TOEFL TPO 73 Speaking Task 2 Sample: The woman expresses her opinion of the letter writer's proposal. Briefly summarize the proposal. Then state her opinion about the proposal and explain the reasons she gives for holding that opinion.

1.Sub Scores Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.Estimated Scores

23. 3.Delivery

The speaker's delivery is generally clear and fluid, with a consistent pace and only occasional pauses. However, there is room for improvement in pronunciation and reducing pauses. To enhance the delivery, the speaker should practice speaking more naturally and focus on accurate pronunciation of words. Additionally, working on reducing unnecessary pauses will help create a smoother flow in speech.

4.Topic Development The response provided is coherent and well-organized, with clear connections between ideas and sufficient support or examples. However, the speaker could further improve topic development by providing more specific details from the listening passage to support their points. Additionally, ensuring that all aspects of the question are addressed will strengthen the response. Practicing summarizing key points from listening passages and incorporating them into the response will help improve topic development skills.

5.Language Use

Original: Tim has written a letter to propose that the school should invite a jazz band formed by his friends to play in the noon on the lawn near the student centre. However, the girl raised several problems regarding this letter. First, she thinks that it is not the best time of day to have this concert. It would be better to have this concert in the evening because playing music in daytime may distract students from studying and reading, and the students are really burdened with studying and reading. Secondly, the girl proposed that the concert should be indoors because when the concert is held and students are hanging out on the grassland, the lawn will be trampled and the grass will die. Consequently, the lawn will become muddy and it's not good for the school.

Corrected: Tim has written a letter to propose that the school should invite a jazz band, formed by his friends, to play in at noon on the lawn near the student center. However, the girla woman raised several concerns regarding this proposal. First, she believes that it is not an optimal time of day for hosting such a concert. It would be more suitable to hold this event in the evening, as playing music during daytime might distract students from their studies. Furthermore, she suggests that the concert should take place indoors, as having it outdoors could lead to damage on the lawn due to increased foot traffic. As a result, the lawn would become muddy, which would be detrimental to the school's appearance.

Revised (140 words): Tim has written a letter proposing that the school invite a jazz band, formed by his friends, to perform at noon on the lawn near the student center. However, a woman raises several concerns regarding this proposal. First, she believes that it is not an optimal time of day for hosting such a concert. It would be more suitable to hold this event in the evening, as playing music during daytime might distract students from their studies. Furthermore, she suggests that the concert should take place indoors, as having it outdoors could lead to damage on the lawn due to increased foot traffic. As a result, the lawn would become muddy, which would be detrimental to the school's appearance. By addressing these concerns and adjusting the proposal accordingly, it could potentially create a more enjoyable experience for both students and performers.

6.Mind Map

• Proposal

  • Jazz band
  • Noon performance
  • Lawn near student center

• Concerns

  • Optimal time of day
    • Evening suggestion
  • Distraction for students
    • Studying and reading
  • Concert location
    • Indoor suggestion

• Consequences

  • Lawn damage
    • Muddy appearance

7.Key Words

1.子项得分

• 交付：3

• 主题发展：3

• 语言使用：3

2.预估分数

• 总分：23

3.表达 回答中的发音和语速基本清晰，但在某些地方存在不必要的停顿。为了提高口语表达能力，建议练习更流畅、自然的语言表达，减少不必要的停顿。同时注意发音准确性，以避免拼写错误。

4.话题发展 回答内容基本上符合题目要求，但在组织结构和连接词方面还有待加强。建议在回答中使用更多的连接词和过渡词汇，使得回答更加连贯和有条理。同时，在提供理由时可以尝试给出更具体的例子或细节，以增强说服力。

5.语言使用

The woman disagrees with the proposal to invite Jay's band to play concerts on campus. The woman disagrees with the proposal to invite the jazz band to play concerts on campus.（将“Jay's band”改为“the jazz band”，以保持与原文一致。）

She gives two reasons for supporting this opinion. She provides two reasons for her opinion.（将“支持这个观点”改为“她的观点”，使表达更自然。）

First, the woman changes the student's proposal that the concerts should take place in the afternoon. First, the woman challenges the suggestion that the concerts should take place in the afternoon.（将“changes”改为“challenges”，以表示女士对提议的质疑。）

According to her, this is a problem. It's not a bad time. According to her, this is problematic because it is not an ideal time.（将“这是一个问题。这不是一个坏时间。”改为“这是有问题的，因为这不是一个理想的时间。”，使表达更自然。）

In fact, students don't have time during the day due to their other commitments like studying and reading. In fact, students are busy during the day with their other commitments, such as studying and reading.（将句子结构进行调整，使表达更自然。）

The concerts will be noisy. The concerts would create noise.（将“音乐会会很吵。”改为“音乐会会产生噪音。”，使表达更自然。）

Evening is a better time and students can get relaxed. The evening would be a better time, allowing students to relax.（将句子结构进行调整，使表达更自然。）

Second, according to the woman, indoors is a better choice. Second, the woman believes that an indoor venue would be a better choice.（将句子结构进行调整，使表达更自然。）

The open law area looks nice now, but the situation will change. The open lawn area looks nice now, but that could change.（将“law”改为“lawn”，以保持与原文一致。将“情况会改变”改为“那可能会改变”，使表达更自然。）

If there are people working there, they will get crowded. If people gather there, it would become crowded.（将句子结构进行调整，使表达更自然。）

The grass will be trampled and died. The grass would be trampled and die.（将“将被践踏和死亡”改为“将被践踏并死去”，使表达更自然。）

The lawn will get into mud. The lawn would turn into mud.（将“草坪会变成泥巴。”改为“草坪会变成泥巴。”，使表达更自然。）

Revised Answer (140 words):

The woman disagrees with the proposal to invite the jazz band to play concerts on campus. She provides two reasons for her opinion. First, the woman challenges the suggestion that the concerts should take place in the afternoon. According to her, this is problematic because it is not an ideal time. In fact, students are busy during the day with their other commitments, such as studying and reading. The concerts would create noise. The evening would be a better time, allowing students to relax. Second, the woman believes that an indoor venue would be a better choice. The open lawn area looks nice

6.思维导图

- Disagreement
  - Jazz band concerts on campus

- Reasons
  - Afternoon concerts
    - Problematic
    - Not an ideal time
    - Students busy with commitments
  - Indoor venue
    - Better choice
    - Open lawn area issues
      - Crowded
      - Grass trampled and dying
      - Turning into mud

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

从表达方面来看，发言者的语言流畅度和语速基本一致，偶尔有停顿。建议发言者在练习时注意提高发音准确度，避免因发音不准确而导致的拼写错误。同时，适当减少不必要的停顿，使语言更加流畅。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，发言者的回答内容基本上是连贯和有组织的，观点之间的联系也比较清晰。但在阐述女士对提议的看法时，可以进一步举例说明以增强说服力。建议在练习时注意提供更多支持性的论据或例子，使回答更加充实和有说服力。

5.语言使用

Original: A letter stressed that the university should invite the jazz band to give free concerts on campus during the afternoon and near the students' dinner on the lawn while the woman disagrees. Oliver thought that she thinks the afternoon would not be a good time to relax for students who have a lot of work to do during the afternoon and playing music would be distracting. Secondly, the woman thinks that the concert should be held indoors, although the lawn that's newly made could be a good place to relax, but once the people get more and more, the lawns are likely to be destroyed. So that's all.

Corrected: A letter stressed suggested ("stressed"意味着强调，但在这里“建议”更合适) that the university should invite the jazz band to give free concerts on campus during the afternoon and near the students' dinner the student center (原文中提到的是学生中心，而不是学生晚餐) on the lawn while the woman disagrees. Oliver She (这里应该用"She"，因为没有提到Oliver这个人物) thought that she thinks the afternoon would not be a good time to relax for students who have a lot of work to do during the afternoon and playing music would be distracting. Secondly, the woman thinks that the concert should be held indoors, although the lawn that's newly made the newly improved lawn (使用“newly improved lawn”更准确地描述草坪的状况) could be a good place to relax, but once the people get more and more, the lawns are likely to be destroyed. So that's all.

Revised (140 words): The letter suggested that the university should invite a jazz band to perform free concerts on campus during the afternoon near the student center on the lawn. However, the woman disagrees with this proposal. She believes that afternoons are not suitable for relaxation as students have a lot of work to do, and playing music would be distracting. Furthermore, she thinks that the concert should be held indoors to preserve the newly improved lawn. Although it is a pleasant place for relaxation, an increasing number of people attending outdoor concerts would likely damage the grass. Therefore, she suggests considering alternative options for organizing these events to avoid potential issues.

6.思维导图

- Letter
  - Suggested
  - Jazz band
  - Free concerts
  - Afternoon
  - Student center lawn

- Woman's opinion
  - Disagrees
  - Afternoon not suitable
    - Students busy
    - Distracting music
  - Concert indoors
    - Preserve lawn
    - Avoid damage from crowds

7.关键词