TOEFL TPO 2 Speaking Task 2 Sample: The man expresses his opinion of the university’s plan to eliminate the bus service. State his opinion and explain the reasons he gives for holding that opinion.

1.Sub Scores Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.Estimated Scores

23. 3.Delivery

The speaker's delivery is generally clear and fluid, but there are some occasional pauses that could be reduced. To improve, the speaker should practice speaking more consistently and work on reducing unnecessary pauses. Additionally, the speaker should focus on accurate pronunciation to avoid any spelling errors that may result from mispronunciation.

4.Topic Development The response is coherent and well-organized, with clear connections between ideas. However, the speaker could provide more specific examples or details to support their points. To improve topic development, the speaker should practice elaborating on their ideas and providing more concrete evidence to strengthen their argument.

5.Language Use

According to the reading passage passage, the university is going to close discontinue free buses for students on campus. The first reason is they think there are few students who will use buses, and secondly, they want to use the saved money for building more parking lots. However, the male students student rejects this notion. First of all, he thinks that the universities build the bus stop on the expensive neighborhood, so if the university can change the location for the bus stop, there will be more students who take the buses. Secondly, he thinks that closing the bus for students will increase the need for parking as the students will drive to school, and additionally, it can increase the noise on campus and make the campus more traffic. Therefore, he rejects the idea of closing buses.

(The word "close" was changed to "discontinue" to better fit the context of discontinuing a service. The word "students" was changed to "student" to maintain subject-verb agreement. The phrase "on the expensive neighborhood" was changed to "in an expensive neighborhood" for proper preposition usage.)

Revised Answer (140 words):

According to the passage, the university plans to discontinue its free bus service for students on campus due to low ridership and a desire to use saved funds for expanding parking lots. However, the male student disagrees with this plan. He argues that if the university changes bus stops' locations from expensive neighborhoods where fewer students live to areas where off-campus students reside, more students would utilize these buses. Additionally, he believes that eliminating bus services would encourage more students to drive to campus, leading to increased parking demand, noise, and traffic congestion. As a result, the student opposes the university's plan to discontinue the bus service and suggests that the university should make it easier for students to use public transportation instead.

6.Mind Map

• Discontinue bus service

  • Low ridership
  • Expanding parking lots

• Male student's disagreement

  • Bus stops in expensive neighborhoods
    • Change locations to off-campus student areas
  • Eliminating bus service consequences
    • Increased parking demand
    • Noise and traffic congestion

• Suggestion

  • Make public transportation more accessible

7.Key Words

1.Sub Scores Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.Estimated Scores

23. 3.Delivery

The speaker's delivery is generally clear and fluid, but there are some occasional pauses that could be improved. To enhance the delivery, the speaker should practice maintaining a consistent pace throughout the response and work on reducing unnecessary pauses. This will help create a more natural flow in their speech.

4.Topic Development The response is coherent and well-organized, with clear connections between ideas. However, there is room for improvement in providing more specific examples or support for the points made. To strengthen topic development, the speaker should focus on elaborating on their reasons and providing more concrete evidence to back up their claims. This will make the response more persuasive and engaging for the listener.

5.Language Use

The man disliked the university's plan to eliminate the bus services. There are two reasons why he disagreed with the plan. The first reason is that the bus service seemed like a waste. It's just because the neighborhood where the bus went through is too expensive for students to live in. So it's not necessarily a kind of waste. The second reason is that adding more parking lot by the money from the bus service actually encouraged more students to ride in the campus. And it caused more traffic and noises, which is not good for students. So it is better to take bus services.

The man disliked The man disapproved of ("disapproved of" sounds more natural and formal) the university's plan to eliminate the bus services. There are two reasons why he disagreed with the plan. The first reason is that the bus service seemed like a waste the bus service appeared wasteful (rephrased for clarity and conciseness). It's just because the neighborhood where the bus went through is too expensive for students to live in the route passes through neighborhoods that are unaffordable for students (rephrased for clarity and conciseness). So it's not necessarily a kind of waste. The second reason is that adding more parking lot by the money from the bus service actually encouraged more students to ride in the campus using funds from eliminating the bus service to add more parking spaces incentivizes students to drive on campus (rephrased for clarity and conciseness). And it caused more traffic and noises noise (corrected plural form), which is not good for students. So it is better to take bus services use the bus service (rephrased for clarity and natural language use).

Revised Answer (140 words):

The man disapproved of the university's plan to eliminate the bus services. He provided two reasons for his disagreement. Firstly, he believed that the bus service appeared wasteful because the route passes through neighborhoods that are unaffordable for students. However, he argued that if the university updated the route to cover areas where off-campus students live, more students would use the service, making it less wasteful. Secondly, he pointed out that using funds from eliminating the bus service to add more parking spaces incentivizes students to drive on campus. This would lead to increased traffic and noise, negatively impacting the campus environment. Therefore, he concluded that it would be better for students to use the bus service instead of driving, and the university should make it easier for them to do so.

6.Mind Map

- Disapproval of the plan
  - Bus service appears wasteful
    - Route through unaffordable neighborhoods
    - Updating route for off-campus students
  - Incentivizing driving on campus
    - Increased parking spaces
    - Negative impacts
      - Traffic
      - Noise
  - Better alternative: using bus service
    - University should make it easier for students

7.Key Words

1. Sub Scores

• Delivery: 2

• Topic Development: 2

• Language Use: 2

2. Estimated Scores

• Total Score: 15

3. Delivery The speaker's delivery could be improved by focusing on clearer and more fluid speech, maintaining a consistent pace, and reducing unnecessary pauses. Additionally, the speaker should work on accurate pronunciation to avoid spelling errors that may result from mispronunciation.

4. Topic Development The response could be better organized and more coherent. The speaker should ensure that they clearly state the man's opinion and provide well-connected reasons for his opinion. To improve topic development, the speaker should focus on providing sufficient support or examples from the listening passage to strengthen their argument.

5. Language Use

Original Answer: The university plan to animate the bus service as a result their students ride the buses and the cost is expensive so the school want to save money and make it to make more park plan. The university plans to eliminate the bus service because few students ride the buses, and the costs are high. The school wants to save money and use it to create more parking spaces. (Corrected for sentence structure, vocabulary, and grammar)

But the man disagrees with it. However, the man disagrees with this plan. (Improved sentence structure and flow)

First, he thinks the reason for the students to take the buses and the route of the bus is not reasonable and it can reach some places students go. First, he believes that the bus routes are outdated and do not cover areas where most students live. (Clarified meaning and improved sentence structure)

Second, they don't think to make more parking lots will do the job because the more parking lots are built, the more students will take their car and make traffic jams and the more need to... Second, he argues that creating more parking lots will encourage students to drive on campus, leading to increased traffic congestion and a greater need for additional parking spaces. (Improved sentence structure, grammar, and clarity)

Revised Answer (140 words):

The university plans to eliminate the bus service because few students ride the buses, and the costs are high. The school wants to save money and use it to create more parking spaces. However, the man disagrees with this plan. First, he believes that the bus routes are outdated and do not cover areas where most students live. If the university updated the routes to serve these areas, more students would likely use the bus service. Second, he argues that creating more parking lots will encourage students to drive on campus, leading to increased traffic congestion and a greater need for additional parking spaces. Instead of eliminating the bus service, the university should focus on improving it to make it more accessible and convenient for students, thereby reducing traffic and noise around campus.

6. Mind Map

- University's Plan
  - Eliminate bus service
  - Reasons: few riders, high costs
  - Use savings for more parking spaces

- Man's Disagreement
  - Outdated bus routes
    - Not serving areas where students live
  - More parking lots
    - Encourage driving on campus
    - Increased traffic congestion
    - Greater need for parking spaces

- Suggested Solution
  - Improve bus service
    - Update routes to serve student areas
  - Reduce traffic and noise around campus

7. Key Words

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

总体来说，回答的表达较为清晰，但在某些地方可能需要稍作调整以提高流畅度。例如，在描述男子反驳校车路线问题时，可以使用更自然的语言。此外，注意正确发音单词以避免拼写错误。建议多加练习，提高口语表达能力。

4.话题发展 回答内容基本上涵盖了男子对大学计划的看法及其理由，但在组织结构上还有改进空间。可以先陈述男子的观点，然后分点阐述他的理由，使回答更加条理清晰。同时，在解释男子的理由时，可以尝试使用更多具体的例子来支持观点。多加练习和思考如何更好地组织回答内容将有助于提高话题发展能力。

5.语言使用

He plans to discontinue free bus service The university plans to discontinue the free bus service (将主语改为“大学”，使句子更清晰) because there are fewer few (将“fewer”改为“few”，因为这里表示的是很少的人，而不是相对比较的概念) people riding on the bus and it's very expensive to operate school bus the buses (将“school bus”改为“the buses”，使句子更通顺). And they hope to save the money to expand overcrowded parking lot the overcrowded student parking lots (将“overcrowded parking lot”改为“the overcrowded student parking lots”，使句子更具体和清晰). However, the man refutes the idea because he thinks the routing of the school bus is badly organized because it's only running around the neighborhood which is very expensive for students to live in so fewer people could get on the bus. Also he dislikes the plans that they will use the money to expand parking lot because parking lot encourages students to drive and it may cause a lot of noise. Also it requires more parking places because no free bus was offered. In addition, he thinks students should use the bus instead of driving.

Revised Answer (140 words):

The university plans to discontinue the free bus service because there are few people riding on the buses and it's very expensive to operate them. They hope to save money to expand the overcrowded student parking lots. However, the man disagrees with this plan, arguing that the bus routes are poorly organized, as they only run through expensive neighborhoods where few students live. He believes that if the routes were updated, more students would use the service. Additionally, he dislikes the idea of using the saved money to expand parking lots, as it encourages students to drive, leading to increased noise and traffic on campus. Furthermore, this would create a demand for even more parking spaces. Instead, he thinks that the university should make it easier for students to use buses rather than driving.

6.思维导图

- Discontinue free bus service
  - Few riders
  - Expensive to operate
  - Expand overcrowded student parking lots

- Man's disagreement
  - Poorly organized bus routes
    - Expensive neighborhoods
    - Few students live there
  - Updated routes = more riders

- Dislike of expanding parking lots
  - Encourages driving
    - Increased noise and traffic
    - Demand for more parking spaces

- Suggestion: Make it easier to use buses instead of driving

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

回答中的语速和发音大部分都很清晰，但在某些地方存在一些不必要的停顿。建议在练习时注意保持连贯的语速，并尝试减少不必要的停顿。同时，注意提高发音的准确性，以避免拼写错误。

4.话题发展 回答内容基本上符合题目要求，但在组织结构和论述方面还有待加强。建议在练习时注意明确表达观点，并尝试使用更多的连接词和例子来支持观点。此外，注意保持回答内容的连贯性和条理性，以便更好地展示话题发展。

5.语言使用

原文：The man disagreed with the university plans to eliminate the bus service for two reasons. The man disagrees with the university's plan to eliminate the bus service, citing two reasons. (将过去时改为一般现时，使语句更自然。同时，使用“citing”来引出原因。)

First, the original routes of the bus locate at the expensive houses fee area. First, the original bus routes pass through areas with expensive housing. (简化句子结构，使表达更清晰。)

In this place, students already should pay for their own car instead of driving. In these areas, students are more likely to own cars rather than rely on public transportation. (重新组织句子，使表达更自然。)

However, when the school decided to eliminate the bus route services, it makes students feel more, it actually encourages students to drive car and it will create noises to the school and cause more traffic and then the school need more spaces for the parking. However, by eliminating the bus service, the university inadvertently encourages students to drive, which will increase noise and traffic around campus and create a greater demand for parking spaces. (重新组织句子，使表达更连贯、清晰。)

However, school should make it easier for students to take bus instead of encourage them to drive. Instead, the university should make it easier for students to use the bus service rather than encouraging them to drive. (调整句子结构，使表达更自然。)

修订后的回答（140词）：

The man disagrees with the university's plan to eliminate the bus service, citing two reasons. First, the original bus routes pass through areas with expensive housing. In these areas, students are more likely to own cars rather than rely on public transportation. However, by eliminating the bus service, the university inadvertently encourages students to drive, which will increase noise and traffic around campus and create a greater demand for parking spaces. Instead, the university should make it easier for students to use the bus service rather than encouraging them to drive.

6.思维导图

- Disagrees with plan
  - Two reasons
    - Original bus routes
      - Expensive housing areas
      - Students more likely to own cars
    - Eliminating bus service consequences
      - Encourages driving
      - Increases noise and traffic
      - Greater demand for parking spaces

- Suggestion
  - Make it easier to use bus service
  - Discourage driving

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 2.5

2.预估分数

22. 3.表达

从表达方面来看，回答的语速较为稳定，但在某些地方存在不必要的停顿。建议在练习时注意语音的清晰度和连贯性，尽量减少不自然的停顿。同时，注意发音的准确性，以避免拼写错误。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，回答内容基本上涵盖了听力材料中提到的观点和原因。但是，在组织结构上可以进一步优化。例如，在提到男生反对取消校车服务的原因时，可以先简要概括他的观点，然后再详细解释每个原因。此外，注意使用恰当的连接词和过渡词来使回答更加连贯。总体来说，需要在组织结构和连接词方面进行改进。

5.语言使用

Original Answer: Taking the lack of people, taking the bus and the maintenance cost into consideration, the school decided to finish off the free bus. Considering the low number of students using the bus and the high maintenance costs, the university decided to discontinue the free bus service.（将“Taking”改为“Considering”，使句子更自然；将“finish off”改为“discontinue”，更符合语境。）

But the men in the conversation disagreed with the idea. However, the man in the conversation disagreed with this decision.（将“men”改为“man”，因为只有一个男生在谈话中；将“idea”改为“decision”，更准确地描述了他的反对。）

The first reason is that they don't take the result into consideration, and it makes the students go out very expensive. The first reason is that he believes the current bus route is outdated and goes through expensive neighborhoods where few students live.（完全修改了原句，以更准确地表达男生提到的原因。）

The second reason is that the discontinuity of the bus will cause the drive and make a lot of noise, which will make the traffic worse, and they will not leave any parking space. The second reason is that discontinuing the bus service will encourage more students to drive on campus, leading to increased noise, traffic congestion, and a shortage of parking spaces.（重新组织了句子结构，使其更清晰易懂。）

Revised Answer (140 words):

Considering the low number of students using the bus and the high maintenance costs, the university decided to discontinue the free bus service. However, the man in the conversation disagreed with this decision. The first reason is that he believes the current bus route is outdated and goes through expensive neighborhoods where few students live. He suggests that if the university updates the route to cover areas where off-campus students reside, more students would use the bus service. The second reason is that discontinuing the bus service will encourage more students to drive on campus, leading to increased noise, traffic congestion, and a shortage of parking spaces. The man argues that instead of making it harder for students to use public transportation, the university should make it easier and more accessible.

6.思维导图

- University's decision
  - Discontinue free bus service
  - Low number of students using the bus
  - High maintenance costs

- Man's disagreement
  - Outdated bus route
    - Expensive neighborhoods
    - Few students living there
  - Encouraging more students to drive
    - Increased noise
    - Traffic congestion
    - Shortage of parking spaces

- Suggested solutions
  - Update bus route
    - Cover areas where off-campus students live
  - Make public transportation easier and more accessible

7.关键词