TOEFL TPO 11 Speaking Task 2 Sample: The woman expresses her opinion about the college’s plan. State her opinion and explain the reasons she gives for holding that opinion.

1.Sub Scores

• Delivery: 3

• Topic Development: 3

• Language Use: 3

2.Estimated Scores

• Total Score: 23

3.Delivery The speaker's delivery is generally clear and fluid, but there are occasional pauses that disrupt the flow of speech. To improve, the speaker should practice speaking more consistently and reduce unnecessary pauses. Additionally, the speaker should work on pronunciation to avoid any spelling errors caused by inaccurate pronunciation.

4.Topic Development The response is coherent and well-organized, with clear connections between ideas. However, the speaker could provide more specific examples or details to support their points. To improve topic development, the speaker should focus on elaborating on the reasons given by the woman for her opinion and ensure that all relevant information from both the reading and listening passages is included in the response.

5.Language Use

Original: Well, the university plans to renovate on-campus housing for the students and the construction will cost two years. The university plans to renovate on-campus housing for students, and the construction will take two years. (Changed "cost" to "take" and added a comma for clarity)

Original: Firstly, it will make some improvements to the bathroom, lighting and heating. Firstly, it will implement improvements to the bathrooms, lighting, and heating systems. (Added "systems" and commas for clarity)

Original: And secondly, lots of people will leave the campus to make the construction well done and after the construction, the dormitory will be appealing to the students. Secondly, many people will leave campus during construction, but once completed, the renovated dormitories will be more appealing to students. (Rephrased for clarity and natural flow)

Original: However, the woman doesn't like the idea because she thinks the university makes a mistake because the construction will cost two years and it will cause lots of noise and many students are disturbed and moving from the campus. However, the woman disagrees with this plan as she believes that the university is making a mistake. The two-year construction period will cause significant noise disturbances, prompting many students to move off-campus. (Rephrased for clarity and natural flow)

Original: And secondly, she thinks it will cost a lot of money so the rent of the dormitory will become expensive to afford. Additionally, she is concerned that the renovation costs will lead to increased dormitory rents, making them less affordable for students. (Rephrased for clarity and natural flow)

Revised Answer (140 words):

The university plans to renovate on-campus housing for students, and the construction will take two years. Firstly, it will implement improvements to the bathrooms, lighting, and heating systems. Secondly, many people will leave campus during construction, but once completed, the renovated dormitories will be more appealing to students. However, the woman disagrees with this plan as she believes that the university is making a mistake. The two-year construction period will cause significant noise disturbances, prompting many students to move off-campus. Additionally, she is concerned that the renovation costs will lead to increased dormitory rents, making them less affordable for students.

6.Mind Map

- University's Plan
  - Renovate on-campus housing
  - Two-year construction
  - Improvements: bathrooms, lighting, heating systems

- Woman's Opinion
  - Disagrees with the plan
  - Reasons:
    - Noise disturbances during construction
    - Students moving off-campus
    - Increased dormitory rents (less affordable)

7.Key Words

1. Sub Scores

• Delivery: 2

• Topic Development: 2

• Language Use: 2

2. Estimated Scores

• Total Score: 15

3. Delivery The speaker's delivery could be improved by focusing on clarity and fluidity in speech. There were occasional pauses and some words were not pronounced accurately, which affected the overall flow of the response. To improve, the speaker should practice speaking at a consistent pace and work on pronunciation.

4. Topic Development The response could benefit from better organization and coherence. While the speaker did mention the woman's opinion and reasons, it was not presented in a clear and well-structured manner. To improve, the speaker should focus on providing a more organized response with clear connections between ideas and sufficient support or examples from both the reading and listening passages.

5. Language Use

Original: As there are more and more students go off campus to live, the college plans to renovate the encapsulometry for two years, but the women disagree with it for several reasons. As an increasing number of students move off-campus, the college plans to renovate the dormitories for two years; however, the woman disagrees with this plan for several reasons. (Corrected sentence structure and vocabulary)

Original: First, they think during the renovation, there will be many noises distracting people and this will cause more people to leave and they will go as far away as the noise and more and more people will leave on campus. First, she believes that during the renovation, noise will distract students, causing them to leave and seek quieter off-campus housing. (Improved sentence structure and clarity)

Original: And second, to renovate the new on-campus dormitory will bring a high cost, and so nobody want to pay for it with high cost and they will continue to go on out-campus dormitory. Secondly, she points out that renovating the on-campus dormitories will be expensive, making it less appealing for students who would prefer more affordable off-campus housing options. (Corrected grammar and sentence structure)

Revised Answer (140 words):

As an increasing number of students move off-campus, the college plans to renovate the dormitories for two years; however, the woman disagrees with this plan for several reasons. First, she believes that during the renovation, noise will distract students, causing them to leave and seek quieter off-campus housing. This would result in even fewer students living on campus. Secondly, she points out that renovating the on-campus dormitories will be expensive, making it less appealing for students who would prefer more affordable off-campus housing options. In conclusion, the woman's opinion is that the college's plan to renovate the dormitories may not achieve its intended goal of attracting more students to live on campus due to the noise disruptions during construction and the increased cost of on-campus housing.

6. Mind Map

- College's Plan
  - Renovate dormitories
  - Two years

- Woman's Disagreement
  - Noise disruptions
    - Distract students
    - Seek off-campus housing
  - Increased cost
    - Less appealing
    - Affordable off-campus options

7. Key Words

1.子项得分 Delivery: 2 Topic Development: 2 Language Use: 2

2.预估分数

17. 3.表达

从表达方面来看，回答中存在一些语法错误和不清晰的表述。建议在练习时注意提高发音准确性，并确保句子结构的正确性。此外，尝试保持语速一致，避免过多的停顿。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，回答基本涵盖了女生的观点及其原因，但部分表述不够准确。建议在练习时注意更清晰地陈述观点，并提供更充分的支持或例子。同时，注意保持回答的连贯性和组织结构。

5.语言使用

原文：The school announced that the student dormitory is going to be run away for two years, including all the equipments of the bathrooms or the other things. The school announced that the student dormitory will undergo renovations for two years, including improvements to the bathrooms and other facilities.（将“run away”改为“undergo renovations”，更符合语境；将“equipments”改为“improvements”，更准确地表达意思。）

The announcement said that the students move off the campus because the dormitory is not in good shape and they will make it more appealing than the off-campus housing. The announcement stated that students are moving off-campus due to the poor condition of the dormitories, and the renovations aim to make them more attractive than off-campus housing.（将“said”改为“stated”，更正式；将“move off”改为“moving off-campus”，使句子更连贯。）

The woman thinks it is a mistake because, firstly, they need about two years to run away from the campus housing and it will cause lots of noise and the students may be feeling disturbed about their living and they will move off the campus. The woman believes it is a mistake because, firstly, the renovations will take two years, causing a lot of noise and disturbance for students living on campus, which may lead them to move off-campus.（将“thinks”改为“believes”，更正式；将“run away from”改为“renovations”，使句子更连贯。）

The second reason is that she thinks the living condition will be improved but the fee will be more expensive so people can rent apartments outside the campus instead of living in the school. The second reason is that she thinks the living conditions will improve, but the cost will increase, making off-campus apartments a more affordable option for students.（将“condition”改为“conditions”，使句子更连贯；将“fee”改为“cost”，更准确地表达意思。）

Revised Answer (140 words):

The school announced that the student dormitory will undergo renovations for two years, including improvements to the bathrooms and other facilities. The announcement stated that students are moving off-campus due to the poor condition of the dormitories, and the renovations aim to make them more attractive than off-campus housing. The woman believes it is a mistake because, firstly, the renovations will take two years, causing a lot of noise and disturbance for students living on campus, which may lead them to move off-campus. The second reason is that she thinks the living conditions will improve, but the cost will increase, making off-campus apartments a more affordable option for students.

6.思维导图

• School announcement

  • Dormitory renovations
    • Two years
    • Bathrooms and facilities
  • Reasons for moving off-campus
    • Poor condition of dormitories

• Woman's opinion

  • Mistake
    • Noise and disturbance during renovations
    • Increased cost of on-campus housing
      • Off-campus apartments more affordable

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

从表达方面来看，这位同学的回答基本上是清晰的，语速适中，偶尔有停顿。但在某些地方，如“housing devices”和“influence on the students' daily sleeping and working”等，发音可能不太准确。建议同学多加练习发音和语调，以便在考试中更自然地表达。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，这位同学的回答较为连贯和有组织。他明确地陈述了女生的观点，并解释了她提出这个观点的原因。然而，在解释原因时，可以更详细地描述听力中提到的信息。例如，在谈到费用问题时，可以提到学校计划通过提高住宿费用来支付改造费用。建议同学在准备过程中多加练习听力理解和组织信息的能力，以便在考试中更好地回答问题。

5.语言使用

Original: The woman totally disagrees with the idea that a school will renovate the on-campus housing devices. She thinks it's totally a mistake. First, she claims that it will create a lot of noises for two years, and this will have a very bad influence on the students' daily sleeping and working. So the students will move out as far as possible. Secondly, the student will be very difficult to afford the fee to live in the new dormitory after renovating. So, under this expensive price, the student will more likely to rent the apartment out of the school for less money.

Corrected: The woman totally strongly disagrees with the idea that a school the college will renovate the on-campus housing devices facilities. She thinks it's totally completely a mistake. First, she claims that it will create a lot of noises noise for two years, and this will have a very bad influence on the students' daily sleeping and working. So, , the students will move out as far as possible. Secondly, the student students will find it very difficult to afford the fee to live in the new dormitory after renovations. So, under this expensive price, the student students will more likely to rent the apartment out of side the school for less money.

(建议使用“strongly”代替“totally”，以使语言更自然。将“a school”改为“the college”，以保持一致性。将“housing devices”改为“housing facilities”，以更准确地描述住宅设施。将“totally”改为“completely”，以使语言更自然。将“noises”改为“noise”，因为这里应使用不可数名词。在“So”之后添加逗号，以使句子更流畅。将单数形式的“the student”改为复数形式的“students”，以保持一致性。去掉“renovating”后的字母s，因为这里应使用名词形式。将“out of”改为“outside”，以使句子更自然。)

Revised (140 words): The woman strongly disagrees with the idea that the college will renovate the on-campus housing facilities. She thinks it's completely a mistake. First, she claims that it will create a lot of noise for two years, which will have a significantly negative impact on students' daily sleep and study routines. As a result, students will be compelled to move out as far as possible to avoid the disturbance. Secondly, students will find it very difficult to afford the increased fees associated with living in the newly renovated dormitories. Consequently, due to the higher costs, students are more likely to rent apartments outside the school for a more affordable price.

6.思维导图

- Disagreement
  - College's renovation plan

- Reasons
  - Noise
    - Two years
    - Negative impact on sleep and study
  - Affordability
    - Increased fees
    - Renting apartments outside school

7.关键词

1.Sub Scores

Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.Estimated Scores

23. 3.Delivery

The speaker's delivery is generally clear and fluid, with a consistent pace and only occasional pauses. However, there is room for improvement in pronunciation and reducing pauses. To enhance the delivery, the speaker should practice speaking more confidently and focus on proper pronunciation of words. Additionally, working on maintaining a steady pace without unnecessary pauses will make the speech more engaging.

4.Topic Development

The response is coherent and well-organized, with clear connections between ideas and sufficient support or examples. The speaker effectively states the woman's opinion and explains her reasons for holding that opinion. However, the response could be improved by providing more specific details from the listening passage to further support the woman's concerns. Additionally, the speaker could work on making smoother transitions between ideas to create a more cohesive response.

5.Language Use

Original: The Central College announces a plan about the renovation of the dormitory. It will take about two years to improve all the settings like lighting and heating in the dormitory. The president hopes that by renovating the student dormitory, the students will be willing to stay in campus rather than living outside of school. The woman totally disagrees with this announcement. She believes that the constructions would create a lot of noise for students who are currently living in the dormitory, and they would probably want to move off the campus, which would make an even worse effect. Additionally, over the construction, the school will increase the cost of housing, which makes the dormitory less affordable. So the students may try to find a cheaper apartment off the campus.

Corrected: The Central College announces has announced (change to present perfect tense for completed actions) a plan about for (use "for" instead of "about" when referring to a purpose or intention) the renovation of the dormitory. It will take about two years to improve all the settings the facilities (use "facilities" for a more precise term) like lighting and heating in the dormitory. The president hopes that by renovating the student dormitory, students will be willing to stay in campus on campus (use "on campus" instead of "in campus") rather than living outside of school. The woman totally disagrees with this announcement. She believes that the constructions construction work (use "construction work" for clarity) would create a lot of noise for students who are currently living in the dormitory, and they would probably want to move off the campus, which would make an even worse effect have an even worse impact (use "have an even worse impact" for a more natural expression). Additionally, over the construction, during the construction period, (use "during the construction period" for clarity) the school will increase the cost of housing, which makes the dormitory less affordable. So students may try to find a cheaper apartment off-campus.

Revised (140 words):

The Central College has announced a plan for the renovation of the dormitory. It will take about two years to improve all the facilities, such as lighting and heating, in the dormitory. The president hopes that by renovating the student dormitory, students will be willing to stay on campus rather than living outside of school. The woman completely disagrees with this announcement. She believes that the construction work would create a lot of noise for students who are currently living in the dormitory, and they would probably want to move off-campus, which would have an even worse impact. Additionally, during the construction period, the school will increase the cost of housing, making the dormitory less affordable. As a result, students may try to find cheaper off-campus apartments.

6.Mind Map

• Central College

  • Announced plan
    • Renovation of dormitory
    • Improve facilities (lighting, heating)
  • President's hope
    • Students stay on campus

• Woman's disagreement

  • Construction work
    • Noise disturbance for current students
    • Worse impact (students moving off-campus)
  • Increased housing cost
    • Dormitory less affordable
    • Students seeking cheaper off-campus apartments

7.Key Words

1.子项得分

Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

从表达方面来看，这位同学的回答相对清晰，但在某些地方可能需要稍作改进。例如，可以尝试提高语速和减少不必要的停顿，使表达更加流畅。同时，注意正确发音以避免拼写错误。建议多加练习，提高口语表达能力。

4.话题发展

从话题发展方面来看，这位同学的回答基本上符合要求，能够概括女生的观点并给出两个原因。但是，在组织结构上可以进一步优化。例如，在提到女生的观点时，可以先总结她的观点，然后再详细解释她给出的两个原因。此外，在解释原因时，可以尝试使用更多的连接词和过渡词汇，使句子之间的衔接更加自然。总之，请继续努力提高话题发展能力。

5.语言使用

Original Answer: Well, in this announcement, the university plans to renovate the dorm of the school. In this announcement, the university plans to renovate the school's dormitories. (将“the dorm of the school”改为“the school's dormitories”使句子更自然) However, the woman from the listening didn't agree with the plan. However, the woman in the listening disagrees with the plan. (使用现在时态，使句子更自然) Firstly, she thinks that the two-year construction will make a lot of noises, Firstly, she believes that the two-year construction will create a lot of noise, (将“thinks”改为“believes”，将“noises”改为“noise”使句子更自然) which may disturb the life of the students and the teachers. which may disrupt students' and teachers' lives. (简化句子结构，使句子更自然) So most students will move off campus to live. As a result, many students may choose to live off-campus. (使用更自然的表达方式) And secondly, she also thinks that students cannot afford the new dorms because they are too expensive. Secondly, she also believes that students may not be able to afford the new dorms due to their high cost. (使用更自然的表达方式) They may rent an apartment for less money. They might opt for renting an apartment at a lower cost. (使用更自然的表达方式) So based on these two reasons, the woman just thinks the plan is not a good idea. Therefore, based on these two reasons, the woman considers the plan to be unfavorable. (使用更自然的表达方式)

Revised Answer (140 words):

In this announcement, the university plans to renovate the school's dormitories. However, the woman in the listening disagrees with the plan. Firstly, she believes that the two-year construction will create a lot of noise, which may disrupt students' and teachers' lives. As a result, many students may choose to live off-campus. Secondly, she also believes that students may not be able to afford the new dorms due to their high cost. They might opt for renting an apartment at a lower cost. Therefore, based on these two reasons, the woman considers the plan to be unfavorable.

6.思维导图

• Announcement

  • Renovate dormitories

• Woman's opinion

  • Disagrees with the plan

• Reason 1

  • Two-year construction
    • Noise disruption
    • Students and teachers affected
    • Off-campus living choice

• Reason 2

  • High cost of new dorms
    • Affordability issue
    • Renting apartments as an alternative

• Conclusion

  • Plan considered unfavorable

7.关键词