TOEFL TPO 44 Writing Task 1 Sample: Summarize the points made in the lecture, being sure to explain how they respond to the specific arguments presented in the reading passage.

1.Sub Scores

• Task fulfillment: 4

• Organization: 4

• Coherence and Cohesion: 4

• Language Use: 3

2.Estimated Scores

• Estimated Score: 25

3.Task completeness The essay does a good job of addressing the specific requirements of the task, summarizing the points made in the lecture and explaining how they respond to the arguments presented in the reading passage. However, there is room for improvement in terms of clarity and language use. Some sentences could be rephrased to better convey their meaning, and some ideas could be expanded upon to provide a more thorough explanation.

Suggestions for improvement:

• Be more specific when referring to certain points or ideas from the reading passage and lecture.

• Work on refining sentence structure and word choice for improved clarity.

Examples:

1. Instead of "the Americans along the journey who were obsessed with obtaining items such as European coins would love to exchange with Norse," consider writing "Native Americans who encountered the Norse during their travels were interested in obtaining foreign objects, including European coins, which they may have acquired through trade or exchange."

2. Instead of "the lecturer considers it as unnecessary because," try writing "the lecturer argues that this absence of coins does not necessarily mean they weren't brought by the Norse because."

4.Essay structure and organization The essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body, and conclusion. Each paragraph focuses on a specific point from the reading passage and provides supporting details from the lecture. However, some transitions between ideas could be improved for better coherence.

Suggestions for improvement:

• Use clearer transition words or phrases to guide readers through your essay.

• Ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that introduces its main idea.

Examples:

1. In your second paragraph, consider adding a transition phrase like "In response to this argument," before presenting the lecturer's counterpoint.

2. For your third paragraph, start with a topic sentence like "The reading passage also argues that European coins would have been useless in North America, but the lecturer presents a different perspective."

5. Grammar

The reading passage provides three challenges that the European silver coin discovered at a Native American archaeological site in not genuine historical evidence. However, the lecturer contradicts each of the points made in the reading passage and affirms that there is correlation between the silver coin and Norse, ana(Use of 'a' vs. 'an') European explorer. Firstly, the article claims that the great distance from Norse settlements to the site where the silver coin was found suggests no connection between Norse and the coin. Conversely, the lecturer disputes this by explaining that since Norse have travelled across many places, the Americans along the journey who were obsessed with obtaining items such as European coins would love to exchange with Norse. Moreover, many other objects have been found at the same site where the Norse settled and travelled through. Secondly, the reading passage suggests that Norse did not bring European coins with them because no other coins have been found at the sites that were inhabited by the Norse. However, the lecturer considers it as unnecessary because the Norse would definitely bring the European coins with him when they planned to go back to Europe at the end of the journey. Finally, the reading passage highlighthighlights(punctuation + singular noun + plural verb) the issue of uselessness of the European coins in North America. While acknowledging the uselessness of that, the lecturer points out that Americans would appeal to such pretty, delicate items such as necklaces and jewelry, and then barter or trade with Norse. Thus, the European coins would have been found at the Native American site.

Section Title: 6. Revised Essay

The reading passage presents three arguments challenging the authenticity of a European silver coin discovered at a Native American archaeological site, asserting that it is not genuine historical evidence. However, the lecturer refutes each point made in the reading passage and maintains that there is a connection between the silver coin and the Norse, European explorers.

Firstly, the article contends that the significant distance between Norse settlements and the site where the silver coin was found implies no connection between the Norse and the coin. In contrast, the lecturer disputes this by explaining that since the Norse traveled to various places, Native Americans who were interested in obtaining items from distant lands could have exchanged goods with them. Furthermore, numerous other objects originating from faraway locations have been discovered at the same site where the Norse settled and journeyed through.

Secondly, the reading passage suggests that because no other coins have been found at sites inhabited by Norse explorers, they did not bring European coins with them to North America. However, the lecturer deems this argument irrelevant as it is plausible that when planning their return to Europe after their journey's end, they would take any remaining European coins back with them.

Lastly, while acknowledging that European coins may have been perceived as useless in North America during that time period, both parties agree on this point. However, they differ in their interpretation of its implications. The lecturer emphasizes that Native Americans would likely be attracted to such aesthetically pleasing items for use in necklaces or jewelry and could barter or trade with Norse explorers for these coins. Consequently, it is possible for European coins to be found at Native American sites due to such exchanges. (291 words)

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Secondly, the reading passage suggests that because no other coins have been found at the same site where the Norse settled and travelled through. ¶ Secondly, the reading passage suggests that Norse sites inhabited by Norse explorers, they did not bring European coins with them because no other coins to North America. However, the lecturer deems this argument irrelevant as it is plausible that when planning their return to Europe after their journey's end (Changed "at the end of their journey" to "after their journey's end" for better phrasing), they would take any remaining European coins back with them.

Lastly, while acknowledging that European coins may have been found at the sites that were inhabited by the Norse. perceived as useless in North America during that time period (Changed "the issue of uselessness of European coins in North America" to improve clarity), both parties agree on this point. However, the they differ in their interpretation of its implications. The lecturer considers it as unnecessary because the Norse would definitely bring the European coins with him when they planned to go back to Europe at the end of the journey. ¶ Finally, the reading passage highlight the issue of uselessness of the European coins in North America. While acknowledging the uselessness of that, the lecturer points out that emphasizes that Native Americans would appeal likely be attracted to such pretty, aesthetically pleasing items for use in necklaces or jewelry (Changed "pretty, delicate items such as necklaces and jewelry, and then jewelry" for better word choice) and could barter or trade with Norse. Thus, the European coins would have been Norse explorers for these coins. Consequently, it is possible for European coins to be found at the Native American site.sites due to such exchanges.

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8. Mind Map

1. Introduction
   - European silver coin found at Native American site
   - Reading passage challenges authenticity
   - Lecturer refutes arguments

2. Distance between Norse settlements and coin site
   - Reading passage: no connection between Norse and coin
   - Lecturer: Norse traveled, Native Americans exchanged goods

3. No other coins found at Norse sites
   - Reading passage: Europeans didn't bring coins to North America
   - Lecturer: Coins taken back to Europe after journey's end

4. Use of European coins in North America
   - Both parties agree: Coins perceived as useless during that time period
   - Lecturer: Native Americans attracted to aesthetically pleasing items, bartered with Norse explorers

5. Conclusion
   - Lecturer maintains connection between silver coin and Norse explorers due to exchanges with Native Americans

9. Key Words