TOEFL TPO 31 Writing Task 1 Sample: Summarize the points made in the lecture, being sure to explain how they respond to the specific argument made in the reading passage.

1.Sub Scores

• Task fulfillment: 4

• Organization: 4

• Coherence and Cohesion: 4

• Language Use: 3

2.Estimated Scores

• Total Score: 25

3.Task completeness The essay does a good job of addressing the specific requirements of the task, summarizing the points made in the lecture and explaining how they respond to the arguments in the reading passage. However, there is room for improvement in terms of language use and clarity. Some sentences are awkwardly phrased or contain minor grammatical errors, which can make it difficult for readers to understand your points.

Suggestions for improvement:

• Be more concise and clear in your writing.

• Proofread your work to catch any grammatical errors or awkward phrasing.

Examples:

1. Instead of "the lecturer offers an opposite stands that there are no similar situation like decomposing in other animals," consider writing "the lecturer argues that decomposition is not observed in other fossils at the site."

2. Instead of "so as to Sinosauropteryx can also works," consider writing "suggesting that Sinosauropteryx may have used its feathers for display purposes as well."

4.Essay structure and organization The essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body, and conclusion. Each paragraph focuses on a specific point from the lecture and provides supporting details. However, some transitions between ideas could be improved to enhance coherence and cohesion.

Suggestions for improvement:

• Use clear transition words or phrases to connect ideas within paragraphs.

• Ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that introduces its main point.

Examples:

1. Add a transition word like "Firstly" at the beginning of the second paragraph: "Firstly, the author suggests that..."

2. Improve topic sentence clarity by rewriting "Additionally, the reading passage claims..." as "Secondly, the reading passage argues that scientists cannot determine the true nature of the structures due to their similarity to frills."

5. Grammar

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6. Revised Essay

In the reading material, the author presents three arguments to support the claim that Sinosauropteryx was not a feathered dinosaur. Conversely, the lecturer in the listening material asserts that strong evidence suggests Sinosauropteryx did have feathers and refutes each point made in the reading passage.

Firstly, the author posits that the fine lines surrounding the skeleton could have formed after the animal's death due to skin decomposition into fibers. The lecturer, however, counters this by noting that no such decomposition is observed in other fossils at the same site. In fact, many other fossils display well-preserved functional structures, indicating that it is more likely that Sinosauropteryx's lines are also well-preserved structures, possibly feathers.

Secondly, the reading passage argues that scientists cannot definitively determine which part of the dinosaur's anatomy these structures represent since they could be fossilized remains of frills rather than feathers. The lecturer disputes this by highlighting a crucial chemical difference between frills and feathers: feathers contain a protein called beta-keratin while frills do not. This distinction allows scientists to deduce that these lines are more likely remnants of feathers than frills.

Lastly, the author contends that since these structures were primarily located along Sinosauropteryx's backbone and tail and would be ineffective for flight or thermoregulation - two common functions of feathers - it is unlikely they represent feathers. The lecturer challenges this argument by emphasizing that feathers can serve other purposes beyond flight and temperature regulation. For example, birds like peacocks use their colorful tail feathers for display purposes during mating rituals. Similarly, recent analyses reveal that Sinosauropteryx's structures were orange and white, supporting the notion that they were indeed colorful display feathers rather than being purely functional or ornamental. (286 words)

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8. Mind Map

- Sinosauropteryx
    - Reading Material Arguments
        1. Fine lines due to decomposition
        2. Structures could be frills, not feathers
        3. Ineffective for flight or thermoregulation
    - Lecturer's Counterarguments
        1. No decomposition in other fossils at the site
        2. Chemical difference between frills and feathers (beta-keratin)
        3. Feathers serve other purposes (e.g., display)

9. Key Words