TOEFL TPO 66 Speaking Task 4 Sample: Using points and examples from the lecture, explain two different hoarding strategies.

1.Sub Scores

• Delivery: 3

• Language Use: 3

• Topic Development: 3

2.Estimated Scores

• Total Score: 23

3.Delivery The speaker's delivery is generally clear and fluid, with a consistent pace and only occasional pauses. However, there are some minor issues with pronunciation and word choice that could be improved. For example, the word "dispensing" should be replaced with "dispersing." Additionally, the speaker should work on pronouncing words like "squirrel" and "pine cones" more clearly. Overall, the delivery is good but could benefit from further practice and refinement.

4.Topic Development The speaker provides a coherent and well-organized response, with clear connections between ideas and sufficient support or examples. The two hoarding strategies are explained using examples from the lecture, such as squirrels storing pine cones in one location and rats dispersing seeds in multiple locations. To further improve topic development, the speaker could elaborate on why these strategies are effective for each animal species mentioned. Additionally, it would be helpful to clarify that the first strategy is called "centralized hoarding" and the second strategy is called "dispersed hoarding."

5.Language Use

In the biology class, the professor introduced about two strategies of hoarding two hoarding strategies(reordering for clarity). First is to hoard in one location. And those animals adapt first strategy that adopt the first strategy(correcting word choice and grammar) are capable for of(correcting preposition) defending other animals and prevent from stealing food them from stealing food(adding "them" for clarity). For example, the squirrel, they will bury their pine cones under the trees. And when the other animals come to steal their pine cones, they will chase them away to defend them. And second strategy is the dispensing dispersing(correcting word choice). They will bury their food in a different location. And those animals have a good memory to remember the location. For example, the rat, they will bury the seeds under hundreds of storing locations.

Revised Answer (140 words):

In the biology class, the professor introduced two hoarding strategies that animals use to store food. The first strategy involves hoarding food in a single location. Animals that adopt this strategy are capable of defending their food supply from other animals, preventing them from stealing it. For example, squirrels store their pine cones under trees and aggressively chase away other animals that attempt to steal them. The second strategy is dispersing food in multiple locations. Animals using this strategy have a good memory to remember where they have hidden their food. An example of this is a desert rat species that buries seeds in hundreds of different locations in the sand. By employing these two strategies, animals can effectively store food for later use and protect it from competitors.

6.Mind Map

• Introduction

  • Hoarding strategies

• Strategy 1: Centralized hoarding

  • Single location
  • Example: Squirrels
    • Pine cones
    • Aggressive defense

• Strategy 2: Dispersed hoarding

  • Multiple locations
  • Good memory
  • Example: Desert rats
    • Seeds
    • Hundreds of locations

7.Key Words

1.子项得分

Delivery: 3 Language Use: 3 Topic Development: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

整体而言，回答的表达较为清晰，但仍有改进的空间。建议在发音方面多加练习，以提高语言的准确性。此外，在语速和停顿方面也需要注意，避免不必要的停顿。

4.话题发展

回答内容基本上涵盖了听力材料中的关键信息，并给出了相应的例子。但在组织结构上可以更加清晰。建议在回答时先简要概括两种贮藏策略，然后分别阐述每种策略的特点和例子，以使回答更加条理清晰。

5.语言使用

原文：The professor talks about two hoarding strategies depending on the animal's ability. The professor discusses two hoarding strategies based on the abilities of different animals.（将talks改为discusses，使语言更加正式；将depending on改为based on，使句子更自然。）

One is to storage food in one location, One strategy is to store food in a single location,（将storage改为store，修正动词形式；将one改为a single，使句子更自然。）

which is often used by animals who are able to defend for their food. which is typically employed by animals capable of defending their food sources.（将often used改为typically employed，提高词汇水平；去掉for，修正语法错误；将food改为food sources，使句子更准确。）

For example, the aggressive squirrels would storage their fruit, pinecones, under the tree. For instance, aggressive squirrels store their food, such as pinecones, under trees.（将would storage改为store，修正动词形式；将fruit, pinecones改为food, such as pinecones，使句子更自然；将the tree改为trees，使句子更通顺。）

And they are strong enough to defend for food from other animals. They are strong enough to protect their food from other animals.（去掉for，修正语法错误；将defend改为protect，使句子更自然。）

The other storage strategy is for weaker animals, hiding their food in different places. The other hoarding strategy involves weaker animals hiding their food in various locations.（将storage改为hoarding，保持一致性；将places改为locations，提高词汇水平。）

For example, the species rat just bury things in different holes. For instance, a certain desert rat species buries seeds in multiple holes.（将the species rat改为a certain desert rat species，使句子更准确；将things改为seeds，使句子更具体；将different holes改为multiple holes，提高词汇水平。）

And these animals often have good memories. These animals typically possess excellent memory skills.（将often have改为typically possess，提高词汇水平；将good memories改为excellent memory skills，使句子更自然。）

For this rat, the scientists found that they can accurately remember hundreds of places where they disperse their food. Scientists have discovered that these rats can accurately recall hundreds of locations where they have dispersed their food.（调整句子结构，使之更通顺；将places改为locations，提高词汇水平。）

Revised Answer (140 words):

The professor discusses two hoarding strategies based on the abilities of different animals. One strategy is to store food in a single location, which is typically employed by animals capable of defending their food sources. For instance, aggressive squirrels store their food, such as pinecones, under trees. They are strong enough to protect their food from other animals. The other hoarding strategy involves weaker animals hiding their food in various locations. For instance, a certain desert rat species buries seeds in multiple holes. These animals typically possess excellent memory skills. Scientists have discovered that these rats can accurately recall hundreds of locations where they have dispersed their food.

6.思维导图

- Hoarding Strategies
    - Based on Abilities
        - Strategy 1: Single Location
            - Defending Food Sources
                - Example: Aggressive Squirrels
        - Strategy 2: Various Locations
            - Weaker Animals
                - Example: Desert Rat Species
            - Excellent Memory Skills

7.关键词

1. Sub Scores

• Delivery: 3

• Language Use: 3

• Topic Development: 3

2. Estimated Scores

• Total Score: 23

3. Delivery The speaker's delivery is generally clear and fluid, with a consistent pace and only occasional pauses. However, there are some punctuation problems that result from inappropriate pauses, and a few spelling errors that may be due to inaccurate pronunciation. To improve, the speaker should focus on proper pausing and pronunciation.

4. Topic Development The response is coherent and well-organized, with clear connections between ideas and sufficient support or examples from the lecture. However, the speaker could improve by providing more specific details from the lecture to support their points. Additionally, the introduction could be more concise to allow for more focus on the two hoarding strategies discussed in the lecture.

5. Language Use

Original: This lecture takes a ton of details to describe the difference between animals to store food during the winter. The professor takes two different hoarding strategies. First, as animals store all the food in one location, such as squirrels, they are capable for food supplies to defend other animals to steal their foods. However, squirrels store pine cones in one single tree because they are good at chasing other squirrels and fighting other squirrels back. Second, some animals are good at memory because they divide their food into several different places, such as the rat in the desert. They bury their seeds in the sand. Because other animals found some of the seeds in the sand, the rat can still eat the other seeds in different locations.

Corrected: This lecture takes provides a ton of details detailed explanation (to make it sound more natural) to describe the difference between animals' strategies to store food during times of scarcity. The professor takes discusses two different hoarding strategies. First, some animals store all their food in one location, such as squirrels; they are capable for of defending their food supplies from other animals that might try to steal it. Squirrels store pine cones in a single tree because they are good at chasing and fighting off other squirrels. Second, some animals have a good memory and divide their food into several different places, such as the desert rat. They bury seeds in various locations in the sand. Even if other animals find some of the seeds, the rat can still rely on the remaining seeds hidden in different locations.

Revised (140 words): The lecture provides a detailed explanation of the differences between animals' strategies for storing food during times of scarcity. The professor discusses two distinct hoarding strategies. First, some animals, like squirrels, store all their food in one location and are capable of defending their food supplies from potential thieves. Squirrels store pine cones in a single tree and are adept at chasing and fighting off other squirrels. Second, animals with good memory, such as desert rats, divide their food into several different places. Desert rats bury seeds in various locations in the sand, ensuring that even if other animals find some seeds, they can still rely on the remaining hidden seeds in different locations. These two strategies demonstrate how animals adapt their hoarding behavior based on their abilities and environmental factors.

6. Mind Map

• Introduction

  • Lecture explanation
  • Animal hoarding strategies

• Strategy 1: One location

  • Squirrels
  • Defending food supplies
  • Pine cones in a single tree

• Strategy 2: Dispersed locations

  • Desert rats
  • Good memory
  • Burying seeds in various locations

• Conclusion

  • Adaptation based on abilities and environment

7. Key Words