TOEFL TPO -1 Writing Task 1 Sample: Summarise the points made in the lecture,being sure to explain how they cast doubt on specific points made in the reading passage.

1.子项得分 任务完成度：4 组织：4 连贯性和衔接：4 语言使用：3

2.预估分数

25. 3.任务完成度

整体来说，文章较好地完成了任务要求，概述了听力中的观点，并解释了它们如何对阅读中的观点产生怀疑。但是，有一些地方可以改进以更清楚地表达观点。首先，在引用听力中的论据时，应更准确地描述细节。其次，在解释听力与阅读之间的矛盾时，可以使用更强烈的词汇来突出这种对比。

示例1： 原文：“However, in the experiment, the researchers didn't find that the location of the whales shows it was alone.” 修改后：“However, according to the lecture, scientists have determined that the 52-hertz whale does not migrate alongside other whales and has its own unusual migration pattern.”

示例2： 原文：“Thus, around it we should hear other alike sound.” 修改后：“Thus, if there were other whales of this rare species with similar high-pitched songs, scientists would have detected them in the past.”

4.文章结构与组织 文章的结构和组织基本上是清晰的，包括引言、主体和结论。每个段落都集中在一个具体的观点和支持细节上。然而，在段落之间加入更明确的过渡词或短语可以使文章更连贯。此外，避免使用过于口语化的表达，以保持正式的写作风格。

示例1： 原文：“Firstly, even though the reading passage suggests that the whale may be a hybrid whose sound is a combination of its parents, the professor in the lecture argues that the migration patterns are unusual between them.” 修改后：“Firstly, although the reading passage suggests that the 52-hertz whale may be a hybrid with a unique song resulting from its parent species, the professor in the lecture refutes this idea by highlighting its unusual migration patterns.”

示例2： 原文：“However, despite the statement in the passage that damaged sense of hearing may be a factor because the whale can not hear and mimic other's sounds…” 修改后：“However, contrary to the reading passage's claim that damaged hearing might cause differences in song due to an inability to mimic other whales' sounds…”

5. 语法批改

The reading passage mainly explores the issue of causes of high-pitched song made from whales. The professor in the lecture deal with the same issue. However, he argues that the ideas in the passage is flawed which contradicts to what the reading states. And the professor uses 3 specific points to support his idea. Firstly, even though the reading passage suggests that the whale may be a hybrid whose sound is a combination of its parents, the professor in the lecture argues that the migration patterns are unusual between them. This is because the hybrid whales hardly tend to travel with the normal ones which means they will not do the same things. However, in the experiment, the researchers didn't find that the location of the whales shows it was alone. Obviously, the professor's argument disproves the counterpart in the reading. Moreover, despite the statement in the passage that damaged sense of hearing may be a factor because the whale can not hear and mimic other's sounds, the professor contends that the pitch is related the physical structure in the whale's throat. Then he supports the point with the fact that sounds are usually generated from the structure in the throat. In other words, the unusual pitch is not because of the damaged hearing since there's no connection between throats and hearing. Finally, the professor asserts that the whale can not be the rare species whereas the author of the passage claims that the whale is the rare species that might have died out. The professor proves that this claim is indefensible by point out that if the whale belongs to the rare species, it definitely has parents who also sounds as high-pitched song, which means they have been there for many decades. Thus, around itit,(Missing comma after pronoun) we should hear other alike sound. However, the researchers did not foundfind(Auxiliary verb + found/saw) the similar sound before this sound, which means that it is not the rare species. In conclusion, the professor in the lecture clearly identifies the weakness of the reading passage and convincing shows that the 3 causes of the high-pitched sound is incorrect.

Section Title: 6.文章修订

The reading passage primarily discusses the possible causes of the high-pitched song produced by whales. In contrast, the professor in the lecture contends that the ideas presented in the passage are flawed and provides three specific points to support his argument.

Firstly, although the reading passage suggests that the whale may be a hybrid with a unique song resulting from a combination of its parents' species, the professor argues that this is unlikely due to its unusual migration patterns. He explains that hybrid whales typically travel with non-hybrid whales, but according to research on the 52-hertz whale's location, it migrates alone. This evidence contradicts the reading's claim and casts doubt on the hybrid theory.

Moreover, while the passage posits that a damaged sense of hearing may be responsible for the whale's unique song as it cannot hear and mimic other whales' sounds, the professor refutes this idea by emphasizing that pitch is related to physical structures in a whale's throat. He supports this point by explaining that vocal sounds originate from an individual's vocal apparatus; therefore, an unusual throat structure would be necessary for producing such a high-pitched song. This information undermines the reading's argument since there is no connection between hearing and throat structure.

Lastly, contrary to the reading passage's assertion that the 52-hertz whale may be a rare species whose population has mostly died out, the professor disputes this claim by pointing out that if it were indeed part of a rare species, its parents would also have sung at a similar frequency. Given that underwater sound detection technology has been in use for many decades, scientists should have detected other 52-hertz whale songs if they existed relatively recently. However, no such songs have been recorded before this one instance, casting doubt on whether it represents a rare species.

In summary, through his analysis of migration patterns, throat structure connections to pitch production and the absence of similar whale songs, the professor effectively identifies weaknesses in the reading passage's arguments and convincingly demonstrates that the proposed causes for the high-pitched song are incorrect. (348 words)

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Moreover, despite the statement in while the passage that posits that a damaged sense of hearing may be a factor because the whale can not responsible for the whale's unique song as it cannot hear and mimic other's other whales' sounds, the professor contends that the refutes this idea by emphasizing that pitch is related the to physical structures in a whale's throat (revised for clarity). He supports this point by explaining that vocal sounds originate from an individual's vocal apparatus; therefore, an unusual throat structure in the whale's throat. Then he supports the point with the fact that sounds are usually generated from the structure in the throat. In other words, the unusual pitch would be necessary for producing such a high-pitched song (revised for clarity and conciseness). This information undermines the reading's argument since there is not because of the damaged hearing since there's no connection between throats and hearing. hearing and throat structure (revised for clarity).

Finally, the professor asserts that the Lastly, contrary to the reading passage's assertion that the 52-hertz whale can not may be the a rare species whereas the author of the passage claims that the whose population has mostly died out, the professor disputes this claim by pointing out that if it were indeed part of a rare species, its parents would also have sung at a similar frequency (revised for clarity). Given that underwater sound detection technology has been in use for many decades, scientists should have detected other 52-hertz whale is the songs if they existed relatively recently (revised for clarity and conciseness). However, no such songs have been recorded before this one instance, casting doubt on whether it represents a rare species that might have died out. The professor proves that this claim is indefensible by point out that if the whale belongs to the rare species, it definitely has parents who also sounds as high-pitched song, which means they have been there for many decades. Thus, around it we should hear other alike sound. However, the researchers did not found the similar sound before this sound, which means that it is not the rare species. (revised for clarity).

In conclusion, summary, through his analysis of migration patterns, throat structure connections to pitch production and the absence of similar whale songs, the professor effectively identifies weaknesses in the lecture clearly identifies the weakness of the reading passage and convincing shows that the 3 passage's arguments and convincingly demonstrates that the proposed causes of for the high-pitched sound is incorrect.song are incorrect (revised for clarity and conciseness).

8. Mind Map

- Introduction
  - Reading passage: possible causes of high-pitched whale song
  - Lecture: refutes the reading passage's ideas

- Point 1: Hybrid Theory
  - Reading: whale may be a hybrid with unique song
  - Lecture: unlikely due to unusual migration patterns

- Point 2: Damaged Sense of Hearing
  - Reading: whale's unique song due to inability to hear and mimic others
  - Lecture: pitch related to throat structure, not hearing ability

- Point 3: Rare Species Theory
  - Reading: whale may be part of a rare species with few remaining members
  - Lecture: no evidence of similar songs from other whales in the past

- Conclusion:
  - Professor effectively refutes reading passage's arguments and demonstrates incorrect proposed causes for high-pitched song.

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