TOEFL TPO 45 Speaking Task 2 Sample: The woman disagrees with the student’s proposal for the coffeehouse. Explain the proposal and the reasons she gives for disagreeing with it.

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

从表达方面来看，这个回答的发音和语速基本上是清晰和流畅的，但偶尔会有停顿。为了提高口语表达能力，建议练习更自然地连接句子，减少不必要的停顿。同时注意发音的准确性，以避免拼写错误。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，回答内容基本上是连贯和组织良好的，但可以进一步加强。为了提高话题发展能力，建议在解释原因时更详细地描述，并尝试使用更多的连接词和过渡词来使回答更加流畅。同时，在提供支持或例子时，可以考虑使用更具说服力的论据。

5.语言使用

原文：The student proposed that the university should close their cafe house because it's empty and is not a good place to meet people and also their light is poor and is not a good place to study. The student proposed that the university should close the coffeehouse because it's usually empty, making it unsuitable for meeting people, and its poor lighting makes it an inadequate place to study.（将"cafe house"改为"coffeehouse"，使词汇更准确；调整句子结构，使表达更清晰。）

But the woman doesn't agree with that for two reasons. However, the woman disagrees with this proposal for two reasons.（使用"However"代替"But"，使过渡更自然；调整句子结构，使表达更清晰。）

Firstly, she thinks the cafe house is just empty just at day because people have to work or study but at evening there are a lot of people there and they have a drink to relax them after study or work. Firstly, she believes that the coffeehouse is only empty during the day due to people's work or study commitments, but in the evening, it becomes crowded as individuals unwind with a drink after their daily activities.（将"cafe house"改为"coffeehouse"；调整句子结构，使表达更清晰；使用更高级的词汇如"commitments"和"daily activities"。）

Secondly, she thinks their light has been fixed and every table's light now is good as a library so it's a good place to study now. Secondly, she asserts that the lighting issue has been resolved, and the illumination at each table is now comparable to that of a library, making it an ideal place to study.（调整句子结构，使表达更清晰；使用更高级的词汇如"asserts"和"illumination"。）

修订版（140词）：

The student proposed that the university should close the coffeehouse because it's usually empty, making it unsuitable for meeting people, and its poor lighting makes it an inadequate place to study. However, the woman disagrees with this proposal for two reasons. Firstly, she believes that the coffeehouse is only empty during the day due to people's work or study commitments, but in the evening, it becomes crowded as individuals unwind with a drink after their daily activities. Secondly, she asserts that the lighting issue has been resolved, and the illumination at each table is now comparable to that of a library, making it an ideal place to study.

6.思维导图

- Proposal
  - Close coffeehouse
  - Reasons: empty, poor lighting

- Woman's disagreement
  - Reason 1: Busy during the day, crowded in the evening
    - Work/study commitments
    - Unwind with a drink
  - Reason 2: Lighting issue resolved
    - Comparable to library
    - Ideal place to study

7.关键词

1. Sub Scores

• Delivery: 3

• Topic Development: 4

• Language Use: 3

2. Estimated Scores

• Total Score: 26

3. Delivery The speaker's delivery is mostly clear and fluid, with a consistent pace and only occasional pauses. However, there are some minor issues with pronunciation and word choice that could be improved. To enhance the delivery, the speaker should focus on practicing pronunciation and enunciation of words to ensure clarity and accuracy.

4. Topic Development The response is coherent and well-organized, with clear connections between ideas and sufficient support or examples. The speaker effectively explains the proposal and the reasons the woman disagrees with it. To further improve topic development, the speaker could provide more specific details from the listening passage to strengthen their argument.

5. Language Use

Original Answer: The proposal stressed that the university should close the coffeehouse, however the woman disagrees with the proposal. The proposal suggests that the university should close the coffeehouse; however, the woman disagrees with this suggestion. (Changed "stressed" to "suggests" and added a semicolon for better sentence structure) First, the proposal stressed that the coffeehouse is too empty to be a good place to meet people. Firstly, the proposal claims that the coffeehouse is often empty, making it unsuitable for socializing. (Rephrased for clarity and natural language flow) However, the woman says that the coffeehouse is pretty full in the evening while students are really busy during the day, so it might seem empty in the day, and the students would like to relax in the evening sitting in the coffeehouse. However, according to the woman, the coffeehouse is quite crowded in the evenings when students have more free time and seek a place to unwind. (Simplified and restructured sentence for clarity) Secondly, the proposal says that poor lighting doesn't allow students to study, but the woman says that the coffeehouse already operates a renovation and provides good lighting as good as in library, Secondly, although the proposal mentions poor lighting as an issue for studying, the woman states that recent renovations have significantly improved lighting conditions, making them comparable to those in a library, (Rephrased for better sentence structure and vocabulary) and every table has good lighting devices for them to study. and now every table has adequate lighting for studying. (Simplified sentence for clarity)

Revised Answer (140 words):

The proposal suggests that the university should close the coffeehouse; however, the woman disagrees with this suggestion. Firstly, the proposal claims that the coffeehouse is often empty, making it unsuitable for socializing. However, according to the woman, the coffeehouse is quite crowded in the evenings when students have more free time and seek a place to unwind. Secondly, although the proposal mentions poor lighting as an issue for studying, the woman states that recent renovations have significantly improved lighting conditions, making them comparable to those in a library, and now every table has adequate lighting for studying. By addressing these concerns and providing specific examples from the listening passage, the speaker effectively refutes the proposal's arguments and demonstrates a strong understanding of both the reading and listening materials.

6. Mind Map

- Proposal
  - Close coffeehouse
  - Reasons:
    - Empty
    - Poor lighting

- Woman's disagreement
  - Coffeehouse crowded in evenings
    - Students socialize and unwind
  - Renovations improved lighting
    - Comparable to library
    - Adequate for studying

7. Key Words

1.子项得分

• 交付：3

• 主题发展：4

• 语言使用：3.5

2.预估分数

• 总分：26

3.表达 回答中的表达大部分是清晰的，但在某些地方可能需要更连贯的语言。为了提高交付效果，建议练习更流畅、自然的发音和语调。同时，注意在适当的地方停顿，以便让听众更好地理解你的观点。

4.话题发展 回答内容组织得很好，呈现了一个连贯且有条理的论述。你成功地解释了女士不同意关闭咖啡馆的原因，并提供了足够的支持和例子。为了进一步提高，可以尝试在回答中加入更多细节，使论点更具说服力。

5.语言使用

原文：However, the woman does not agree with the idea. However, the woman disagrees with the idea.（改为更自然的表达方式，用disagrees替换does not agree）

Firstly, she mentions that since students are very busy in the morning, there are a lot of people in the coffeehouse in the evening. Firstly, she points out that due to students being busy during daytime, the coffeehouse is crowded in the evening.（改为更自然的表达方式，用points out替换mentions，用due to替换since，用crowded替换there are a lot of people）

Besides, the coffeehouse has renovated slightly. Moreover, the coffeehouse has undergone some renovations.（改为更自然的表达方式，用Moreover替换Besides，用undergone some renovations替换has renovated slightly）

Now every table gets good lighting, Now, every table has good lighting,（改为更自然的表达方式，用has替换gets）

Revised Answer (140 words):

The proposal suggests that the university should close the coffeehouse because it is always empty and it is not a good place to meet people. Moreover, the lighting is so poor that it's not a suitable place to study. However, the woman disagrees with the idea. Firstly, she points out that due to students being busy during daytime, the coffeehouse is crowded in the evening. They get together, sit down to relax or prepare for their classes. Moreover, the coffeehouse has undergone some renovations, improving the lighting conditions. Now, every table has good lighting, making it a suitable place to study. As a result, the woman believes that the university should not close the coffeehouse, as it serves as a valuable space for students to socialize and study during evenings.

6.思维导图

- Proposal
  - Close coffeehouse
  - Reasons: empty, poor lighting

- Woman's disagreement
  - Crowded in the evening
    - Students busy during daytime
    - Relax, prepare for classes
  - Renovations
    - Improved lighting conditions
    - Suitable place to study

- Conclusion
  - University should not close coffeehouse

7.关键词