TOEFL TPO -1 Writing Task 1 Sample: summarize the points made in the lecture,be sure to explain how they opposed the specific points made in the reading passage

1.子项得分 任务完成度: 4 组织: 3 连贯性和衔接: 3 语言使用: 3

2.预估分数

22. 3.任务完成度

整体来说，你的文章在任务完成度方面表现较好。你成功地总结了听力中的观点，并解释了它们是如何反驳阅读文章中的论点的。然而，有一些地方可以改进。首先，在引述听力观点时，可以更详细地解释这些观点是如何具体反驳阅读文章中的论点的。此外，尝试使用更多不同类型的连接词来增强文章连贯性。

示例1： 原文：Conversely, the speaker refutes this point by stating that although there is truly powerful wind in this area, part of stones are deep in the muddy floor, so moving stones need great resistence. 改进：In contrast, the lecturer contends that despite the presence of strong winds in the area, the stones are partially embedded in the muddy floor, which requires a significant amount of force to move them.

示例2： 原文：However, the speaker mantains an opposite opinion, arguing that thereis no evidence and research can prove this theory. 改进：Nonetheless, the lecturer disputes this claim by asserting that there is no concrete evidence or research to support this theory.

4.文章结构与组织 在文章结构和组织方面，你的作文有一定的基础，但仍有改进空间。虽然你的文章包括了引言、正文和结论，但部分段落的组织和衔接可以加强。尝试在每个段落开头使用主题句来明确表达该段落的主要观点，并在段落之间使用更多的过渡词或短语来增强连贯性。

示例1： 原文：Firstly, the reading claims that stones are pushed by strong wind. 改进：In the first argument, the reading passage posits that the movement of the stones is caused by strong winds.

示例2： 原文：Secondly, the reading asserts that ice formations lead to the phenomenon. 改进：Moving on to the second argument, the reading passage suggests that ice formations are responsible for the sailing stones phenomenon.

5. 语法批改

The reading ainlymainly(misspelling) talks about three theoriestotheories to(misspelling) explain a phenomenon in part of Death Valley called sailing stones. However, the listening challenges what is stated in the reading passage by presenting three compelling counterarguments. Firstly, the reading claims that stones are pushed by strong wind. When it rains, floor become slippery, where the friction reduces. In this way, stones can slide long distances under the push of wind. Conversely, the speaker refutes this point by stating that although there is truly powerful wind in this area, part of stonesthe stones(This rule identifies whether the article 'the' is missing in a sentence.) are deep in the muddy floor, so moving stones need great resistenceresistance(misspelling). Wind can't generate enough force to (Two consecutive spaces)push heavy stones through muddythe muddy(This rule identifies whether the article 'the' is missing in a sentence.) floor, since stones don't slide or roll on the surface onof(This rule identifies wrong preposition usage.) the floor. Secondly, the reading asserts that ice formations lead to the phenomenon. At night, ice sheets form on the ground, and trpTRP(misspelling) stones within them, sliding slowly on the sloping ground. In contrast, the speaker opposes this opinion, arguing that the condition in Death Valley can't support a large scale of ice formation. On the hand, there is only small volume of groundwater in dessert. On the other hand, also the limited reason, temperature in this area fropscrops(misspelling) at night and rises quickly in the day, which means the temperature is not stable below the freezing point. Finally, the author of the reading passage believes that it's the result of that people move stones. However, the speaker mantainsmaintains(misspelling) an opposite opinion, arguing that thereistherein(misspelling) no evidence and research can prove this theory. We can't find any footprint or traces of pet animals like horses to drag stones. In a summary, each theory to explain the sailing stones in the reading passage are effectively countered by the listening.

Section Title: 6.文章修订

The reading primarily discusses three theories to explain a phenomenon in part of Death Valley called sailing stones. However, the listening challenges what is stated in the reading passage by presenting three compelling counterarguments.

Firstly, the reading claims that strong winds push the stones. When it rains, the floor becomes slippery, reducing friction. In this way, stones can slide long distances under the push of wind. Conversely, the speaker refutes this point by stating that although there are indeed powerful winds in this area, some stones are deeply embedded in the muddy floor, requiring significant resistance to move them. Wind cannot generate enough force to push heavy stones through the muddy floor since they do not merely slide or roll on the surface.

Secondly, the reading asserts that ice formations lead to this phenomenon. At night, ice sheets form on the ground and trap stones within them, sliding slowly on sloping terrain. In contrast, the speaker opposes this opinion, arguing that conditions in Death Valley cannot support large-scale ice formation. On one hand, there is only a small volume of groundwater in the desert. On the other hand, temperature fluctuations also limit ice formation; temperatures drop at night and rise quickly during the day, meaning they do not remain stable below freezing.

Finally, the author of the reading passage believes that people moving stones cause this phenomenon. However, the speaker maintains an opposite opinion, arguing that there is no evidence or research to support this theory. No footprints or traces of pack animals like horses dragging stones have been found.

In summary, each theory explaining sailing stones in Death Valley presented in the reading passage is effectively countered by arguments from listening material. (286 words)

The reading ainly talks about primarily discusses three theoriesto theories to explain a phenomenon in part of Death Valley called sailing stones. stones (changed "ainly" to "primarily" for clarity and proper spelling). However, the listening challenges what is stated in the reading passage by presenting three compelling counterarguments.

Firstly, the reading claims that stones strong winds push the stones (corrected "stones are pushed by strong wind. wind" to make it more concise). When it rains, the floor become slippery, where the friction reduces. becomes slippery (added "the" for proper grammar), reducing friction. In this way, stones can slide long distances under the push of wind. Conversely, the speaker refutes this point by stating that although there is truly are indeed powerful wind in this area, part of winds in this area (changed "is truly" to "are indeed" for better word choice), some stones are deep deeply embedded in the muddy floor, so moving stones need great resistence. requiring significant resistance to move them (rephrased for clarity). Wind can't cannot generate enough force to to push heavy stones through the muddy floor, floor since stones don't they do not merely slide or roll on the surface on the floor. surface.

Secondly, the reading asserts that ice formations lead to the this phenomenon. At night, ice sheets form on the ground, and trp ground and trap stones within them, sliding slowly on the sloping ground. terrain (rephrased for clarity). In contrast, the speaker opposes this opinion, arguing that the condition conditions in Death Valley can't cannot support a large scale of large-scale ice formation. On the one hand, there is only a small volume of groundwater in dessert. the desert (corrected "dessert" typo and rephrased for clarity). On the other hand, temperature fluctuations also the limited reason, temperature in this area frops limit ice formation; temperatures drop at night and rises rise quickly in during the day, which means the temperature is meaning they do not remain stable below the freezing point. (rephrased for clarity).

Finally, the author of the reading passage believes that it's the result of that people move stones. moving stones cause this phenomenon (rephrased for better sentence structure). However, the speaker mantains maintains an opposite opinion, arguing that thereis there is no evidence and or research can prove this theory. We can't find any footprint to support this theory (corrected "mantains" typo and rephrased for clarity). No footprints or traces of pet pack animals like horses to drag stones. dragging stones have been found.

In a summary, each theory to explain the explaining sailing stones in Death Valley presented in the reading passage are is effectively countered by the listening.arguments from listening material (rephrased for clarity and conciseness).

8. Mind Map

• Introduction

  • Death Valley
  • Sailing stones phenomenon

• Theory 1: Strong Winds

  • Reading: Wind pushes stones on slippery floor
  • Listening: Wind cannot generate enough force for heavy stones in mud

• Theory 2: Ice Formations

  • Reading: Ice sheets trap stones and slide on slopes
  • Listening: Limited groundwater and temperature fluctuations prevent large-scale ice formation

• Theory 3: Human Intervention

  • Reading: People move the stones
  • Listening: No evidence or research to support this theory, no footprints or traces found

• Conclusion

  • Counterarguments from listening material challenge each theory from reading passage

9. Keywords