TOEFL TPO -1 Writing Task 2 Sample: Governments should not fund any scientific research whose consequences are unclear. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.

1.子项得分

• 任务完成度：4

• 组织：3

• 连贯与衔接：3

• 语言使用：3

2.预估分数

• 22

3.任务完成度 你的文章基本上回答了题目要求，但是在论述过程中，有些观点不够明确。为了提高任务完成度，建议你在论述时更加具体和详细。例如，在描述支持不确定结果研究的优势时，可以给出更多具体的例子来证明其价值。

改进示例1： 原文：“However, we can not neglect the researches with unclear consequences in the long run. If we find another word to express "unclear" in the long term, it is "creative". ” 修改后：“However, we cannot neglect the researches with unclear consequences in the long run, as they often lead to groundbreaking discoveries and innovations. For example, the development of penicillin was initially an unexpected result of a scientific experiment, but it has since revolutionized medicine and saved countless lives.”

改进示例2： 原文：“For example, we solve the covid-19 problem by using the first method, but we can not thoroughly overcome it.” 修改后：“For instance, while short-term solutions like social distancing and wearing masks help mitigate the spread of COVID-19, it is crucial to invest in long-term research for developing effective vaccines and treatments that may have uncertain outcomes initially but could eventually eradicate the virus.”

4.文章结构与组织 文章整体结构基本清晰，但在段落组织和过渡方面还有待加强。建议你在段落之间使用更明确的过渡词或短语，以帮助读者更好地理解你的观点。同时，确保每个段落都有一个明确的主题句，以便读者清楚地了解该段落的主要内容。

改进示例1： 原文：“Admittedly, giving financial help only to researches with clear, or rather, clear and good-effect consequences is a wise means for human being's development in the short term.” 修改后：“On one hand, allocating funds primarily to research projects with clear and positive outcomes can be beneficial for addressing immediate challenges and promoting short-term development.”

改进示例2： 原文：“To sum up, funding and supporting the researches with certain results is a good idea to deal with the emergance in the short term…” 修改后：“In conclusion, while prioritizing funding for research projects with certain outcomes may be advantageous in addressing immediate concerns and promoting short-term progress, it is essential not to overlook the potential long-term benefits of investing in research projects with uncertain outcomes.”

5. 语法批改

Should govermentsgovernments(misspelling) refuse to give financial help to any scientific research with unclear consequences? In the short term, unassailablyunassailable(misspelling), it is a wise idea to fund research which has clear consequences. Nevertheless, in my perspective, merely funding those researches while ignoring the research with unclear consequences in contrast is unfavorable in the long run.

Admittedly, giving financial help only to researches with clear, or rather, clear and good-effect consequences is a wise means for human being's development in the short term. This is because our sources are limited, and thus what we can put into the scientific research, such as money, is qualified alike. If we fund too much onof(This rule identifies wrong preposition usage.) the unclear-consequences researches in the short term, we will not have enough sources to support the relatively good and clear researches. ConcequentlyConsequently(misspelling), we get too muchmany('much' + countable noun, e.g. 'much (many) children') uncertain results and lose the ability to deal with the accidental emergencies. For instance, when facing the covid-19COVID-19(COVID-19) virus, we are anxious to handle that problem and there are two research regarding with that need funding. One of them is a research that can palliate the symptonsymptom(misspelling) and deflate the morality, the other one may have the ability to thorough kill the virus but, but(comma between independent clauses) it is not quite sure. In such emergent circumstance, we may choose to fund the former one, given that we have limited money and want to solve the problem with security and efficiency.

However, we can not neglect the researches with unclear consequences in the long run. If we find another word to express "unclear" in the long term, it is "creative". This is because a definite resultsa definite result(Agreement: 'a' + plural word) is within our imagination, while only a uncertain resultsa uncertain result(Agreement: 'a' + plural word) can bring us surprising things that beyond our thoughts and wits. Thus, the unclear consequences have huge protencialpotential(misspelling), which is beneficial to the whole human society from the perpectiveperspective(misspelling) of development. Imagine, if we only fund the researches with clear consequences, we can not create what brings us a huge jump. For example, we solve the covid-19COVID-19(COVID-19) problem by using the first method, but we can not thoroughly overcome it. After we apply the second method and improve it once and once again, and finally, it proves to be a wonderful way to kill all the covid-19COVID-19(COVID-19) virus, which contributes the bigger bonus to the whole human society. In a nutshell, we should take serious at the uncertain researches with huge creativity hidenhidden(misspelling) beyond it.

To sum up, funding and supporting the researches with certain results is a good idea to deal with the emerganceemergence(misspelling) in the short term, while in the long run, the researches with unclear results have its merits for it can bring surprising bonus and huge creativity to our society and thus inject endless vitality to the breakthrough development of our history.

6.文章修订

Should governments refuse to provide financial support for scientific research with unclear consequences? In the short term, it is undoubtedly a wise decision to fund research projects that have clear and positive outcomes. However, in my perspective, solely funding such research while disregarding those with uncertain consequences may prove detrimental in the long run.

On one hand, allocating funds primarily to research projects with clear and positive outcomes can be beneficial for addressing immediate challenges and promoting short-term development. This is because our resources are limited, and thus what we can invest in scientific research, such as money, is finite. If we allocate too many resources to projects with uncertain outcomes in the short term, we may not have enough resources left to support those that yield more predictable and favorable results. Consequently, we may end up with an abundance of uncertain findings while losing the ability to deal with urgent emergencies effectively. For instance, when faced with the COVID-19 pandemic, there might be two competing research projects requiring funding: one that can alleviate symptoms and reduce mortality rates, and another that has the potential to eradicate the virus entirely but has not yet been proven effective. In such a critical situation, it would be reasonable to prioritize funding for the former project due to its immediate benefits and assured efficacy.

On the other hand, we cannot neglect research projects with unclear consequences in the long run as they often lead to groundbreaking discoveries and innovations. The uncertainty associated with these projects can be viewed as a source of creativity since definite results are within our expectations while unpredictable outcomes can bring about surprising advancements beyond our current understanding. Therefore, investing in projects with uncertain consequences holds significant potential for driving human progress from a long-term perspective. Imagine if we only funded research projects with clear outcomes; this approach would limit our ability to make substantial leaps forward in various fields of study. For example, while short-term solutions like social distancing and wearing masks help mitigate the spread of COVID-19, it is crucial to invest in long-term research for developing effective vaccines and treatments that may have uncertain outcomes initially but could eventually eradicate the virus.

In conclusion, while prioritizing funding for research projects with certain outcomes may be advantageous in addressing immediate concerns and promoting short-term progress, it is essential not to overlook the potential long-term benefits of investing in research projects with uncertain outcomes. By striking a balance between supporting projects with immediate applicability and those with transformative potential, we can ensure that our society continues to advance and thrive throughout history.

Essay statistics: {"words": 452, "unique_words": 221} (441 words)

7.文章批改

Should goverments governments refuse to provide financial support for scientific research with unclear consequences? (Changed "refuse to give financial help to any scientific research with unclear consequences? help" to "refuse to provide financial support" for a more formal tone) In the short term, unassailably, it is undoubtedly a wise idea decision to fund research which has projects that have clear consequences. Nevertheless, and positive outcomes. However, in my perspective, merely solely funding such research while disregarding those with uncertain consequences may prove detrimental in the long run. (Changed "merely funding those researches while ignoring the research with unclear consequences in contrast is unfavorable in the long run. contrast" to "solely funding such research while disregarding those with uncertain consequences" for clarity and coherence)

Admittedly, giving On one hand, allocating funds primarily to research projects with clear and positive outcomes can be beneficial for addressing immediate challenges and promoting short-term development. (Changed "giving financial help only to researches with clear, or rather, clear and good-effect consequences is a wise means for human being's development in the short term. term" to improve clarity and formality) This is because our sources resources are limited, and thus what we can put into the invest in scientific research, such as money, is qualified alike. finite. If we fund allocate too much on the unclear-consequences researches many resources to projects with uncertain outcomes in the short term, we will may not have enough sources resources left to support the relatively good and clear researches. Concequently, those that yield more predictable and favorable results. Consequently, we get too much may end up with an abundance of uncertain results and lose findings while losing the ability to deal with the accidental emergencies. urgent emergencies effectively. For instance, when facing the covid-19 virus, we are anxious to handle that problem and faced with the COVID-19 pandemic (replaced "covid-19 virus" for consistency), there are might be two research regarding with that need funding. One of them is a research competing research projects requiring funding: one that can palliate alleviate symptoms and reduce mortality rates (changed "palliate the sympton and deflate the morality, the other one may have the ability to thorough kill morality" for clarity), and another that has the potential to eradicate the virus entirely but it is has not quite sure. yet been proven effective. In such emergent circumstance, a critical situation (changed "emergent circumstance" for clarity), it would be reasonable to prioritize funding for the former project due to its immediate benefits and assured efficacy.

On the other hand, we may choose to fund the former one, given that we have limited money and want to solve the problem with security and efficiency. ¶ However, we cannot neglect research projects with unclear consequences in the long run as they often lead to groundbreaking discoveries and innovations. (Changed "we can not neglect the researches with unclear consequences in the long run. If we find another word to express "unclear" in the long term, it is "creative". This is because run" for clarity and coherence) The uncertainty associated with these projects can be viewed as a source of creativity since definite results is are within our imagination, expectations while only a uncertain results unpredictable outcomes can bring us about surprising things that advancements beyond our thoughts and wits. Thus, the unclear current understanding. Therefore, investing in projects with uncertain consequences have huge protencial, which is beneficial to the whole holds significant potential for driving human society progress from the perpective of development. Imagine, a long-term perspective. Imagine if we only fund the researches funded research projects with clear consequences, outcomes; this approach would limit our ability to make substantial leaps forward in various fields of study. For example, while short-term solutions like social distancing and wearing masks help mitigate the spread of COVID-19, it is crucial to invest in long-term research for developing effective vaccines and treatments that may have uncertain outcomes initially but could eventually eradicate the virus.

In conclusion, while prioritizing funding for research projects with certain outcomes may be advantageous in addressing immediate concerns and promoting short-term progress (changed "deal with the emergance" for clarity), it is essential not to overlook the potential long-term benefits of investing in research projects with uncertain outcomes. By striking a balance between supporting projects with immediate applicability and those with transformative potential (changed "huge creativity" for clarity), we can not create what brings us a huge jump. For example, we solve the covid-19 problem by using the first method, but we can not thoroughly overcome it. After we apply the second method and improve it once and once again, and finally, it proves to be a wonderful way to kill all the covid-19 virus, which contributes the bigger bonus to the whole human society. In a nutshell, we should take serious at the uncertain researches with huge creativity hiden beyond it. ¶ To sum up, funding and supporting the researches with certain results is a good idea to deal with the emergance in the short term, while in the long run, the researches with unclear results have its merits for it can bring surprising bonus and huge creativity to ensure that our society and thus inject endless vitality to the breakthrough continues to advance and thrive throughout history. (Changed "breakthrough development of our history.history" for coherence)

8.思维导图

• Thesis statement: Balancing funding for research projects with certain outcomes and those with uncertain consequences
  • Topic sentence 1: Benefits of funding research projects with clear and positive outcomes
    • Sub-topic: Limited resources
    • Supporting example: COVID-19 pandemic, prioritizing projects with immediate benefits
  • Topic sentence 2: Importance of investing in research projects with unclear consequences
    • Sub-topic: Creativity and groundbreaking discoveries
    • Supporting example: Penicillin, vaccines for COVID-19
  • Conclusion: Striking a balance between supporting projects with immediate applicability and those with transformative potential

9.关键词

10.补充示例

1. Investing in renewable energy research with uncertain outcomes can lead to innovative solutions for climate change and reduce our reliance on fossil fuels.

2. Funding exploratory space missions with unclear consequences may result in groundbreaking discoveries about our universe and potentially habitable planets.

3. Supporting research projects focused on artificial intelligence and machine learning with uncertain outcomes can revolutionize various industries and improve overall efficiency.

4. Allocating resources to experimental medical treatments with unclear consequences can potentially lead to breakthroughs in curing previously untreatable diseases.

5. Investing in research projects that aim to develop new materials with uncertain outcomes can lead to the creation of sustainable and eco-friendly alternatives for various applications.