TOEFL TPO -1 Writing Task 1 Sample: pearl poet

1. Sub Scores

• Task fulfillment: 3

• Organization: 3

• Coherence and Cohesion: 3

• Language Use: 2

2. Estimated Scores

• Score: 20

3. Task Completeness The essay addresses the question and attempts to refute the assumptions made in the reading passage. However, it lacks clarity and detail in some parts, making it difficult to understand the points being made. To improve task fulfillment, ensure that you provide clear explanations for each point and use specific examples from both the reading and listening passages.

Example 1: Instead of "So dialect in Hugh's poems is tend to be from yorkshore, which is apparently a different dialect like the pearl poems.", write "The listening passage states that Hugh's poems are written in a Yorkshire dialect, which is different from the dialect used in the Pearl Poems."

Example 2: Instead of "However, the listening rejects by indicating that the poems all from one person.", write "The listening passage argues that stylistic similarities and consistent vocabulary usage across all Pearl Poems suggest they were written by a single author."

4. Essay Structure and Organization The essay has an introduction, body paragraphs addressing each assumption, and a conclusion. However, it lacks clear transitions between ideas and paragraphs. To improve organization, use appropriate transition words or phrases to connect your ideas more effectively.

Example 1: Instead of "First, the passage argues...", write "Firstly, the reading passage argues..."

Example 2: Instead of "Second, the reading says...", write "Secondly, according to the reading passage..."

5. Grammar

theThe(Checks that a sentence starts with an uppercase letter) reading passage makes three assumptions about who will the unknown author would be. However, the listening refutes each of them.

First, the passage argues that John MassyMass(misspelling) would be the author due to his living place as same as the poems waswere(Detects potentially wrong usage of "was") orginatedoriginated(misspelling) from. AlsoAlso,(Commas after conjunctive/linking adverbs in front of a new sentence.) the manuscript is in the same handwriting as the poems of the Pearl Poet. The listening in contrast, mentions that back to 14th century, there prevails that produces poems by copying, which means the handwriting probably all comes from one same person called copiestcopies(misspelling), not the original author. So if they share the same manuscript, it would all be copied by the same person.

Second, the reading says Hugh might be the author by stating that his poems have a lotlot of(a bit (of)) constant sound as the Pearl Poems. On the contrary, the listening refutes this assertion by saying that poems are more likely to be written in dialect at that time. So dialectthe dialect(This rule identifies whether the article 'the' is missing in a sentence.) in Hugh's poems is tendtended(Agreement: 'been' or 'was' + past tense) to be from yorkshoreYorkshire(misspelling), which is apparently a different dialect like the pearl poems.

Third, the reading suggests that it is from several wirtterswitters(misspelling) because poems mention common place wherewhere it(missing pronoun after 'where/when/how/why') might be all the poets from. However, the listening rejects by indicating that the poems all from one person. Even if they share the same places, vocabulary can not be easily vaguedvalued(misspelling), uncommon usage of words can only be using by one person and, and(comma between independent clauses) it never shows up in other work.

In conculsionconclusion(misspelling), by giving enough reason, the listening refutes all the options the passgepassage(misspelling) has given.

Section Title: 6. Revised Essay

The reading passage presents three assumptions regarding the identity of the unknown author, referred to as the Pearl Poet. However, the listening passage refutes each of these assumptions.

Firstly, the reading passage posits that John Massy could be the author due to his residence being in the same region where the poems originated. Additionally, it mentions that the manuscript shares similar handwriting with other poems attributed to the Pearl Poet. In contrast, the listening passage states that during the 14th century, it was common for scribes to produce copies of poems, suggesting that a single copyist might have transcribed all these works rather than them being written by their original authors. Consequently, sharing a manuscript does not necessarily indicate a shared authorship.

Secondly, the reading passage proposes Hugh as a potential author by highlighting similarities in poetic structure and sound between his works and those of the Pearl Poet. However, the listening passage counters this claim by explaining that poems from this era were typically written in regional dialects. As such, Hugh's works are likely to have been composed in a Yorkshire dialect which is distinctly different from that found in Pearl Poems.

Lastly, the reading passage suggests that multiple authors may have contributed to these poems since they mention common places where poets might have gathered or resided. The listening passage disputes this notion by asserting that all poems can be attributed to one individual. It argues that even if they share similar locations or settings, unique vocabulary and uncommon word usage cannot be easily replicated or borrowed; such linguistic features only appear in one person's work and are not found elsewhere.

By providing sufficient evidence and reasoning, the listening passage effectively refutes all possible options presented by the reading passage regarding the identity of Pearl Poet's authorship. (304 words)

the The reading passage makes presents three assumptions about regarding the identity of the unknown author, referred to as the Pearl Poet. However, the listening passage refutes each of these assumptions (Changed "makes" to "presents" and "about who will the unknown author would be. However, the listening refutes each of them. be" to "regarding the identity of the unknown author, referred to as the Pearl Poet", for clarity and coherence).

First, the passage argues Firstly, the reading passage posits that John Massy would could be the author due to his living residence being in the same region where the poems originated (Changed "living place as same as" to "residence being in"). Additionally, it mentions that the manuscript shares similar handwriting with other poems attributed to the Pearl Poet. In contrast, the listening passage states that during the 14th century, it was common for scribes to produce copies of poems (Changed "there prevails that produces poems by copying" to "it was common for scribes to produce copies of poems"), suggesting that a single copyist might have transcribed all these works rather than them being written by their original authors. Consequently, sharing a manuscript does not necessarily indicate a shared authorship.

Secondly, the reading passage proposes Hugh as the poems was orginated from. Also the manuscript a potential author by highlighting similarities in poetic structure and sound between his works and those of the Pearl Poet (Changed "a lot constant sound" to "similarities in poetic structure and sound"). However, the listening passage counters this claim by explaining that poems from this era were typically written in regional dialects. As such, Hugh's works are likely to have been composed in a Yorkshire dialect which is in the same handwriting as the poems of the Pearl Poet. distinctly different from that found in Pearl Poems (Changed "yorkshore" to "Yorkshire").

Lastly, the reading passage suggests that multiple authors may have contributed to these poems since they mention common places where poets might have gathered or resided (Changed "wirtters" to "authors"). The listening in contrast, mentions that back to 14th century, there prevails that produces poems by copying, which means the handwriting probably passage disputes this notion by asserting that all comes from poems can be attributed to one same person called copiest, not the original author. So individual. It argues that even if they share the same manuscript, it would all be copied by the same person. ¶ Second, the reading says Hugh might be the author by stating that his poems have a lot constant sound as the Pearl Poems. On the contrary, the listening refutes this assertion by saying that poems are more likely to be written in dialect at that time. So dialect in Hugh's poems is tend to be from yorkshore, which is apparently a different dialect like the pearl poems. ¶ Third, the reading suggests that it is from several wirtters because poems mention common place where might be all the poets from. However, the listening rejects by indicating that the poems all from one person. Even if they share the same places, similar locations or settings, unique vocabulary can not and uncommon word usage cannot be easily vagued, uncommon usage of words can replicated or borrowed; such linguistic features only be using by appear in one person and it never shows up in other work. person's work and are not found elsewhere (Changed "vagued" to "replicated or borrowed").

In conculsion, by giving enough reason, By providing sufficient evidence and reasoning, the listening passage effectively refutes all the possible options the passge has given.presented by the reading passage regarding the identity of Pearl Poet's authorship (Changed "conculsion" to "By providing sufficient evidence and reasoning" for a more natural transition).

8. Mind Map

- Introduction
  - Reading passage assumptions
  - Listening passage refutations

- Assumption 1: John Massy
  - Reading: Same region, similar handwriting
  - Listening: Scribes common, shared manuscript not equal to shared authorship

- Assumption 2: Hugh
  - Reading: Similar poetic structure and sound
  - Listening: Regional dialects, Yorkshire dialect different from Pearl Poems

- Assumption 3: Multiple authors
  - Reading: Common places mentioned in poems
  - Listening: Unique vocabulary and uncommon word usage indicate single author

- Conclusion
  - Listening passage refutes all options presented by reading passage

9. Key Words