TOEFL TPO 58 Speaking Task 2 Sample: The woman expresses her opinion about the proposal described in the letter. Briefly summarize the proposal. Then state her opinion about the proposal and explain the reasons she gives for holding that opinion.

1.子项得分

• Delivery: 3

• Topic Development: 4

• Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

• 总分：26

3.表达 回答中的发音和语速大部分都很清晰，但在某些地方存在一些不太自然的停顿。建议在练习时注意保持语速的连贯性，避免在不必要的地方停顿。同时，注意提高发音的准确性，以减少拼写错误。

4.话题发展 回答内容组织得很好，观点之间的联系清晰，举例充足。在这方面无需改进。

5.语言使用

Original: In the letter, the student suggests Kemper's the bookstore should sell snacks and drinks. This is because there should have chairs and tables available for students to sit while deciding what to buy, and it is convenient for hungry students between classes. However, the woman opposes this. First, she points out that the drinks are easily spent spilled on an expensive book by accident, so the book will be ruined. Moreover, she argues that there is already a convenience store in the student center selling same goods, which is much closer to academic building. However, bookstores are all the way in the other part of the campus. As a result, it is not convenient for students between classes to grab food.

(将“Kemper's”改为“the”，因为这里不需要特指某个书店。将“spent”改为“spilled”，因为这里表示的是饮料容易洒在书上。)

Revised (140 words): In the letter, the student suggests that the campus bookstore should sell snacks and drinks. The proposal aims to provide chairs and tables for students to sit while browsing books and offer convenience for hungry students between classes. However, the woman disagrees with this idea. Firstly, she highlights that drinks can be easily spilled on expensive books accidentally, causing damage to them. Furthermore, she argues that a convenience store already exists in the student center selling similar items and is much closer to academic buildings than the bookstore located on the other side of campus. Consequently, it would not be convenient for students between classes to grab food from the bookstore.

6.思维导图

- Proposal
    - Campus bookstore
    - Sell snacks and drinks
    - Chairs and tables
    - Convenience for hungry students

- Woman's disagreement
    - Drinks easily spilled on books
        - Damage to expensive books
    - Convenience store in student center
        - Closer to academic buildings
        - Similar items sold
    - Bookstore location inconvenient
        - Other side of campus

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 2 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 2

2.预估分数

19. 3.表达

在回答中，发音和语速需要改进。有时候，发音不准确，导致了拼写错误。此外，适当的停顿也很重要。建议多加练习，提高发音准确度和语言流利度。

4.话题发展 回答内容基本上符合题目要求，但在组织结构和论述方面还有待加强。首先，在总结提案时，请注意使用正确的性别代词。其次，在解释女生观点时，可以更清晰地表达她的担忧，并给出更具体的例子。最后，在总结时，请注意使用正确的地点描述。建议在练习中关注这些方面，以便更好地组织和发展话题。

5.语言使用

Original: In the readings in newspapersnewspaper reading(报纸阅读，而不是报纸中的阅读), they said the compasscampus(发音错误，应为campus) bookstore should sell snacks and drinks. But the girlwoman(用woman更正式) doesn't think so. HeShe(性别代词错误，应为she) doesn't think it will work very well. First, heshe(性别代词错误，应为she) thinks if we eat snacks and drink some beverage, it will be easy to ruin the expensive book. Second, it's not convenient enough to buy snacks and drinks in the bookstore because the bookstore is always outside the campuson the other side of campus(地点描述错误，应为校园另一边). And they have already some closer stores in the campus, so they don't have to sell snacks and drinks in the bookstore.

Revised (140 words): In the newspaper reading, it was suggested that the campus bookstore should sell snacks and drinks. However, the woman disagrees with this idea, as she believes it would not work effectively. Her first concern is that consuming snacks and beverages near books could easily lead to accidental spills, damaging expensive books. Secondly, she argues that purchasing snacks and drinks at the bookstore is not convenient due to its location on the other side of campus. She points out that there are already closer stores within the campus, making it unnecessary for the bookstore to sell snacks and drinks.

6.思维导图

- Campus Bookstore
  - Sell snacks and drinks
  - Woman's opinion
    - Disagrees
      - Reason 1: Accidental spills
        - Damage expensive books
      - Reason 2: Inconvenient location
        - Other side of campus
        - Closer stores available

7.关键词

1.子项得分

• 交付：3

• 主题发展：3.5

• 语言使用：3.5

2.预估分数

• 总分：26

3.表达 回答中的语速和发音大部分都很清晰，但在某些地方存在一些不必要的停顿。建议在练习时注意保持连贯的语速，减少不必要的停顿。同时，注意提高发音的准确性，以避免拼写错误。

4.话题发展 回答内容基本上是连贯和组织良好的，能够清楚地表达女士对提议的看法及其理由。但在描述便利店位置时，可以更明确地说明学生中心距离教学楼更近，而书店则相对较远。此外，在总结时可以再次强调女士反对提议的观点。

5.语言使用

原文：The latter The letter (改为letter，因为这里是指信件，而不是后者) proposes that campus bookstores should sell snacks and drinks for the students who are hungry between classes, and students can also have a snack when they are buying books. However, the woman disagrees with this proposal. First of all, she thinks that it is easy for students to spill something on the books accidentally. Therefore, the books will be ruined. Some of the books are very expensive, so it is not good to do so. Additionally, the campus has a convenient store at the student center which sells snacks, and it is much closer to the buildings where students have classes, so students can purchase snacks there, and the campus bookstore is much further.

Revised Answer (140 words):

The letter proposes that campus bookstores should sell snacks and drinks for students who are hungry between classes, providing a place for them to enjoy refreshments while browsing books. However, the woman disagrees with this proposal for two main reasons. Firstly, she believes that having food and drinks in the bookstore increases the risk of accidental spills on books, potentially damaging or ruining expensive textbooks. Secondly, she points out that there is already a convenience store located in the student center which sells snacks and is much closer to academic buildings than the bookstore. This makes it more accessible for students to grab a quick snack between classes. In conclusion, due to concerns about potential damage to books and existing alternatives for purchasing snacks on campus, the woman does not support the proposal.

6.思维导图

- Letter Proposal
  - Campus bookstores sell snacks and drinks
  - Convenience for students between classes

- Woman's Disagreement
  - Accidental spills on books
    - Damaging expensive textbooks
  - Convenience store in student center
    - Closer to academic buildings
    - Existing alternative for snacks

- Conclusion
  - Concerns about book damage
  - Availability of other snack options on campus

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

从表达方面来看，发言者的语音清晰，语速基本稳定，偶尔有停顿。为了提高口语表达能力，建议发言者在练习时注意掌握适当的停顿，避免不必要的停顿。此外，注意发音准确性，以免出现拼写错误。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，发言者的回答内容基本上是连贯和有组织的，观点之间的联系也比较清晰，并且提供了一定的支持和例证。为了进一步提高话题发展能力，建议在练习时尝试使用更多的连接词和过渡词汇来使观点之间的联系更加紧密，并在论述中给出更详细的例子和论据。

5.语言使用

Original Answer: Well, the proposal is that the bookstall should sell drinks and snacks. Because first, students are available to sit down and have something to eat or drink when they are reading books. And next, if students are hungry between classes, they can go to the bookstall to have something to eat. However, the woman disagrees with this idea. Because first, she points out that the books will be easily get ruined if there are students drink or eat at the bookstall. And specifically, some of the books are rarely expensive. What's more, she points out that there has already been a convenience store which is much closer to the building where students take classes. The convenience store also sells food and drinks, so students are unlikely to go to the bookstall.

Corrected Answer: The proposal suggests that the bookstore should sell drinks and snacks. Firstly, this would allow students to sit down and enjoy refreshments while browsing books. Secondly, it would provide a convenient option for students who are hungry between classes. However, the woman disagrees with this idea for two reasons. She believes that having food and drinks in the bookstore could lead to accidental spills and damage to expensive books. Furthermore, she mentions that there is already a convenience store closer to the academic buildings where students have their classes. This store also sells food and drinks, making it less likely for students to visit the bookstore for refreshments. (原文中的“bookstall”改为“bookstore”，以保持一致；将“rarely expensive”改为“expensive”，使表达更准确。)

Revised Version (140 words):

The proposal suggests that the campus bookstore should sell drinks and snacks for two main reasons: it would provide a comfortable space for students to enjoy refreshments while browsing books, and it would offer a convenient option for those who are hungry between classes. However, the woman disagrees with this idea for two main reasons. Firstly, she is concerned that having food and drinks in the bookstore could lead to accidental spills, potentially damaging expensive books. Secondly, she highlights the fact that there is already a convenience store closer to the academic buildings where students have their classes. This store also sells food and drinks, making it a more convenient option for students. Therefore, she believes that adding refreshments to the bookstore is unnecessary and could even be detrimental to the books.

6.思维导图

- Proposal
  - Sell drinks and snacks
  - Benefits
    - Comfortable space for refreshments
    - Convenience for hungry students

- Woman's disagreement
  - Reasons
    - Accidental spills and damage to books
    - Existence of a closer convenience store
      - Sells food and drinks
      - More convenient for students

7.关键词

1.Sub Scores Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.Estimated Scores

23. 3.Delivery

The speaker's delivery is generally clear and fluid, but there are occasional pauses that could be reduced for a more consistent pace. To improve, the speaker should practice speaking without unnecessary pauses and work on pronouncing words more accurately to avoid spelling errors.

4.Topic Development The response is coherent and well-organized, with clear connections between ideas. However, the speaker could provide more specific examples or details to further support their points. To improve, the speaker should focus on elaborating on the reasons given by the woman in the conversation and providing more context to strengthen their argument.

5.Language Use

Original: Well, the letter proposes that the campus bookstore would sell snacks and drinks, but the woman disagreed with the idea in the letter. The letter suggests that the campus bookstore should sell snacks and drinks; however, the woman disagrees with this proposal. (Improved sentence structure and clarity)

Original: First, she worried about the books. Firstly, she expressed concern for the books. (Improved vocabulary and phrasing)

Original: To be more specific, some books are expensive. Specifically, she mentioned that some books are costly. (Enhanced vocabulary and sentence structure)

Original: In addition, if students eat the snacks or drinks, they may not care about whether they damage the books. Moreover, students consuming snacks or beverages might inadvertently damage these valuable books. (Improved vocabulary and phrasing)

Original: Second, the convenience store is nearby the academic building. Secondly, there is already a convenience store near the academic building. (Enhanced sentence structure and clarity)

Original: However, the campus bookstore is far away from the academic building, In contrast, the campus bookstore is located at a considerable distance from the academic building, (Improved vocabulary and phrasing)

Original: so it is unnecessary for students between classes to sell snacks and drinks in the campus bookstore. making it less convenient for students to purchase snacks and drinks between classes. (Enhanced clarity and sentence structure)

Revised Answer (140 words):

The letter suggests that the campus bookstore should sell snacks and drinks; however, the woman disagrees with this proposal. Firstly, she expressed concern for the books. Specifically, she mentioned that some books are costly. Moreover, students consuming snacks or beverages might inadvertently damage these valuable books. Secondly, there is already a convenience store near the academic building. In contrast, the campus bookstore is located at a considerable distance from the academic building, making it less convenient for students to purchase snacks and drinks between classes. These reasons led the woman to disagree with the idea presented in the letter, as she believes that selling snacks and drinks in the campus bookstore would not be practical or beneficial for students.

6.Mind Map

- Proposal
  - Campus bookstore selling snacks and drinks

- Woman's opinion
  - Disagrees with the proposal

- Reasons for disagreement
  - Concern for books
    - Costly books
    - Potential damage from snacks and beverages
  - Convenience store near academic building
    - Campus bookstore at a considerable distance
    - Less convenient for students between classes

7.Key Words

1. Sub Scores

• Delivery: 2

• Topic Development: 2

• Language Use: 2

2. Estimated Scores

• Total Score: 15

3. Delivery The speaker's delivery could be improved by focusing on clearer pronunciation and reducing pauses. Additionally, the speaker should work on maintaining a consistent pace throughout the response. To improve, practice speaking aloud and focus on enunciating each word clearly.

4. Topic Development The response does not accurately summarize the proposal from the reading passage, nor does it clearly state the woman's opinion and her reasons for holding that opinion. To improve, the speaker should focus on providing a coherent and well-organized response that directly addresses the question, making sure to include clear connections between ideas and sufficient support or examples from both the reading and listening passages.

5. Language Use

Original Answer: In the reading, we know that there is a proposal that universities should open a snack shop to create job opportunities and also to create a convenient place for students to buy food and provide a fast and easy place to get snacks at any time of the day and in the conversation, the men agree with the proposal because it provides good job experience which can use in real life like you're running a business in the campus and when you graduate, you can run a business in real life and secondly, there is a cafeteria in the school but it still wait in a long line and although you have a car, you have to drive one hour to get the food and this time can save for studying.

Corrected Answer: In the reading passage, we learn about a proposal suggesting that universities should open snack shops on campus. These shops would provide job opportunities and create convenient locations for students to purchase food. In the conversation, the man agrees with this proposal because it offers valuable job experience that can be applied in real life, such as running a business on campus or after graduation. However, there is already a cafeteria at school where students often wait in long lines. Even if they have cars, they must drive an hour to get food, which could be better spent studying. (The corrected answer has improved sentence structure, vocabulary, and grammar. It also provides a clearer summary of both the reading passage and listening conversation.)

Revised Answer (140 words):

In the reading passage, we learn about Matt Shapiro's proposal suggesting that the campus bookstore should sell snacks and drinks for students' convenience. In the listening passage, two students discuss this idea. The woman disagrees with Matt's proposal for two main reasons. First, she is concerned about potential damage to books from spilled drinks or food. Second, she points out that there is already a convenience store in the student center, which is closer to academic buildings than the bookstore. In conclusion, while the proposal may seem appealing at first, the woman's concerns about book damage and the existence of a more conveniently located store make it less practical for implementation.

6. Mind Map

- Reading Passage
  - Proposal: Campus bookstore selling snacks and drinks

- Listening Passage
  - Woman's opinion: Disagrees with proposal
    - Reason 1: Potential damage to books
    - Reason 2: Existing convenience store in student center

- Conclusion
  - Woman's concerns make proposal less practical

7. Key Words