TOEFL TPO -1 Speaking Task 1 Sample: some people prefer to get advice from friends who are at the same age as they are, like their friends, other like to ask people who are older than them, such as their parents or grandparents. which do you refer and why

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some people prefer to get advice from friends who are at the same age as they are, like their friends, other like to ask people who are older than them, such as their parents or grandparents. which do you refer and why

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1.子项得分

交付：3
主题发展：3
语言使用：3

2.预估分数

总分：23

3.表达从交付方面来看，回答的语速较为稳定，但在某些地方存在不适当的停顿。建议在练习口语时注意保持流利、自然的语速，并尽量减少不必要的停顿。同时，注意发音的准确性，以避免拼写错误。

4.话题发展从话题发展方面来看，回答内容较为连贯和有组织。然而，可以提供更多具体的例子来支持观点。例如，在提到向年长者寻求建议时，可以举出一些实际生活中的例子来说明年长者的经验对解决问题的帮助。这样可以使回答更具说服力和深度。

5. 语言使用

Original:

I am all on the perspective that it is better to ask people who are older than us. Why? Because firstly, people that are older than you have much more life experience on what you are experiencing right now than you. For example, if you are struggling on how to get a better score in a high level competition, your brother or sister may might know a better answer than your friends because your friends is at the same age as you and they are experiencing this in the first time too.

Revised:

I firmly believe that seeking advice from individuals older than ourselves is more beneficial. Why? Firstly, those who are older possess a wealth of life experience that can provide valuable insights into our current situations. For example, if one is struggling to improve their performance in a high-level competition, a sibling or cousin might offer more effective guidance than a peer, as they have likely faced similar challenges before.

Secondly, older individuals often have a broader perspective on life, allowing them to provide well-rounded advice. For instance, when making important career decisions, consulting with parents or grandparents can help us consider various aspects and potential consequences that we may not have thought of otherwise.

I firmly believe that seeking advice from individuals older than ourselves is more beneficial (revised for clarity and formality). Why? Firstly, those who are older possess a wealth of life experience (advanced vocabulary) that can provide valuable insights into our current situations (proper grammar and natural flow). For example, if one is struggling to improve their performance in a high-level competition (smooth transition), a sibling or cousin might offer more effective guidance than a peer (strong supporting example), as they have likely faced similar challenges before (reasoning and explanation).

Secondly, older individuals often have a broader perspective on life (advanced vocabulary), allowing them to provide well-rounded advice (proper grammar and natural flow). For instance, when making important career decisions (smooth transition), consulting with parents or grandparents can help us consider various aspects and potential consequences that we may not have thought of otherwise (strong supporting example and conclusion).

Corrected:

I ~~am all on the perspective~~ firmly believe that it seeking advice from individuals older than ourselves is ~~better to ask people~~ more beneficial (revised for clarity and formality). Why? Firstly, those who are older ~~than us. Why? Because firstly, people that are older than you have much more~~ possess a wealth of life experience ~~on what you are experiencing right now than you.~~ (advanced vocabulary) that can provide valuable insights into our current situations (proper grammar and natural flow). For example, if ~~you are~~ one is struggling ~~on how~~ to ~~get a better score~~ improve their performance in a ~~high level competition, your brother~~ high-level competition (smooth transition), a sibling or ~~sister~~ cousin might offer more effective guidance than a peer (strong supporting example), as they have likely faced similar challenges before (reasoning and explanation).

Secondly, older individuals often have a broader perspective on life (advanced vocabulary), allowing them to provide well-rounded advice (proper grammar and natural flow). For instance, when making important career decisions (smooth transition), consulting with parents or grandparents can help us consider various aspects and potential consequences that we may ~~might know a better answer than your friends because your friends is at the same age as you~~ not have thought of otherwise (strong supporting example and ~~they are experiencing this in the first time too.~~conclusion).

思维导图


- Preference or Opinion
  - Older people as a source of advice

- Main Point
  - Life experience

- Supporting Examples
  - High level competition
  - Sibling's advice

- Conclusion
  - Older people have valuable insights due to their experiences

关键词

Word	Phonetic Symbols	Parts of Speech	English definitions	Simplified Chinese translations	Sample sentences
perspective	/pərˈspektɪv/	noun	a particular way of considering sth.	观点，看法	I am all on the perspective that it is better to ask people who are older than us for advice.
life experience	/laɪf ɪkˈspɪriəns/	noun	knowledge or skill gained through living one's life	生活经验	Older people have much more life experience on what you are experiencing right now than you.
struggle	/ˈstrʌɡl/	verb	to try very hard to do sth, even though it is difficult	努力，奋斗	If you are struggling on how to get a better score in a high level competition, your brother or sister may know a better answer than your friends.
insight	/ˈɪnsaɪt/	noun	the ability to understand people and situations in a clear way	洞察力，见解	Older people have valuable insights due to their experiences.
valuable	/ˈvæljuəbl/	adjective	very useful or important, worth a lot of money	有价值的，宝贵的	Their advice is valuable because of their life experience.

补充示例
Sub-opinion: Older people can provide guidance on career choices. Explanation: They have been through various stages in their careers and can share their experiences. Supporting example: An older colleague may give you advice on how to advance in your career or handle a difficult work situation.
Sub-opinion: Older people can offer relationship advice. Explanation: They have experienced different types of relationships and can provide insights on maintaining healthy connections. Supporting example: Your grandparents may share their secrets to a long-lasting marriage or how to deal with conflicts in a relationship.
Sub-opinion: Older people can help with financial decisions. Explanation: They have managed their finances for a longer time and have learned from their successes and mistakes. Supporting example: Your parents may advise you on saving for retirement, investing, or managing debt.
Sub-opinion: Older people can provide guidance on personal growth. Explanation: They have faced various challenges and can share their wisdom on overcoming obstacles and developing resilience. Supporting example: A mentor may teach you how to handle failure, set goals, and stay motivated.
Sub-opinion: Older people can offer advice on health and well-being. Explanation: They have learned the importance of maintaining physical and mental health throughout their lives. Supporting example: A family member may suggest ways to cope with stress, maintain a balanced diet, or stay active as you age.