TOEFL TPO -1 Writing Task 1 Sample: Pearl poet's identity

1. Sub Scores

• Task fulfillment: 3

• Organization: 3

• Coherence and Cohesion: 3

• Language Use: 2

2. Estimated Scores

• Estimated Score: 20

3. Task Completeness The essay addresses the main points from the reading and listening passages, but it could be improved by providing more specific details and examples from both sources. Additionally, the essay should clearly state the relationship between the reading and listening passages in the introduction.

Suggestions for improvement:

• Include more specific details from both the reading and listening passages to support your points.

• Clearly state the relationship between the reading and listening passages in your introduction.

Examples:

1. Instead of just mentioning that John Massy lived in the same place as where the poems originated, provide more information about his background or other evidence that supports this claim.

2. When discussing Hugh's poems, give specific examples of how his use of dialect differs from that of the Pearl Poems.

3. Essay Structure and Organization The essay has a basic structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. However, it could be improved by having clearer transitions between ideas and paragraphs.

Suggestions for improvement:

• Use clear transitions between ideas within paragraphs.

• Improve paragraph organization by focusing on one main point per paragraph.

Examples:

1. Instead of saying "First, ...", you can use a transition like "The first assumption made in the reading passage is that... However, this is refuted by the listening passage because..."

2. In your second paragraph discussing Hugh's poems, start with a clear topic sentence such as "Another argument presented in the reading passage is that Hugh might be the author due to similarities in sound patterns; however, this claim is challenged by evidence provided in the listening passage."

5. Grammar

theThe(Checks that a sentence starts with an uppercase letter) reading passage makes three assumptions about who will the unknown author would be. However, the listening refutes each of them.

First, the passage argues that John MassyMass(misspelling) would be the author due to his living place as same as the poems waswere(Detects potentially wrong usage of "was") orginatedoriginated(misspelling) from. AlsoAlso,(Commas after conjunctive/linking adverbs in front of a new sentence.) the manuscript is in the same handwriting as the poems of the Pearl Poet. The listening in contrast, mentions that back to 14th century, there prevails that produces poems by copying, which means the handwriting probably all comes from one same person called copiestcopies(misspelling), not the original author. So if they share the same manuscript, it would all be copied by the same person.

Second, the reading says Hugh might be the author by stating that his poems have a lotlot of(a bit (of)) constant sound as the Pearl Poems. On the contrary, the listening refutes this assertion by saying that poems are more likely to be written in dialect at that time. So dialectthe dialect(This rule identifies whether the article 'the' is missing in a sentence.) in Hugh's poems is tendtended(Agreement: 'been' or 'was' + past tense) to be from yorkshoreYorkshire(misspelling), which is apparently a different dialect like the pearl poems.

Third, the reading suggests that it is from several wirtterswitters(misspelling) because poems mention common place wherewhere it(missing pronoun after 'where/when/how/why') might be all the poets from. However, the listening rejects by indicating that the poems all from one person. Even if they share the same places, vocabulary can not be easily vaguedvalued(misspelling), uncommon usage of words can only be using by one person and, and(comma between independent clauses) it never shows up in other work.

In conculsionconclusion(misspelling), by giving enough reason, the listening refutes all the options the passgepassage(misspelling) has given.

Section Title: 6. Revised Essay

The reading passage presents three assumptions regarding the identity of the unknown author, referred to as the Pearl Poet. However, the listening passage disputes each of these assumptions.

Firstly, the reading passage posits that John Massy could be the author due to his residence being in the same region where the poems originated. Additionally, it mentions that the manuscript shares similar handwriting with other poems attributed to the Pearl Poet. In contrast, the listening passage asserts that during the 14th century, it was common for poems to be copied by scribes, suggesting that a single copyist might have transcribed all these works rather than them being written by their original authors. Therefore, sharing a manuscript does not necessarily indicate a shared authorship.

Secondly, the reading passage proposes Hugh as a potential author by highlighting similarities in sound patterns between his poems and those of the Pearl Poet. However, the listening passage counters this claim by stating that poems from this period were often written in dialects specific to their region. Consequently, Hugh's use of Yorkshire dialect is distinct from that employed in Pearl Poems and cannot be considered evidence of shared authorship.

Lastly, the reading passage suggests that multiple writers could have contributed to these poems since they mention common places where several poets may have resided. Nevertheless, the listening passage refutes this notion by emphasizing that despite sharing certain locations or themes, each poet would possess unique vocabulary and uncommon word usage which would not appear in others' works. This implies that a single individual is more likely responsible for creating these poems.

By providing sufficient counterarguments against each assumption presented in the reading passage regarding Pearl Poet's identity, it becomes clear that none of these options can be definitively confirmed or rejected based on available evidence. (303 words)

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Second, the reading says Secondly, the reading passage proposes Hugh might as a potential author by highlighting similarities in sound patterns between his poems and those of the Pearl Poet. However, the listening passage counters this claim by stating that poems from this period were often written in dialects specific to their region (clarifying what "dialect" refers to). Consequently, Hugh's use of Yorkshire dialect is distinct from that employed in Pearl Poems and cannot be the author by stating that his poems considered evidence of shared authorship.

Lastly, the reading passage suggests that multiple writers could have a lot constant sound as the Pearl Poems. On the contrary, contributed to these poems since they mention common places where several poets may have resided (improving sentence structure). Nevertheless, the listening passage refutes this assertion by saying that poems are notion by emphasizing that despite sharing certain locations or themes, each poet would possess unique vocabulary and uncommon word usage which would not appear in others' works (correcting "vagued" to "appear"). This implies that a single individual is more likely to be written in dialect at that time. So dialect in Hugh's poems is tend to be from yorkshore, which is apparently a different dialect like the pearl responsible for creating these poems.

Third, the reading suggests that By providing sufficient counterarguments against each assumption presented in the reading passage regarding Pearl Poet's identity, it is from several wirtters because poems mention common place where might becomes clear that none of these options can be all the poets from. However, the listening rejects by indicating that the poems all from one person. Even if they share the same places, vocabulary can not be easily vagued, uncommon usage of words can only be using by one person and it never shows up in other work. ¶ In conculsion, by giving enough reason, the listening refutes all the options the passge has given.definitively confirmed or rejected based on available evidence.

8. Mind Map

- Introduction
  - Reading passage assumptions
  - Listening passage disputes

- Assumption 1: John Massy
  - Reading: Residence, handwriting similarities
  - Listening: Scribes copying poems, shared manuscript ≠ shared authorship

- Assumption 2: Hugh
  - Reading: Sound patterns similarities
  - Listening: Regional dialects, Yorkshire dialect ≠ Pearl Poems dialect

- Assumption 3: Multiple writers
  - Reading: Common places mentioned in poems
  - Listening: Unique vocabulary and word usage, single individual more likely

- Conclusion
  - Counterarguments provided by listening passage
  - No definitive confirmation or rejection of options based on evidence

9. Key Words