TOEFL TPO 3 Speaking Task 2 Sample: The woman expresses her opinion of the change that has been announced. State her opinion and explain her reasons for holding that opinion.

1.Sub Scores

Delivery: 2 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 2

2.Estimated Scores

Estimated Score: 19

3.Delivery

The speaker's delivery could be improved. There are some punctuation problems, which may be the result of inappropriate pauses. Additionally, some words are mispronounced, leading to spelling errors in the transcription. To improve delivery, the speaker should practice speaking more fluidly with a consistent pace and only occasional pauses. Also, working on pronunciation will help eliminate spelling errors caused by inaccurate pronunciation.

4.Topic Development

The topic development is generally good, as the speaker provides a coherent and well-organized response. The speaker clearly states the woman's opinion and explains her reasons for holding that opinion. However, there is room for improvement in providing more specific examples or details from the listening passage to support the reasons mentioned. To enhance topic development, the speaker should focus on incorporating more information from the listening passage and making stronger connections between ideas.

5.Language Use

Original Answer: Woman disapproved of the announcement that hot breakfast should be eliminated from the dining hall. There are two reasons of her disagreement. Firstly, he think the food being hot or cold is not the issue. From the items given by the university like the yogurt, he don't think they are better than a warm omelette or a bowl of cereal. In a cold morning, students still need hot breakfast like omelette and cereal. Secondly, he don't think hot breakfast can save money. It can only become worse because students have to go off campus to pay more fee for a hot breakfast that they want, that they desire. It can all add up to a student's financial situation. In conclusion, the woman disagreed with the announcement.

Corrected Answer: Woman The woman disapproved of the announcement that hot breakfasts should be eliminated from the dining hall. There are two reasons offor her disagreement. Firstly, heshe thinks the food being hot or cold is not the issue. From the items given by the university, like the yogurt, he don'tshe doesn't think they are better than a warm omelette or a bowl of cereal. In a cold morning, students still need hot breakfast items like omelette and cereal. Secondly, he don'tshe doesn't think hot breakfasteliminating hot breakfasts can save money. It can only become worse because students have to go off campus to pay more feefees for a hot breakfast that they want, that they desire. It can all add up to a student's financial situation. In conclusion, the woman disagreed with the announcement.

(Reasons and explanations: Added missing articles and punctuation; corrected verb tense and subject-verb agreement; replaced incorrect pronouns; added commas for clarity)

Revised Answer (140 words):

The woman disapproved of the announcement that hot breakfasts should be eliminated from the dining hall. There are two reasons for her disagreement. Firstly, she believes that whether food is hot or cold is not the main issue. Considering the items provided by the university, such as yogurt, she doesn't think they are healthier than a warm omelette or a bowl of cereal. On cold mornings, students still require hot breakfast items like omelettes and cereal. Secondly, she doesn't believe that eliminating hot breakfasts will save money. In fact, it could worsen the situation because students would have to go off-campus and pay higher fees for the hot breakfasts they desire. This additional expense could negatively impact a student's financial situation. In conclusion, the woman strongly disagrees with the announced change.

6.Mind Map

• Disapproval

  • Hot vs. cold not the main issue
  • Health comparison: yogurt vs. warm omelette/cereal
  • Cold mornings: need for hot breakfast items

• Financial concerns

  • Eliminating hot breakfasts won't save money
  • Off-campus expenses: higher fees for desired hot breakfasts
  • Impact on student's financial situation

7.Key Words

1.Sub Scores Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.Estimated Scores

23. 3.Delivery

The speaker's delivery is generally clear and fluid, but there are a few instances where the pace is inconsistent and pauses are noticeable. To improve, the speaker should practice maintaining a consistent pace throughout the response and work on reducing unnecessary pauses. Additionally, focusing on accurate pronunciation will help eliminate any spelling errors that may arise from mispronunciation.

4.Topic Development The response is coherent and well-organized, with clear connections between ideas. However, there is room for improvement in providing more specific examples or support for the woman's opinion. To enhance topic development, the speaker should consider elaborating on the reasons behind her dissatisfaction with the change and provide more concrete examples to strengthen her argument.

5.Language Use

The reading classes reading passage (clarify the source of information) announced a change on the campus, in particular to breakfast, that is being replaced by a variety of cold breakfast. It will encourage students to enhance their health condition and will also save their money. The female in the conversation is not happy with the university's decision, she states that replacing yoghurt yogurt (correct spelling) with omelette is not a great decision to be more health conscious, and she also states that what will be the condition when they are served cold breakfast during the cold days. Secondly, she explains that it will rather worsen their situation because they have to go off campus in search of food and they have to pay extra. In this way, the female expressed her opinion about the change.

Revised Answer (140 words):

The reading passage announced a change on campus regarding breakfast, which will be replaced by a variety of cold options. This change aims to encourage students to improve their health and save money. However, the woman in the conversation disagrees with the university's decision. She argues that replacing yogurt with an omelette is not necessarily healthier and questions how students will feel when served cold breakfast on chilly mornings. Furthermore, she believes this change will worsen their situation as they may need to go off-campus for food, resulting in additional expenses. In summary, the woman expresses her dissatisfaction with the proposed change due to concerns about health benefits and potential increased costs for students seeking alternative meal options.

6.Mind Map

- Reading Passage
  - Change on campus
  - Cold breakfast options
  - Health benefits
  - Cost savings

- Woman's Opinion
  - Disagreement with decision
    - Health concerns (yogurt vs. omelette)
    - Cold mornings
  - Worsening situation
    - Off-campus food search
    - Additional expenses

- Revised Answer
  - Summary of woman's dissatisfaction
  - Health benefits and costs concerns

7.Key Words

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数 Estimated Score: 23

3.表达 在表达方面，发言者的语音清晰，语速适中，但偶尔有些停顿。为了提高发言的流畅性，建议发言者在练习时注意掌握适当的停顿和连贯性。此外，注意准确发音以避免拼写错误。

4.话题发展 In terms of topic development, the speaker provides a coherent response that addresses the woman's opinion and her reasons for holding that opinion. However, the response could be better organized by clearly stating the woman's opinion at the beginning and then elaborating on her reasons in separate sentences. To improve, the speaker should practice organizing their thoughts and providing clear connections between ideas with sufficient support or examples.

6.语言使用

Original Answer: Well, the university plans to stop serving hot breakfast, but the women didn't like it. The university plans to eliminate hot breakfast options, which the woman disagrees with. (将句子改为更自然的表达方式) Firstly, whether the breakfast is hot and cold isn't the issue, Firstly, she argues that whether breakfast is hot or cold should not be the main concern, (修正语法错误并使表达更自然) except in a very cold morning, especially on very cold mornings, (改进语法和词汇选择) people will like to have a hot breakfast. when people would prefer a hot breakfast. (使表达更自然) Secondly, if students can't get what they want in campus, Secondly, if students cannot find their desired meals on campus, (改进词汇选择和语法) they'll buy breakfast off-campus and pay off-campus prices, which is more expensive than in-campus. they will resort to off-campus options and pay higher prices, which are more expensive than on-campus meals. (使表达更自然并改进词汇选择) So having a cold breakfast can't help the students save money. Therefore, offering only cold breakfast options won't help students save money. (使表达更自然) So to conclude, the women didn't like the idea. In conclusion, the woman opposes the proposed change. (使表达更自然并改进结论)

Revised Answer (140 words): The university plans to eliminate hot breakfast options, which the woman disagrees with. Firstly, she argues that whether breakfast is hot or cold should not be the main concern, especially on very cold mornings when people would prefer a hot breakfast. Secondly, if students cannot find their desired meals on campus, they will resort to off-campus options and pay higher prices, which are more expensive than on-campus meals. Therefore, offering only cold breakfast options won't help students save money. In conclusion, the woman opposes the proposed change.

7.思维导图

- Disagreement
  - Woman's opinion

- Reasons
  - Hot vs. cold breakfast
    - Cold mornings
  - On-campus vs. off-campus meals
    - Cost comparison

- Conclusion
  - Woman opposes the change

8.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 4 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数 Estimated Score: 26

3.表达 从表达方面来看，发言者的语言流利度和语速基本一致，仅有少量停顿。但是，有些地方的停顿不太合适，可能导致了标点问题。此外，拼写错误可能是由于发音不准确所致。建议发言者注意在适当的地方停顿，并练习准确的发音。

4.话题发展 The speaker provides a coherent and well-organized response, with clear connections between ideas and sufficient support or examples. The woman's opinion and her reasons for holding that opinion are clearly stated, and the response effectively addresses the points made in the reading passage. To improve further, the speaker could elaborate more on the woman's reasons for her opinion, such as providing specific examples of hot breakfast items that are healthy or discussing the potential impact of students going off-campus for breakfast on their overall satisfaction with the university dining services.

5.语言使用

Original Answer: The reading passage states that the campus will no longer serve hot breakfasts for two main reasons, providing a healthier assortment of food and enabling students to save money. However, the woman in the last passage disagrees with the reasons. She argues that yogurt is not necessarily healthier than hot foods like omelettes or hot cereal, and whether a food is hot or cold should not be the main concern. Additionally, she believes that eliminating hot breakfasts may lead students to go off campus for meals, which could be more expensive in the long run. Therefore, she finds it unreasonable to eliminate hot breakfasts from the dining service.

Corrected Answer: The reading passage states that the campus will no longer serve hot breakfasts for two primary reasons: offering a more nutritious variety of food and allowing students to save money. However, the woman in the conversation disagrees with these justifications. She contends that yogurt is not inherently healthier than warm dishes like omelettes or hot cereal, and the temperature of a meal should not be the primary factor. Furthermore, she believes that removing hot breakfast options might prompt students to seek meals off-campus, potentially incurring higher costs over time. Consequently, she deems it illogical to eliminate hot breakfasts from the dining service.

(原文中的“two main reasons”改为“two primary reasons”，因为“primary”更正式。同时，“healthier assortment of food”改为“more nutritious variety of food”，以提高词汇的复杂性。此外，“last passage”改为“conversation”，使表达更自然。)

Revised Answer (140 words): The reading passage asserts that the university will cease serving hot breakfasts due to two primary reasons: offering a more nutritious variety of food and allowing students to save money. Contrarily, the woman in the conversation disputes these justifications. She contends that yogurt is not inherently healthier than warm dishes, such as omelettes or hot cereal, and the temperature of a meal should not be the determining factor. Furthermore, she posits that removing hot breakfast options might prompt students to seek meals off-campus, potentially incurring higher costs over time and negatively impacting their satisfaction with the university dining services. Consequently, she deems it illogical to eliminate hot breakfasts from the dining service and suggests that other factors should be considered when evaluating the healthiness and cost-effectiveness of meal options.

6.思维导图

• Reading passage

  • No hot breakfasts
  • Reasons: healthier food, save money

• Woman's opinion

  • Disagrees with reasons
  • Yogurt vs. hot foods (omelettes, hot cereal)
  • Temperature not the main concern

• Additional concerns

  • Going off-campus for meals
  • Higher costs over time

• Conclusion

  • Illogical to eliminate hot breakfasts

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数 Estimated Score: 23

3.表达 从表达方面来看，整体上说得还算清楚，但仍有改进的空间。建议在发音和语速方面多加练习，以便提高口语的流利度和连贯性。此外，注意在适当的地方停顿，以增强表达的清晰度。

4.话题发展 The response is coherent and well-organized, but there is room for improvement in topic development. The speaker could provide more specific examples or details to support the woman's opinion, such as mentioning specific hot breakfast items that are healthy or comparing the costs of on-campus and off-campus breakfast options. Additionally, the speaker could emphasize the woman's concern about the inconvenience of going off-campus for breakfast.

5.语言使用

Original: The announcement proposed that eliminating hot breakfast next month, stating that cold food is more healthy and can save money. The announcement proposes eliminating hot breakfasts starting next month, stating that cold food is healthier and can save money. (建议使用现在时态，以及注意名词和形容词的正确形式。)

Original: However, in the conversation, the woman disagrees with the announcement. However, during the conversation, the woman expresses her disagreement with the announcement. (使用更自然的表达方式来描述女士的观点。)

Original: Firstly, she believes whether the food is hot or cold is not the main issue of food health. Firstly, she believes that whether the food is hot or cold is not the primary factor determining its healthiness. (使用更准确的词汇来描述女士的观点。)

Original: For instance, in cold morning, a nice omelette is obviously a better choice than cold yogurt. For instance, on a cold morning, a warm omelette is clearly a better choice than cold yogurt. (注意介词的使用和形容词的选择。)

Original: Secondly, she contends that the claim of saving money is counterproductive. Secondly, she argues that the claim of saving money will actually be counterproductive. (使用更自然的动词来描述女士的观点。)

Original: She explains that if we can't buy things in the campus, we need to pay for them out of the campus, which is more expensive and adding up a lot of money. She explains that if students cannot purchase their desired items on campus, they will have to buy them off-campus, which will be more expensive and accumulate additional costs. (使用更准确的词汇和更自然的表达方式。)

Revised Answer (140 words): The announcement proposes eliminating hot breakfasts starting next month, stating that cold food is healthier and can save money. However, during the conversation, the woman expresses her disagreement with the announcement. Firstly, she believes that whether the food is hot or cold is not the primary factor determining its healthiness. For instance, on a cold morning, a warm omelette is clearly a better choice than cold yogurt. Secondly, she argues that the claim of saving money will actually be counterproductive. She explains that if students cannot purchase their desired items on campus, they will have to buy them off-campus, which will be more expensive and accumulate additional costs.

6.思维导图

- Announcement
  - Eliminating hot breakfasts
  - Cold food healthier and saves money

- Woman's disagreement
  - Food temperature not primary factor for healthiness
    - Example: Warm omelette vs. cold yogurt on a cold morning
  - Claim of saving money counterproductive
    - Students buying off-campus items
    - More expensive and accumulates additional costs

7.关键词

1. Sub Scores Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2. Estimated Scores

23. 3. Delivery

The speaker's delivery is generally clear and fluid, but there are occasional pauses that disrupt the flow of speech. To improve, the speaker should practice speaking more consistently and work on reducing unnecessary pauses. Additionally, the speaker should focus on accurate pronunciation to avoid any confusion due to spelling errors.

4. Topic Development The response is coherent and well-organized, with clear connections between ideas. However, the speaker could provide more specific examples or details to support their argument. To improve topic development, the speaker should consider elaborating on their points and providing more concrete evidence to strengthen their argument.

5. Language Use

Original: Recently, the university decides decided (past tense is needed here) to discontinue the supply of hot breakfast food at university dining halls, arguing that these cold breakfast dishes are healthier than the hot items. Meanwhile, this change helps to keep the university's meal plans affordable. However, the woman in the conversation disagrees with the university's policy. Firstly, it is unnecessary that yogurt is healthier than omelets or hot cereals. Actually, on a cold morning, a hot omelet or hot cereal is good to people than a cold yogurt. Secondly, when students can't get what they want on campus, they will choose to eat breakfast off-campus and pay off campus expenses. If the students only take breakfast off-campus two seconds a week, it will add up.

Revised (140 words): Recently, the university decided to discontinue serving hot breakfast foods at dining halls, claiming that cold breakfast dishes are healthier and more cost-effective. However, the woman in the conversation disagrees with this policy for two reasons. First, she believes that it is not necessarily true that yogurt is healthier than omelets or hot cereals; in fact, on a cold morning, a warm omelet or hot cereal might be more beneficial than cold yogurt. Second, she argues that if students cannot find their preferred breakfast options on campus, they will likely go off-campus for meals and incur additional expenses. Even if students eat off-campus only twice a week, these costs can accumulate over time.

6. Mind Map

• University decision

  • Discontinue hot breakfast
  • Cold breakfast benefits

• Woman's disagreement

  • Health comparison (yogurt vs. omelets/hot cereals)
  • Cold mornings

• Off-campus consequences

  • Additional expenses
  • Accumulation over time

7. Key Words

1.Sub Scores

• Delivery: 3

• Topic Development: 3

• Language Use: 3

2.Estimated Scores

• Total Score: 23

3.Delivery The speaker's delivery is generally clear and fluid, but there are occasional pauses that disrupt the flow of the speech. To improve, the speaker should practice maintaining a consistent pace throughout the response and avoid unnecessary pauses. Additionally, working on pronunciation will help eliminate any spelling errors caused by inaccurate pronunciation.

4.Topic Development The speaker provides a coherent response that addresses the woman's opinion and her reasons for holding that opinion. However, the response could be better organized to create clearer connections between ideas. To improve, the speaker should focus on presenting ideas in a more structured manner, using appropriate transitions to connect thoughts and provide sufficient support or examples for each point made.

5.Language Use

The woman in the conversation reveals the plan the school wants wants to measure in the next month that to eliminate the warm food for the breakfast. (change "wants" to "want" because "the school" is singular) Firstly, she thinks the morning can be very cold, so in the cold morning, warm foods are what the students truly need. And for the next point of saving money, she reveals it too. Because if the student's need of warm food cannot be fed at the campus, the student will find some other way students will seek alternatives (replace "find some other way" with "seek alternatives" for a more natural-sounding phrase) to complete their needs, such as go off the campus and buy food off campus, which will cost them more. So the woman is truly against the plan of school. For more UN videos visit www.un.org

Revised Answer (140 words):

The woman in the conversation expresses her disagreement with the university's plan to eliminate hot breakfast options next month. She believes that on cold mornings, students genuinely need warm food options like omelettes and hot cereal. She also questions whether cold foods are inherently healthier than hot ones, arguing that it should not be a deciding factor. Furthermore, she contends that this change might not save money as intended. If students cannot find satisfying breakfast options on campus, they may seek alternatives off-campus, which could be more expensive. This additional expense could add up over time and negate any potential savings from limiting breakfast choices on campus. In conclusion, the woman strongly opposes the university's plan to remove hot breakfast items, citing concerns about students' needs for warm food and the potential financial impact on their budgets.

6.Mind Map

• Disagreement

  • Cold mornings
  • Warm food options

• Health concerns

  • Cold vs. hot foods

• Financial impact

  • Off-campus alternatives
  • Additional expenses

7.Key Words

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

从表达方面来看，这位同学的回答基本上是清晰的，但在某些地方可能需要稍微停顿一下。建议在练习时注意语速和发音，尽量保持连贯流畅。同时，注意在适当的地方停顿，以便更好地表达观点。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，这位同学的回答基本上是连贯和有组织的。但是，在解释女生观点的原因时，可以更加详细地说明她对健康食物的看法以及她认为热早餐对学生更有益的原因。此外，在提到离校就餐可能导致更高开销时，可以进一步强调这一点对学生的影响。建议在练习时尝试提供更多支持或例子来丰富你的回答。

5.语言使用

Original: Well, the woman holds the opinion that the school's decision to change the survival of the breakfast from the hot warm food to cold food like yogurt is very bad. The woman believes that the school's decision to replace hot breakfast items with cold foods such as yogurt is a poor choice. (将原句的表述进行了简化，使其更自然。)

Because she thinks that she didn't agree with the statement of the school that the cold food like yogurt is much healthier than the warm food on breakfast. She disagrees with the school's claim that cold foods like yogurt are much healthier than hot breakfast items. (修改了句子结构，使其更清晰。)

Because of this, she said that students need to go off campus to get the warm breakfast they wanted to eat, and this action will cost them more money because the price off campus is much more expensive than on campus. As a result, she argues that students will have to go off-campus for hot breakfast options, which will be more expensive due to higher off-campus prices. (对原句进行了重新组织，使其更连贯。)

So this will cost them more money and make things worse. So she didn't approve this. This will ultimately increase their expenses and worsen their situation. Therefore, she disapproves of this change. (对原句进行了简化和改进。)

Revised version (140 words):

The woman believes that the school's decision to replace hot breakfast items with cold foods such as yogurt is a poor choice. She disagrees with the school's claim that cold foods like yogurt are much healthier than hot breakfast items. As a result, she argues that students will have to go off-campus for hot breakfast options, which will be more expensive due to higher off-campus prices. This will ultimately increase their expenses and worsen their situation. Therefore, she disapproves of this change.

6.思维导图

- Woman's opinion
  - School's decision
    - Replace hot breakfast items with cold foods
    - Poor choice
  - Disagreement
    - Cold foods healthier than hot breakfast items
  - Consequences
    - Off-campus for hot breakfast options
    - More expensive due to higher off-campus prices
  - Result
    - Increased expenses
    - Worsened situation
  - Disapproval of the change

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

从表达方面来看，这个回答的语音清晰，语速适中，偶尔有停顿。为了提高表达能力，建议在发音和语调上多加练习，尤其是在连读和弱读方面。此外，注意在适当的地方停顿，以增强语言的连贯性。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，这个回答较为连贯和有组织。然而，在解释女生对政策的反对意见时，可以更详细地说明她的观点和理由。例如，在提到早餐选择权时，可以进一步解释为什么这对学生很重要。此外，在谈到校外早餐价格问题时，可以给出更具体的例子来支持观点。总之，在回答中加入更多细节和例子将使话题发展得更好。

5.语言使用

Original: In the reading passage, the university is going to implement a policy that hot breakfast foods will no longer be served at the university dining hall soon. While in the listening material, the student dislikes this idea. First, she said in the cold morning, she would like to have warm breakfast rather than cold breakfast. She should have the right to make a choice. Second, she thinks many students who want warm breakfast will go to off-campus breakfast store and it is expensive for them to buy the warm breakfast at the campus.

Corrected: In the reading passage, the university plans to implement a policy that hot breakfast foods will no longer be served in the university dining hall soon. However, in the listening material, the student opposes this idea. Firstly, she mentioned that on cold mornings, she would prefer a warm breakfast over a cold one. She believes students should have the right to choose. Secondly, she argues that many students who desire warm breakfasts will resort to off-campus establishments, which would be more expensive for them compared to on-campus options.

(原文中的 "is going to" 改为 "plans to" 更自然。同时，将 "dislikes" 改为 "opposes" 使表达更准确。在列举理由时，使用 "Firstly" 和 "Secondly" 使语言更连贯。最后，对第二个理由进行了重新表述，使其更清晰。)

Revised (140 words): In the reading passage, it is mentioned that the university plans to implement a policy where hot breakfast foods will no longer be served in the dining hall soon. However, in the listening material, a female student opposes this idea for two main reasons. Firstly, she argues that on cold mornings, students should have the right to choose between a warm or cold breakfast, as they might prefer a warm meal to start their day. Secondly, she believes that this policy will lead many students who desire warm breakfasts to resort to off-campus establishments, which would be more expensive compared to on-campus options. Consequently, this change might not be as beneficial as the university claims, considering the potential inconvenience and additional costs for students who prefer warm breakfasts.

6.思维导图

• Reading passage

  • University policy
    • No hot breakfast foods

• Listening material

  • Female student's opinion
    • Opposes the policy
      • Reason 1: Right to choose (cold vs. warm breakfast)
      • Reason 2: Off-campus establishments (more expensive)

• Revised answer

  • Contrast between reading and listening materials
  • Female student's reasons for opposing the policy
  • Potential consequences of the policy

7.关键词

1.子项得分

• 交付 (Delivery): 3

• 主题发展 (Topic Development): 3.5

• 语言使用 (Language Use): 3

2.预估分数

• 总分: 26

3.表达 回答中的语速和发音大部分都很清晰，但有些地方需要改进。建议在练习发音时注意一些元音和辅音的发音，以及在句子之间适当地停顿。这样可以使听众更容易理解你的观点。

4.话题发展 回答内容基本上是连贯和组织良好的，但可以在一些方面进行改进。例如，在提到女士对健康食物的看法时，可以更详细地解释她为什么认为热食比冷食更健康。此外，在谈到学生可能会在校外花费更多钱时，可以给出更具体的例子来支持这一观点。总体而言，尝试在回答中提供更多详细信息和例子，以使观点更加有说服力。

5.语言使用

原文：The school intends to discontinue the service on hot breakfast at dining hall and serve a white assortment of cold breakfast instead because they consider that cold breakfast food are healthier and that limited selection can help students saving money. The school plans to discontinue serving hot breakfast in the dining hall and offer a wide variety of cold breakfast options instead, as they believe that cold breakfast foods are healthier and limiting the selection can help students save money. (在这里，我们修正了句子结构，使其更自然流畅，并使用了更高级的词汇。同时，我们纠正了一些语法错误，例如将“white assortment”改为“wide variety”。)

The woman disagrees with the decision because of two main reasons. The woman disagrees with the decision for two main reasons. (这里我们简化了句子结构，使其更自然。)

Firstly, she believes that it's unconvincing to say that cold meals are better than hot ones. First, she believes it's unconvincing to claim that cold meals are superior to hot ones. (我们使用了“claim”和“superior”来替换原文中的词汇，使句子更高级。)

Especially on a cold morning, people may prefer to have a hot meal. Particularly on a cold morning, people might prefer a hot meal. (我们使用了“particularly”和“might”来替换原文中的词汇，使句子更自然。)

Secondly, she argues that limiting our selections will actually cause students to spend more. Second, she argues that limiting the options will actually lead to students spending more. (我们使用了“lead to”来替换原文中的“cause”，使句子更自然。)

She explains that students would have to pay for more expensive foods off campus because they couldn't get what they want in school and those extra spendings would add up to be a large number. She explains that students would have to pay for pricier food off-campus since they can't get what they want at school, and those additional expenses would accumulate to a significant amount. (在这里，我们修正了句子结构，使其更自然流畅，并使用了更高级的词汇。同时，我们纠正了一些语法错误。)

修订版（140字）：

The school plans to discontinue serving hot breakfast in the dining hall and offer a wide variety of cold breakfast options instead, as they believe that cold breakfast foods are healthier and limiting the selection can help students save money. The woman disagrees with the decision for two main reasons. First, she believes it's unconvincing to claim that cold meals are superior to hot ones. Particularly on a cold morning, people might prefer a hot meal. Second, she argues that limiting the options will actually lead to students spending more. She explains that students would have to pay for pricier food off-campus since they can't get what they want at school, and those additional expenses would accumulate to a significant amount.

6.思维导图

• Discontinue hot breakfast

  • Cold breakfast options
    • Healthier
    • Save money

• Woman's disagreement

  • Unconvincing claim
    • Cold vs. hot meals
    • Cold mornings preference
  • Limiting options
    • Increased spending
    • Off-campus food expenses

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

从表达方面来看，发言者的语言流利，语速较为稳定，仅有少量停顿。但在某些地方，发言者的发音不够准确，导致了拼写错误。建议发言者多加练习，提高发音准确度。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，发言者的回答内容较为连贯和有条理，观点之间的联系也较为清晰。但在论述原因时，可以尝试提供更多具体的例子和支持观点的论据。建议发言者在练习时注意提高论述深度和举例的质量。

5.语言使用

Original: The women think that the university shouldn't change the hot breakfast into the cold breakfast. First of all, the court says that if change the hot breakfast into the cold breakfast, it will be more healthier. However, the woman thinks that the temperature has nothing to do with health. Secondly, the campus said that it will help students to save money if change the hot breakfast into the cold breakfast. However, the woman thinks that it can be worse because students should go outside the campus to buy the breakfast that they would buy in the campus, which will increase the cost, make the whole process more expensive. Thank you.

Corrected: The women The woman (单数，应为woman) thinks (主语是单数，应加s) that the university shouldn't change the hot breakfast into from hot to (更自然的表达方式) cold breakfast. First of all, the court the announcement (应为announcement，而非court) says that if change they change (主语缺失，应为they change) the hot breakfast into the cold breakfast, cold ones, (避免重复，用ones替代) it will be more healthier healthier (去掉多余的more). However, the woman thinks that the temperature has nothing to do with health. Secondly, the campus the university (用university替换campus更准确) said that it will help students to save money if change they change (主语缺失，应为they change) the hot breakfast into the cold breakfast. cold ones. (避免重复，用ones替代) However, the woman thinks that it can be worse because students should go outside the campus to buy the breakfast that they would buy in the campus, which will increase the cost, make the whole process more expensive. Thank you.

Revised (140 words): The woman thinks that the university shouldn't change from hot to cold breakfast. First of all, the announcement says that if they change from hot breakfast items to cold ones, it will be healthier. However, the woman believes that temperature has no relation to health benefits. Secondly, the university claims that changing to cold breakfast items will help students save money. Nevertheless, the woman argues that this change could worsen the situation because students might have to go off-campus to purchase their preferred hot breakfast items. Consequently, this would increase their expenses and make the overall process more costly. In conclusion, she disagrees with the university's decision to eliminate hot breakfasts due to her concerns about health benefits and the potential financial burden on students.

6.思维导图

- Woman's opinion
  - Disagrees with the change
    - Health benefits
      - Temperature not related to health
    - Financial burden
      - Going off-campus for hot breakfasts
      - Increased expenses

- University's claims
  - Healthier cold breakfasts
  - Saving money for students

7.关键词

1.子项得分

• 交付：3

• 主题发展：3.5

• 语言使用：3

2.预估分数

• 总分：26

3.表达 回答中的发音和语速基本清晰流畅，但在某些地方存在不适当的停顿。建议在练习时注意保持连贯性，尽量减少不必要的停顿。同时，注意提高发音准确性，以避免拼写错误。

4.话题发展 回答内容基本上是连贯和组织良好的，但在某些地方可以更加明确地表达观点。例如，在描述女士对冷热食物的看法时，可以更具体地说明她认为热食对学生更有益。此外，在讨论节省开支问题时，可以提供更多具体的例子来支持女士的观点。总体而言，在练习时要注意提高观点的明确性，并尝试提供更多有力的论据来支持你的观点。

5.语言使用

Original: The passage is about the school's decision that the dining service will no longer provide hot breakfast because the cold breakfasts are healthier than the hot ones. Also, it can help students save a lot of money and makes the meals more affordable to them. However, the woman thinks it is ridiculous to do so because he does not think the cold breakfasts are healthier than the hot ones because she thinks that whether it is cold or hot is not an issue. Because in a cold morning, it is better for students to have a couple of hot drinks like omelets. Also, it will make the things worse when it comes to save money or not because students have to go off campus and pay off-campus prices and this can be quite expensive and unaffordable. If students go only two or three mornings off-campus to buy stuff, this can add up and accumulate to a great number. So that is why the woman does not stand for the suggestions listed in the article.

Corrected: The passage discusses about the school's decision that to have the dining service stop providing hot breakfasts, as they believe cold breakfasts are healthier and more affordable for students. However, the woman finds this decision ridiculous, as she doesn't think whether a breakfast is hot or cold should be an issue. On a cold morning, she believes students would benefit more from hot options like omelettes. Additionally, she argues that this change could worsen their financial situation since students might go off-campus for breakfast and pay higher prices, which could become unaffordable over time.

(删除了“about”，因为在这里不需要。将“that”改为“to have”，使句子更自然。删除了“ones”，因为在这里不需要复数形式。将“he”改为“she”，以保持一致性。)

Revised (140 words): The passage discusses the school's decision to have the dining service stop providing hot breakfast, as they believe cold breakfasts are healthier and more affordable for students. However, the woman disagrees with this decision, arguing that the temperature of breakfast shouldn't be an issue. She believes that on a cold morning, students would benefit more from hot options like omelettes. Furthermore, she contends that this change could worsen students' financial situation, as they might go off-campus for breakfast and pay higher prices. This could become unaffordable over time, negating any potential savings from the school's decision. In conclusion, the woman opposes the suggestions in the article due to her concerns about health benefits and potential financial consequences for students.

6.思维导图

- School's decision
  - Dining service
    - Stop providing hot breakfast
    - Cold breakfasts: healthier and more affordable

- Woman's disagreement
  - Temperature of breakfast shouldn't be an issue
  - Cold mornings: hot options like omelettes beneficial
  - Financial situation concerns
    - Off-campus breakfast: higher prices, unaffordable over time

7.关键词