TOEFL TPO -1 Writing Task 2 Sample: please answer the following questions respectively. 1. How long and in what capacity have you known the applicant? 2. please comment on the applicant's research proposal.

1.子项得分

• 任务完成度: 4

• 文章结构与组织: 4

• 连贯性与衔接: 4

• 语言运用: 4

2.预估分数

• 总分：25

3.任务完成度 总体来说，文章回答了题目中的两个问题。然而，第二部分关于研究提案的评论可以更具体和详细。为了提高任务完成度，建议在讨论研究提案时，更深入地探讨其优点和不足，并给出具体的建议。

示例1： 原文：For the submitted research proposal, I think she has done a remarkably satisfactory project. 修改后：For the submitted research proposal, I think she has done a remarkably satisfactory project, as she has clearly outlined the research objectives and methodology.

示例2： 原文：The overall layout of the research plan proposed in this application project is relatively reasonable. 修改后：The overall layout of the research plan proposed in this application project is relatively reasonable, with a well-defined structure that includes an introduction, literature review, methodology, and expected results.

4.文章结构与组织 文章的结构基本清晰，但可以通过使用主题句和段落间过渡句进一步改善。此外，在批评研究提案时，请确保每个段落都集中在一个特定的观点上，并提供支持细节。

示例1： 原文：The submitted version is about intergroup contact mechnisim. 修改后：The submitted version focuses on the intergroup contact mechanism, which is a crucial aspect of intercultural studies.

示例2： 原文：The research is rich in contect and also very complex in nature... 修改后：One of the strengths of this research proposal is its richness in content and complexity, as it delves into various factors such as stereotypes, intercultural attitudes, and adaptation strategies.

5. 语法批改

1. I have known Ms Wang SuhanSudan(misspelling) for more than 13 years. Back in 2010 when I was giving a lecture on Extensive Reading in her class, I first know her. For that fall semester and subsequent spring semester, I had been her course instructor during her undergraduate studies. Then in 2013, she came to me hoping that I can be her master supervisor for her future studies. From 2013-2016, I had been her master supervisorsupervisor,(This rule identifies whether commas are missing in a sentence.) giving instructions for her academic confusions. After her graduation, we still contact with each occasionally. She expressed intensive and strong interest in intercultural studies and sometimes would resortwould sometimes resort(Word order: Wrong position of adverb, e.g. 'Always I am happy. (I am always happy.)') to me for some instructions. We also give greetings during festivals, more like the connections between friends.

2. Ms Wang SuhanSudan(misspelling) has put huge efforts in the completion and refinement of the research proposal. I offered suggestions for the revisions of her orginaloriginal(misspelling) draft and, and(comma between independent clauses) she strictly followed the instructions and has made great improvements on it. For the submitted research proposal, I think she has done a remarkably satisfactory project.

The submitted version is about intergroup contact mechnisimmechanism(misspelling). This research proposal is outlined with the intergroup contact theories as the theoretical framework, and factors like stereotypes, intercultural attitudes, adaptation stragiesstages(misspelling) are also involved.

The research is rich in contectcontact(misspelling) and also very complex in nature, and the transformation of the connections between these contents can provide a reasonable logical review, not just a simple accumulation. I think it will not cause a decoupling between theory and practice. The overall layout of the research plan proposed in this application project is relatively reasonable. It can be seen that the applicant has some experience and foundation in preliminary research work, but the disadvantage is that the applicant's analysis of the key technical difficulties faced in constructing the theoretical model is not thorough enough.

6.文章修订

I have known Ms. Wang Suhan for more than 13 years. Our acquaintance began in 2010 when I delivered a lecture on Extensive Reading in her class. During that fall semester and the subsequent spring semester, I served as her course instructor throughout her undergraduate studies. In 2013, she approached me with the hope that I could become her master's supervisor for her future academic pursuits. From 2013 to 2016, I fulfilled this role, providing guidance and addressing her academic concerns. After her graduation, we maintained occasional contact, with Ms. Wang expressing a strong and enduring interest in intercultural studies and seeking my advice on various topics. Our relationship has evolved into a friendly connection, with us exchanging greetings during festivals.

Ms. Wang Suhan has invested considerable effort into the completion and refinement of her research proposal. Upon reviewing her original draft, I offered suggestions for revisions, which she diligently followed, resulting in significant improvements to the document. In its current form, I believe she has produced an exceptionally satisfactory project.

The submitted version of Ms. Wang's research proposal focuses on the intergroup contact mechanism—a crucial aspect of intercultural studies—using intergroup contact theories as its theoretical framework. The proposal also explores various factors such as stereotypes, intercultural attitudes, and adaptation strategies.

One of the strengths of this research proposal is its richness in content and complexity; it delves into numerous aspects while maintaining a logical flow between them rather than merely accumulating information haphazardly. This approach ensures that there is no disconnect between theory and practice.

The overall layout of the research plan proposed in this application project is relatively reasonable; it includes a well-defined structure comprising an introduction, literature review, methodology section, and expected results section. It is evident that Ms. Wang possesses experience and a solid foundation in preliminary research work.

However, there are areas for improvement. A notable weakness is the insufficient analysis of the key technical difficulties faced in constructing the theoretical model. To address this issue, Ms. Wang should delve deeper into potential challenges and provide a more comprehensive evaluation of these obstacles.

In conclusion, Ms. Wang Suhan's research proposal demonstrates her dedication to intercultural studies and her ability to develop a complex and well-structured project. With further refinement and attention to detail, I am confident that her research will yield valuable insights into the field of intergroup contact mechanisms.

Essay statistics: {"words": 455, "unique_words": 235} (402 words)

1. 7.文章批改

I have known Ms Ms. Wang Suhan for more than 13 years. Back (clarified the subject) Our acquaintance began in 2010 when I was giving delivered a lecture on Extensive Reading in her class, I first know her. For class. (improved sentence structure) During that fall semester and the subsequent spring semester, I had been served as her course instructor during throughout her undergraduate studies. Then in (enhanced clarity) In 2013, she came to approached me hoping with the hope that I can be her master could become her master's supervisor for her future studies. academic pursuits. (rephrased for better flow) From 2013-2016, I had been her master supervisor giving instructions for 2013 to 2016, I fulfilled this role, providing guidance and addressing her academic confusions. concerns. (improved sentence structure) After her graduation, we still contact maintained occasional contact, with each occasionally. She expressed intensive and Ms. Wang expressing a strong and enduring interest in intercultural studies and sometimes would resort to me for some instructions. We also give seeking my advice on various topics. Our relationship has evolved into a friendly connection, with us exchanging greetings during festivals, more like the connections between friends. ¶ 2. Ms festivals.

Ms. Wang Suhan has put huge efforts in invested considerable effort into the completion and refinement of the her research proposal. (enhanced clarity) Upon reviewing her original draft, I offered suggestions for the revisions of her orginal draft and revisions, which she strictly followed the instructions and has made great diligently followed, resulting in significant improvements on it. For the submitted research proposal, I think to the document. In its current form, I believe she has done a remarkably produced an exceptionally satisfactory project.

The submitted version is about of Ms. Wang's research proposal focuses on the intergroup contact mechnisim. This research proposal is outlined with the mechanism—a crucial aspect of intercultural studies—using intergroup contact theories as the its theoretical framework, and framework. (improved sentence structure and clarity) The proposal also explores various factors like such as stereotypes, intercultural attitudes, and adaptation stragies are also involved. ¶ The research strategies.

One of the strengths of this research proposal is rich in contect and also very complex in nature, and the transformation of the connections its richness in content and complexity; it delves into numerous aspects while maintaining a logical flow between these contents can provide a reasonable logical review, not just a simple accumulation. I think it will not cause a decoupling them rather than merely accumulating information haphazardly. (improved sentence structure and coherence) This approach ensures that there is no disconnect between theory and practice.

The overall layout of the research plan proposed in this application project is relatively reasonable. reasonable; it includes a well-defined structure comprising an introduction, literature review, methodology section, and expected results section. (improved sentence structure and clarity) It can be seen is evident that the applicant has some Ms. Wang possesses experience and a solid foundation in preliminary research work, but the disadvantage work.

However, there are areas for improvement. A notable weakness is that the applicant's the insufficient analysis of the key technical difficulties faced in constructing the theoretical model is not thorough enough.model. (enhanced clarity) To address this issue, Ms. Wang should delve deeper into potential challenges and provide a more comprehensive evaluation of these obstacles.

In conclusion, Ms. Wang Suhan's research proposal demonstrates her dedication to intercultural studies and her ability to develop a complex and well-structured project. (improved sentence structure) With further refinement and attention to detail, I am confident that her research will yield valuable insights into the field of intergroup contact mechanisms.

8.思维导图

• Thesis statement: Ms. Wang Suhan's research proposal on intergroup contact mechanisms
  • Topic sentence 1: Relationship with Ms. Wang Suhan
    • Sub-topic: Course instructor during undergraduate studies
    • Sub-topic: Master's supervisor from 2013 to 2016
    • Sub-topic: Ongoing friendly connection
  • Topic sentence 2: Research proposal development and refinement
    • Sub-topic: Suggestions for revisions
    • Sub-topic: Significant improvements made
  • Topic sentence 3: Content and complexity of the research proposal
    • Sub-topic: Intergroup contact theories as the theoretical framework
    • Sub-topic: Exploration of stereotypes, intercultural attitudes, and adaptation strategies
  • Topic sentence 4: Strengths and weaknesses of the research proposal
    • Sub-topic: Richness in content and complexity
    • Sub-topic: Insufficient analysis of key technical difficulties in constructing the theoretical model

9.关键词

10.补充示例

1. Ms. Wang's research proposal demonstrates her ability to synthesize information from various sources, which is crucial for conducting interdisciplinary studies.

2. The research proposal could benefit from incorporating more case studies to illustrate the practical applications of the intergroup contact theories.

3. By collaborating with experts in related fields, Ms. Wang can gain valuable insights and further enhance the quality of her research proposal.

4. Ms. Wang's research proposal can contribute to the understanding of intercultural communication and help develop strategies for fostering positive interactions between different cultural groups.

5. The research proposal's focus on adaptation strategies can provide useful recommendations for individuals and organizations working in multicultural environments, thus promoting effective communication and collaboration.