TOEFL TPO -1 Writing Task 2 Sample: recommendation letter

1.子项得分

• 任务完成度: 4

• 文章结构与组织: 4

• 连贯性与衔接: 4

• 语言运用: 4

2.预估分数

• 总分：25

3.任务完成度 这篇文章基本上完成了推荐信的任务要求，但是可以在以下方面进行改进：

1. 在文章开头简要介绍一下自己和学生的关系，以及推荐信的目的。

2. 更具体地描述学生在实验室和课堂上的表现，以及她在项目中所扮演的角色。

例如：

• "I am writing this recommendation letter for Zhang Manyu, who has been my student in the Microbiology class and later joined my research lab."

• "In the College Students' Innovation and Entrepreneurship Research Project, Zhang Manyu took the lead in designing experiments and analyzing data, which greatly contributed to the project's success."

4.文章结构与组织 文章整体结构清晰，但可以在以下方面进行改进：

1. 在引言部分简要介绍一下自己和学生的关系，以及推荐信的目的。

2. 使用更明确的过渡词或短语来连接不同段落和观点。

例如：

• "I have had the pleasure of knowing Zhang Manyu as her professor in Microbiology class and later as her research mentor when she joined my lab."

• "Not only has she excelled academically, but Zhang Manyu has also demonstrated strong leadership and commitment to volunteer work."

5. 语法批改

I first met Zhang ManyuMany(misspelling) in the class of Microbiology, she performed well in the class and expressed interest to my research of fungal viruses after the class. She actively communicated with me about scientific research and joined my lab for further study.

After entering the laboratory, Zhang ManyuMany(misspelling) showed great passion for scientific research. Since then, she has mastered the theoretical knowledge and experimental operation related to research of fungal virusesviruses,(This rule identifies whether commas are missing in a sentence.) as well as the experimental design and operation of protein expression and purification. With my support, she applied for the Collegeapplied to the College(Collocation: apply for/to) Students' Innovation and Entrepreneurship Research Project and successfully concluded it. What’s more, the project was rated as an excellent innovation project. At the same time, under my guidance, she published an article in AchivesArchives(misspelling) of Virology as a co-first author. During her stay in my laboratory, she studied scientific problems seriously, cooperated with other members of the laboratory and helped each other. And she can always complete the task I gave her in time and well.

Outside the laboratory, she has strong learning and practical ability. She earnestly studied various courses and actively participated in practical activities. As a result, she won a series of honors such as the National Scholarship, the Yangtze University Scholarship, and the Excellent Student Model. In addition, she was also dedicated and actively participated in volunteer activities. She joined the Youth Volunteer Detachment of Yangtze University and participated in various volunteer activities, and she also won the title of outstanding volunteer.

6.文章修订

I am writing this recommendation letter for Zhang Manyu, a highly motivated and talented student whom I have had the pleasure of knowing as her professor in the Microbiology class and later as her research mentor when she joined my lab. Zhang Manyu has consistently demonstrated exceptional academic performance, strong leadership skills, and a commitment to volunteer work.

In the Microbiology class, Zhang Manyu stood out among her peers due to her keen interest in the subject matter and dedication to learning. She actively participated in class discussions and often approached me after class to discuss my research on fungal viruses. Recognizing her potential, I invited her to join my laboratory for further study.

Upon joining my lab, Zhang Manyu displayed great enthusiasm for scientific research. She quickly mastered the theoretical knowledge and experimental techniques related to fungal virus research, as well as protein expression and purification. With my guidance, she applied for the College Students' Innovation and Entrepreneurship Research Project and successfully completed it. The project was recognized as an excellent innovation project under her leadership.

During her time in my laboratory, Zhang Manyu took on significant responsibilities in designing experiments and analyzing data, which greatly contributed to our research progress. She collaborated effectively with other lab members, offering assistance whenever needed. I could always rely on her to complete tasks efficiently and accurately.

Zhang Manyu's accomplishments extend beyond the laboratory setting. She has demonstrated strong learning abilities by excelling in various courses while actively participating in practical activities. Her hard work has earned her numerous accolades such as the National Scholarship, Yangtze University Scholarship, and the Excellent Student Model award.

In addition to her academic achievements, Zhang Manyu is dedicated to community service. She joined the Youth Volunteer Detachment of Yangtze University and participated in various volunteer activities throughout her time at university. Her outstanding contributions have earned her recognition as an exceptional volunteer.

Throughout my years of experience teaching students at the university level, I have encountered few individuals who possess the same level of dedication, intelligence, and passion for learning as Zhang Manyu. I am confident that she will continue to excel in her future endeavors and make significant contributions to her chosen field.

In conclusion, I wholeheartedly recommend Zhang Manyu for any academic or professional opportunity that she may seek. Her exceptional academic performance, strong leadership skills, and commitment to community service make her an ideal candidate for any program or position. I have no doubt that she will continue to achieve great success in all her future pursuits.

Please feel free to contact me if you require any further information or clarification regarding Zhang Manyu's qualifications. (443 words)

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I am writing this recommendation letter for Zhang Manyu, a highly motivated and talented student whom I have had the pleasure of knowing as her professor in the Microbiology class and later as her research mentor when she joined my lab. (Reason: Clarify the relationship between the writer and Zhang Manyu, and set the context for the recommendation letter.) Zhang Manyu in the class has consistently demonstrated exceptional academic performance, strong leadership skills, and a commitment to volunteer work. (Reason: Summarize her main qualities.)

In the Microbiology class, Zhang Manyu stood out among her peers due to her keen interest in the subject matter and dedication to learning. (Reason: Provide specific examples of Microbiology, she performed well in the class and expressed interest to my research of fungal viruses after the class. her performance in class.) She actively communicated with participated in class discussions and often approached me about scientific after class to discuss my research and joined my lab on fungal viruses. Recognizing her potential, I invited her to join my laboratory for further study.

After entering the laboratory, Upon joining my lab, Zhang Manyu showed displayed great passion enthusiasm for scientific research. Since then, she has She quickly mastered the theoretical knowledge and experimental operation techniques related to research of fungal viruses virus research, as well as the experimental design and operation of protein expression and purification. (Reason: Detail her skills acquired in the lab.) With my support, guidance, she applied for the College Students' Innovation and Entrepreneurship Research Project and successfully concluded completed it. What’s more, the The project was rated recognized as an excellent innovation project. At the same time, project under my guidance, she published an article in Achives of Virology as a co-first author. her leadership.

During her stay time in my laboratory, she studied scientific problems seriously, cooperated Zhang Manyu took on significant responsibilities in designing experiments and analyzing data, which greatly contributed to our research progress. (Reason: Describe her role in projects more specifically.) She collaborated effectively with other members of lab members, offering assistance whenever needed. I could always rely on her to complete tasks efficiently and accurately.

Zhang Manyu's accomplishments extend beyond the laboratory and helped each other. And she can always complete the task I gave her in time and well. ¶ Outside the laboratory, she setting. She has demonstrated strong learning and practical ability. She earnestly studied abilities by excelling in various courses and while actively participated participating in practical activities. As a result, (Reason: Emphasize that she won a series of honors is well-rounded academically.) Her hard work has earned her numerous accolades such as the National Scholarship, the Yangtze University Scholarship, and the Excellent Student Model. Model award.

In addition, she was also addition to her academic achievements, Zhang Manyu is dedicated and actively participated in volunteer activities. to community service. She joined the Youth Volunteer Detachment of Yangtze University and participated in various volunteer activities, and activities throughout her time at university. (Reason: Highlight her commitment to volunteering.) Her outstanding contributions have earned her recognition as an exceptional volunteer.

Throughout my years of experience teaching students at the university level, I have encountered few individuals who possess the same level of dedication, intelligence, and passion for learning as Zhang Manyu. (Reason: Compare her to other students to emphasize her uniqueness.) I am confident that she also won the title of outstanding volunteer.will continue to excel in her future endeavors and make significant contributions to her chosen field.

In conclusion, I wholeheartedly recommend Zhang Manyu for any academic or professional opportunity that she may seek. (Reason: Reinforce the recommendation.) Her exceptional academic performance, strong leadership skills, and commitment to community service make her an ideal candidate for any program or position. I have no doubt that she will continue to achieve great success in all her future pursuits.

Please feel free to contact me if you require any further information or clarification regarding Zhang Manyu's qualifications. (Reason: Offer availability for further inquiries.)

8.思维导图

• Thesis statement: Zhang Manyu's exceptional academic performance, strong leadership skills, and commitment to community service
  • Topic sentence 1: Microbiology class performance
    • Sub-topic: Keen interest in subject matter
    • Supporting example: Active participation in class discussions
  • Topic sentence 2: Laboratory experience
    • Sub-topic: Mastered theoretical knowledge and experimental techniques
    • Supporting example: College Students' Innovation and Entrepreneurship Research Project
  • Topic sentence 3: Academic achievements
    • Sub-topic: Excelling in various courses and practical activities
    • Supporting example: National Scholarship, Yangtze University Scholarship, Excellent Student Model award
  • Topic sentence 4: Commitment to community service
    • Sub-topic: Joined Youth Volunteer Detachment of Yangtze University
    • Supporting example: Recognition as an exceptional volunteer

9.关键词

10.补充示例

1. Zhang Manyu's leadership skills were evident when she organized a study group for her peers, helping them understand complex microbiology concepts.

2. Her dedication to scientific research was further demonstrated when she presented her findings at a national conference, receiving praise from experts in the field.

3. Zhang Manyu's commitment to community service extended to organizing charity events on campus, raising funds for local non-profit organizations.

4. In addition to her academic and volunteer work, Zhang Manyu also participated in extracurricular activities such as the university debate team, honing her communication and critical thinking skills.

5. As a testament to her strong work ethic, Zhang Manyu balanced her academic responsibilities with part-time employment, gaining valuable real-world experience and further demonstrating her time management skills.