TOEFL TPO -1 Writing Task 1 Sample: Question:Summarize the points made in the lecture, being sure to explain how they challenge the specific theories presented in the reading passage.

1.子项得分 任务完成度: 4 组织: 4 连贯性和衔接: 4 语言使用: 3

2.预估分数

25. 3.任务完成度

总体来说，文章较好地完成了任务要求，但仍有一些可以改进的地方。首先，在引用听力材料中提到的研究时，可以更详细地描述研究的方法和结果，以增强论证的可信度。其次，在讨论生态影响时，可以进一步阐述为什么使用转基因蚊子对生态系统有益。

示例1： 原文：According to a relevant study mentioned by the professor, the population of other type of mosquitoes would stay basically same, meanwhile no more dangerous virus was found when GM mosquitoes were released by scientists. 改进：According to a study mentioned by the professor, researchers observed that as the Aedes aegypti mosquitoes were eliminated, the population of other types of mosquitoes, such as the Asian tiger mosquito, remained stable and did not increase to spread more dangerous viruses.

示例2： 原文：Furthermore, using GM mosquitoes have good effect to ecosystem because people are declined to use toxin pesticides which are bad for surrounding environment. 改进：Furthermore, using GM mosquitoes has a positive impact on the ecosystem because it reduces the need for toxic pesticides that harm both wildlife and human health.

4.文章结构与组织 文章的结构和组织方面表现较好，有明确的引言、主体和结论。然而，在段落之间加入更明确的过渡词或短语可以使文章更连贯。此外，确保每个段落都有一个中心句，以便读者更容易理解每个段落的主要观点。

示例1： 原文：First of all, contrary to the critic in the reading passage that the population of other mosquitoes will increase and then will spread more dangerous virus, the professor contradicts this belief by suggesting that introducing GM mosquitoes will not cause other species of mosquitoes to flourish. 改进：First of all, in contrast to the claim in the reading passage that the population of other mosquitoes will increase and spread more dangerous viruses, the professor refutes this belief by suggesting that introducing GM mosquitoes will not cause other species of mosquitoes to flourish.

示例2： 原文：Second, the professor apparently rejects the critic in the reading passage that the GM mosquitoes will inject defective protein to human through biting which is dangerous for us. 改进：Secondly, addressing the concern raised in the reading passage about GM mosquitoes injecting defective proteins into humans through biting, which could be dangerous, the professor clearly rejects this notion.

5. 语法批改

The reading passage presents three major critics about potentially dangerous effects caused by the introduction of genetically modified AedesAndes(misspelling) aegyptiEgypt(misspelling) mosquito. The professor in the reading passage, however, argues that such critics are not convincing and refutes them one by one.

First of allFirst(first of all (first)), contrary to the critic in the reading passage that the population of other mosquitoes will increase and then will spread more dangerous virus, the professor contradicts this belief by suggesting that introducing GM mosquitoes will not cause other species of mosquitoes to flourish. According to a relevant study mentioned by the professor, the population of other type of mosquitoes would stay basically same, meanwhile no more dangerous virus was found when GM mosquitoes were released by scientists.

Second, the professor apparently rejects the critic in the reading passage that the GM mosquitoes will inject defective protein to human through bitingbiting,(This rule identifies whether commas are missing in a sentence.) which is dangerous for us. The professor contends that majority of the GM mosquitoes is male. Given the common fact that male mosquitoes will not bite humana human(This rule identifies whether the article 'a' is missing in a sentence.), there is no need to worry about this kind of drawback.

Third, opposite to the critic in the reading passage that creating GM mosquitoes may bring unforeseen impacts to ecology, the professor claims that most GM organisms' ecological merits outweigh the ecological drawbacks as so far. GM organisms do not cause significantly adverse influence to ecosystem. The example of the given butterfly is probably an isolated case. Furthermore, using GM mosquitoes have good effect toon(This rule identifies wrong preposition usage.) ecosystem because people are declined to use toxin pesticides which are bad for surrounding environment.

Section Title: 6.文章修订

The reading passage presents three major criticisms regarding the potentially dangerous effects caused by the introduction of genetically modified (GM) Aedes aegypti mosquitoes. However, the professor in the lecture refutes these concerns, providing counterarguments for each point.

Firstly, the reading passage suggests that reducing the Aedes aegypti population could lead to an increase in other mosquito species, which may spread more dangerous forms of dengue virus. Contradicting this claim, the professor cites a study that found no significant change in other mosquito populations when GM mosquitoes were introduced. This evidence challenges the notion that releasing GM mosquitoes would result in more dangerous viruses being transmitted.

Secondly, the reading passage raises concerns about potential harm caused by GM mosquitoes biting humans and transferring defective proteins. The professor dismisses this worry by explaining that only male GM mosquitoes will be released, and since male mosquitoes do not bite humans, there is no risk of harmful proteins being transmitted through bites.

Lastly, while the reading passage warns of unforeseen ecological consequences resulting from introducing GM organisms into ecosystems, the professor argues that most GM organisms have not had significant negative impacts on ecosystems thus far. The example of butterfly populations being affected is considered an isolated case. Moreover, using GM mosquitoes could benefit ecosystems by reducing reliance on toxic pesticides for mosquito control.

In conclusion, the professor effectively challenges each criticism presented in the reading passage with well-reasoned counterarguments and evidence from scientific studies. This demonstrates that concerns about introducing genetically modified Aedes aegypti mosquitoes may be unfounded or overstated. (260 words)

Section Title: 7. Article Revision

The reading passage presents three major critics criticisms about the potentially dangerous effects caused by the introduction of genetically modified (GM) Aedes aegypti mosquito. The professor in the reading passage, however, argues that such critics are not convincing and mosquitoes. However, the professor in the lecture refutes them one by one. ¶ First of all, contrary to the critic in the reading passage that the these concerns, providing counterarguments for each point. [Changed "critics" to "criticisms" for correct usage and added (GM) to clarify abbreviation.]

Firstly, the reading passage suggests that reducing the Aedes aegypti population of could lead to an increase in other mosquitoes will increase and then will mosquito species, which may spread more dangerous virus, the professor contradicts viruses. Contradicting this belief by suggesting that introducing GM mosquitoes will not cause claim, the professor cites a study that found no significant change in other species of mosquitoes to flourish. According to a relevant study mentioned by the professor, the population of other type of mosquito populations when GM mosquitoes were introduced. This evidence challenges the notion that releasing GM mosquitoes would stay basically same, meanwhile no result in more dangerous virus was found when GM mosquitoes were released viruses being transmitted. [Changed "critic" to "suggestion" and rephrased for clarity.]

Secondly, the reading passage raises concerns about potential harm caused by scientists. ¶ Second, the professor apparently rejects the critic in the reading passage that the GM mosquitoes biting humans and transferring defective proteins. The professor dismisses this worry by explaining that only male GM mosquitoes will inject defective protein to human through biting which is dangerous for us. The professor contends that majority of the GM mosquitoes is male. Given the common fact that be released, and since male mosquitoes will do not bite human, humans, there is no need to worry about this kind risk of drawback. ¶ Third, opposite to the critic in the reading passage that creating GM mosquitoes may bring harmful proteins being transmitted through bites. [Changed "critic" to "concern" and rephrased for clarity.]

Lastly, while the reading passage warns of unforeseen ecological consequences resulting from introducing GM organisms into ecosystems, the professor argues that most GM organisms have not had significant negative impacts to ecology, the professor claims that most GM organisms' ecological merits outweigh the ecological drawbacks as so on ecosystems thus far. GM organisms do not cause significantly adverse influence to ecosystem. The example of the given butterfly populations being affected is probably considered an isolated case. Furthermore, Moreover, using GM mosquitoes have good effect to ecosystem because people are declined to use toxin could benefit ecosystems by reducing reliance on toxic pesticides which are bad for surrounding environment.for mosquito control. [Changed "critic" to "warning" and rephrased for clarity.]

In conclusion, the professor effectively challenges each criticism presented in the reading passage with well-reasoned counterarguments and evidence from scientific studies. This demonstrates that concerns about introducing genetically modified Aedes aegypti mosquitoes may be unfounded or overstated. [Rephrased for clarity and flow.]

8. Mind Map

1. Introduction
   - Genetically modified (GM) Aedes aegypti mosquitoes
   - Criticisms and counterarguments

2. Criticism 1: Increase in other mosquito species
   - Counterargument: No significant change in other mosquito populations

3. Criticism 2: Potential harm from GM mosquito bites
   - Counterargument: Only male GM mosquitoes released, no risk of harmful proteins transmission

4. Criticism 3: Unforeseen ecological consequences
   - Counterargument: Most GM organisms have not had significant negative impacts, reduced reliance on toxic pesticides

5. Conclusion
   - Professor's effective counterarguments and evidence from scientific studies.

9. Keywords