TOEFL TPO 19 Writing Task 1 Sample: Summarize the points made in the lecture, being sure to explain how they challenge the specific points made in the reading passage.

1.子项得分 任务完成度: 4 组织: 3 连贯与衔接: 3 语言使用: 3

2.预估分数

22. 3.任务完成度

整体来说，文章较好地完成了任务要求，对阅读和听力中的观点进行了总结和对比。但在具体表述时，有些地方可以更加明确和准确。例如，在论述听力中挑战阅读观点的部分，可以更具体地说明听力中的例子是如何反驳阅读观点的。

改进建议：

1. 在提到听力中的观点时，尽量使用更具体、详细的例子来说明。

2. 在论述过程中注意保持清晰、准确的表达。

示例：

1. Instead of "the lecturer indicates that people who promote a product are exactly the people who have used the product and had a high evaluation on it", you can write "the lecturer explains that buzzers are chosen because they genuinely believe in the quality of the product they are promoting, and their opinions are based on their personal experience with the product."

2. Instead of "he claims that only people have good experience will be willing to introduce the product to others", you can write "he argues that if a product is truly bad, it would be difficult for companies to find buzzers who genuinely believe in its quality, thus ensuring that buzzed products are likely to be good."

4.文章结构与组织 文章的结构基本清晰，包括引言、正文和结论。但在段落组织和衔接方面，可以进一步改进。例如，可以在每个段落的开头明确提出要讨论的观点，并在段落之间使用更清晰的过渡词或短语。

改进建议：

1. 在每个段落开头明确提出要讨论的观点。

2. 使用过渡词或短语来连接不同的段落和观点。

示例：

1. Instead of "As opposed to the writer's first idea that cosumers do not know whether a person prasing some products is being paid or not, which may mislead the cosumers", you can write "Firstly, the lecturer challenges the reading's claim that consumers may be misled by buzzers who are paid to promote products."

2. Instead of "After that, the lecturer proceeds to challenge the writer's second argument", you can write "Secondly, in contrast to the reading's argument that consumers are often cheated by buzzers, the lecturer asserts that..."

3. 语法批改

Both the passage and the listening are engaging in a discussion regarding the controversy of buzzing, a phenomenon that advertisers hire buzzers to promote their products to others. The writer proposes three problems caused by buzzing, and hold the firm perspective that buzzing should be banned, the lecturer who holds the opposite opinion, however, states that each of the three problems is incorrect.

As opposed to the writer's first idea that cosumersconsumers(misspelling) do not know whether a person prasingpraising(misspelling) some products is being paid or not, which may mislead the cosumersconsumers(misspelling), the lecturer indicates that people who promote a product are exactly the people who have used the product and had a high evaluation on it. In detail, he argues that people who thinksthink(Agreement of relative pronoun 'who' and verb) the product he uses is good so, so(comma between independent clauses) he is choosedchose(choosed (chose)) by the company to tell some truth.

After that, the lecturer proceeds to challenge the writer's second argument that consumers are often cheated by the buzzers, by examining that acutuallyactually(misspelling), consumers are more cautious about them. To be specific, he says that they will ask you plenty of question about the product; and if the buzzer can not answer the question or give the wrong answer, then they will not be interested in it.

Finally, it is the writer's third assumption that the existence of buzzing will spread the mistrust and dishonstydishonesty(misspelling) among the sociatysociety(misspelling), which is contrasted by the lecturer that if a product is not good, they can not recruit any buzzers. He claims that only people have good experience will be willing to introduce the product to others, thus leading a better experience to others, which, in fact, can contribute to a more trustful sociatysociety(misspelling).

6.文章修订

Both the passage and the listening discuss the controversy surrounding buzzing, a marketing strategy in which advertisers hire buzzers to promote their products to others. The author presents three problems caused by buzzing and argues that it should be banned. In contrast, the lecturer disputes each of these points, asserting that they are inaccurate.

Firstly, the lecturer challenges the reading's claim that consumers may be misled by buzzers who are paid to promote products. He explains that buzzers are chosen because they genuinely believe in the quality of the product they are promoting, and their opinions are based on their personal experience with the product. This differs from traditional advertising where actors are paid to read scripted lines. Although buzzers receive compensation for sharing their opinions, they still provide truthful information about their experiences with the product.

Secondly, in contrast to the reading's argument that consumers are often deceived by buzzers, the lecturer asserts that people actually approach them with caution. He elaborates on this point by stating that consumers tend to ask numerous questions about a product when interacting with a buzzer. If a buzzer cannot provide satisfactory answers or appears untruthful, consumers will likely lose interest in purchasing the product.

Lastly, while the author posits that buzzing could spread mistrust and dishonesty within society, the lecturer contends that only products with positive user experiences can successfully recruit buzzers. He argues that if a product is truly inferior, it would be difficult for companies to find individuals who genuinely believe in its quality. As a result, buzzed products are more likely to be well-received by consumers who try them out based on recommendations from buzzers. This positive experience could ultimately lead to increased trust and openness among people in society. (292 words)

7.文章批改

Both the passage and the listening are engaging in a discussion regarding discuss the controversy of surrounding buzzing, a phenomenon that marketing strategy in which advertisers hire buzzers to promote their products to others. (clarified the subject) The writer proposes author presents three problems caused by buzzing, and hold the firm perspective that buzzing and argues that it should be banned, banned. In contrast, the lecturer who holds the opposite opinion, however, states that disputes each of the three problems is incorrect. these points, asserting that they are inaccurate. (improved coherence)

As opposed to the writer's first idea that cosumers do not know whether a person prasing some Firstly, the lecturer challenges the reading's claim that consumers may be misled by buzzers who are paid to promote products. He explains that buzzers are chosen because they genuinely believe in the quality of the product they are promoting, and their opinions are based on their personal experience with the product. (revised for clarity and accuracy) This differs from traditional advertising where actors are paid to read scripted lines. Although buzzers receive compensation for sharing their opinions, they still provide truthful information about their experiences with the product. (enhanced vocabulary)

Secondly, in contrast to the reading's argument that consumers are often deceived by buzzers, the lecturer asserts that people actually approach them with caution. (improved transition) He elaborates on this point by stating that consumers tend to ask numerous questions about a product when interacting with a buzzer. If a buzzer cannot provide satisfactory answers or appears untruthful, consumers will likely lose interest in purchasing the product. (corrected grammar and sentence structure)

Lastly, while the author posits that buzzing could spread mistrust and dishonesty within society, the lecturer contends that only products is being paid or not, which may mislead the cosumers, the lecturer indicates that people who promote a product are exactly the people who have used the product and had a high evaluation on it. In detail, he with positive user experiences can successfully recruit buzzers. (enhanced vocabulary) He argues that people who thinks the product he uses is good so he is choosed by the company to tell some truth. ¶ After that, the lecturer proceeds to challenge the writer's second argument that consumers are often cheated by the buzzers, by examining that acutually, consumers are more cautious about them. To be specific, he says that they will ask you plenty of question about the product; and if the buzzer can not answer the question or give the wrong answer, then they will not be interested in it. ¶ Finally, it is the writer's third assumption that the existence of buzzing will spread the mistrust and dishonsty among the sociaty, which is contrasted by the lecturer that if a product is not good, they can not recruit any truly inferior, it would be difficult for companies to find individuals who genuinely believe in its quality. As a result, buzzed products are more likely to be well-received by consumers who try them out based on recommendations from buzzers. He claims that only This positive experience could ultimately lead to increased trust and openness among people have good experience will be willing to introduce the product to others, thus leading a better experience to others, which, in fact, can contribute to a more trustful sociaty.in society. (improved coherence and flow)

8.思维导图

- Introduction
  - Controversy surrounding buzzing
  - Author's problems with buzzing
  - Lecturer's counterarguments

- First Point
  - Reading: Consumers may be misled by buzzers
  - Lecture: Buzzers provide truthful information based on personal experience

- Second Point
  - Reading: Consumers are often deceived by buzzers
  - Lecture: People approach buzzers with caution and ask questions

- Third Point
  - Reading: Buzzing could spread mistrust and dishonesty in society
  - Lecture: Positive user experiences lead to successful recruitment of buzzers and increased trust in society

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