TOEFL TPO 11 Speaking Task 2 Sample: The woman expresses her opinion about the college’s plan. State her opinion and explain the reasons she gives for holding that opinion.

1.Sub Scores

• Delivery: 3

• Topic Development: 3

• Language Use: 3

2.Estimated Scores

• Total Score: 23

3.Delivery The speaker's delivery is generally clear and fluid, but there are occasional pauses that disrupt the flow of speech. To improve, the speaker should practice speaking more consistently and reduce unnecessary pauses. Additionally, the speaker should work on pronunciation to avoid any spelling errors caused by inaccurate pronunciation.

4.Topic Development The response is coherent and well-organized, with clear connections between ideas. However, the speaker could provide more specific examples or details to support their points. To improve topic development, the speaker should focus on elaborating on the reasons given by the woman for her opinion and ensure that all relevant information from both the reading and listening passages is included in the response.

5.Language Use

Original: Well, the university plans to renovate on-campus housing for the students and the construction will cost two years. The university plans to renovate on-campus housing for students, and the construction will take two years. (Changed "cost" to "take" and added a comma for clarity)

Original: Firstly, it will make some improvements to the bathroom, lighting and heating. Firstly, it will implement improvements to the bathrooms, lighting, and heating systems. (Added "systems" and commas for clarity)

Original: And secondly, lots of people will leave the campus to make the construction well done and after the construction, the dormitory will be appealing to the students. Secondly, many people will leave campus during construction, but once completed, the renovated dormitories will be more appealing to students. (Rephrased for clarity and natural flow)

Original: However, the woman doesn't like the idea because she thinks the university makes a mistake because the construction will cost two years and it will cause lots of noise and many students are disturbed and moving from the campus. However, the woman disagrees with this plan as she believes that the university is making a mistake. The two-year construction period will cause significant noise disturbances, prompting many students to move off-campus. (Rephrased for clarity and natural flow)

Original: And secondly, she thinks it will cost a lot of money so the rent of the dormitory will become expensive to afford. Additionally, she is concerned that the renovation costs will lead to increased dormitory rents, making them less affordable for students. (Rephrased for clarity and natural flow)

Revised Answer (140 words):

The university plans to renovate on-campus housing for students, and the construction will take two years. Firstly, it will implement improvements to the bathrooms, lighting, and heating systems. Secondly, many people will leave campus during construction, but once completed, the renovated dormitories will be more appealing to students. However, the woman disagrees with this plan as she believes that the university is making a mistake. The two-year construction period will cause significant noise disturbances, prompting many students to move off-campus. Additionally, she is concerned that the renovation costs will lead to increased dormitory rents, making them less affordable for students.

6.Mind Map

- University's Plan
  - Renovate on-campus housing
  - Two-year construction
  - Improvements: bathrooms, lighting, heating systems

- Woman's Opinion
  - Disagrees with the plan
  - Reasons:
    - Noise disturbances during construction
    - Students moving off-campus
    - Increased dormitory rents (less affordable)

7.Key Words

1. Sub Scores

• Delivery: 2

• Topic Development: 2

• Language Use: 2

2. Estimated Scores

• Total Score: 15

3. Delivery The speaker's delivery could be improved by focusing on clarity and fluidity in speech. There were occasional pauses and some words were not pronounced accurately, which affected the overall flow of the response. To improve, the speaker should practice speaking at a consistent pace and work on pronunciation.

4. Topic Development The response could benefit from better organization and coherence. While the speaker did mention the woman's opinion and reasons, it was not presented in a clear and well-structured manner. To improve, the speaker should focus on providing a more organized response with clear connections between ideas and sufficient support or examples from both the reading and listening passages.

5. Language Use

Original: As there are more and more students go off campus to live, the college plans to renovate the encapsulometry for two years, but the women disagree with it for several reasons. As an increasing number of students move off-campus, the college plans to renovate the dormitories for two years; however, the woman disagrees with this plan for several reasons. (Corrected sentence structure and vocabulary)

Original: First, they think during the renovation, there will be many noises distracting people and this will cause more people to leave and they will go as far away as the noise and more and more people will leave on campus. First, she believes that during the renovation, noise will distract students, causing them to leave and seek quieter off-campus housing. (Improved sentence structure and clarity)

Original: And second, to renovate the new on-campus dormitory will bring a high cost, and so nobody want to pay for it with high cost and they will continue to go on out-campus dormitory. Secondly, she points out that renovating the on-campus dormitories will be expensive, making it less appealing for students who would prefer more affordable off-campus housing options. (Corrected grammar and sentence structure)

Revised Answer (140 words):

As an increasing number of students move off-campus, the college plans to renovate the dormitories for two years; however, the woman disagrees with this plan for several reasons. First, she believes that during the renovation, noise will distract students, causing them to leave and seek quieter off-campus housing. This would result in even fewer students living on campus. Secondly, she points out that renovating the on-campus dormitories will be expensive, making it less appealing for students who would prefer more affordable off-campus housing options. In conclusion, the woman's opinion is that the college's plan to renovate the dormitories may not achieve its intended goal of attracting more students to live on campus due to the noise disruptions during construction and the increased cost of on-campus housing.

6. Mind Map

- College's Plan
  - Renovate dormitories
  - Two years

- Woman's Disagreement
  - Noise disruptions
    - Distract students
    - Seek off-campus housing
  - Increased cost
    - Less appealing
    - Affordable off-campus options

7. Key Words

1.子项得分 Delivery: 2 Topic Development: 2 Language Use: 2

2.预估分数

17. 3.表达

从表达方面来看，回答中存在一些语法错误和不清晰的表述。建议在练习时注意提高发音准确性，并确保句子结构的正确性。此外，尝试保持语速一致，避免过多的停顿。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，回答基本涵盖了女生的观点及其原因，但部分表述不够准确。建议在练习时注意更清晰地陈述观点，并提供更充分的支持或例子。同时，注意保持回答的连贯性和组织结构。

5.语言使用

原文：The school announced that the student dormitory is going to be run away for two years, including all the equipments of the bathrooms or the other things. The school announced that the student dormitory will undergo renovations for two years, including improvements to the bathrooms and other facilities.（将“run away”改为“undergo renovations”，更符合语境；将“equipments”改为“improvements”，更准确地表达意思。）

The announcement said that the students move off the campus because the dormitory is not in good shape and they will make it more appealing than the off-campus housing. The announcement stated that students are moving off-campus due to the poor condition of the dormitories, and the renovations aim to make them more attractive than off-campus housing.（将“said”改为“stated”，更正式；将“move off”改为“moving off-campus”，使句子更连贯。）

The woman thinks it is a mistake because, firstly, they need about two years to run away from the campus housing and it will cause lots of noise and the students may be feeling disturbed about their living and they will move off the campus. The woman believes it is a mistake because, firstly, the renovations will take two years, causing a lot of noise and disturbance for students living on campus, which may lead them to move off-campus.（将“thinks”改为“believes”，更正式；将“run away from”改为“renovations”，使句子更连贯。）

The second reason is that she thinks the living condition will be improved but the fee will be more expensive so people can rent apartments outside the campus instead of living in the school. The second reason is that she thinks the living conditions will improve, but the cost will increase, making off-campus apartments a more affordable option for students.（将“condition”改为“conditions”，使句子更连贯；将“fee”改为“cost”，更准确地表达意思。）

Revised Answer (140 words):

The school announced that the student dormitory will undergo renovations for two years, including improvements to the bathrooms and other facilities. The announcement stated that students are moving off-campus due to the poor condition of the dormitories, and the renovations aim to make them more attractive than off-campus housing. The woman believes it is a mistake because, firstly, the renovations will take two years, causing a lot of noise and disturbance for students living on campus, which may lead them to move off-campus. The second reason is that she thinks the living conditions will improve, but the cost will increase, making off-campus apartments a more affordable option for students.

6.思维导图

• School announcement

  • Dormitory renovations
    • Two years
    • Bathrooms and facilities
  • Reasons for moving off-campus
    • Poor condition of dormitories

• Woman's opinion

  • Mistake
    • Noise and disturbance during renovations
    • Increased cost of on-campus housing
      • Off-campus apartments more affordable

7.关键词