TOEFL TPO -1 Speaking Task 4 Sample: In the lecture, the professor talks about two ways animals may use to maintain group unity There are two key points.The first key point is using what is called threatening display behavior. Take baboons for example.When two baboons find some fruit and both of them want to eat it one of the baboons may stare at the other baboon and make some threatening noises.After receiving these signals, the other baboon would walk away and give up these fruit without a fight.Thus the group unity is remained.The second key point is through use of friendly display behavior Still back to baboon example.If two baboons do get into a physical fight but afterwards, they would get close to each other and even hug each other which means that they are not angry anymore, they can still be friends.So the unity is maintained again. Therefore, by giving out these two examples the professor explains two ways to maintain group unity.

1.子项得分

• 交付 (Delivery): 3

• 语言使用 (Language Use): 3

• 话题发展 (Topic Development): 3

2.预估分数

• 总分: 23

3.表达 从交付方面来看，发言者的语速较为稳定，但有时会出现不必要的停顿。建议发言者注意在适当的地方停顿，以提高语言流畅度。此外，尽量减少发音错误，以免影响听众理解。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，发言者对两种维持群体团结的方式进行了阐述，并给出了例子。但在描述友好展示行为时，出现了一些表述不清的地方（例如，“which means that they do not agree with each other”）。建议在描述时更加清晰明确，以便听众更好地理解所讲内容。

5.语言使用

原文：In the lecture, the professor talks about two ways animals may use to maintain group unity. In the lecture, the professor discusses two methods animals use to maintain group unity. (将talks about改为discusses，使表述更准确) There are two key points. The main points are as follows: (用更自然的表达方式引出要点) The first key point is using what is called fitting display behavior. The first key point involves utilizing what is known as threatening display behavior. (将fitting改为threatening，纠正错误词汇) Take baboons. For example, when two baboons find some fruit and both of them want to eat it, one of the baboons may stare at the other baboon and make some threatening noises. After receiving these signals, the other baboons would walk away and give up this fruit without a fight. Thus, the group unity is maintained. The second key point is to use friendly display behaviors. The second key point involves employing friendly display behaviors. (将to use改为employing，使表述更准确) Take two baboons as an example. If two baboons do get into a physical fight, they will get close to each other and even hug each other, which means that they do not agree with each other. They can still be friends, (删除了不恰当的表述，使句子更清晰) so the unity is maintained again. Therefore, by giving out these two examples, the professor explains two ways to maintain group unity.

修订版（140词）：

In the lecture, the professor discusses two methods animals use to maintain group unity. The main points are as follows: The first key point involves utilizing what is known as threatening display behavior. For example, when two baboons find some fruit and both of them want to eat it, one of the baboons may stare at the other baboon and make some threatening noises. After receiving these signals, the other baboon would walk away and give up the fruit without a fight, thus maintaining group unity. The second key point involves employing friendly display behaviors. If two baboons get into a physical fight, they will get close to each other and even hug each other, showing that they can still be friends and maintain unity within the group. By providing these examples, the professor effectively explains two ways animals maintain group unity.

6.思维导图

- Lecture
  - Group unity
    - Threatening display behavior
      - Baboons example
        - Stare and noises
        - Avoiding conflict
    - Friendly display behavior
      - Baboons example
        - Physical fight resolution
        - Hugging and closeness

7.关键词