TOEFL Speaking Task 3 Sample: Using the example of the teacher from the lecture, explain the approach-avoidance conflict.

1.子项得分 Delivery: 2.5 Language Use: 2.5 Topic Development: 3

2.预估分数

19. 3.表达

从发音和语速方面来看，这位考生的表达有待提高。他的发音不够准确，导致了一些拼写错误。此外，他在回答中有时会出现不恰当的停顿。建议考生多加练习，提高发音准确度和语言流利度。

4.话题发展 考生在话题发展方面做得相对较好，能够用教师的例子解释approach-avoidance conflict。但是，在回答中出现了一些错误，例如将"approach-avoidance conflict"误说成"approach of violence conflict"。建议考生在练习时注意检查自己的表达是否准确，并尝试更清晰地组织思路和连接观点。

5.语言使用

Original: Well, the professor talks about the approach of violence conflict, Well, the professor talks about the approach-avoidance conflict, (将"approach of violence conflict"改为正确的"approach-avoidance conflict") which means that when you pursue a career, you want it, but you also be discouraged or frightened by it. which occurs when pursuing a goal that is both attractive and discouraging at the same time. (用更准确的描述替换原来的表述)

For example, the professor used the example of his colleague who wants to be a teacher, so he chose to be a teacher after graduate, and he finds that it is all more complex than he thought. He had to grade so many papers, and so he wants to pursue teaching, but he is also discouraged by this decision. He doesn't know how this was so demanding, and he will meet so many challenges. So he also feels stressful. So by these examples, the professor talks about clarifying the concept of approach of violence conflict.

Revised (140 words): The professor discusses the approach-avoidance conflict, which occurs when pursuing a goal that is both attractive and discouraging at the same time. For instance, he mentions his friend who aspired to become a teacher. After graduating and starting her teaching practice, she realized that teaching was more complex and demanding than she initially thought. She had to grade numerous papers and prepare lesson plans during her free time on weekends. While she still wanted to pursue teaching due to her passion for working with students, she felt discouraged by the additional workload outside the classroom. This created stress and tension, as she questioned whether she had the energy and dedication to succeed in a teaching career. Through this example, the professor effectively illustrates the concept of approach-avoidance conflict.

6.思维导图

Approach-Avoidance Conflict
├─ Definition
│   └─ Attractive and discouraging aspects of a goal
├─ Example
│   ├─ Professor's friend
│   │   ├─ Aspired to become a teacher
│   │   ├─ Realized teaching was complex and demanding
│   │   ├─ Grading papers and preparing lesson plans
│   │   └─ Stress and tension from conflicting feelings
└─ Conclusion
    └─ Effective illustration of the concept

7.关键词

1.子项得分

• 交付：0

• 语言使用：0

• 主题发展：0

2.预估分数

• 总分：0

3.表达 回答中没有涉及到问题的回答，因此无法对表达进行评价。建议重新审阅题目并提供一个完整的回答。

4.话题发展 回答没有针对问题进行讨论，因此无法对话题发展进行评价。建议重新审阅题目并提供一个与问题相关的回答。

5.语言使用

原回答：MBC 뉴스 이덕영입니다. The approach-avoidance conflict can be explained using the example of the teacher from the lecture. (原文与问题无关，已修改为与问题相关的回答。)

修正后的回答：The approach-avoidance conflict can be explained using the example of the teacher from the lecture. The teacher was attracted to her goal of becoming a teacher because she enjoyed working with students in the classroom. However, she was also discouraged by the negative aspects of teaching, such as spending a lot of time outside the classroom grading papers and preparing lesson plans. This conflict between her positive and negative feelings created tension and stress, making it difficult for her to decide whether to pursue her teaching career or not.

在这个回答中，我们纠正了原始回答与问题无关的问题，并提供了一个与问题相关的回答。同时，我们确保了使用高级词汇、正确的语法、自然流畅的陈述、平滑的过渡和有力的结论。修正后的回答使用了自然 sounding 的语言风格，使其更符合托福口语评分标准。

6.思维导图

- Approach-Avoidance Conflict
  - Attracted to goal
    - Enjoyed working with students
  - Discouraged by negative aspects
    - Time-consuming tasks outside the classroom
  - Tension and stress
    - Difficulty in deciding whether to pursue teaching career

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Language Use: 3 Topic Development: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

在表达方面，发言者的语言流利度和语速较为稳定，但偶尔会有停顿。建议发言者注意在适当的地方停顿，以提高整体表达的清晰度。此外，需要注意正确发音，以避免拼写错误。

4.话题发展 在话题发展方面，发言者提供了一个相对连贯和组织良好的回答，并在一定程度上阐述了教师例子与心理学概念之间的联系。然而，可以进一步完善回答的结构和逻辑性，例如更明确地区分正面和负面因素，并给出更具体的支持或例子。建议在练习中加强对这方面的关注。

5.语言使用

Original Answer: Approaching avoidance of conflict Approach-avoidance conflict (修改为正确的词组) is a conflict that occurs when a person is attracted by the positive qualities of the goal and is characterized discouraged (更准确地描述负面因素) by the negative qualities of the same goal. This professor dives deeper into this subject by his friend's experience. She wanted to be a teacher since she was an undergraduate student. However, after she began her practice teaching, she noticed teaching was a more complex and struggling demanding (更恰当的形容词) thing. This is because she needed to grade papers and prepare lessons on weekends although she still treated teaching as her lifelong career. She also feels stressful in this college by spending so much time in and out of classrooms. That's what the approaching avoidance of conflict means and occurs.

Revised Answer (140 words): The approach-avoidance conflict occurs when a person is attracted by the positive qualities of a goal but discouraged by its negative aspects. The professor illustrates this concept through his friend's experience as an aspiring teacher. Since her undergraduate years, she had dreamt of becoming a teacher. However, upon starting her practice teaching, she realized that the profession was more demanding than she had anticipated, requiring her to grade papers and prepare lessons during weekends. Despite her passion for teaching, she felt stressed due to the extensive time commitment both inside and outside the classroom. This situation exemplifies the approach-avoidance conflict, as she is drawn to the rewarding aspects of teaching but deterred by its challenges.

6.思维导图

• Approach-avoidance conflict

  • Positive qualities
  • Negative qualities

• Professor's friend's experience

  • Aspiring teacher
  • Undergraduate years

• Practice teaching

  • Demanding profession
  • Grading papers
  • Preparing lessons

• Stress and conflict

  • Passion for teaching
  • Time commitment

7.关键词