TOEFL TPO -1 Writing Task 1 Sample: Question:Summarize the points made in the lecture, being sure to explain how they cast doubt on the specific theories mentioned in the reading passage.

1.子项得分 任务完成度: 4 组织: 3 连贯与衔接: 3 语言使用: 3

2.预估分数

22. 3.任务完成度

这篇文章在任务完成度方面做得相对较好，基本上涵盖了阅读和听力材料中的观点。但是，可以更详细地解释听力材料中的观点，以便更好地展示它们是如何质疑阅读材料中的理论的。此外，在引用听力材料时，请确保准确描述其内容。

例1： 原文：Instead of leaving to some peaceful spaces due to unsuitable living situation, some experts suggest that the native people admire blood and violence. which might be a reason for the decreasing of people. 改进：Instead of migrating due to an unsuitable living situation, the lecturer suggests that regional conflicts and violent battles with neighboring tribes could have driven the Anasazi people out of the area to seek safer ground.

例2： 原文：Admittedly little rainfall might decrease the population, he asserts the fact that through the tree rings, the rainfall is enough for demand. 改进：The lecturer asserts that although global warming may have contributed to a decrease in overall rainfall for the region, tree ring analysis indicates that there was still adequate rainfall to support the community's drinking and agricultural needs.

4.文章结构与组织 文章的结构和组织方面需要改进。首先，需要有一个清晰的引言来概述文章的主题。其次，在正文段落中，确保每个段落专注于一个特定的观点，并提供支持细节。最后，使用明确的过渡词和短语来连接不同的观点和段落。

例1： 原文：The passage suggests the long dry season is the main reason cause the dimes of Anasazi and supports the reason by three clues, but the speaker challenges the claim by pointing some contradictory arguments. 改进：The passage argues that a prolonged drought was the primary cause of the Anasazi's disappearance, providing three pieces of evidence to support this claim. However, the lecturer disputes this theory by presenting several counterarguments.

例2： 原文：Firstly, while the passage advises that tree rings indicates the dry situation in that prior, the speaker disagrees with the idea by showing some evidences. 改进：Firstly, although the passage claims that tree ring analysis reveals a dry climate during that period, the lecturer counters this argument by presenting evidence to suggest otherwise.

5. 语法批改

The passage suggests the long dry season is the main reason cause the dimes of Anasazi and supports the reason by three clues, but the speaker challenges the claim by pointing some contradictory arguments. Firstly, while the passage advises that tree rings indicates the dry situation in that prior, the speaker disagrees with the idea by showing some evidences. Admittedly little rainfall might decrease the population, he asserts the fact that through the tree rings, the rainfall is enough for demand. Therefore, the explainto explain(a infinitive) of tree rings in the passage is wrong. Secondly, the clue mentioned in the passage is that the dams and reservoirs aren't large enough to store water. However, the speaker rejects the idea by pointing the time of the structures is earlier than the dry seasons. He explains that the date of the structure is built 100 years before the dry time, which means the local people adapt the use of these storing water buildings. Moreover, the volume of the reservoirs and dams is enough for using around 50 years. Therefore, in light of the above arguments, it is impossible for the collapse of the culture due to small size of dams and reservoirs. Thirdly, although the reading argues that the growth of population can't live during dry periods, the speaker refutes the idea by using some discoveries of experts. Instead of leaving to some peaceful spaces due to unsuitable living situation, some experts suggest that the native people admire blood and violence. whichWhich(Checks that a sentence starts with an uppercase letter) might be a reason for the decreasing of people. All in all ,, (Use of whitespace before comma and before/after parentheses)in light of the above counterarguments, the cited clues are not right, thereby the long time dry season isn't the main reason for the demise of Anasazi.

6.文章修订

The passage posits that a prolonged drought was the primary cause of the Anasazi's disappearance, providing three pieces of evidence to support this claim. However, the lecturer disputes this theory by presenting several counterarguments.

Firstly, although the passage claims that tree ring analysis reveals a dry climate during that period, the lecturer counters this argument by presenting evidence to suggest otherwise. While acknowledging that reduced rainfall might have impacted the population, he asserts that tree ring data indicates sufficient rainfall to meet the community's drinking and agricultural needs. Consequently, the explanation based on tree rings in the passage is inaccurate.

Secondly, the passage contends that dams and reservoirs were not large enough to store water during droughts. However, the lecturer refutes this idea by pointing out that these structures were built 100 years before the droughts occurred. This implies that local people had already adapted to using these water storage facilities. Moreover, he explains that their capacity was sufficient for usage over 50 years. Therefore, it is implausible for the Anasazi culture's collapse to be attributed solely to inadequate dams and reservoirs.

Thirdly, while the reading argues that population growth could not be sustained during dry periods, leading people to migrate in search of more favorable conditions, the lecturer offers an alternative explanation based on recent discoveries. Rather than migrating due to unsuitable living situations, he suggests regional conflicts and violent battles with neighboring tribes could have driven Anasazi people out of their area in search of safer ground.

In light of these counterarguments presented by the lecturer, it becomes evident that attributing long-term drought as the main reason for Anasazi's demise is unsubstantiated. (275 words)

7.文章批改

The passage suggests the long dry season is the main reason posits that a prolonged drought was the primary cause the dimes of Anasazi and supports the reason by of the Anasazi's disappearance, providing three clues, but the speaker challenges the claim by pointing some contradictory arguments. pieces of evidence to support this claim. (Changed "suggests" to "posits" for a more formal tone and clarity) However, the lecturer disputes this theory by presenting several counterarguments. (Added "several" for emphasis)

Firstly, while although the passage advises claims that tree rings indicates the ring analysis reveals a dry situation in that prior, the speaker disagrees climate during that period, the lecturer counters this argument by presenting evidence to suggest otherwise. (Changed "disagrees with the idea by showing some evidences. Admittedly little evidences" to "counters this argument by presenting evidence to suggest otherwise" for clarity and proper grammar) While acknowledging that reduced rainfall might decrease have impacted the population, he asserts the fact that through the that tree rings, the ring data indicates sufficient rainfall is enough for demand. Therefore, the explain of to meet the community's drinking and agricultural needs. (Rephrased for clarity and conciseness) Consequently, the explanation based on tree rings in the passage is wrong. inaccurate.

Secondly, the clue mentioned in the passage is that the contends that dams and reservoirs aren't were not large enough to store water. water during droughts. However, the speaker rejects the lecturer refutes this idea by pointing the out that these structures were built 100 years before the droughts occurred. (Changed "the time of the structures is earlier than the dry seasons. He explains that the date of the structure is seasons" to "these structures were built 100 years before the dry time, which means the droughts occurred" for clarity) This implies that local people adapt the use of had already adapted to using these storing water buildings. storage facilities. Moreover, the volume of the reservoirs and dams is enough for using around he explains that their capacity was sufficient for usage over 50 years. Therefore, in light of the above arguments, it is impossible for the implausible for the Anasazi culture's collapse of the culture due to small size of to be attributed solely to inadequate dams and reservoirs.

Thirdly, although while the reading argues that the population growth of population can't live could not be sustained during dry periods, the speaker refutes the idea by using some discoveries of experts. Instead of leaving to some peaceful spaces leading people to migrate in search of more favorable conditions, the lecturer offers an alternative explanation based on recent discoveries. (Rephrased for clarity and conciseness) Rather than migrating due to unsuitable living situation, some situations, he suggests regional conflicts and violent battles with neighboring tribes could have driven Anasazi people out of their area in search of safer ground. (Changed "some experts suggest that the native people admire blood and violence. which might be a violence" to "he suggests regional conflicts and violent battles with neighboring tribes could have driven Anasazi people out of their area in search of safer ground" for clarity and accuracy)

In light of these counterarguments presented by the lecturer, it becomes evident that attributing long-term drought as the main reason for the decreasing of people. ¶ All in all ,in light of the above counterarguments, the Anasazi's demise is unsubstantiated. (Changed "the cited clues are not right, thereby the long time dry season isn't right" to "attributing long-term drought as the main reason for the Anasazi's demise of Anasazi.is unsubstantiated" for clarity and formality)

8.思维导图

• Introduction

  • Passage: Prolonged drought as primary cause
  • Lecturer: Disputes theory with counterarguments

• Counterargument 1: Tree ring analysis

  • Passage: Dry climate indicated by tree rings
  • Lecturer: Sufficient rainfall for community needs

• Counterargument 2: Dams and reservoirs

  • Passage: Inadequate water storage capacity
  • Lecturer: Built long before droughts, sufficient capacity for usage over 50 years

• Counterargument 3: Population growth and migration

  • Passage: Migration due to unsuitable living conditions during dry periods
  • Lecturer: Regional conflicts and violent battles as alternative explanation for migration

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