TOEFL TPO -1 Writing Task 1 Sample: Summarize the points made in the lecture, being sure to explain how they oppose specific points made in the reading passage.

1.子项得分 任务完成度: 4 组织: 4 连贯与衔接: 4 语言使用: 3

2.预估分数

25. 3.任务完成度

整体来说，文章较好地完成了任务要求，对阅读和听力材料中的观点进行了对比。但在语言表达方面还有待提高。建议在练习写作时注意以下几点：

1. 尽量避免使用重复的词汇和表达，尝试使用同义词或其他表达方式。

2. 注意语法错误和拼写错误，避免影响文章的整体质量。

例如：

• 原文："Since the lizards living in the captivity also run quickly when the predators or other danger come closely to them." 改进："Since captive lizards also run quickly when predators or other dangers approach them."

• 原文："Thus, the problem of being killed during the migration could be overcame." 改进："Thus, the problem of being killed during migration can be overcome."

4.文章结构与组织 文章结构清晰，包括引言、正文和结论。各段落专注于特定观点并提供支持细节。但在段落之间的过渡方面还有待加强。建议在练习写作时注意以下几点：

1. 在段落开头使用过渡词或短语，使文章更连贯。

2. 确保每个段落都有明确的主题句，以便读者更容易理解文章的结构。

例如：

• 原文："On top of that, the reading claims that introducing reptiles into a new area can cause the death during the migration due to homing behaviors." 改进："Furthermore, the reading claims that introducing reptiles into a new area can cause death during migration due to homing behaviors."

• 原文："Finally, while the reading contends that reptiles are not able to adapt to an unfamiliar environment known as a hard release, which caused them unable to find food, the professor holds a different point." 改进："Lastly, although the reading contends that reptiles cannot adapt to an unfamiliar environment known as a hard release and struggle to find food, the professor presents an alternative viewpoint."

5. 语法批改

The reading argues that the translocation of reptiles has some backdrops and, and(comma between independent clauses) it provides with some reasons. However, the professor says that none of the information mentioned in the reading is convincing and the problems can be solved.

First, the reading asserts that translocation programs involving breeding reptiles in captivity leads to a fact that many species are not able to prevent from predators. The professor, on the contrary, posits that there is an experiment contracting that result. To be specific, researchers find that the lizards raised in captive react the same as lizards living in the wild. Since the lizards living in the captivity also run quickly when the predators or other danger come closely to them.

On top of that, the reading claims that introducing reptiles into a new area can cause the death during the migration due to homing behaviors. Nevertheless, the professor refutes it by saying that the homing behaviors only behave in some adult ones, and young reptiles usually do not have a strong behavior drive to return to the original place. Thus, the problem of being killed during the migration could be overcameovercome(Agreement: 'been' or 'was' + past tense).

Finally, while the reading contends that reptiles are not able to adapt to an unfamiliar environment known as a hard release, which caused them unable to find food, the professor holds a different point. According to her, it will be easier for reptiles to adapt if researchers practice them in a soft release. ReseachersResearchers(misspelling) can provide them with food to help them get used to the new environment. As a result, they can learn how to find food.

Section Title: 6.文章修订

The reading passage argues that translocation of reptiles has several drawbacks, providing reasons to support this claim. However, the lecture contends that the problems mentioned in the reading can be addressed and overcome.

Firstly, the reading states that breeding reptiles in captivity as part of translocation programs results in their inability to recognize and avoid predators. In contrast, the professor cites an experiment demonstrating that captive-raised lizards exhibit similar reactions to their wild counterparts when faced with potential threats. This suggests that even translocated reptiles raised in captivity possess innate behaviors to protect themselves from predators.

Additionally, the reading claims that homing behavior can lead to fatalities during migration when reptiles are introduced into new areas. The professor refutes this by explaining that homing behavior is primarily observed in adult animals accustomed to their original environment, while young reptiles do not possess a strong drive to return home. Consequently, relocating younger animals can mitigate the risk of death during migration.

Lastly, the reading asserts that hard release methods leave reptiles disoriented and unable to locate sufficient food sources for survival in unfamiliar environments. The professor counters this by proposing a soft release approach where animals are placed in protected enclosures and provided with food for a period of time. This allows them to gradually acclimate to their new surroundings and learn how to find sustenance independently. (229 words)

Revised essay: Article Revision

The reading passage argues that the translocation of reptiles has some backdrops and it provides with some reasons. several drawbacks, providing reasons to support this claim. However, the professor says that none of the information lecture contends that the problems mentioned in the reading is convincing and the problems can be solved. addressed and overcome (Changed "7.文章批改" to "Article Revision" for a more natural title; changed "backdrops" to "drawbacks" for correct term usage; revised sentence structure for clarity).

First, the reading asserts that Firstly, the reading states that breeding reptiles in captivity as part of translocation programs involving breeding reptiles in captivity leads to a fact that many species are not able to prevent from results in their inability to recognize and avoid predators. The professor, on the contrary, posits that there is In contrast, the professor cites an experiment contracting that result. To be specific, researchers find that the demonstrating that captive-raised lizards exhibit similar reactions to their wild counterparts when faced with potential threats (Revised sentence structure for clarity). This suggests that even translocated reptiles raised in captive react the same as lizards living in the wild. Since the lizards living in the captivity also run quickly possess innate behaviors to protect themselves from predators (Added transition word "Firstly" and revised sentence structure for clarity).

Additionally, the reading claims that homing behavior can lead to fatalities during migration when the predators or other danger come closely to them. ¶ On top reptiles are introduced into new areas. The professor refutes this by explaining that homing behavior is primarily observed in adult animals accustomed to their original environment, while young reptiles do not possess a strong drive to return home (Revised sentence structure for clarity). Consequently, relocating younger animals can mitigate the risk of that, the reading claims that introducing reptiles into a new area can cause the death during the migration due to homing behaviors. Nevertheless, the (Added transition word "Additionally" and revised sentence structure for clarity).

Lastly, the reading asserts that hard release methods leave reptiles disoriented and unable to locate sufficient food sources for survival in unfamiliar environments. The professor refutes it counters this by saying that the homing behaviors only behave in some adult ones, and young reptiles usually do not have a strong behavior drive to return to the original place. Thus, the problem of being killed during the migration could be overcame. ¶ Finally, while the reading contends that reptiles are not able to adapt to an unfamiliar environment known as a hard release, which caused them unable to find food, the professor holds a different point. According to her, it will be easier for reptiles to adapt if researchers practice them in proposing a soft release. Reseachers can provide them release approach where animals are placed in protected enclosures and provided with food to help for a period of time (Revised sentence structure for clarity). This allows them get used to the to gradually acclimate to their new environment. As a result, they can surroundings and learn how to find food.sustenance independently (Added transition word "Lastly" and revised sentence structure for clarity).

8. Mind Map

1. Introduction
   - Reading passage: drawbacks of reptile translocation
   - Lecture: problems can be addressed and overcome

2. Predator Recognition
   - Reading: captive-raised reptiles lack predator recognition
   - Lecture: experiment shows similar reactions to wild counterparts

3. Homing Behavior
   - Reading: homing behavior leads to fatalities during migration
   - Lecture: young reptiles do not possess strong homing drive, reducing risk

4. Hard Release vs Soft Release
   - Reading: hard release leaves reptiles disoriented and unable to find food
   - Lecture: soft release allows gradual acclimation and learning of food sources

5. Conclusion
   - Addressing and overcoming the drawbacks of reptile translocation

9. Keywords