TOEFL TPO 4 Speaking Task 3 Sample: Explain how the examples from the professor's lecture illustrate the relationship between verbal and nonverbal communication.

1.Sub Scores Delivery: 2 Language Use: 2 Topic Development: 2

2.Estimated Scores Total Score: 15

3.Delivery The speaker's delivery could be improved by focusing on clearer pronunciation and reducing pauses. Additionally, the speaker should work on maintaining a consistent pace throughout their speech. To improve, the speaker should practice speaking aloud and focus on enunciating each word clearly.

4.Topic Development The speaker's response does address the relationship between verbal and nonverbal communication using examples from the lecture. However, the response could be better organized and more coherent. The speaker should work on clearly connecting their ideas and providing more detailed explanations of the examples. To improve, the speaker can practice outlining their response before speaking to ensure a well-organized and coherent answer.

5.Language Use

Original: In this lecture, we explain that verbal and non-verbal communication can affect each other, and when they are in contact, the non-verbal communication is more effective. The lecturer, Professor Gates, has a private personal experience to explain this concept. First, when he saw his uncle come, he was very happy, and his sister gave his uncle the signal, he was happy, and his uncle can feel these signals. And the second example is when he told her daughter to nurse some hammer and snails, but his daughter cannot catch with her. But he just said to her daughter, it's okay, but his face is pain, and his head trembles. Her daughter can feel his pain.

Corrected: In this lecture(replace "we explain" with "it is explained"), it is explained that verbal and non-verbal communication can affect each other, and when they are in contact, the non-verbal communication is more effective. The lecturer, Professor Gates, uses a personal experience to illustrate this concept. First, when he saw his uncle arrive(replace "come" with "arrive"), he was very happy, and his reaction showed his uncle how happy he was(rephrase for clarity). His uncle could feel these signals. The second example is when he told his daughter to use a hammer and nails(replace "nurse some hammer and snails" with "use a hammer and nails"), but she couldn't keep up with him(replace "cannot catch with her" with "couldn't keep up with him"). He told her it was okay, but his face showed pain, and his hand trembled(replace "head trembles" with "hand trembled"). His daughter could sense his pain.

Revised Answer (140 words):

In this lecture, it is explained that verbal and non-verbal communication can affect each other, and when they are in harmony, non-verbal communication can be more effective. The lecturer, Professor Gates, uses a personal experience to illustrate this concept. When he saw his uncle arrive unexpectedly, he was overjoyed, and his reaction clearly conveyed his happiness to his uncle. His uncle could feel these positive signals. In the second example, he was teaching his daughter how to use a hammer and nails. Although she struggled to keep up with him, he reassured her that everything was fine. However, his facial expression showed pain, and his hand trembled due to an injury. Despite his verbal reassurance, his daughter could sense his pain through non-verbal cues. These examples demonstrate the importance of non-verbal communication in conveying emotions and messages effectively.

6.Mind Map

- Verbal and Non-verbal Communication
  - Affect each other
  - Non-verbal communication more effective when in harmony

- Professor Gates' Examples
  - Uncle's arrival
    - Happiness conveyed through non-verbal cues
  - Teaching daughter to use hammer and nails
    - Pain sensed through non-verbal cues despite verbal reassurance

- Importance of Non-verbal Communication
  - Conveys emotions and messages effectively

7.Key Words

1.Sub Scores Delivery: 3 Language Use: 3 Topic Development: 3

2.Estimated Scores

23. 3.Delivery

The speaker's delivery is generally clear and fluid, but there are some occasional pauses that could be improved. To enhance the delivery, the speaker should practice speaking with a more consistent pace and reduce unnecessary pauses. Additionally, working on pronunciation will help to eliminate any spelling errors that may have resulted from inaccurate pronunciation.

4.Topic Development The response is coherent and well-organized, with clear connections between ideas and sufficient support or examples. However, there is room for improvement in terms of providing more detailed explanations of the examples given. The speaker could elaborate on how the nonverbal communication in each example either supported or conflicted with the verbal message being conveyed. By doing so, the response would better illustrate the relationship between verbal and nonverbal communication.

5.Language Use

The professor gives examples of verbal and non-verbal communication. Verbal communication is with words, while non-verbal communication is using facial expressions, hand gestures, body movement, and tone of voice in order to give a more accurate message. For the first example the professor gives, he talks about meeting his Uncle Pete. Now, he really likes Uncle Pete, and so he said something like, Uncle Pete, what a surprise! "Uncle Pete! What a surprise!" (Removed the comma for a more natural flow) At the same time, his body movement was really, really happy. His eyes got wide, he broke into a huge smile, jumping up and down like a little boy. and jumped up and down like an excited child. (Rephrased for better sentence structure and vocabulary) Now, this shows body movement and the non-verbal communication of happiness. Now, another example he gives is when he was building a birdhouse with his daughter. He accidentally hurt himself and smashed his thumb with the hammer. Now, he said to his daughter, don't worry. However, his facial expression shows that he was very much in pain and his voice was trembling. This non-verbal communication shows that he was in pain. Thus, these two are the examples of non-verbal communication provided.

Revised Answer (140 words):

The professor illustrates the relationship between verbal and non-verbal communication through two examples. In the first example, when meeting his Uncle Pete unexpectedly, the professor expressed happiness verbally by exclaiming "Uncle Pete! What a surprise!" Simultaneously, his non-verbal cues—wide eyes, a huge smile, and jumping up and down like an excited child—reinforced his verbal message. This demonstrated the harmony between verbal and non-verbal communication in conveying genuine happiness. In contrast, the second example involved the professor accidentally hurting himself while building a birdhouse with his daughter. Despite verbally reassuring her that he was fine, his facial expression, trembling voice, and hand-shaking indicated pain. This example highlights how non-verbal cues can contradict verbal messages, revealing the true emotions behind the words spoken.

6.Mind Map

- Verbal Communication
  - Words

- Non-verbal Communication
  - Facial expressions
  - Hand gestures
  - Body movement
  - Tone of voice

- Example 1: Uncle Pete
  - Verbal: Exclamation of surprise and happiness
  - Non-verbal: Wide eyes, huge smile, jumping up and down

- Example 2: Building a birdhouse
  - Verbal: Reassurance of being fine
  - Non-verbal: Facial expression of pain, trembling voice, hand-shaking

7.Key Words

1.Sub Scores Delivery: 2 Language Use: 2 Topic Development: 3

2.Estimated Scores Score: 19

3.Delivery The speaker's delivery could be improved by focusing on clearer pronunciation and reducing pauses. Additionally, it would be helpful to maintain a consistent pace throughout the response. To improve, the speaker should practice speaking more fluidly and work on enunciating words clearly.

4.Topic Development The speaker's response is generally coherent and well-organized, with clear connections between ideas. However, there is room for improvement in providing more accurate details from the lecture. For example, the speaker should mention that the professor's facial expressions and body language conveyed his happiness when seeing his uncle, and that his daughter could tell he was in pain despite his verbal reassurance. To enhance topic development, the speaker should focus on providing more specific examples from the lecture to support their explanation of the relationship between verbal and nonverbal communication.

5.Language Use

Original: Verbal communication is an expression or gesture that people produce unconsciously. When it agrees with the nonverbal communication, we're trying to convey a message that is more enhanced and convincing. When it conflicts with the nonverbal communication, we're trying to convey a different or just more accurate message. The professor shared his own experience about the surprise visit of his uncle and what he said totally correspond with what he do. Because according to his wife, his eye was open and his eyes was widened and his mouth was open. Another experience is that he used to play the hammer with the daughter and he kind of smashed the lecturer's hands. It hurts a lot, but the professor won't confess is still conflicts with what he was doing because his hands were shaking. His voice was also trembling.

Corrected: Verbal communication is an expression or gesture that people produce unconsciously. When it agrees with the nonverbal communication, we're trying to convey a message that is more enhanced and convincing. When it conflicts with the nonverbal communication, we're trying to convey a different or just more accurate message. The professor shared his own experience about the surprise visit of his uncle and what he said totally correspond corresponded (past tense needed) with what he do did (past tense needed). Because according to his wife, his eye eyes (plural needed) were open and widened, and his mouth was open. Another experience is that he used to play the hammer with the daughter and he kind of smashed the lecturer's professor's (maintain consistency) hands. It hurt a lot, but the professor won't didn't (past tense needed) confess; it still conflicted with what he was doing because his hands were shaking. His voice was also trembling.

Revised Answer (140 words): Verbal communication consists of expressions or gestures that people produce unconsciously. When it aligns with nonverbal communication, we convey a more enhanced and convincing message. However, when it conflicts with nonverbal communication, we communicate a different or more accurate message. The professor shared his experience of his uncle's surprise visit, and his words corresponded with his actions, as his wife described his eyes widening and mouth opening in surprise. In another example, while building a birdhouse with his daughter, the professor accidentally smashed his thumb with a hammer. Despite verbally reassuring her that he was fine, his nonverbal cues—shaking hands and trembling voice—revealed the truth about his pain. These examples illustrate how verbal and nonverbal communication can either support or contradict each other in conveying messages.

6.Mind Map

- Verbal Communication
  - Expressions and gestures
  - Produced unconsciously

- Nonverbal Communication
  - Enhances and supports verbal messages
  - Conflicts can convey different or more accurate messages

- Professor's Examples
  - Uncle's surprise visit
    - Corresponding verbal and nonverbal cues (eyes, mouth)
  - Building birdhouse with daughter
    - Conflicting verbal reassurance and nonverbal cues (shaking hands, trembling voice)

7.Key Words