TOEFL Speaking Task 3 Sample:

1.子项得分

• 交付（Delivery）：3

• 语言使用（Language Use）：3

• 话题发展（Topic Development）：2

2.预估分数

• 总分：22

3.表达 从交付方面来看，回答中的语音清晰，语速基本稳定，偶尔有停顿。但在某些地方，如“they would try to test whether the product could be successful at the supermarket”，可以改进为“they would test whether the product would be successful in the supermarket”以提高流畅度。此外，注意正确发音单词，避免拼写错误。建议多练习发音和语速控制。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，回答内容与主题相关，但组织结构和论证不够充分。首先，在介绍阅读材料时，应提到“市场调查”这一关键词。其次，在描述听力材料时，应详细说明教授如何通过电影公司的例子来证明市场调查的重要性。最后，在总结时，可以强调市场调查在产品发布前的重要作用。建议在练习时关注材料的核心观点，并尝试用更清晰的逻辑结构组织回答。

5.语言使用

Original Answer: The reading describes a target that before a product was launched in the supermarket, they would try to test whether the product could be successful at the supermarket. And the professor demonstrated this target with an example of a movie company. The movie company never made the cartoon, so before the movie was published to the market, they invited some students and tested them what was their favorite character. And judging from the character, they changed the comment of the movie, and then the movie would be successful.

Corrected Answer: The reading describes a targetgoal (“目标”改为“目的”，使语言更自然) that before a product was launched in the supermarket, they would try to (删除“try to”，使句子更简洁) test whether the product could bewould be (将“could be”改为“would be”，使语法更准确) successful atin (将“at”改为“in”，使介词更准确) the supermarket. The professor demonstrated this targetgoal (同上，改为“目的”) with an example of a movie company. The movie company never made the cartoon, so before the movie was publishedreleased (将“published”改为“released”，使词汇更准确) to the market, they invited some students and tested themtheir preferences regarding (将“them”改为“their preferences regarding”，使句子更清晰) what was their favorite character. And (删除“and”，使句子更流畅) Judging from the character, they changed the commentcontent (将“comment”改为“content”，使词汇更准确) of the movie, and then the movie would be successful.

Revised Answer (140 words): The reading passage discusses the goal of conducting market research before launching a product in the supermarket to ensure its success. The professor illustrates this goal with an example of a movie company that had never produced a cartoon before. To guarantee the success of their upcoming movie, the company conducted market research by inviting students to provide feedback on their favorite characters. Based on this feedback, they modified the content of the film to better appeal to their target audience. This example demonstrates how market research can significantly contribute to a product's success by identifying and addressing consumer preferences before its release.

6.思维导图

- Market Research
    - Goal
        - Ensure product success
    - Example
        - Movie company
            - Cartoon movie
            - Invited students
                - Feedback on favorite characters
            - Modified content
                - Based on feedback
    - Result
        - Successful product launch

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Language Use: 3 Topic Development: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

从表达方面来看，发言者的语言流畅度和语速较为一致，仅有少量停顿。但在某些地方，标点符号的使用不当导致了不恰当的停顿。此外，拼写错误可能是发音不准确的原因。建议发言者在练习时注意提高发音准确性，并尝试在适当的地方停顿，以提高整体表达效果。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，发言者提供了一个连贯且组织良好的回答，并在回答中明确地阐述了观点和例子。但是，可以进一步完善回答的结构，使其更加清晰。例如，在提到长程警报时，可以先解释这个概念，然后再给出例子。此外，在描述虚假警报时，可以更详细地说明这种行为如何有助于减少竞争。总之，通过进一步优化回答结构和内容，可以使话题发展更加完善。

5.语言使用

Original: The lecturer gave the example of vervin monkeys vervet (改正：vervin 改为 vervet，因为发音不准确) to explain the concept of a long course alarm call (改正：long course 改为 alarm call，以保持一致性和准确性). First, they gave a long course alarm call (同上) to warn on approaching predators. When monkeys see an approaching leopard which feed on them, they will screech and make noise. Even if they don't see it, they will go to branches on trees nearby. However, when animals make a long course false alarm call (同上，加入 false 以表示虚假警报), when they want to convey deceptive information to scare others away to reduce competition, the vervet monkeys will make forced screeching noise to scare their members away and eat food alone.

Revised (140 words): The lecturer provided the example of vervet monkeys to illustrate the concept of alarm calls. Initially, vervet monkeys emit an alarm call to warn their group members about approaching predators, such as leopards. When a monkey sees a leopard approaching, it will screech loudly, prompting other monkeys to flee to nearby tree branches for safety, even if they haven't seen the predator themselves. However, vervet monkeys may also use false alarm calls to convey deceptive information in order to scare away their group members and reduce competition for food resources. In such cases, a monkey will deliberately emit a screeching noise, causing the other monkeys to scatter in fear. As a result, the deceptive monkey can enjoy the food without any competition from its peers.

6.思维导图

• Alarm Calls
  • Vervet Monkeys
    • Warning group members
      • Approaching predators (leopards)
      • Screeching noise
    • False alarm calls
      • Deceptive information
      • Reduce competition for food

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Language Use: 3 Topic Development: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

从表达方面来看，说话者的语言流利，语速较为稳定，仅有少量停顿。但是，需要注意的是，部分标点符号问题可能是由于不恰当的停顿所致。此外，拼写错误可能是发音不准确导致的。建议说话者在练习时注意发音的准确性，并尝试减少不必要的停顿。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，说话者提供了一个连贯且组织良好的回答，观点之间关系明确，举例和论证也较为充分。但仍有提升空间。建议说话者在练习时尝试更深入地展开论述，以便更好地支持自己的观点，并在适当时候加入更多相关细节。

5.语言使用

Original Answer: In the lecture, the professor mainly talked about animals participating in a physical competition to demonstrate which is more powerful. And here is an example. There are two rattlesnakes who find food in the same hole and want to eat food. Then they face each other with their body and make them as tall as possible. Then they push together to get control of other. During the push, neither of the snakes bites together. And finally, one of the snakes wins and gets control of another. Instead of biting it, it just releases it and lets it go. And the winner jumps to the hole for food.

Corrected Answer: In the lecture, the professor mainly talked discussed(讨论更自然) animals participating in a physical competition to demonstrate which is more powerful. And Here(去掉And，使句子更流畅) is an example. There are two rattlesnakes who find food in the same hole and want to eat food it(避免重复). Then they face each other with their body bodies(复数形式更准确) and make them as tall as possible. Then they push together to get control of other each other(表达更准确). During the push, neither of the snakes bites together the other(表达更清晰). And finally, one of the snakes wins and gets control of another the other(表达更准确). Instead of biting it, it just releases it and lets it go. And the winner jumps slithers(蛇的动作用词) to the hole for food.

Revised Answer (140 words): In the lecture, the professor discussed how animals engage in physical competitions to demonstrate their power and dominance. A prime example involves two rattlesnakes that discover food in the same burrow. These snakes face each other, lifting their bodies to appear as tall as possible. They then push against each other, attempting to gain control. Interestingly, neither snake tries to bite or harm the other during this struggle. Ultimately, one snake prevails and establishes dominance over the other. Instead of attacking its opponent, the victorious snake simply releases it, allowing it to slither away unharmed. The winner then proceeds to claim its prize by slithering into the hole to consume the food.

6.思维导图

- Lecture
  - Physical competition
    - Demonstrate power

- Example
  - Rattlesnakes
    - Same food source
    - Face each other
    - Push against each other
      - No biting or harm
    - Dominance established
      - Loser released unharmed
      - Winner claims food

7.关键词

1.子项得分

• 交付 (Delivery): 3

• 语言使用 (Language Use): 3.5

• 主题发展 (Topic Development): 3.5

2.预估分数

• 总分: 27

3.表达 回答中的发音大部分清晰，语速适中，但偶尔有些停顿。建议在练习时注意提高发音的准确性，并尝试在不影响理解的情况下减少停顿次数，使语言更流畅。

4.话题发展 回答内容基本上是连贯和有组织的，能够清楚地阐述观点，并提供了足够的支持和例子。但在描述大象海豹的例子时，可以尝试更详细地解释为什么这个例子能很好地说明分配原则。此外，在总结时可以更明确地指出动物如何根据不同需求的难易程度来合理分配时间和精力。

5.语言使用

原文：The principle of allocation is about how animals decide to spend their time and energy, depending on what's easy or difficult for them. The allocation principle concerns how animals allocate their time and energy based on the ease or difficulty of fulfilling their needs.（将原句中的“分配原则”改为“分配原则”，使句子更自然。）
Take elephant seals as an example. For instance, consider the case of elephant seals.（将“以大象海豹为例”改为“例如，考虑大象海豹的情况”，使句子更自然。）
They live where there's tons of fish, so getting food isn't hard. They inhabit areas abundant with fish, making food acquisition relatively easy.（将原句中的“生活在有很多鱼的地方，所以获取食物不难”改为“它们生活在鱼类丰富的地区，使得获取食物相对容易”，使句子更自然。）
But when it comes to making babies, it's much more difficult. However, reproduction proves to be a more challenging task.（将原句中的“但是在生育方面，这要困难得多”改为“然而，繁殖被证明是一个更具挑战性的任务”，使句子更自然。）
Basically, this principle is all about the animals being smart with their energy and doing their best to better survive. In essence, this principle illustrates how animals efficiently utilize their energy to enhance their chances of survival.（将原句中的“基本上，这个原则是关于动物如何聪明地利用他们的能量并尽力更好地生存”改为“从本质上讲，这个原则说明了动物如何有效地利用他们的能量来提高生存的机会”，使句子更自然。）

修订版（140字）：

The allocation principle concerns how animals allocate their time and energy based on the ease or difficulty of fulfilling their needs. For instance, consider the case of elephant seals. They inhabit areas abundant with fish, making food acquisition relatively easy. They can store fat for months, and they don't have to eat all the time, so they don't spend much effort on food hunting. However, reproduction proves to be a more challenging task. The male seals need to find the perfect place and defend the land. There's a lot of work that requires a significant amount of energy. In essence, this principle illustrates how animals efficiently utilize their energy to enhance their chances of survival.

6.思维导图

- Allocation Principle
  - Time and energy
  - Ease or difficulty of needs

- Elephant Seals
  - Abundant fish
    - Easy food acquisition
    - Fat storage
  - Reproduction
    - Challenging task
      - Finding suitable location
      - Defending territory

- Efficient utilization of energy
  - Enhancing survival chances

7.关键词

1.子项得分

• 交付 (Delivery): 3

• 语言使用 (Language Use): 3

• 话题发展 (Topic Development): 3

2.预估分数

• 总分: 23

3.表达 从交付方面来看，发言者的语速较为稳定，但偶尔会有停顿。建议发言者在练习时注意保持流畅的语速，并尽量减少不必要的停顿。此外，发言者在发音方面也需要加强练习，以提高准确度。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，发言者对于阅读和听力材料的总结较为清晰，但在组织结构和连接思路方面还有待提高。建议发言者在练习时注意明确地表达观点，并在适当的地方加入过渡词或短语，以使回答更加连贯和有条理。同时，注意在回答中提供足够的支持和例证来增强说服力。

5.语言使用

原文：Scheming Skimming (改为“Skimming”，因为“Scheming”意为“阴谋”，与原文意思不符) is a strategy used by companies often used with unique and innovative products for them to set a high price. In the lecture, the professor uses the DVD as an example to illustrate the concept or the strategy. At first, in 1990, the DVD gained the market and got a lot of profit with high quality. And some people think it has high quality, it's awesome and they can afford, but another group of people, they couldn't afford. Later, when the DVD is out of the market, the company makes half the price compared to its price and makes another group of people happy.

修订版（140词）：

Skimming is a pricing strategy often employed by companies for unique and innovative products, allowing them to initially set a high price. In the lecture, the professor cites DVDs as an example to illustrate this concept. When DVDs were first introduced in 1990, they quickly gained market share due to their superior quality. Some consumers recognized their value and were willing to pay a premium for them; however, others could not afford them at that time. Eventually, as DVD technology became more widespread and prices dropped by half, a new segment of consumers who were previously priced out of the market could now enjoy this advanced technology at a more affordable cost. This pricing strategy allowed companies to maximize profits by targeting different consumer segments at various stages of product adoption.

6.思维导图

- Skimming
  - Pricing strategy
  - Unique and innovative products
  - High initial price

- Example: DVDs
  - Introduced in 1990
  - Gained market share
  - Superior quality

- Consumer segments
  - Early adopters
    - Willing to pay a premium
  - Price-sensitive consumers
    - Wait for price reduction

- Result: Maximized profits

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Language Use: 3 Topic Development: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

从表达方面来看，发言者的语言流利度和语速较为稳定，但偶尔会有停顿。建议发言者在练习时注意提高口语连贯性，减少不必要的停顿。同时，注意发音的准确性，以避免拼写错误。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，发言者的回答内容较为完整，能够清楚地表达观点。但在组织结构上还有待加强，建议在练习时注意逻辑性和条理性，使回答更加有层次感。同时，在举例时尽量使用准确的词汇，以增强说服力。

5.语言使用

原文：There is a kind of plant called buckles which were eaten by caterpillars. There is a kind of plant called tobacco which is eaten by caterpillars.（将“buckles”改为“tobacco”，因为原文中提到的是一种烟草植物；将“were”改为“is”，使时态一致。）

When the caterpillar bites the plant, the plant will emit a chemical, also carry a scent. When the caterpillar bites the plant, the plant emits a chemical that carries a scent.（将“will emit”改为“emits”，使时态一致；将“also carry”改为“that carries”，使句子结构更清晰。）

This scent will attract a big ice bug, and this bug will eat the caterpillar. This scent attracts a big-eyed bug, and this bug eats the caterpillar.（将“big ice bug”改为“big-eyed bug”，因为原文中提到的是大眼睛昆虫；将“will attract”和“will eat”改为“attracts”和“eats”，使时态一致。）

At the same time, the big ice bugs will be beneficial for these metals because they can find the caterpillar easily. At the same time, the big-eyed bugs benefit from this relationship because they can find the caterpillars easily.（将“big ice bugs”改为“big-eyed bugs”，将“these metals”改为“this relationship”，使句子意义更清晰；将“will be beneficial”改为“benefit”，使时态一致。）

修订版（140词）：

The reading passage discusses an indirect defense strategy in which plants rely on other organisms to defend them, and this mutual relationship benefits both parties. The professor gives an example to illustrate this. There is a kind of plant called tobacco which is eaten by caterpillars. When the caterpillar bites the plant, the plant emits a chemical that carries a scent. This scent attracts a big-eyed bug, and this bug eats the caterpillar. In this way, the tobacco plant is protected from the caterpillars' damage, while the big-eyed bugs benefit from this relationship because they can find the caterpillars easily. This example demonstrates how the indirect defense strategy works effectively for both the plants and their defenders, ensuring their survival and well-being.

6.思维导图

• Indirect Defense
  • Mutual Benefits
    • Tobacco Plant
      • Caterpillar
        • Chemical Scent
          • Big-eyed Bug
            • Protection and Resource Acquisition

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Language Use: 3 Topic Development: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

总体来说，发言者的表达较为清晰，但在某些地方存在一些不自然的停顿。建议发言者在练习时注意保持语速的一致性，尽量减少不必要的停顿。同时，注意正确发音，避免出现拼写错误。

4.话题发展 发言者对于文章和听力内容的总结较为完整，但在连接观点和提供支持或例子方面还有待加强。建议在练习时更加关注文章和听力内容之间的逻辑关系，以及如何用更具体的例子来支持自己的观点。这样可以使回答更加有条理和说服力。

5.语言使用

Original: This passage mainly talks about bidirectionality, which is a principle of the relationship with parents and children is reciprocal. The professor gives an example to explain this. Two parents have a six-year-old boy named Max. If Max smells more, the parents will smell back. If the Max held, his parents will take more time to hold him. If the Max tried to communicate with his parents, his parents will spend more time talking with him. What's more, parents' response also affects the child's behavior in the future, such as increase their physical connection with parents or smell more in the future.

Corrected: This passage The reading passage mainly talks about bidirectionality, which is a principle of that states the relationship with between parents and children is reciprocal. The professor gives an example to explain this. Two parents have a six-year-old six-month-old boy named Max. If Max smells smiles more, the parents will smell smile back. If the Max held, wants to be held, his parents will take more time to hold him. If Max tried to communicate with his parents, his parents will spend more time talking with him. What's more, parents' response also affects the child's behavior in the future, such as increase increasing their physical connection with parents or smell smile more in the future.

(将“这篇文章”改为“阅读文章”，使表达更准确；将“关系”改为“关系之间”，使语句更通顺；将“六岁”的错误描述改为正确的“六个月”；将“闻到”改为正确的“微笑”；将“增加”改为动名词形式的“增加”，使语法正确。)

Revised (140 words): The reading passage mainly discusses bidirectionality, a principle that states the relationship between parents and children is reciprocal. The professor provides an example to illustrate this concept. Two parents have a six-month-old boy named Max. If Max smiles more, his parents will smile back at him. If Max wants to be held, his parents will spend more time holding him. When Max tries to communicate with his parents, they will engage in more conversations with him. Furthermore, the parents' responses also influence the child's future behavior, such as increasing their physical connection with their parents or smiling more. By understanding and applying the principle of bidirectionality, we can see how both parents and children play crucial roles in shaping each other's behaviors and development.

6.思维导图

Bidirectionality
├─ Principle
│   └─ Reciprocal relationship between parents and children
├─ Example
│   ├─ Max (six-month-old boy)
│   ├─ Smiles more -> Parents smile back
│   ├─ Wants to be held -> Parents hold him more
│   └─ Tries to communicate -> Parents talk more with him
└─ Influence on future behavior
    ├─ Increased physical connection
    └─ More smiling

7.关键词

1.Sub Scores Delivery: 3 Language Use: 3 Topic Development: 3

2.Estimated Scores

23. 3.Delivery

The speaker's delivery is generally clear and fluid, with a consistent pace and only occasional pauses. However, there are some minor issues with word choice and sentence structure that could be improved. For example, the phrase "the customers did not know the authentic of their product" could be rephrased as "the customers were unsure about the authenticity of the products." Additionally, the speaker should work on using more natural transitions between ideas, such as "As a result" or "Therefore." Overall, the speaker should continue to practice speaking clearly and fluently while focusing on improving word choice and sentence structure.

4.Topic Development The speaker provides a coherent and well-organized response, with clear connections between ideas and sufficient support or examples. The example of the jewelry store effectively illustrates the concept of signaling. However, the speaker could further develop their response by elaborating on how the expert's certification impacted customer trust and sales. Additionally, it would be helpful to mention how this example relates to the broader concept of signaling in business. To improve topic development, the speaker should focus on providing more detailed explanations and making stronger connections between ideas.

5.Language Use

Original: Signaling means that the salesperson demonstrated demonstrates a high-quality product to customers. The speaker explained this concept with his friend's example. For example, his friend has a small jewelry store and all products in her store are very expensive because these products are all real gold and diamonds. However, the customers did not know the authentic authenticity of their product so they concerns were concerned about their expensive price. So she invited an expert to her store and do a certificate. After all, she put the sign in the store then the customer understand the product in her store are all real gold and diamonds. Especially those experts do not work for her so customers trust her.

(The verb tense should be consistent throughout the response, so "demonstrated" should be changed to "demonstrates." The word "authentic" should be replaced with "authenticity" for proper word usage. The phrase "concerns about" should be changed to "were concerned about" for correct grammar. The phrase "do a certificate" should be replaced with "provide certification" for clarity.)

Revised (140 words): Signaling means that the salesperson demonstrates a high-quality product to customers. The speaker explained this concept using his friend's jewelry store as an example. In this case, his friend sells expensive jewelry made of real gold and diamonds. However, customers were unsure about the authenticity of these products and were concerned about their high prices. To address this issue, she invited an expert to provide certification for her store's products. After receiving the certification, she displayed a sign in the store to inform customers that all the jewelry items were certified as authentic by an independent expert. This expert did not work for her, which made customers more likely to trust his judgment. By using this signaling strategy, the store owner was able to reassure customers about the quality of her products and justify the high prices.

6.Mind Map

• Signaling

  • Salesperson demonstrates high-quality products

• Speaker's example

  • Friend's jewelry store
    • Expensive products (real gold and diamonds)
    • Customers unsure about authenticity

• Solution

  • Expert certification
    • Independent expert
    • Sign in store

• Result

  • Increased customer trust
  • Justification for high prices

7.Key Words

1.子项得分

• 交付 (Delivery): 3

• 语言使用 (Language Use): 3

• 话题发展 (Topic Development): 3

2.预估分数

• 总分: 23

3.表达 从交付方面来看，发言者的语音清晰，语速基本稳定，但偶尔有些停顿。为了提高表达能力，建议发言者注意以下几点：1）尽量保持语速的稳定性，避免在不需要的地方停顿；2）在发音方面，要注意一些单词的准确发音，以免引起误解；3）在口语表达过程中，可以适当运用一些连词和过渡词，使句子更加连贯。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，发言者的回答基本上是连贯和有组织的，但在某些地方还可以加强。为了提高话题发展能力，建议发言者注意以下几点：1）在描述阅读和听力材料时，可以更详细地介绍其中的关键信息和观点；2）在给出例子时，尽量确保例子与主题紧密相关，并能有效支持观点；3）在组织回答时，要注意逻辑性和条理性，使回答更加有说服力。

5.语言使用

原文：So, co-branding is that two companies that sell different products will benefit from each other by working together to create a new product. Thus, co-branding involves two companies selling different products, benefiting from collaborating to create a new product.（因此，共同品牌是指两家销售不同产品的公司通过合作创建新产品而互惠互利。）（将"So"改为"Thus"使句子更加正式，同时调整句子结构使其更清晰。）

And Professor used an example to illustrate the idea. The professor provided an example to clarify this concept.（教授用一个例子来说明这个概念。）（去掉"And"，用"The professor"开始句子，并将"used"改为"provided"，使句子更加准确。）

A few years ago, a shoe company, they have this shoe that can attract people to run and jog by measuring how fast and how far could people go. A few years ago, a shoe company developed a shoe that encouraged people to run and jog by measuring their speed and distance.（几年前，一家鞋公司开发了一款鞋子，通过测量速度和距离鼓励人们跑步和慢跑。）（调整句子结构，使其更清晰。）

However, they do not know anything about technology, so they work with a technology company that could help them to collect data and send the data to this smartphone. However, lacking technological expertise, they collaborated with a tech company that helped them collect and transmit data to smartphones.（然而，由于缺乏技术专长，他们与一家科技公司合作，帮助他们收集并将数据传输到智能手机。）（调整句子结构，使其更清晰。）

So, the customers that can use this product to get feedback from their sports. As a result, customers can use this product to receive feedback on their athletic performance.（因此，顾客可以使用这个产品来获取关于他们运动表现的反馈。）（将"So"改为"As a result"，并调整句子结构使其更清晰。）

So, this product, they attract two kinds of customers. Thus, this product appeals to two types of customers.（因此，这个产品吸引了两种类型的顾客。）（将"So"改为"Thus"，并调整句子结构使其更清晰。）

The first one is the one who are interested in technology product, and the other customer is the people that are regular exercise. The first group consists of those interested in technology products, and the second group includes individuals who regularly exercise.（第一组是对技术产品感兴趣的人，第二组是经常锻炼的人。）（调整句子结构，使其更清晰。）

So, this is a potential. Therefore, there is potential in this co-branding strategy.（因此，这种共同品牌策略具有潜力。）（将"So"改为"Therefore"，并调整句子结构使其更清晰。）

修订版（140词）：

Thus, co-branding involves two companies selling different products, benefiting from collaborating to create a new product. The professor provided an example

6.思维导图

Co-branding
├─ Definition
│   └─ Two companies collaborating
├─ Benefits
│   └─ Mutual advantages
├─ Example
│   ├─ Shoe company
│   ├─ Tech company
│   └─ Athletic performance feedback
└─ Target customers
    ├─ Technology enthusiasts
    └─ Regular exercisers

7.关键词