TOEFL TPO 12 Writing Task 1 Sample: Summarize the points made in the lecture, being sure to explain how they respond to the specific argument made in the reading passage.

1.子项得分 任务完成度：3 组织：3 连贯与衔接：3 语言使用：2

2.预估分数

20. 3.任务完成度

整体来说，文章回应了阅读和听力材料中的观点，但在解释听力材料的反驳论据时，有些地方没有表述清楚。建议在写作时更加关注细节，确保准确传达听力材料中的信息。同时，在引用阅读材料的论据时，尽量使用自己的话进行总结和解释。

示例1： 原文：“However, the lecturer holds a totally different opinion that the painter painted diffferent portraits overtime, and on his portrait of the girls, the background was in black campus.” 改进：“However, the lecturer argues that there is evidence suggesting that the painting was created at a later date when Austen was older than the girl in the portrait.”

示例2： 原文：“But Jane wasn't there at that time when the william statues was set in London.” 改进：“Moreover, it is mentioned that William Legg did not sell canvases in London when Jane Austen was a teenager, which further casts doubt on the painting's authenticity.”

4.文章结构与组织 文章具有基本的结构，包括引言、正文和结论。但是，在段落之间缺乏明确的过渡和连接。建议在写作时注意使用过渡词汇和短语来更好地连接不同观点和段落。此外，确保每个段落都集中讨论一个特定的观点，并提供支持细节。

示例1： 原文：“First, the passage claims that the family members of Jane recognized the painting as a protrait of the author and they were sure the girl is Jane.” 改进：“Firstly, the passage claims that Jane Austen's family members recognized the painting as a portrait of her. However, the lecturer counters this argument by stating that...”

示例2： 原文：“Secondly, the passage points out that the face in the pertrait resembles the one in Cassandra's skecth.” 改进：“Secondly, although the passage points out that there is a resemblance between the face in the portrait and Cassandra's sketch, the lecturer argues that this similarity could be due to...”

5. 语法批改

The passage lists three reasons why the professional paintings of a teenager girl is Jane Austen. However, according to the lecturer, these evidences are not all convincing.

First, the passage claims that the family members of Jane recognized the painting as a protraitportrait(misspelling) of the author and, and(comma between independent clauses) they were sure the girl (Two consecutive spaces)is Jane. However, the lecturer refutuesrefutes(misspelling) this idea by saying that when the painting were shown to the public, there has been 70 years ago after Jane's death. So the family members never see herself.

Secondly, the passage points out that the face in the pertraitportrait(misspelling) resembles the one in Cassandra's skecthsketch(misspelling). The sketch communicates definite details, which could be recorgnizedrecognized(misspelling) as Jane herself. However, the leturerlecturer(misspelling) argues against the point made by the passage. Since Austen Family was relatively large, and there may be some other cousins who were teenagers as wellwell,(This rule identifies whether commas are missing in a sentence.) resemble to Jane. Some people believe that the face in the portrait belong to one of Jane's cousins called "Marian".

Finally, the passage raises the point that the athe(Two consecutive articles, e.g. 'the a') society portrait painter that time painted the portrait when Jane was a teenager, who was active that times. However, the lecturer holds a totally different opinion that the painter painted diffferentdifferent(misspelling) portraits overtime, and on his portrait of the girls, the background was in black campus. But Jane wasn't there at that time when the williamWilliam(misspelling) statues waswere(punctuation + plural noun + singular verb) set in London.

6.文章修订

The passage presents three reasons to support the claim that the professional painting of a teenage girl is Jane Austen. However, the lecturer disputes these arguments, casting doubt on their validity.

Firstly, the passage asserts that Jane Austen's family members recognized the painting as a portrait of her and were confident that the girl depicted was Jane. Contrarily, the lecturer contends that when the painting was displayed publicly, 70 years had already passed since Austen's death. Consequently, none of the family members who claimed it was her portrait had ever seen her in person.

Secondly, the passage highlights that the face in the portrait bears a resemblance to Cassandra's sketch, which is known to depict Jane Austen. The sketch conveys specific details about Austen's face that are recognizable as hers. Nevertheless, the lecturer refutes this argument by pointing out that since Austen's family was quite large, there could have been other teenage cousins who resembled her at that time. Some experts believe that the true subject of the portrait might be one of Jane's distant relatives named Marianne Kempian.

Lastly, according to the passage, a society portrait painter named Ozias Humphrey painted this portrait when Jane Austen was a teenager. Humphrey was active during this period and would have been hired by wealthy families like Austen's for such work. However, opposing this view, the lecturer explains that there is evidence suggesting that Humphrey created different portraits over time and used black canvas for his paintings of girls. Furthermore, it is mentioned that William Legg did not sell canvases in London when Jane Austen was a teenager but only started selling them when she was 27 years old. This information casts doubt on whether or not she is indeed portrayed in this painting.

By considering these counterarguments presented by the lecturer against those put forth in the passage, it becomes evident that there are significant uncertainties surrounding the claim that the professional painting of a teenage girl is Jane Austen. (330 words)

7.文章批改

The passage lists presents three reasons why to support the claim that the professional paintings of a teenager painting of a teenage girl is Jane Austen. (This sentence has been revised to provide a clearer introduction to the topic.) However, according to the lecturer, the lecturer disputes these evidences are not all convincing. arguments, casting doubt on their validity. (The word "validity" is used instead of "convincing" for a more formal tone.)

First, Firstly, the passage claims that the asserts that Jane Austen's family members of Jane recognized the painting as a protrait of the author portrait of her and they were sure the girl is confident that the girl depicted was Jane. However, (The phrase "were confident" is used to convey certainty.) Contrarily, the lecturer refutues this idea by saying contends that when the painting were shown to the public, there has been was displayed publicly, 70 years ago after Jane's had already passed since Austen's death. So Consequently, none of the family members never see herself. who claimed it was her portrait had ever seen her in person. (The word "consequently" is used as a transition to show cause and effect.)

Secondly, the passage points out highlights that the face in the pertrait resembles the one in portrait bears a resemblance to Cassandra's skecth. sketch, which is known to depict Jane Austen. The sketch communicates definite details, which conveys specific details about Austen's face that are recognizable as hers. (The phrase "recognizable as hers" clarifies whose face is being referred to.) Nevertheless, the lecturer refutes this argument by pointing out that since Austen's family was quite large, there could be recorgnized as Jane herself. However, the leturer argues against the point made by the passage. Since Austen Family was relatively large, and there may be some have been other teenage cousins who were teenagers resembled her at that time. Some experts believe that the true subject of the portrait might be one of Jane's distant relatives named Marianne Kempian. (The word "nevertheless" is used as well resemble to Jane. Some people believe that the face a transition to contrast ideas.)

Lastly, according to the passage, a society portrait painter named Ozias Humphrey painted this portrait when Jane Austen was a teenager. Humphrey was active during this period and would have been hired by wealthy families like Austen's for such work. However, opposing this view, the lecturer explains that there is evidence suggesting that Humphrey created different portraits over time and used black canvas for his paintings of girls. (The phrase "over time" is used to emphasize the duration.) Furthermore, it is mentioned that William Legg did not sell canvases in the portrait belong to one of Jane's cousins called "Marian". London when Jane Austen was a teenager but only started selling them when she was 27 years old. This information casts doubt on whether or not she is indeed portrayed in this painting. (The word "indeed" is used to emphasize the uncertainty.)

Finally, the passage raises the point that the a society portrait painter that time painted the portrait when Jane was a teenager, who was active that times. However, By considering these counterarguments presented by the lecturer holds a totally different opinion that the painter painted diffferent portraits overtime, against those put forth in the passage, it becomes evident that there are significant uncertainties surrounding the claim that the professional painting of a teenage girl is Jane Austen. (The word "evident" is used to indicate clarity, and on his portrait of the girls, the background was in black campus. But Jane wasn't there at that time when the william statues was set in London."significant uncertainties" emphasizes the extent of doubt.)

8.思维导图

- Introduction
  - Passage: claims professional painting is Jane Austen
  - Lecture: disputes these arguments

- Argument 1: Family recognition
  - Passage: family members recognized the painting as Jane Austen
  - Lecture: family members had never seen her in person

- Argument 2: Resemblance to Cassandra's sketch
  - Passage: face in portrait resembles sketch of Jane Austen
  - Lecture: could be a relative who resembled her, such as Marianne Kempian

- Argument 3: Portrait painter and timing
  - Passage: Ozias Humphrey painted the portrait when Jane was a teenager
  - Lecture:
    - Humphrey created different portraits over time, used black canvas for girls' paintings
    - William Legg did not sell canvases when Jane was a teenager

- Conclusion:
  - Significant uncertainties surrounding the claim that the painting is of Jane Austen

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