TOEFL TPO -1 Writing Task 2 Sample: reply to the professor

1.子项得分 任务完成度: 4 组织: 3 连贯与衔接: 3 语言使用: 4

2.预估分数

24. 3.任务完成度

你的文章基本上回答了问题，但是可以在表达上更加清晰和具体。建议你在描述申请过程中遇到的问题时，提供更多细节以便让教授更好地理解你的需求。

示例1： 原文：I need to submit the Research Proposal and your CV. 修改：为了申请CSC项目，我需要提交一份研究计划和您的简历。

示例2： 原文：I am still looking forward to your funding situation. 修改：同时，我也期待您能告知我关于资助情况的更多信息。

4.文章结构与组织 文章结构可以进一步优化。建议将文章划分为简短的引言、主体和结论部分。在主体部分中，可以按照逻辑顺序详细介绍每个要点及其支持细节。同时，请确保在段落之间使用恰当的过渡词或短语来保持连贯性。

示例1： 引言：亲爱的教授，非常感谢您给予我的鼓励和支持。在此，我想向您咨询关于申请CSC项目的一些问题。

示例2： 过渡词：首先，关于研究计划和您的简历，我需要在10月23日前提交这些材料。其次，我了解到申请美国签证时可能会遇到一些问题，因此希望您能提供一些建议。最后，关于资助情况，我期待您的回复。

5. 语法批改

I am so glad to receive your reply, and thank you so much for your encouragement. I will apply to the Plant Pathology graduate program and CSC at the same time. According to the CSC project description, I need to submit the Research Proposal and your CV. I wonder if it is convenient for you to give me your CV and a general direction of the Research Proposal. As the application deadline for CSC program in our school is October 23, I‘mI’m(Non-standard word) looking forward to your earlier reply.

In addition, I heard that when applying for a student visa, the US visa application Center will refuse the visa application for who applied to CSC-funded Bacteriology and Microbiology program. Therefore, I apply for CSC and keep you informed of the latest application progress, but I am still looking forward to your funding situation.

6.文章修订

Dear Professor,

I am truly grateful for your prompt response and the encouragement you have provided. I am writing to discuss my application to the Plant Pathology graduate program and the Chinese Scholarship Council (CSC) funding. The deadline for the CSC program at our school is October 23, and I would like to request your assistance in preparing the necessary documents.

Firstly, as per the CSC project guidelines, I am required to submit a Research Proposal along with your Curriculum Vitae (CV). I kindly request you to provide me with your CV at your earliest convenience. Furthermore, I would appreciate it if you could offer some guidance on formulating a comprehensive Research Proposal that aligns with the program's objectives.

Secondly, I have recently learned that applicants who apply for CSC-funded Bacteriology and Microbiology programs may face difficulties in obtaining a US student visa. The US Visa Application Center has been known to reject applications from candidates enrolled in these specific programs. Consequently, while I will keep you informed about my CSC application progress, I would also like to inquire about any alternative funding opportunities that may be available through your department or institution.

In conclusion, I eagerly anticipate your valuable input regarding my application process and funding options. Your expertise and guidance will undoubtedly enhance my chances of success in securing admission into the Plant Pathology graduate program and obtaining financial support.

Once again, thank you for your encouragement thus far. I look forward to hearing from you soon.

Sincerely,

[Your Name] (253 words)

7.文章批改

Dear Professor,

I am so glad to receive your reply, and thank you so much truly grateful (1) for your encouragement. I will apply prompt response and the encouragement you have provided. I am writing to discuss my application to the Plant Pathology graduate program and the Chinese Scholarship Council (CSC) funding. The deadline for the CSC program at the same time. According to the CSC project description, I need to submit the Research Proposal and your CV. I wonder if it is convenient for you to give our school is October 23, and I would like to request your assistance in preparing the necessary documents (2).

(1) "truly grateful" - This phrase is more formal and conveys a stronger sense of appreciation than "so glad."

(2) "preparing the necessary documents" - This phrase is more specific and formal than "give me your CV and a general direction of the Research Proposal. As the application deadline Proposal."

Firstly, as per the CSC project guidelines, I am required to submit a Research Proposal along with your Curriculum Vitae (CV). I kindly request you to provide me with your CV at your earliest convenience (3). Furthermore, I would appreciate it if you could offer some guidance on formulating a comprehensive Research Proposal that aligns with the program's objectives (4).

(3) "at your earliest convenience" - This phrase is more polite and formal than "if it is convenient for CSC program in our school is October 23, I‘m looking forward to your earlier reply. ¶ In addition, I heard you."

(4) "formulating a comprehensive Research Proposal that when applying aligns with the program's objectives" - This phrase provides more detail about what kind of guidance is being requested from the professor.

Secondly, I have recently learned that applicants who apply for a student visa, the US visa application Center will refuse the visa application for who applied to CSC-funded Bacteriology and Microbiology program. Therefore, I apply for programs may face difficulties in obtaining a US student visa. The US Visa Application Center has been known to reject applications from candidates enrolled in these specific programs. Consequently, while I will keep you informed about my CSC and keep you informed of the latest application progress, but I I would also like to inquire about any alternative funding opportunities that may be available through your department or institution (5).

(5) "inquire about any alternative funding opportunities that may be available through your department or institution" - This phrase is more formal and specific than "I am still looking forward to your funding situation.situation."

In conclusion, I eagerly anticipate your valuable input regarding my application process and funding options. Your expertise and guidance will undoubtedly enhance my chances of success in securing admission into the Plant Pathology graduate program and obtaining financial support (6).

(6) "securing admission into the Plant Pathology graduate program and obtaining financial support" - This phrase is more formal and specific than "looking forward to your earlier reply."

Once again, thank you for your encouragement thus far. I look forward to hearing from you soon.

Sincerely,

[Your Name]

8.思维导图

• Thesis statement: Applying for the Plant Pathology graduate program and CSC funding
  • Topic sentence 1: Requesting professor's CV and guidance on Research Proposal
    • Sub-topic: CSC project guidelines
    • Supporting example: Deadline for the CSC program at the school
  • Topic sentence 2: Addressing potential visa issues for CSC-funded Bacteriology and Microbiology programs
    • Sub-topic: US Visa Application Center rejections
    • Supporting example: Alternative funding opportunities through the department or institution
  • Conclusion: Expressing gratitude and anticipation for professor's input

9.关键词

10.补充示例

1. Example: Requesting a letter of recommendation from the professor

   • Sub-opinion: A strong recommendation letter can improve the chances of admission.
   • Explanation: Professors can provide insights into the student's academic abilities and potential.

2. Example: Seeking advice on preparing for the graduate program

   • Sub-opinion: Proper preparation can ensure a smooth transition into graduate studies.
   • Explanation: Professors can offer valuable tips and resources for success in the program.

3. Example: Asking about research opportunities within the department

   • Sub-opinion: Engaging in research projects can enhance the student's learning experience.
   • Explanation: Professors may have information about ongoing projects or potential collaborations.

4. Example: Inquiring about networking opportunities with other professionals in the field

   • Sub-opinion: Networking can lead to future job prospects and collaborations.
   • Explanation: Professors may have connections with other experts in the field and can facilitate introductions.

5. Example: Requesting guidance on selecting relevant coursework for the graduate program

   • Sub-opinion: Choosing appropriate courses can help build a strong foundation for future research.
   • Explanation: Professors can recommend courses that align with the student's interests and career goals.