TOEFL TPO 2 Speaking Task 2 Sample: The man expresses his opinion of the university’s plan to eliminate the bus service. State his opinion and explain the reasons he gives for holding that opinion.

1.Sub Scores Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.Estimated Scores

23. 3.Delivery

The speaker's delivery is generally clear and fluid, but there are some occasional pauses that could be reduced. To improve, the speaker should practice speaking more consistently and work on reducing unnecessary pauses. Additionally, the speaker should focus on accurate pronunciation to avoid any spelling errors that may result from mispronunciation.

4.Topic Development The response is coherent and well-organized, with clear connections between ideas. However, the speaker could provide more specific examples or details to support their points. To improve topic development, the speaker should practice elaborating on their ideas and providing more concrete evidence to strengthen their argument.

5.Language Use

According to the reading passage passage, the university is going to close discontinue free buses for students on campus. The first reason is they think there are few students who will use buses, and secondly, they want to use the saved money for building more parking lots. However, the male students student rejects this notion. First of all, he thinks that the universities build the bus stop on the expensive neighborhood, so if the university can change the location for the bus stop, there will be more students who take the buses. Secondly, he thinks that closing the bus for students will increase the need for parking as the students will drive to school, and additionally, it can increase the noise on campus and make the campus more traffic. Therefore, he rejects the idea of closing buses.

(The word "close" was changed to "discontinue" to better fit the context of discontinuing a service. The word "students" was changed to "student" to maintain subject-verb agreement. The phrase "on the expensive neighborhood" was changed to "in an expensive neighborhood" for proper preposition usage.)

Revised Answer (140 words):

According to the passage, the university plans to discontinue its free bus service for students on campus due to low ridership and a desire to use saved funds for expanding parking lots. However, the male student disagrees with this plan. He argues that if the university changes bus stops' locations from expensive neighborhoods where fewer students live to areas where off-campus students reside, more students would utilize these buses. Additionally, he believes that eliminating bus services would encourage more students to drive to campus, leading to increased parking demand, noise, and traffic congestion. As a result, the student opposes the university's plan to discontinue the bus service and suggests that the university should make it easier for students to use public transportation instead.

6.Mind Map

• Discontinue bus service

  • Low ridership
  • Expanding parking lots

• Male student's disagreement

  • Bus stops in expensive neighborhoods
    • Change locations to off-campus student areas
  • Eliminating bus service consequences
    • Increased parking demand
    • Noise and traffic congestion

• Suggestion

  • Make public transportation more accessible

7.Key Words

1.Sub Scores Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.Estimated Scores

23. 3.Delivery

The speaker's delivery is generally clear and fluid, but there are some occasional pauses that could be improved. To enhance the delivery, the speaker should practice maintaining a consistent pace throughout the response and work on reducing unnecessary pauses. This will help create a more natural flow in their speech.

4.Topic Development The response is coherent and well-organized, with clear connections between ideas. However, there is room for improvement in providing more specific examples or support for the points made. To strengthen topic development, the speaker should focus on elaborating on their reasons and providing more concrete evidence to back up their claims. This will make the response more persuasive and engaging for the listener.

5.Language Use

The man disliked the university's plan to eliminate the bus services. There are two reasons why he disagreed with the plan. The first reason is that the bus service seemed like a waste. It's just because the neighborhood where the bus went through is too expensive for students to live in. So it's not necessarily a kind of waste. The second reason is that adding more parking lot by the money from the bus service actually encouraged more students to ride in the campus. And it caused more traffic and noises, which is not good for students. So it is better to take bus services.

The man disliked The man disapproved of ("disapproved of" sounds more natural and formal) the university's plan to eliminate the bus services. There are two reasons why he disagreed with the plan. The first reason is that the bus service seemed like a waste the bus service appeared wasteful (rephrased for clarity and conciseness). It's just because the neighborhood where the bus went through is too expensive for students to live in the route passes through neighborhoods that are unaffordable for students (rephrased for clarity and conciseness). So it's not necessarily a kind of waste. The second reason is that adding more parking lot by the money from the bus service actually encouraged more students to ride in the campus using funds from eliminating the bus service to add more parking spaces incentivizes students to drive on campus (rephrased for clarity and conciseness). And it caused more traffic and noises noise (corrected plural form), which is not good for students. So it is better to take bus services use the bus service (rephrased for clarity and natural language use).

Revised Answer (140 words):

The man disapproved of the university's plan to eliminate the bus services. He provided two reasons for his disagreement. Firstly, he believed that the bus service appeared wasteful because the route passes through neighborhoods that are unaffordable for students. However, he argued that if the university updated the route to cover areas where off-campus students live, more students would use the service, making it less wasteful. Secondly, he pointed out that using funds from eliminating the bus service to add more parking spaces incentivizes students to drive on campus. This would lead to increased traffic and noise, negatively impacting the campus environment. Therefore, he concluded that it would be better for students to use the bus service instead of driving, and the university should make it easier for them to do so.

6.Mind Map

- Disapproval of the plan
  - Bus service appears wasteful
    - Route through unaffordable neighborhoods
    - Updating route for off-campus students
  - Incentivizing driving on campus
    - Increased parking spaces
    - Negative impacts
      - Traffic
      - Noise
  - Better alternative: using bus service
    - University should make it easier for students

7.Key Words

1. Sub Scores

• Delivery: 2

• Topic Development: 2

• Language Use: 2

2. Estimated Scores

• Total Score: 15

3. Delivery The speaker's delivery could be improved by focusing on clearer and more fluid speech, maintaining a consistent pace, and reducing unnecessary pauses. Additionally, the speaker should work on accurate pronunciation to avoid spelling errors that may result from mispronunciation.

4. Topic Development The response could be better organized and more coherent. The speaker should ensure that they clearly state the man's opinion and provide well-connected reasons for his opinion. To improve topic development, the speaker should focus on providing sufficient support or examples from the listening passage to strengthen their argument.

5. Language Use

Original Answer: The university plan to animate the bus service as a result their students ride the buses and the cost is expensive so the school want to save money and make it to make more park plan. The university plans to eliminate the bus service because few students ride the buses, and the costs are high. The school wants to save money and use it to create more parking spaces. (Corrected for sentence structure, vocabulary, and grammar)

But the man disagrees with it. However, the man disagrees with this plan. (Improved sentence structure and flow)

First, he thinks the reason for the students to take the buses and the route of the bus is not reasonable and it can reach some places students go. First, he believes that the bus routes are outdated and do not cover areas where most students live. (Clarified meaning and improved sentence structure)

Second, they don't think to make more parking lots will do the job because the more parking lots are built, the more students will take their car and make traffic jams and the more need to... Second, he argues that creating more parking lots will encourage students to drive on campus, leading to increased traffic congestion and a greater need for additional parking spaces. (Improved sentence structure, grammar, and clarity)

Revised Answer (140 words):

The university plans to eliminate the bus service because few students ride the buses, and the costs are high. The school wants to save money and use it to create more parking spaces. However, the man disagrees with this plan. First, he believes that the bus routes are outdated and do not cover areas where most students live. If the university updated the routes to serve these areas, more students would likely use the bus service. Second, he argues that creating more parking lots will encourage students to drive on campus, leading to increased traffic congestion and a greater need for additional parking spaces. Instead of eliminating the bus service, the university should focus on improving it to make it more accessible and convenient for students, thereby reducing traffic and noise around campus.

6. Mind Map

- University's Plan
  - Eliminate bus service
  - Reasons: few riders, high costs
  - Use savings for more parking spaces

- Man's Disagreement
  - Outdated bus routes
    - Not serving areas where students live
  - More parking lots
    - Encourage driving on campus
    - Increased traffic congestion
    - Greater need for parking spaces

- Suggested Solution
  - Improve bus service
    - Update routes to serve student areas
  - Reduce traffic and noise around campus

7. Key Words