TOEFL TPO 45 Speaking Task 2 Sample: The woman disagrees with the student’s proposal for the coffeehouse. Explain the proposal and the reasons she gives for disagreeing with it.

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

从表达方面来看，这个回答的发音和语速基本上是清晰和流畅的，但偶尔会有停顿。为了提高口语表达能力，建议练习更自然地连接句子，减少不必要的停顿。同时注意发音的准确性，以避免拼写错误。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，回答内容基本上是连贯和组织良好的，但可以进一步加强。为了提高话题发展能力，建议在解释原因时更详细地描述，并尝试使用更多的连接词和过渡词来使回答更加流畅。同时，在提供支持或例子时，可以考虑使用更具说服力的论据。

5.语言使用

原文：The student proposed that the university should close their cafe house because it's empty and is not a good place to meet people and also their light is poor and is not a good place to study. The student proposed that the university should close the coffeehouse because it's usually empty, making it unsuitable for meeting people, and its poor lighting makes it an inadequate place to study.（将"cafe house"改为"coffeehouse"，使词汇更准确；调整句子结构，使表达更清晰。）

But the woman doesn't agree with that for two reasons. However, the woman disagrees with this proposal for two reasons.（使用"However"代替"But"，使过渡更自然；调整句子结构，使表达更清晰。）

Firstly, she thinks the cafe house is just empty just at day because people have to work or study but at evening there are a lot of people there and they have a drink to relax them after study or work. Firstly, she believes that the coffeehouse is only empty during the day due to people's work or study commitments, but in the evening, it becomes crowded as individuals unwind with a drink after their daily activities.（将"cafe house"改为"coffeehouse"；调整句子结构，使表达更清晰；使用更高级的词汇如"commitments"和"daily activities"。）

Secondly, she thinks their light has been fixed and every table's light now is good as a library so it's a good place to study now. Secondly, she asserts that the lighting issue has been resolved, and the illumination at each table is now comparable to that of a library, making it an ideal place to study.（调整句子结构，使表达更清晰；使用更高级的词汇如"asserts"和"illumination"。）

修订版（140词）：

The student proposed that the university should close the coffeehouse because it's usually empty, making it unsuitable for meeting people, and its poor lighting makes it an inadequate place to study. However, the woman disagrees with this proposal for two reasons. Firstly, she believes that the coffeehouse is only empty during the day due to people's work or study commitments, but in the evening, it becomes crowded as individuals unwind with a drink after their daily activities. Secondly, she asserts that the lighting issue has been resolved, and the illumination at each table is now comparable to that of a library, making it an ideal place to study.

6.思维导图

- Proposal
  - Close coffeehouse
  - Reasons: empty, poor lighting

- Woman's disagreement
  - Reason 1: Busy during the day, crowded in the evening
    - Work/study commitments
    - Unwind with a drink
  - Reason 2: Lighting issue resolved
    - Comparable to library
    - Ideal place to study

7.关键词

1. Sub Scores

• Delivery: 3

• Topic Development: 4

• Language Use: 3

2. Estimated Scores

• Total Score: 26

3. Delivery The speaker's delivery is mostly clear and fluid, with a consistent pace and only occasional pauses. However, there are some minor issues with pronunciation and word choice that could be improved. To enhance the delivery, the speaker should focus on practicing pronunciation and enunciation of words to ensure clarity and accuracy.

4. Topic Development The response is coherent and well-organized, with clear connections between ideas and sufficient support or examples. The speaker effectively explains the proposal and the reasons the woman disagrees with it. To further improve topic development, the speaker could provide more specific details from the listening passage to strengthen their argument.

5. Language Use

Original Answer: The proposal stressed that the university should close the coffeehouse, however the woman disagrees with the proposal. The proposal suggests that the university should close the coffeehouse; however, the woman disagrees with this suggestion. (Changed "stressed" to "suggests" and added a semicolon for better sentence structure) First, the proposal stressed that the coffeehouse is too empty to be a good place to meet people. Firstly, the proposal claims that the coffeehouse is often empty, making it unsuitable for socializing. (Rephrased for clarity and natural language flow) However, the woman says that the coffeehouse is pretty full in the evening while students are really busy during the day, so it might seem empty in the day, and the students would like to relax in the evening sitting in the coffeehouse. However, according to the woman, the coffeehouse is quite crowded in the evenings when students have more free time and seek a place to unwind. (Simplified and restructured sentence for clarity) Secondly, the proposal says that poor lighting doesn't allow students to study, but the woman says that the coffeehouse already operates a renovation and provides good lighting as good as in library, Secondly, although the proposal mentions poor lighting as an issue for studying, the woman states that recent renovations have significantly improved lighting conditions, making them comparable to those in a library, (Rephrased for better sentence structure and vocabulary) and every table has good lighting devices for them to study. and now every table has adequate lighting for studying. (Simplified sentence for clarity)

Revised Answer (140 words):

The proposal suggests that the university should close the coffeehouse; however, the woman disagrees with this suggestion. Firstly, the proposal claims that the coffeehouse is often empty, making it unsuitable for socializing. However, according to the woman, the coffeehouse is quite crowded in the evenings when students have more free time and seek a place to unwind. Secondly, although the proposal mentions poor lighting as an issue for studying, the woman states that recent renovations have significantly improved lighting conditions, making them comparable to those in a library, and now every table has adequate lighting for studying. By addressing these concerns and providing specific examples from the listening passage, the speaker effectively refutes the proposal's arguments and demonstrates a strong understanding of both the reading and listening materials.

6. Mind Map

- Proposal
  - Close coffeehouse
  - Reasons:
    - Empty
    - Poor lighting

- Woman's disagreement
  - Coffeehouse crowded in evenings
    - Students socialize and unwind
  - Renovations improved lighting
    - Comparable to library
    - Adequate for studying

7. Key Words

1.子项得分

• 交付：3

• 主题发展：4

• 语言使用：3.5

2.预估分数

• 总分：26

3.表达 回答中的表达大部分是清晰的，但在某些地方可能需要更连贯的语言。为了提高交付效果，建议练习更流畅、自然的发音和语调。同时，注意在适当的地方停顿，以便让听众更好地理解你的观点。

4.话题发展 回答内容组织得很好，呈现了一个连贯且有条理的论述。你成功地解释了女士不同意关闭咖啡馆的原因，并提供了足够的支持和例子。为了进一步提高，可以尝试在回答中加入更多细节，使论点更具说服力。

5.语言使用

原文：However, the woman does not agree with the idea. However, the woman disagrees with the idea.（改为更自然的表达方式，用disagrees替换does not agree）

Firstly, she mentions that since students are very busy in the morning, there are a lot of people in the coffeehouse in the evening. Firstly, she points out that due to students being busy during daytime, the coffeehouse is crowded in the evening.（改为更自然的表达方式，用points out替换mentions，用due to替换since，用crowded替换there are a lot of people）

Besides, the coffeehouse has renovated slightly. Moreover, the coffeehouse has undergone some renovations.（改为更自然的表达方式，用Moreover替换Besides，用undergone some renovations替换has renovated slightly）

Now every table gets good lighting, Now, every table has good lighting,（改为更自然的表达方式，用has替换gets）

Revised Answer (140 words):

The proposal suggests that the university should close the coffeehouse because it is always empty and it is not a good place to meet people. Moreover, the lighting is so poor that it's not a suitable place to study. However, the woman disagrees with the idea. Firstly, she points out that due to students being busy during daytime, the coffeehouse is crowded in the evening. They get together, sit down to relax or prepare for their classes. Moreover, the coffeehouse has undergone some renovations, improving the lighting conditions. Now, every table has good lighting, making it a suitable place to study. As a result, the woman believes that the university should not close the coffeehouse, as it serves as a valuable space for students to socialize and study during evenings.

6.思维导图

- Proposal
  - Close coffeehouse
  - Reasons: empty, poor lighting

- Woman's disagreement
  - Crowded in the evening
    - Students busy during daytime
    - Relax, prepare for classes
  - Renovations
    - Improved lighting conditions
    - Suitable place to study

- Conclusion
  - University should not close coffeehouse

7.关键词

1.子项得分

• 交付 (Delivery): 3

• 主题发展 (Topic Development): 3.5

• 语言使用 (Language Use): 3

2.预估分数

• 总分: 25

3.表达 回答中的发音大部分清晰，但在某些地方可能需要更清晰的发音。此外，尝试保持一致的语速，并减少不必要的停顿。为了提高发音，请多做练习并注意模仿英语母语者的发音。

4.话题发展 回答内容基本上是连贯和组织良好的，但可以在解释女士不同意提议的原因时提供更多详细信息。例如，在提到咖啡馆在晚上很受欢迎时，可以进一步说明学生们如何在那里进行社交活动或学习。此外，在谈论照明改善时，可以提到咖啡馆进行了翻新以解决这个问题。总之，尝试在回答中提供更多具体细节和例子，以使其更加充实和有说服力。

5.语言使用

Original Answer: According to the letter, the students think coffeehouse should be closed. In the letter, it is proposed that the coffeehouse should be closed. (根据信中的内容，建议关闭咖啡馆。更自然的表达方式) This is because the coffeehouse is always empty and the light there is very poor. The reasons given are that it is often empty and has poor lighting. (原因是它经常空无一人，而且照明很差。更简洁的表达) The woman opposed this. There are two reasons why the woman opposed this change. First, students always go there in the evening because they are busy for studying or other kind of things during the day. When the night comes, students will go there to sit down and relax. Second, the woman says light in the coffeehouse used to be very poor, but now it is as bright as the lights in the library. What's more, all the tables in the coffeehouse can get good light.

Revised Answer (140 words):

In the letter, it is proposed that the coffeehouse should be closed due to it often being empty and having poor lighting. However, the woman disagrees with this proposal for two main reasons. Firstly, she explains that students usually visit the coffeehouse in the evenings when they have finished their daytime commitments such as studying or working. During these evening hours, she claims that many students gather at the coffeehouse to unwind and socialize with their peers. Secondly, she addresses the issue of poor lighting by stating that recent renovations have significantly improved the lighting conditions, making it comparable to the library. Furthermore, she emphasizes that these improvements have been made to all tables, ensuring a well-lit environment for everyone.

6.思维导图

- Letter
  - Proposal
    - Close coffeehouse
    - Reasons
      - Often empty
      - Poor lighting

- Woman's disagreement
  - Reason 1
    - Evening visits
    - Busy students during the day
    - Unwind and socialize
  - Reason 2
    - Improved lighting
    - Recent renovations
    - Comparable to library lighting

7.关键词

1.子项得分

• 交付：3

• 主题发展：4

• 语言使用：3

2.预估分数

• 总分：26

3.表达 回答中的表达大部分清晰流畅，但在某些地方可能需要稍作改进。例如，在描述女士不同意提议的原因时，可以使用更自然的连接词，如“首先”和“其次”，以使句子更连贯。此外，注意正确发音单词，避免发音错误导致拼写错误。练习提高发音准确性和语言流畅性。

4.话题发展 回答在话题发展方面做得很好。回答清楚地解释了提议及女士不同意的原因，并提供了足够的支持和例子。为了进一步改进，可以考虑在描述女士不同意的原因时，更详细地说明咖啡馆在晚上的情况，以便听众更好地理解她的观点。

5.语言使用

原文：Essentially, a student proposes that the university should close the coffeehouse because it's quite empty and the lighting is poor, making it a bad place for students to meet with friends and study. In essence, a student suggests that the university should shut down the coffeehouse due to its emptiness and inadequate lighting, which hinders students from socializing and studying there.（将“Essentially”改为“In essence”，使语言更自然；将“proposes”改为“suggests”，使动词更准确；将“quite empty”改为“emptiness”，使描述更精确；将“the lighting is poor”改为“inadequate lighting”，使表达更准确。）（将“Essentially”改为“In essence”，使语言更自然；将“proposes”改为“suggests”，使动词更准确；将“quite empty”改为“emptiness”，使描述更精确；将“the lighting is poor”改为“inadequate lighting”，使表达更准确。）

原文：However, the woman in the conversation disagrees with the proposal for two reasons. Nonetheless, the woman in the conversation opposes the proposal due to two reasons.（将“However”改为“Nonetheless”，使过渡词更自然；将“disagrees with”改为“opposes”，使动词更准确。）（将“However”改为“Nonetheless”，使过渡词更自然；将“disagrees with”改为“opposes”，使动词更准确。）

原文：The first reason is that during the day, students are quite busy with their classes. Primarily, students are preoccupied with their classes during the day,（将“The first reason is that”改为“Primarily”，使连接词更自然；将“quite busy”改为“preoccupied”，使描述更准确。）（将“The first reason is that”改为“Primarily”，使连接词更自然；将“quite busy”改为“preoccupied”，使描述更准确。）

原文：However, in the night, students can have time to get together, which makes the coffeehouse full. Nevertheless, at night, students have time to gather, resulting in a bustling coffeehouse.（将“However”改为“Nevertheless”，使过渡词更自然；将“in the night”改为“at night”，使表达更准确；将“makes the coffeehouse full”改为“resulting in a bustling coffeehouse”，使描述更生动。）（将“However”改为“Nevertheless”，使过渡词更自然；将“in the night”改为“at night”，使表达更准确；将“makes the coffeehouse full”改为“resulting in a bustling coffeehouse”，使描述更生动。）

原文：The second reason is that after the renovation of the coffeehouse, the lighting condition is as good as the library. Secondly, following the coffeehouse's renovation, the lighting quality is now on par with that of the library.（将“The second reason is that”改为“Secondly”，使连接词更自然；将“the lighting condition”改为“the lighting quality”，使描述更准确；将“is as good as”改为“is now on par with”，使表达更自然。）（将“The second reason is that”改为“Secondly”，使连接词更自然；将“the lighting condition”改为“the lighting quality”，使描述更准确；将“is as good as”改为“is now on par with”，使表达更自然。）

Revised Answer (140 words):

In essence, a student suggests that the university

6.思维导图

- Introduction
  - Student's proposal
  - Woman's disagreement

- Reason 1
  - Busy during the day
  - Bustling coffeehouse at night

- Reason 2
  - Renovation
  - Improved lighting quality

- Conclusion
  - Two reasons for disagreement

7.关键词

1.Sub Scores

• Delivery: 3

• Topic Development: 3

• Language Use: 3

2.Estimated Scores

• Total Score: 23

3.Delivery The speaker's delivery is generally clear and fluid, but there are occasional pauses that could be improved. To enhance the delivery, the speaker should work on maintaining a consistent pace throughout the response and reducing unnecessary pauses. Additionally, focusing on accurate pronunciation will help minimize spelling errors.

4.Topic Development The response is coherent and well-organized, with clear connections between ideas. However, there is room for improvement in providing more sufficient support or examples. To strengthen the topic development, the speaker should consider elaborating on specific instances or experiences that demonstrate the popularity of the coffeehouse at night and its suitability for studying. This will help to further support the woman's disagreement with the proposal to close the coffeehouse.

5.Language Use

Original: The leader writer ("leader" is not the appropriate term; use "writer" instead) says that school should close the coffee house because it's usually very empty so it's not a good place to meet people and the lighting is very poor so it's still not a good place to study. But the woman is against the leader's writer's (use "writer's" instead of "leader's") idea. Firstly, the woman says people actually go to the coffee house at night because people are busy during the day, they have many classes and jobs to do, but at evening they can relax at the coffee house with some drinking or eating or reading for class. Secondly, the woman says the lighting used to be a problem but now the lighting in the coffee house is as good as in the library, every table has good lighting.

Revised (140 words): The writer suggests that the university should close its coffeehouse due to its emptiness and poor lighting, making it unsuitable for socializing or studying. However, the woman disagrees with this proposal for two main reasons. First, she explains that while it may be empty during daytime hours, many students frequent the coffeehouse in the evenings when they have more free time to relax and socialize. They can enjoy beverages and snacks while engaging in conversations or catching up on their studies. Second, she addresses the issue of inadequate lighting by stating that recent renovations have significantly improved this aspect, making it comparable to library lighting conditions. Consequently, she believes that closing down the coffeehouse would be an unwarranted decision based on outdated information and personal bias.

6.Mind Map

• Proposal

  • Close coffeehouse
  • Reasons: emptiness, poor lighting

• Woman's disagreement

  • Evening popularity
    • Busy daytime schedules
    • Relaxation and socializing
  • Improved lighting
    • Recent renovations
    • Library comparison

7.Key Words