TOEFL TPO -1 Writing Task 1 Sample: summarize the points made in the lecture, be sure to explain how they opposed the specific points in the reading

1.子项得分 任务完成度: 4 组织: 4 连贯与衔接: 4 语言使用: 3

2.预估分数

25. 3.任务完成度

整体来说，你的文章很好地回应了题目要求，总结了听力中的观点，并解释了它们如何反驳阅读材料中的观点。然而，有一些地方可以改进。首先，在提到听力中的论据时，可以更详细地描述这些论据以及它们是如何支持听力观点的。其次，在总结段落中，尝试更明确地说明听力和阅读材料之间的对立关系。

示例1： 原文：That is, the population of Ansian Tiger mosquitoes, which carry dangerous virus, remain basically same when the population of Aedes aegypti declines. 改进：That is, the population of Asian Tiger mosquitoes, which carry a more dangerous strain of the dengue virus, remained relatively stable even when the population of Aedes aegypti declined significantly.

示例2： 原文：In summary, each threat mentioned in the reading to reject that releasing the GM mosquitoes is effectively countered by the listening. 改进：In summary, each potential threat mentioned in the reading against releasing GM mosquitoes is effectively countered by opposing arguments presented in the listening.

4.文章结构与组织 你的文章结构清晰，包括引言、正文和结论。每个段落都集中讨论了一个特定的观点，并提供了支持细节。然而，可以改进一些方面。首先，确保在段落之间使用恰当的过渡词或短语来更好地连接不同的观点。其次，在引言部分，可以尝试更明确地概述文章将讨论的主要观点。

示例1： 原文：However, the listening challenges what is stated in the reading passage by presenting three compelling counterarguments. 改进：However, the listening challenges the claims made in the reading passage by presenting three compelling counterarguments, addressing concerns about other mosquito species, GM mosquito bites, and unforeseen ecological effects.

示例2： 原文：Firstly, the reading cliams that other mosquitoes carrying dangerous virus may increase of the population of Aedes aegypti decreases. 改进：Firstly, the reading claims that if the population of Aedes aegypti decreases due to GM mosquitoes, other mosquito species carrying dangerous viruses may increase.

5. 语法批改

The reading primarily talks about three potential threats that would be caused by the approach of releasing the GM mosquitoes to reduce Aedes aegypti mosquitoes. However, the listening challenges what is stated in the reading passage by presenting three compelling counterarguments.

Firstly, the reading cliamsclaims(misspelling) that other mosquitoes carrying dangerous virus may increase of the population of Aedes aegypti decreases. Conversely, the speaker refutes this point by stating that according ato a(This rule identifies whether the preposition 'to' is missing in a sentence.) scentificscientific(misspelling) study measuring whether the elmiminationelimination(misspelling) of Aedes aegypti would affect the population of other mosquitoes, the phenomenon put forward in the reading wouldn't happen. That is, the population of AnsianAsian(misspelling) Tiger mosquitoes, which carry dangerousthe dangerous(This rule identifies whether the article 'the' is missing in a sentence.) virus, remain basically samethe same(This rule identifies whether the article 'the' is missing in a sentence.) when the population of Aedes aegypti declines. AnsianAsian(misspelling) Tiger mosquitoes neither take over Aedes aegypti's place nor spread the virus.

Secondly, the reading asserts that GM mosquitoes would bite people, leading to significantly harmful effects. In contrast, the speaker maintiansmaintains(misspelling) an opposite opinion, arguing that we only release male GM mosquitoes, who don't bite people, while merely female ones bite people. As a result, GM mosquitoes we released can do their job without having the possibility of biting people. HneceHence(misspelling), we don;tdon't(Wrong apostrophe character) need to worry that they will pass virus to humans.

Finally, the author of the reading passage believes that this approach will bring about unpredictable ecological effects. Nevertheless, the speaker opposes this idea by mentioning that although it's truly hard to foresee what will happen, the gene so far haven't produced negative effects on (Two consecutive spaces)the ecosystem. The example mentioned in the reading is just aanAAN(misspelling) isolated case, so we don't need to be concerned. Additionally, the method will pose good effects on the ecosystem, since we don't need to control the population of Aedes aegypti through toxic pesticide, which is ecologically harmful.

In summary, each threat mentioned in the reading to reject that releasing the GM mosquitoes is effectively countered by the listening.

Section Title: 6.文章修订

The reading passage primarily discusses three potential threats associated with releasing genetically modified (GM) mosquitoes to reduce the Aedes aegypti population. However, the lecture challenges these claims by presenting three compelling counterarguments.

Firstly, the reading claims that if the Aedes aegypti population decreases, other mosquitoes carrying dangerous viruses may increase. Conversely, the speaker refutes this point by citing a scientific study that examined whether the elimination of Aedes aegypti would affect the population of other mosquito species. The study found that the Asian Tiger mosquito population, which carries a particularly dangerous virus, remained essentially unchanged when Aedes aegypti numbers declined. Thus, Asian Tiger mosquitoes neither took over Aedes aegypti's niche nor spread their virus more widely.

Secondly, the reading asserts that GM mosquitoes could bite people and cause significant harm. In contrast, the speaker maintains an opposing view, arguing that only male GM mosquitoes will be released and they do not bite humans; only female mosquitoes do so. Consequently, GM mosquitoes can effectively reduce Aedes aegypti populations without posing any risk of transmitting viruses to people through bites.

Finally, the author of the reading passage believes that introducing GM mosquitoes could have unpredictable ecological effects. Nevertheless, the speaker opposes this idea by mentioning that although it is indeed difficult to foresee all potential consequences, most GM organisms introduced thus far have not had serious negative impacts on ecosystems. The example mentioned in the reading is merely an isolated case and should not be cause for undue concern. Moreover, using GM mosquitoes could actually benefit ecosystems by eliminating the need for toxic pesticides to control Aedes aegypti populations – substances known to be harmful to both wildlife and humans.

In summary, each threat mentioned in the reading as reasons against releasing GM mosquitoes is effectively countered by evidence presented in the lecture. (304 words)

Revised essay: Section Title: 7.文章批改

The reading passage primarily talks about discusses three potential threats that would be caused by the approach of associated with releasing the GM genetically modified (GM) mosquitoes to reduce Aedes aegypti mosquitoes. the Aedes aegypti population. However, the listening lecture challenges what is stated in the reading passage these claims by presenting three compelling counterarguments. counterarguments (changed "talks about" to "discusses" and "the listening" to "the lecture" for clarity).

Firstly, the reading cliams that claims that if the Aedes aegypti population decreases, other mosquitoes carrying dangerous virus viruses may increase of the population of Aedes aegypti decreases. increase. Conversely, the speaker refutes this point by stating that according citing a scentific scientific study measuring that examined whether the elmimination elimination of Aedes aegypti would affect the population of other mosquitoes, the phenomenon put forward in the reading wouldn't happen. That is, the population of Ansian mosquito species (corrected grammar and sentence structure). The study found that the Asian Tiger mosquitoes, mosquito population, which carry carries a particularly dangerous virus, remain basically same remained essentially unchanged when the population of Aedes aegypti declines. Ansian Aedes aegypti numbers declined. Thus, Asian Tiger mosquitoes neither take took over Aedes aegypti's place niche nor spread the virus. their virus more widely (clarified meaning and corrected grammar).

Secondly, the reading asserts that GM mosquitoes would could bite people, leading to significantly harmful effects. people and cause significant harm. In contrast, the speaker maintians maintains an opposite opinion, opposing view, arguing that we only release male GM mosquitoes, who don't mosquitoes will be released and they do not bite people, while merely humans; only female ones bite people. As a result, GM mosquitoes we released mosquitoes do so (corrected grammar and sentence structure). Consequently, GM mosquitoes can do their job effectively reduce Aedes aegypti populations without having the possibility posing any risk of biting people. Hnece, we don;t need to worry that they will pass virus to humans. transmitting viruses to people through bites (clarified meaning).

Finally, the author of the reading passage believes that this approach will bring about introducing GM mosquitoes could have unpredictable ecological effects. Nevertheless, the speaker opposes this idea by mentioning that although it's truly hard it is indeed difficult to foresee what will happen, the gene so all potential consequences, most GM organisms introduced thus far haven't produced have not had serious negative effects on the ecosystem. impacts on ecosystems (corrected grammar and sentence structure). The example mentioned in the reading is just aan merely an isolated case, so we don't case and should not be cause for undue concern. Moreover, using GM mosquitoes could actually benefit ecosystems by eliminating the need for toxic pesticides to control Aedes aegypti populations – substances known to be concerned. Additionally, the method will pose good effects on the ecosystem, since we don't need to control the population of Aedes aegypti through toxic pesticide, which is ecologically harmful. harmful to both wildlife and humans (clarified meaning and corrected grammar).

In summary, each threat mentioned in the reading to reject that as reasons against releasing the GM mosquitoes is effectively countered by the listening.evidence presented in the lecture (corrected grammar and sentence structure).

8. Mind Map

1. Introduction
   - Reading passage: potential threats of GM mosquitoes
   - Lecture: counterarguments to these threats

2. Threat 1: Increase in other dangerous mosquito species
   - Reading: decrease in Aedes aegypti leads to increase in other species
   - Lecture: scientific study shows no significant change in Asian Tiger mosquito population

3. Threat 2: GM mosquitoes could bite people and cause harm
   - Reading: possibility of GM mosquitoes biting humans
   - Lecture: only male GM mosquitoes released, which do not bite humans

4. Threat 3: Unpredictable ecological effects
   - Reading: potential negative impacts on ecosystems
   - Lecture: most GM organisms have not had serious negative impacts, example in reading is isolated case

5. Conclusion
   - Summary of lecture's counterarguments to reading's threats

9. Keywords