TOEFL TPO -1 Writing Task 2 Sample: discuss your long-term future plan and provide a reference letter.

1.子项得分

• 任务完成度: 4

• 文章结构与组织: 4

• 连贯性与衔接: 4

• 语言运用: 4

2.预估分数

• 分数：25

3.任务完成度 整体来说，文章回答了题目要求的两个部分：讨论长期未来计划和提供推荐信。然而，关于长期未来计划的讨论较为简短，可以在这部分加入更多具体的细节和规划。此外，推荐信中使用了错误的代词（他而不是她），需要进行修改。

改进建议示例：

1. 在讨论长期未来计划时，可以加入更多具体的规划和目标，例如：“在未来五年内，我希望能够在某某大学任教，并积极参与跨文化交流项目。”
2. 修改推荐信中的错误代词：“In addition, she also possesses excellent cross-cultural communication skills...”

4.文章结构与组织 文章整体结构清晰，包括引言、正文和结尾。然而，在正文部分关于长期未来计划的讨论可以进一步完善。此外，在推荐信部分可以使用更明确的段落划分以突出每个方面。

改进建议示例：

1. 在讨论长期未来计划时，可以将不同的目标和规划分成不同的段落，例如：“首先，我计划在某某大学任教。其次，我希望积极参与跨文化交流项目。”
2. 在推荐信部分使用明确的段落划分，例如：“首先，我想强调她在学术方面的出色才能和深厚的专业知识。其次，她具有优秀的语言技能和跨文化沟通能力。”

5. 语法批改

I feel certain about my long-term future plans. My several years of working experience in teaching convince me that I will continue to be a teacher after graduation. I am, primarily, an intercultural communicator myself. My identity as a teacher facilitates the spread of intercultural knowledge to the younger generations and provide them a more open intercultural perspective. I can also benefit other peoplepeople,(This rule identifies whether commas are missing in a sentence.) including my friends and colledgescolleges(misspelling). Also, I will try to address the problems and traverse the barriers on the academic road. I feel my PhD project can open up new lines of inquiry for this field and want to use it as the foundation for a fruitful research career.

Dear Admissions Committee:

I am writing this letter to fully recommend a very outstanding student who is currently applying for the doctoral program in English at your university. I am her master's supervisor and have known her for several years. She completed her master's research under my guidance, and now she hopes to further her studies and become a doctoral student in cross-cultural research.

Firstly, I would like to emphasize her outstanding academic talent and profound professional knowledge. She has a broad knowledge background and in-depth understanding in fields such as English linguistics and cultural studies. She demonstrated excellent analytical skills and critical thinking in her research. Her master's thesis has received unanimous praise from the academic community, proving her academic ability and research potential.

Secondly, she has excellent language skills and cross-cultural communication abilities. Her English speaking and writing abilities are excellent, and she is proficient in both oral and written communication in English. In addition, he also possesses excellent cross-cultural communication skills, which gives him a unique advantage in understanding and explaining English language phenomena in different cultural backgrounds, which is also a solid foundation for her pursuit of a doctoral degree.

In addition, she has a high sense of responsibility and professionalism in academic research. He always takes his research work seriously, completes research tasks on time, and has a good team spirit. His rigor and attention to detail in his research also left a deep impression on me.

Lastly, I would like to emphasize her personal qualities and career goals. She is a very proactive and responsible person. She has a clear career plan for her future and hopes to become an expert in cross-cultural communication research through further education, contributing to the promotion of English education and research in China.

Overall, I highly recommend her to become a member of the doctoral program in English at your university. I believe that her academic ability, language skills, cross-cultural communication skills, and personal qualities will enable her to succeed in her doctoral program and ultimately become an outstanding scholar in our academic community.

Thank you for your patient reading. We look forward to your active consideration. If you need more information about her, I am very willing to provide it.

6.文章修订

I am confident about my long-term future plans. My several years of experience in teaching have convinced me that I will continue to be a teacher after graduation. Primarily, I consider myself an intercultural communicator. My identity as a teacher facilitates the spread of intercultural knowledge to younger generations and provides them with a more open intercultural perspective. Furthermore, I can also benefit others, including my friends and colleagues. Additionally, I will strive to address problems and overcome barriers on the academic road. I believe my PhD project can open up new lines of inquiry for this field, and I want to use it as the foundation for a fruitful research career.

Dear Admissions Committee,

I am writing this letter to wholeheartedly recommend an exceptional student who is currently applying for the doctoral program in English at your esteemed university. As her master's supervisor, I have known her for several years. She completed her master's research under my guidance, and now she hopes to further her studies by becoming a doctoral student in cross-cultural research.

Firstly, I would like to emphasize her outstanding academic talent and profound professional knowledge. She possesses a broad knowledge background and an in-depth understanding of fields such as English linguistics and cultural studies. She has demonstrated excellent analytical skills and critical thinking in her research endeavors. Her master's thesis has received unanimous praise from the academic community, proving her academic ability and research potential.

Secondly, she exhibits excellent language skills and cross-cultural communication abilities. Her English speaking and writing abilities are exceptional, demonstrating proficiency in both oral and written communication in English. In addition, she possesses outstanding cross-cultural communication skills which give her a unique advantage in understanding and explaining English language phenomena within different cultural backgrounds; this serves as a solid foundation for her pursuit of a doctoral degree.

Moreover, she demonstrates a high sense of responsibility and professionalism in academic research. She always takes her research work seriously, completes research tasks on time, and exhibits a strong team spirit. Her rigor and attention to detail in her research have left a deep impression on me.

Lastly, I would like to emphasize her personal qualities and career goals. She is a proactive and responsible individual with a clear career plan for her future. She aspires to become an expert in cross-cultural communication research through further education, contributing to the promotion of English education and research in China.

In conclusion, I highly recommend her for the doctoral program in English at your prestigious university. I am confident that her academic ability, language skills, cross-cultural communication skills, and personal qualities will enable her to succeed in her doctoral program and ultimately become an outstanding scholar within our academic community.

Thank you for your patient reading. We look forward to your active consideration. If you require more information about her, I am more than willing to provide it.

Essay statistics: {"words": 457, "unique_words": 229} (488 words)

I feel certain 7.文章批改

I am confident about my long-term future plans. (Changed "feel certain" to "confident" for a stronger expression of certainty) My several years of working experience in teaching convince have convinced me that I will continue to be a teacher after graduation. I am, primarily, (Changed "working experience" to "experience" for a more concise expression) Primarily, I consider myself an intercultural communicator myself. communicator. My identity as a teacher facilitates the spread of intercultural knowledge to the younger generations and provide provides them with a more open intercultural perspective. perspective. (Changed "provide" to "provides" for subject-verb agreement) Furthermore, I can also benefit other people others, including my friends and colledges. Also, colleagues. (Changed "colledges" to "colleagues" for correct spelling) Additionally, I will try strive to address the problems and traverse the overcome barriers on the academic road. I feel believe my PhD project can open up new lines of inquiry for this field and field, and I want to use it as the foundation for a fruitful research career.

Dear Admissions Committee: Committee,

I am writing this letter to fully wholeheartedly recommend a very outstanding an exceptional student who is currently applying for the doctoral program in English at your esteemed university. I am (Changed "fully recommend a very outstanding student" to "wholeheartedly recommend an exceptional student" for better word choice and conciseness) As her master's supervisor and supervisor, I have known her for several years. She completed her master's research under my guidance, and now she hopes to further her studies and become by becoming a doctoral student in cross-cultural research.

Firstly, I would like to emphasize her outstanding academic talent and profound professional knowledge. She has possesses a broad knowledge background and an in-depth understanding in of fields such as English linguistics and cultural studies. She has demonstrated excellent analytical skills and critical thinking in her research. research endeavors. (Changed "endeavors" from "research") Her master's thesis has received unanimous praise from the academic community, proving her academic ability and research potential.

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Lastly, I would like to emphasize her personal qualities and career goals. She is a very proactive and responsible person. She has individual with a clear career plan for her future and hopes future. She aspires to become an expert in cross-cultural communication research through further education, contributing to the promotion of English education and research in China.

Overall, In conclusion, I highly recommend her to become a member of for the doctoral program in English at your prestigious university. I believe (Changed "your university" to "your prestigious university" for better word choice) I am confident that her academic ability, language skills, cross-cultural communication skills, and personal qualities will enable her to succeed in her doctoral program and ultimately become an outstanding scholar in within our academic community.

Thank you for your patient reading. We look forward to your active consideration. If you need require more information about her, I am very more than willing to provide it.

8.思维导图

• Thesis statement: Long-term future plans and reference letter

  • Topic sentence 1: Intercultural communicator
    • Sub-topic: Teaching younger generations
    • Supporting example: Open intercultural perspective
  • Topic sentence 2: Benefiting others
    • Sub-topic: Friends and colleagues
    • Supporting example: Addressing problems and overcoming barriers
  • Topic sentence 3: PhD project as a foundation for research career
    • Sub-topic: New lines of inquiry in the field
    • Supporting example: Fruitful research career

• Reference letter:

  • Introduction: Recommendation for doctoral program in English
  • Academic talent and professional knowledge:
    • Sub-topic: English linguistics and cultural studies
    • Supporting example: Master's thesis praised by the academic community
  • Language skills and cross-cultural communication abilities:
    • Sub-topic: Proficiency in oral and written communication in English
    • Supporting example: Unique advantage in understanding language phenomena within different cultural backgrounds
  • Responsibility and professionalism in academic research:
    • Sub-topic: Rigor and attention to detail in research work
    • Supporting example: Strong team spirit and timely completion of tasks

9.关键词

10.补充示例

1. She plans to collaborate with international scholars to exchange ideas and develop innovative teaching methods.

2. As a teacher, she will encourage her students to participate in cross-cultural exchange programs, broadening their horizons and fostering global understanding.

3. She will contribute to the development of new teaching materials that incorporate diverse cultural perspectives, making English education more inclusive and accessible.

4. By attending international conferences and presenting her research findings, she will help promote cross-cultural understanding within the academic community.

5. Her long-term goal is to establish a research center dedicated to the study of intercultural communication, which will serve as a platform for scholars from different countries to collaborate and share their expertise.