TOEFL TPO -1 Writing Task 1 Sample: Summarize the points made in the lecture being sure to explain how they respond to the specific arguments presented in the reading passage

1.子项得分 任务完成度：4 组织：4 连贯性和衔接：4 语言使用：3

2.预估分数

25. 3.任务完成度

你的文章基本上完成了任务要求，但在表达观点时，有些地方需要更清晰。例如，在第二段中，你提到“不同的捕猎生活方式”，但没有明确说明这与阅读材料中的观点有何不同。此外，在最后一段中，你应该更明确地解释为什么背鳍大小不能准确估计年龄。

改进建议：

• 在描述讲座中提到的观点时，请务必清楚地表达出它们是如何反驳阅读材料中的论点的。

• 使用更具体和详细的例子来支持你的论点。

示例：

1. "The professor refutes the reading's claim about the remote sightings by explaining that the different hunting lifestyles of orcas could lead to such differences in their locations."

2. "The professor argues that the age estimates based on dorsal fin size are not accurate because, after an orca reaches 20 years of age, its dorsal fin stops growing, making it difficult to determine its exact age."

4.文章结构与组织 文章结构基本合理，包括引言、正文和结论。然而，在某些段落中，你可以使用更清晰的过渡词或短语来帮助读者更好地理解你的观点。此外，确保每个段落都集中讨论一个特定的论点，并提供足够的细节来支持这个观点。

改进建议：

• 使用过渡词或短语来帮助读者更好地理解你的观点。

• 确保每个段落都集中讨论一个特定的论点，并提供足够的细节来支持这个观点。

示例：

1. "Firstly, the professor challenges the reading's claim about the coloration differences by explaining that..."

2. "In addition, the professor disputes the reading's argument about age estimates by stating that..."

5. 语法批改

In the lecture, the professor casts doubt on the reading passage that Alaska white orca and Iceberg are two different species in three aspects. The professor asserts that these three differences are not reliable to verify that they are two species, however they might be a same species. (Whitespace repetition (bad formatting))Firstly, contrary to the reading passage that there is a minor coloration difference between two animals that Alaska white orca’s color is darker than Iceberg, the professor contends that the exact color of orca will change season to season since the existence of a substance named AlgyAlly(misspelling) which grows on Alaska orca. This special substance is attributed to the fact that Alaska orca’s white skin is darker than Iceberg, which means without this seasonal variation, the color of Alaska orca and Iceberg might be identical. (Whitespace repetition (bad formatting))Secondly, the reading passage claims that as Alaska orca’s sighting is remote from Iceberg, resulting in the separation of two species without long distance traveling, which is refuted by the professor that remote sightings are the outcome of different hunting lifestyles. Unlike Iceberg has to prey on fish that live in the open ocean, requiring it to follow a remote migration from Alaska to Russia, Alaska orca potentially hunts mammals that near the coastline, enabling it not to migrate far away, which contributes to the different sighting locations. Finally, opposite to the reading passage that age estimates reveal that Alaska orca is older than the actual age of Iceberg, the professor alleges that the estimates based on dorsal fin size are not convincing. The data of dorsal fin from Iceberg has three possibilities of age, ranging from twenty to thirty, which means Iceberg’s age might be older than the former estimate. Therefore, Iceberg and Alaska orca are likely to be a same species.

Section Title: 6.文章修订

In the lecture, the professor casts doubt on the reading passage's assertion that the Alaskan white orca and Iceberg are two different individuals, providing three counterarguments to support the possibility that they might be the same individual.

Firstly, while the reading passage claims there is a slight coloration difference between the two animals, with the Alaskan white orca appearing darker than Iceberg, the professor contends that an orca's exact color can change seasonally due to algae growth on its skin. This seasonal variation could account for any perceived color differences between the two sightings, suggesting that they might indeed be of the same individual.

Secondly, although the reading passage argues that remote sighting locations imply these are separate individuals without long-distance traveling capabilities, the professor refutes this by explaining how different hunting lifestyles can affect orcas' migratory patterns. Unlike mammal-hunting orcas that stay near coastlines, fish-hunting orcas like Iceberg follow migrating fish and can travel over 2000 kilometers in open ocean. This suggests that it would not be unusual for Iceberg to travel between Alaska and Russia.

Lastly, in contrast to the reading passage's assertion that age estimates based on dorsal fin size indicate these are different individuals, with Alaska white orca being older than Iceberg, the professor points out that such estimates are not necessarily accurate. After an orca reaches 20 years of age, its dorsal fin ceases to grow; thus, a fully grown dorsal fin could belong to an individual aged anywhere between 20 and 30 years old. Consequently, Iceberg could easily have been older than initially estimated and might indeed be identical to Alaska white orca. (272 words)

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Firstly, contrary to while the reading passage that claims there is a minor slight coloration difference between the two animals that Alaska animals, with the Alaskan white orca’s color is orca appearing darker than Iceberg, the professor contends that the an orca's exact color can change seasonally due to algae growth on its skin (Added "growth" for clarity). This seasonal variation could account for any perceived color differences between the two sightings, suggesting that they might indeed be of orca will change season to season since the existence of a substance named Algy which grows on Alaska orca. This special substance is attributed to the fact that Alaska orca’s white skin is darker than Iceberg, which means without this seasonal variation, the color of Alaska orca and Iceberg might be identical. the same species (Changed "individual" to "species" for consistency).

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Finally, opposite Lastly, in contrast to the reading passage passage's assertion that age estimates reveal that Alaska orca is older than the actual age of Iceberg, the professor alleges that the estimates based on dorsal fin size indicate these are different species (Changed "individuals" to "species" for consistency), with Alaska white orca being older than Iceberg, the professor points out that such estimates are not convincing. The data necessarily accurate. After an orca reaches 20 years of age, its dorsal fin from ceases to grow; thus, a fully grown dorsal fin could belong to an individual aged anywhere between 20 and 30 years old. Consequently, Iceberg has three possibilities of age, ranging from twenty to thirty, which means Iceberg’s age might be could easily have been older than the former estimate. Therefore, Iceberg and initially estimated and might indeed be identical to Alaska orca are likely to be a same species.white orca (Changed "species" to "identical" for clarity and consistency).

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