TOEFL TPO 16 Speaking Task 1 Sample: Some people who unexpectedly receive a large amount of money spend it on practical things, while others spend it for pleasure only. Which do you think is better and why?

1.Sub Scores

• Delivery: 2

• Topic Development: 2

• Language Use: 2

2.Estimated Scores

• Total Score: 15

3.Delivery The speaker's delivery could be improved by focusing on clearer and more fluid speech. There were some instances where the sentences were difficult to understand due to inappropriate pauses and inaccurate pronunciation. To enhance the delivery, the speaker should practice speaking at a consistent pace, minimizing pauses, and working on accurate pronunciation of words.

4.Topic Development The response provided by the speaker could be better organized and more coherent. While there were some connections between ideas, they were not always clear or well-developed. To improve topic development, the speaker should focus on providing a clear introduction, followed by well-structured supporting points with relevant examples or explanations. Additionally, it would be beneficial to restate the main idea in a conclusion to provide a more cohesive response.

5.Language Use

Original Answer: I prefer to spend my money on some practical things. The first thing is it can give me a sense of achievement because such practical things can, I can get some reward after realizing some practical things. For example, if I learn English for a long time and after I go to some English countries, I can use the English to communicate with them naturally. The second reason is it can also help me manage my money in a sensible way because it can tell me which I should pay and which I shouldn't and I can get some reward too.

Corrected Answer: I prefer to spend my money on some practical things. I believe that spending money on practical items is better. (More natural-sounding language) The first thing is it This (Simpler and clearer) can give me a sense of achievement because such practical things can, I can get some reward after realizing some practical things. I can reap rewards from their use. (Improved sentence structure and clarity) For example, if I learn English for a long time and after I go to some English countries, I can use the English to communicate with them naturally. I will be able to communicate effectively with locals. (More specific and natural language) The second reason is it Another advantage is that it (Improved transition and clarity) can also help me manage my money in a sensible way because it can tell me which I should pay and which I shouldn't, and I can get some reward too. allowing me to make informed financial decisions. (Clearer and more natural language)

I believe that spending money on practical items is better. This can give me a sense of achievement because I can reap rewards from their use. For example, investing in education, such as learning English, will enable me to communicate effectively with locals when visiting English-speaking countries. Another advantage is that allocating funds towards practical items helps me manage my money sensibly, allowing me to make informed financial decisions. In contrast, spending money solely on pleasure may lead to short-term satisfaction but lacks long-term benefits. Therefore, focusing on practical expenditures ensures a more stable and rewarding future.

6.Mind Map

• Preference: Spending money on practical items
  • Main Point 1: Sense of achievement
    • Example 1: Investing in education (learning English)
  • Main Point 2: Sensible money management
    • Example 2: Making informed financial decisions
  • Conclusion: Practical expenditures ensure a stable and rewarding future

7.Key Words

8.Additional Examples

1. Investing in a reliable vehicle for transportation not only saves money on repairs but also ensures safety and convenience.

2. Purchasing energy-efficient appliances reduces utility bills and contributes to environmental conservation.

3. Allocating funds for health insurance provides financial security during medical emergencies and promotes overall well-being.

4. Saving money for retirement ensures a comfortable and stress-free life after completing one's career.

5. Investing in real estate can generate passive income through rental properties and increase net worth over time.

1.子项得分

• Delivery: 2

• Topic Development: 2

• Language Use: 2

2.预估分数

• Estimated Score: 17 (mapped to TOEFL iBT 0-30 scale)

3.表达 作为一名托福老师，在发音方面，您需要注意更清晰、流畅的发音，并保持一致的语速，只有偶尔的停顿。请注意在发音时避免不恰当的停顿和拼写错误。为了提高口语表达能力，您可以多进行练习，尤其是在模仿地道英语发音方面。此外，尝试在练习时使用录音设备，以便您能够听到自己的发音并找出需要改进的地方。

4.话题发展 Regarding topic development, your response could be more coherent and well-organized. You should focus on addressing the question directly and providing a clear stance on whether you think it is better to spend the money on practical things or for pleasure only. Additionally, try to provide more specific examples or reasons to support your opinion. This will help strengthen your argument and make your response more engaging for the listener.

5. 语言使用

Original:

In my own opinion, I will spend my money on whatever you want. There is a phrase that says you only live once. Life is for making yourself happy, and spending money is a way to get to your target. So buy things you want, otherwise money loses value. I always want to buy things that is not really useful, but it can make me happy. For example, I had two earphones a few months ago, and suddenly I buy a new one because it can make me happy and is pretty beautiful.

Revised:

In my opinion, spending a large amount of money on pleasurable experiences is better. The saying "you only live once" emphasizes the importance of enjoying life and making ourselves happy. Using money as a means to achieve happiness is a valid approach. Therefore, purchasing items that bring joy, even if they are not necessarily practical, can be worthwhile.

One example is when I had two functional earphones a few months ago but decided to buy a new, aesthetically pleasing pair. Although it was not a practical purchase, it made me happy and added beauty to my life. Another instance could be taking a dream vacation or attending a once-in-a-lifetime event. These experiences may not have long-term practical benefits, but they create lasting memories and contribute to overall happiness.

In my opinion, spending a large amount of money on pleasurable experiences is better because it aligns with the saying "you only live once," which emphasizes the importance of enjoying life and making ourselves happy. Using money as a means to achieve happiness is a valid approach, so purchasing items that bring joy, even if they are not necessarily practical, can be worthwhile.

For example, I had two functional earphones a few months ago but decided to buy a new, aesthetically pleasing pair because it made me happy and added beauty to my life. This demonstrates that non-practical purchases can still have value in terms of personal satisfaction. Another instance could be taking a dream vacation or attending a once-in-a-lifetime event - these experiences may not have long-term practical benefits, but they create lasting memories and contribute to overall happiness. By focusing on pleasure rather than practicality, we can enrich our lives and make the most of our time on Earth.

Corrected:

In my own opinion, I will spend my spending a large amount of money on whatever you want. There pleasurable experiences is better because it aligns with the saying "you only live once," which emphasizes the importance of enjoying life and making ourselves happy. Using money as a means to achieve happiness is a phrase valid approach, so purchasing items that says you only live once. Life is for making yourself happy, and spending money is a way to get to your target. So buy things you want, otherwise money loses value. I always want to buy things that is bring joy, even if they are not really useful, but it necessarily practical, can make me happy. be worthwhile.

For example, I had two functional earphones a few months ago, and suddenly I ago but decided to buy a new one new, aesthetically pleasing pair because it can make made me happy and is pretty beautiful.added beauty to my life. This demonstrates that non-practical purchases can still have value in terms of personal satisfaction. Another instance could be taking a dream vacation or attending a once-in-a-lifetime event - these experiences may not have long-term practical benefits, but they create lasting memories and contribute to overall happiness. By focusing on pleasure rather than practicality, we can enrich our lives and make the most of our time on Earth.

6. 思维导图

- Preference or Opinion
  - Spend money on whatever makes you happy
  - Life is short, enjoy it

- Main Point
  - Money loses value if not spent on things you want

- Supporting Examples
  - Buying things that make you happy, even if not useful
  - Purchasing a new earphone for happiness and beauty

- Conclusion
  - It's important to spend money on things that bring joy and happiness in life

7. 关键词

8. 补充示例

9. Investing in experiences, like traveling, can create lasting memories and happiness.

10. Buying a gift for a loved one can bring joy to both the giver and the receiver.

11. Spending money on hobbies or interests can lead to personal growth and fulfillment.

12. Donating to a charity or cause you care about can provide a sense of purpose and happiness.

13. Treating yourself to a special meal or event can create a memorable and enjoyable experience.

1.子项得分

• 交付：3

• 话题发展：3

• 语言使用：3

2.预估分数

• 23

3.表达 从交付方面来看，发言者的语速较为稳定，但在某些地方存在不必要的停顿。建议发言者注意在适当的地方停顿，以提高语言流畅度。此外，尽量减少发音错误，以免影响听众理解。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，发言者的回答较为连贯和有组织。然而，可以通过提供更多具体的例子或支持观点的理由来进一步完善回答。例如，在谈到旅行时，可以具体说明旅行如何帮助自己放松和成长。同时，注意保持回答与问题紧密相关，避免偏离主题。

5. 语言使用

Original:

From my perspective, I prefer to spend a large amount of money on practical things like traveling around the world or go to visit some different sightseeing around the world. First of all, I think someone might say money will come and go, but I see money as a way to support my family and give me a chance to be outstanding in the future, so I never waste a penny on anything I don't need. And also I think, during the process I'm traveling and visiting, it can relax myself. Life is just like a running vehicle, you cannot expect it to run at full speed without any brakes. Sometimes you need to slow down, take a breath and enjoy the visiting moment, and there's why.

Revised:

In my opinion, it is better to spend a large amount of money on practical things, such as traveling and exploring various destinations worldwide. Firstly, I believe that money serves as a means to support one's family and create opportunities for personal growth; therefore, I avoid squandering it on frivolous items. Secondly, engaging in travel and exploration can provide relaxation and rejuvenation. Life can be likened to a fast-moving vehicle that occasionally requires slowing down to catch a breath and savor the present moment. By investing in meaningful experiences like travel, we can strike a balance between practicality and pleasure.

In my opinion, it is better to spend a large amount of money on practical things (revised for clarity), such as traveling (added example) and exploring various destinations worldwide (expanded example for specificity). Firstly, I believe that money serves as a means (rephrased for advanced vocabulary) to support one's family and create opportunities for personal growth; therefore, I avoid squandering it (used advanced vocabulary) on frivolous items (clarified the idea). Secondly, engaging in travel and exploration (rephrased for better flow) can provide relaxation and rejuvenation (used advanced vocabulary). Life can be likened to (used advanced vocabulary) a fast-moving vehicle that occasionally requires slowing down to catch a breath (improved analogy) and savor the present moment (clarified the idea). By investing in meaningful experiences like travel (rephrased for better flow), we can strike a balance between practicality and pleasure (strong conclusion).

Corrected:

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6. 思维导图

- Preference or Opinion
  - Spend money on practical things
  - Travel and visit sightseeing spots

- Main Point
  - Money as a way to support family and future
  - Avoid wasting money on unnecessary things

- Supporting Examples
  - Money comes and goes
  - Traveling relaxes and recharges oneself

- Conclusion
  - Importance of balancing life and enjoying the moment

7. 关键词

8. 补充示例

9. Sub-opinion: Traveling can broaden one's horizons. Explanation: Visiting different places exposes us to new cultures and experiences. Supporting example: I learned about the history and traditions of Japan during my trip to Kyoto.

10. Sub-opinion: Investing in experiences is more valuable than material possessions. Explanation: Memories from traveling last a lifetime and contribute to personal growth. Supporting example: My trip to Europe helped me become more independent and open-minded.

11. Sub-opinion: Traveling can strengthen relationships with family and friends. Explanation: Shared experiences create lasting bonds and memories. Supporting example: My family vacation to Hawaii brought us closer together as we explored the islands.

12. Sub-opinion: Traveling can improve mental health. Explanation: Taking a break from daily stressors can reduce anxiety and improve overall well-being. Supporting example: After my vacation to Bali, I returned home feeling refreshed and rejuvenated.

13. Sub-opinion: Traveling can provide opportunities for personal growth. Explanation: Facing new challenges and stepping out of one's comfort zone can build resilience and self-confidence. Supporting example: During my solo trip to South America, I overcame language barriers and navigated unfamiliar cities, which made me more confident in my abilities.

1.Sub Scores

• Delivery: 3

• Language Use: 3

• Topic Development: 3

2.Estimated Scores

• Total Score: 23

3.Delivery The speaker's delivery is generally clear and fluid, with a consistent pace and only occasional pauses. However, there are some minor issues that need improvement. The speaker should work on varying their sentence structure to create a more engaging speech. Additionally, the speaker should focus on enunciating words more clearly to avoid any potential pronunciation errors.

4.Topic Development The response provided is coherent and well-organized, with clear connections between ideas. However, the speaker could improve by providing more specific examples and details to support their opinion. For instance, the speaker could mention specific TV programs or channels that promote positive or negative influences on society. Additionally, the speaker should work on developing their argument further by discussing the broader implications of television's influence on society, such as its impact on social behavior or cultural values.

5.Language Use

Original Answer: For me, television is a tool that depends on people's minds, which means how we use it. If we use it in a positive way, it will have some benefits. For example, if we watch TV together with our family members, we could discuss some news or topics on the TV. It could promote communication. But if we use television in a negative way, it might hurt our health. If we watch TV for the whole night, we would have no energy to focus on studying or working.

Corrected Answer: For me, television is a tool that depends on people's mindsperspectives ('perspectives' is more appropriate than 'minds' in this context), which means how we use it. If we use it in a positive way, it will have some benefits. For example, if we watch TV together with our family members, we couldcan (use 'can' for better consistency) discuss some news or topics on the TV. It could promote communication. But if we use television in a negative way, it might hurt our health. If we watch TV for the whole night, we wouldwill (use 'will' for better consistency) have no energy to focus on studying or working.

Revised Answer (110 words): In my opinion, television is a tool that depends on people's perspectives and how they utilize it. When used positively, television offers numerous benefits such as fostering communication within families. For instance, watching educational programs or engaging in discussions about current events can strengthen family bonds and promote intellectual growth. Conversely, excessive television consumption can negatively impact one's health and overall productivity. A prime example is binge-watching TV shows late into the night, which can lead to sleep deprivation and reduced focus on essential tasks like studying or working. Ultimately, the influence of television on society depends on the viewer's choices and their ability to strike a balance between entertainment and responsibility.

6.Mind Map

• Preference: Positive influence of television

  • Main Point 1: Fostering communication within families
    • Supporting Example 1: Watching educational programs
    • Supporting Example 2: Discussing current events
  • Main Point 2: Negative impact of excessive television consumption
    • Supporting Example 3: Binge-watching TV shows
    • Supporting Example 4: Sleep deprivation

• Conclusion: Influence depends on viewer's choices and balance between entertainment and responsibility

7.Key Words

8.Additional Examples

1. Watching documentaries can broaden one's knowledge about various subjects, such as history, science, and culture.

2. Participating in family game shows can encourage teamwork and healthy competition among family members.

3. Viewing age-appropriate educational content can enhance children's learning experiences and supplement their school education.

4. Watching excessive violent or inappropriate content can lead to desensitization and negative behavioral changes in viewers.

5. Engaging in social media discussions about popular TV shows can foster a sense of community and shared interests among viewers.

1.子项得分

• 交付：3

• 主题发展：3

• 语言使用：3

2.预估分数

• 23

3.表达 从交付方面来看，这位同学的回答基本上是清晰、流畅的，语速较为稳定，偶尔有停顿。但在某些地方，如“but eventually you found out”，应该改为“but eventually you would find out”，以保持一致的时态。此外，注意正确发音单词，避免拼写错误。建议多练习朗读和听力练习，提高口语表达能力。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，这位同学的回答内容相对连贯、组织良好，观点明确，并给出了合理的例子（如投资银行获得正向现金流）。但可以进一步完善论述，例如在谈到实际支出时提供更多具体的例子和解释。建议在练习时尝试使用更多的连接词和过渡词汇，使回答更加流畅和有说服力。

5. 语言使用

Original:

In my opinion, it's very important to spend money on practical things. Think of yourself winning a lottery of 1 million dollars. It's very easy for you to go on a worldwide trip for a year, but eventually you found out that money will be spent very quickly, and you will become depressed because you cannot sustain the level of pressure you want to have. But in contrast, if you invest those money in the bank, you will get a positive cash flow for the following few years, and that will help you to get your life really changed. So that's why I think spending on practical things is really beneficial.

Revised:

In my opinion, it is crucial to allocate funds toward practical necessities rather than solely for pleasure. Imagine unexpectedly receiving a windfall of one million dollars. While it may be tempting to embark on a year-long, global adventure, the funds would likely be depleted rapidly, leading to disappointment and an inability to maintain the desired lifestyle. On the other hand, if one were to invest that money wisely, such as in a savings account or other financial instruments, it would generate a steady income stream for years to come, significantly improving one's quality of life. Therefore, I firmly believe that prioritizing practical expenditures is the more advantageous choice.

In my opinion, it is crucial (revised "very important" for a more advanced vocabulary) to allocate funds (revised "spend money" for a more precise term) toward practical necessities (revised "practical things" for clearer meaning) rather than solely for pleasure (added this phrase to emphasize the contrast between the two options). Imagine unexpectedly receiving a windfall (revised "winning a lottery" for a more formal expression) of one million dollars. While it may be tempting (revised "it's very easy" for better flow and tone) to embark on a year-long, global adventure (revised "go on a worldwide trip for a year" for smoother phrasing), the funds would likely be depleted rapidly (revised "money will be spent very quickly" for clearer meaning), leading to disappointment and an inability to maintain the desired lifestyle (revised "you will become depressed because you cannot sustain the level of pressure you want to have" for better flow and clarity).

On the other hand, if one were to invest that money wisely (revised "if you invest those money in the bank" for better grammar and flow), such as in a savings account or other financial instruments (added this phrase to provide specific examples), it would generate a steady income stream (revised "you will get a positive cash flow" for more accurate terminology) for years to come, significantly improving one's quality of life (revised "that will help you to get your life really changed" for a stronger conclusion). Therefore, I firmly believe (added this phrase for a stronger conclusion) that prioritizing practical expenditures (revised "spending on practical things" for clearer meaning) is the more advantageous choice (revised "is really beneficial" for a stronger conclusion).

Corrected:

In my opinion, it's very important to spend money on it is crucial (revised "very important" for a more advanced vocabulary) to allocate funds (revised "spend money" for a more precise term) toward practical things. Think necessities (revised "practical things" for clearer meaning) rather than solely for pleasure (added this phrase to emphasize the contrast between the two options). Imagine unexpectedly receiving a windfall (revised "winning a lottery" for a more formal expression) of yourself winning a lottery of 1 one million dollars. It's While it may be tempting (revised "it's very easy for you to go easy" for better flow and tone) to embark on a year-long, global adventure (revised "go on a worldwide trip for a year, but eventually you found out that money year" for smoother phrasing), the funds would likely be depleted rapidly (revised "money will be spent very quickly, quickly" for clearer meaning), leading to disappointment and you an inability to maintain the desired lifestyle (revised "you will become depressed because you cannot sustain the level of pressure you want to have. But in contrast, have" for better flow and clarity).

On the other hand, if one were to invest that money wisely (revised "if you invest those money in the bank, you bank" for better grammar and flow), such as in a savings account or other financial instruments (added this phrase to provide specific examples), it would generate a steady income stream (revised "you will get a positive cash flow for the following few years, and that flow" for more accurate terminology) for years to come, significantly improving one's quality of life (revised "that will help you to get your life really changed. So that's why changed" for a stronger conclusion). Therefore, I think spending firmly believe (added this phrase for a stronger conclusion) that prioritizing practical expenditures (revised "spending on practical things things" for clearer meaning) is the more advantageous choice (revised "is really beneficial.beneficial" for a stronger conclusion).

6. 思维导图

- Preference/Opinion
  - Importance of spending money on practical things

- Main Point
  - Money spent on practical things provides long-term benefits

- Supporting Examples
  - Winning a lottery and spending it wisely
  - Investing in the bank for positive cash flow

- Conclusion
  - Spending on practical things is truly beneficial

7. 关键词

8. 补充示例

9. Sub-opinion: Saving money for emergencies is practical. Explanation: Emergencies can happen at any time, and having a financial cushion can help. Supporting Example: Setting aside money for medical expenses or unexpected job loss.

10. Sub-opinion: Investing in education is a practical choice. Explanation: Education can lead to better job opportunities and increased income. Supporting Example: Attending college or taking professional development courses.

11. Sub-opinion: Spending money on maintaining a healthy lifestyle is practical. Explanation: Good health can prevent future medical expenses and improve overall well-being. Supporting Example: Investing in gym memberships, healthy food, and regular check-ups.

12. Sub-opinion: Buying quality items that last longer is more practical than buying cheap items that break easily. Explanation: Quality items may have a higher upfront cost but save money in the long run. Supporting Example: Purchasing durable appliances or clothing that lasts for years.

13. Sub-opinion: Allocating money for retirement is a practical financial decision. Explanation: Planning for retirement ensures financial stability in later years. Supporting Example: Contributing to a retirement fund or pension plan regularly.

1.子项得分

• Delivery: 3

• Topic Development: 3

• Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

• Estimated Score: 23

3.表达 在表达方面，您的回答相对清晰，但仍有改进的空间。为了提高发音的准确性，请注意以下几点：在 "practical things" 中，应该发出清晰的 "th" 声音；在 "valuable" 中，应该强调第一个音节。此外，尝试减少不必要的停顿，以使语言更流畅。练习这些技巧将有助于提高您的发音和语言表达能力。

4.话题发展 Your response is coherent and well-organized, but it could benefit from more specific examples or details to support your reasons. To improve topic development, consider providing a personal experience or a hypothetical situation that demonstrates the value of spending unexpected money on practical things rather than pleasure. This will help strengthen your argument and make your response more engaging for the listener.

5. 语言使用

Original:

Personally, I think we should spend the unexpected money for practical things rather than use it up for pleasure for two reasons. One reason is that practical things is more valuable and worthwhile too for the money. Another reason is that pleasure only last for a short time. We may fell in greater depression when the money is used up and the pleasure is gone.

Revised:

Personally, I believe it is better to spend unexpected money on practical things rather than using it solely for pleasure, for two main reasons. Firstly, practical items tend to be more valuable and provide a worthwhile return on investment. Secondly, pleasure is often fleeting, and we may experience greater disappointment when the money runs out and the enjoyment fades away.

Personally, I believe it is better to spend unexpected money on practical things (reason: more natural phrasing) rather than using it (reason: clearer language) solely for pleasure, for two main reasons. Firstly, practical items tend to be more valuable (reason: clearer expression) and provide a worthwhile return on investment (reason: added detail). Secondly, pleasure is often fleeting (reason: more accurate description), and we may experience greater disappointment (reason: more precise language) when the money runs out and the enjoyment fades away (reason: smoother phrasing).

Corrected:

Personally, I think we should believe it is better to spend the unexpected money for on practical things (reason: more natural phrasing) rather than use using it up (reason: clearer language) solely for pleasure pleasure, for two main reasons. One reason is that Firstly, practical things is items tend to be more valuable (reason: clearer expression) and provide a worthwhile too for the money. Another reason return on investment (reason: added detail). Secondly, pleasure is that pleasure only last for a short time. We often fleeting (reason: more accurate description), and we may fell in experience greater depression disappointment (reason: more precise language) when the money is used up runs out and the pleasure is gone.enjoyment fades away (reason: smoother phrasing).

6. 思维导图

- Preference or Opinion
  - Spend unexpected money on practical things

- Main Point
  - Practical things are more valuable and worthwhile
  - Pleasure only lasts for a short time

- Supporting Examples
  - Investing in education or skills
  - Saving for emergencies or future needs
  - Purchasing necessary items for daily life

- Conclusion
  - Spending unexpected money on practical things is a wiser choice than using it for temporary pleasure

7. 关键词

8. 补充示例

9. Investing in a gym membership can improve one's physical health, which is a practical use of unexpected money.

10. Using unexpected money to pay off debts can reduce financial stress and lead to a more stable financial situation.

11. Purchasing energy-efficient appliances with the unexpected money can save on electricity bills and help the environment.

12. Donating a portion of the unexpected money to a charity can make a positive impact on others' lives and bring personal satisfaction.

13. Setting aside the unexpected money for future travel plans allows for memorable experiences without the stress of overspending.

1.子项得分

• 交付 (Delivery): 3

• 主题发展 (Topic Development): 3

• 语言使用 (Language Use): 3

2.预估分数

• 总分: 23

3.表达 从交付方面来看，演讲者的语言流利，语速稳定，仅有少量停顿。但在某些地方，不恰当的停顿导致了标点问题。此外，发音不准确也导致了一些拼写错误。建议演讲者加强发音练习，并注意在适当的地方停顿，以提高语言表达能力。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，演讲者提供了一个连贯且组织良好的回答，并在回答中给出了一些实际例子。然而，为了使回答更有说服力，可以考虑提供更多具体的例子和详细的解释。同时，在论述观点时，可以尝试使用更多的连接词和短语来增强逻辑性。

5.语言使用

原文：In my opinion, spending a large amount of money on practical things is much better than spending it on pleasure only, because of one reason. These practical things you can use one day, while pleasure can only make you enjoy for one time. If you buy for example a lot of food, or notebooks, pens for studying, these are very practical things that you can use later in life. For example, with this money, you don't need to buy food for the next month or so, and you don't need to buy supplies for example note taking, or working for the next month or so. With these practical things, you can get prepared for harder times. Let's take an example, for example there's a economic downturn where the food price rises, but since you spend this money on practical food, you have food already, so you don't need to worry, instead of just spending it on pleasure. Thank you.

修正后：In my opinion, I believe that spending a large amount of money on practical things is much better than spending it on solely for pleasure(改为更自然的表达方式), because of one reason(删除多余的词汇). These practical thingsyou can use one day, can be utilized in the future, while pleasure can only make you enjoy for one time(使用更自然的表达方式). If you buyfor example a lot of food, or notebooks, pens for studying, these are very practical things that you can use later in life. For example, with this money, you don't need to buy food for the next month or so, and you don't need to buy supplies forexample note taking, or working for the next month or so. With these practical things, you can get prepared for harder times. Let's take an example, for example there's a economic downturn where the food price rises, but since you spend this money on practical food, you have food already, so you don't need to worry, instead of just spending it on pleasure. Thank you.

I believe that spending a large amount of money on practical things is much better than spending it solely for pleasure because practical items can be utilized in the future while pleasure provides only temporary enjoyment. For instance, investing in necessities such as food and educational supplies like notebooks and pens ensures that we are well-prepared for any unforeseen circumstances. In case of an economic downturn leading to increased food prices, having already spent money on essential items would provide a sense of security and stability.

Another reason is that practical purchases often contribute to our personal growth and development. For example, investing in educational resources or professional development courses can enhance our skills and knowledge, which may lead to better career opportunities and financial stability in the long run. In contrast, spending money solely on pleasure may provide short-term happiness but does not contribute to our overall well-being and success.

In conclusion, allocating a significant amount of money towards practical items is a wise decision as it not only prepares us for unexpected situations but also contributes to our personal growth and long-term success.

6.思维导图

- Preference: Practical things over pleasure
  - Main Point: Future utility and personal growth
    - Supporting Example 1: Investing in necessities (food, educational supplies)
      - Economic downturn and increased food prices
    - Supporting Example 2: Personal growth and development
      - Educational resources, professional development courses
      - Better career opportunities, financial stability
  - Conclusion: Wise decision for long-term success and well-being

7.关键词

8.补充示例

1. Investing in energy-efficient appliances can save money on utility bills and reduce environmental impact.

2. Purchasing a reliable vehicle can provide safe and efficient transportation, leading to increased independence and mobility.

3. Allocating funds towards health insurance or a gym membership can promote physical well-being and prevent potential health issues.

4. Saving money for emergencies or retirement ensures financial security and peace of mind in the future.

5. Investing in real estate can provide a stable living environment and potentially generate passive income through rental properties.

1.子项得分

• 交付 (Delivery): 3

• 主题发展 (Topic Development): 2.5

• 语言使用 (Language Use): 2.5

2.预估分数

• 总分: 19

3.表达 从交付方面来看，回答的语言流利度较好，但有些地方存在不恰当的停顿。建议在练习口语时注意保持连贯性和一致的语速，减少不必要的停顿。此外，注意发音的准确性，以避免拼写错误。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，回答内容基本上符合题目要求，但在组织结构和论据支持方面还有待加强。建议在回答问题时明确表达观点，并给出具体的例子来支持观点。例如，在提到祖父出售冰箱获得了很多钱的例子时，可以进一步阐述这笔钱如何用于实际需求以及带来了长久的幸福感。

5. 语言使用

Original:

I think it's better to spend money on practical things. I feel this way for several reasons. First, I think practical things can foster financial security and stability, which can improve our quality of life. Second, I think practical things can also give us happiness that lasts longer. For example, my grandfather didn't get a fridge, but he sold it, then gained a lot of money. In this way,

Revised:

I believe it is better to spend an unexpected large amount of money on practical things rather than solely for pleasure. This viewpoint is based on two primary reasons. Firstly, investing in practical items or experiences can contribute to financial security and stability, ultimately enhancing our overall quality of life. Secondly, practical expenditures often result in long-lasting happiness and satisfaction.

For instance, when my grandfather unexpectedly received a refrigerator, he decided to sell it and invest the money wisely. This decision not only provided him with a significant financial gain but also allowed him to secure his future. Another example is when a friend of mine won a substantial sum in the lottery; instead of spending it frivolously, she chose to pay off her student loans and purchase a modest home. This wise allocation of funds has brought her immense peace of mind and contentment.

I believe it is better to spend an unexpected large amount of money on practical things rather than solely for pleasure (revised for clarity and formality). This viewpoint is based on two primary reasons (added for structure). Firstly, investing in practical items or experiences can contribute to financial security and stability (rephrased for advanced vocabulary), ultimately enhancing our overall quality of life (added for stronger conclusion). Secondly, practical expenditures often result in long-lasting happiness and satisfaction (rephrased for advanced vocabulary).

For instance, when my grandfather unexpectedly received a refrigerator (changed "didn't get" to "received" for clarity), he decided to sell it and invest the money wisely (rephrased for smoother transition). This decision not only provided him with a significant financial gain (revised for advanced vocabulary) but also allowed him to secure his future (added for stronger conclusion). Another example is when a friend of mine won a substantial sum in the lottery; instead of spending it frivolously (revised for advanced vocabulary), she chose to pay off her student loans and purchase a modest home (added specific example). This wise allocation of funds (revised for advanced vocabulary) has brought her immense peace of mind and contentment (rephrased for stronger conclusion).

Corrected:

I think it's believe it is better to spend an unexpected large amount of money on practical things. I feel this way for several reasons. First, I think things rather than solely for pleasure (revised for clarity and formality). This viewpoint is based on two primary reasons (added for structure). Firstly, investing in practical things items or experiences can foster contribute to financial security and stability, which can improve stability (rephrased for advanced vocabulary), ultimately enhancing our overall quality of life. Second, I think life (added for stronger conclusion). Secondly, practical things can also give us expenditures often result in long-lasting happiness that lasts longer. and satisfaction (rephrased for advanced vocabulary).

For example, instance, when my grandfather didn't get a fridge, unexpectedly received a refrigerator (changed "didn't get" to "received" for clarity), he decided to sell it and invest the money wisely (rephrased for smoother transition). This decision not only provided him with a significant financial gain (revised for advanced vocabulary) but he sold it, then gained a lot of money. In this way,also allowed him to secure his future (added for stronger conclusion). Another example is when a friend of mine won a substantial sum in the lottery; instead of spending it frivolously (revised for advanced vocabulary), she chose to pay off her student loans and purchase a modest home (added specific example). This wise allocation of funds (revised for advanced vocabulary) has brought her immense peace of mind and contentment (rephrased for stronger conclusion).

6. 思维导图

- Preference or Opinion
  - Spend money on practical things

- Main Point
  - Financial security and stability
  - Long-lasting happiness

- Supporting Examples
  - Grandfather selling fridge for profit

- Conclusion
  - Investing in practical things improves quality of life and provides lasting happiness

7. 关键词

8. 补充示例

9. Buying a fuel-efficient car can save money on gas and reduce environmental impact, leading to long-term satisfaction.

10. Investing in education or professional development can lead to better job opportunities and higher income, improving overall life quality.

11. Purchasing a home can provide a sense of stability and security, as well as potential financial gains through property appreciation.

12. Spending money on health insurance or preventative care can help avoid costly medical bills in the future, ensuring financial stability.

13. Allocating funds for an emergency savings account can provide peace of mind and financial security in case of unexpected expenses.

1.Sub Scores

• Delivery: 3

• Topic Development: 3

• Language Use: 3

2.Estimated Scores

• Total Score: 23

3.Delivery The speaker's speech is mostly clear and fluid, with a consistent pace and only occasional pauses. However, there are some minor issues with punctuation, such as the use of commas in "for example, computers and smartphones for playing and online courses." To improve delivery, the speaker should practice proper pausing and intonation to convey their ideas more effectively.

4.Topic Development The response is coherent and well-organized, with clear connections between ideas and sufficient support or examples. The speaker effectively explains the benefits of investing in practical items like computers and smartphones for education and gaming purposes. However, the example of buying an iPhone Pro for $3,000 could be better explained to show how its value diminished over time. To improve topic development, the speaker should provide more specific examples or details to support their argument.

5.Language Use

Original Answer: I think investing my money in practical items, for example, computers and smartphones for playing and online courses brings long-term benefits that outweigh the temporary pleasure of indulging in luxury goods. Computers and smartphones provide a doorway to educational resources, allowing me to acquire new skills throughout online courses. Additionally, gaming can be both entertaining and mentally stimulating. It cultivates problem-solving abilities, strategic thinking, and teamwork, especially when I'm playing online multiplayer games. However, while indulging in luxurious items may provide instant gratification, their value diminishes over time. For example, I once bought an iPhone Pro for $3,000, however, after a year, it became out of style and was worthless.

Corrected Answer: I think investing my money in practical items, for example, such as computers and smartphones for playing and, online courses, brings long-term benefits that outweigh the temporary pleasure of indulging in luxury goods. Computers and smartphones provide a doorway to educational resources, allowing me to acquire new skills throughoutthrough online courses. Additionally, gaming can be both entertaining and mentally stimulating. It cultivates problem-solving abilities, strategic thinking, and teamwork, especially when I'm playing online multiplayer games. However, while indulging in luxurious items may provide instant gratification, their value diminishes over time. For example, I once bought an iPhone Pro for $3,000, however, after a year, it became out of style and was worthlessdevalued.

Reasons and Explanations:

• Added commas for better sentence structure and flow.

• Replaced "for example," with "such as" to make the sentence sound more natural.

• Changed "throughout" to "through" for a more accurate description of the process.

• Replaced "worthless" with "devalued" for a more precise description of the situation.

Revised Answer (110 words): I believe that investing my money in practical items, such as computers and smartphones for playing games and taking online courses, brings long-term benefits that outweigh the temporary pleasure of indulging in luxury goods. Computers and smartphones offer access to educational resources, enabling me to acquire new skills through online courses. Moreover, gaming can be both entertaining and mentally stimulating, fostering problem-solving abilities, strategic thinking, and teamwork when playing online multiplayer games. Conversely, while luxury items may provide instant gratification, their value diminishes over time. For instance, I once purchased an iPhone Pro for $3,000; however, after a year, it became outdated and significantly devalued.

6.Mind Map

• Preference: Investing in practical items
  • Main Point: Long-term benefits outweigh temporary pleasure
    • Supporting Example 1: Computers and smartphones for education and gaming
      • Access to educational resources
      • Acquiring new skills through online courses
      • Gaming as a mentally stimulating activity
    • Supporting Example 2: Luxury items lose value over time
      • Instant gratification vs. diminishing value
      • Personal experience with iPhone Pro purchase
  • Conclusion: Practical investments provide lasting benefits, while luxury items lose value and provide only temporary satisfaction

7.Key Words

8.Additional Examples

1. Investing in a reliable vehicle for transportation can save money on repairs and maintenance in the long run, providing more value than an expensive sports car that may require costly upkeep.

2. Purchasing energy-efficient appliances can lead to long-term savings on utility bills, while also being environmentally friendly, compared to buying high-end appliances that may not be as cost-effective.

3. Allocating funds towards further education or professional development can lead to career advancement and increased earning potential, as opposed to spending money on extravagant vacations that provide only short-term enjoyment.

4. Contributing to a retirement fund or savings account ensures financial security in the future, whereas spending on luxury items may result in financial instability later in life.

5. Donating a portion of the money to charitable causes can create a lasting impact on the lives of others and provide personal fulfillment, rather than spending it all on material possessions that offer only temporary satisfaction.

1.子项得分

• 交付（Delivery）: 2

• 主题发展（Topic Development）: 3

• 语言使用（Language Use）: 3

2.预估分数

• 总分：22

3.表达 作为一名托福老师，在交付方面，我认为这个回答的语速不够流畅，有些地方停顿不当。建议在练习口语时，注意保持语速的稳定和流畅度，尽量减少不必要的停顿。同时，注意正确发音，以避免拼写错误。

4.话题发展 在话题发展方面，这个回答提供了一个观点和两个原因来支持观点。但是，这个回答可以更加完整和有说服力。建议在练习时，尝试提供更具体的例子来支持你的观点，并确保你的回答紧密围绕主题展开。

5. 语言使用

Original:

I agree with the idea that when people who unexpectedly receive a large amount of money spend it on practical things, it's better. First, they can use the money to learn something they couldn't learn in the past, so they can broaden their horizons after they learn something they couldn't do. Second, practical things means it is useful, so they can get something very practical after they learn something they couldn't do in the past.

Revised:

I believe that it is better for people who unexpectedly receive a large amount of money to spend it on practical things rather than solely for pleasure. Firstly, they can invest the money in acquiring new skills or knowledge that they were previously unable to pursue, thus expanding their horizons and enriching their lives. Secondly, by focusing on practicality, they can obtain valuable assets or experiences that have long-term benefits and contribute to their overall well-being.

I believe that it is better for people who unexpectedly receive a large amount of money (revised for clarity) to spend it on practical things (revised for conciseness) rather than solely for pleasure (added "solely" to show a balance between practicality and pleasure). Firstly, they can invest the money in acquiring new skills or knowledge (rephrased to be more specific) that they were previously unable to pursue, thus expanding their horizons (more advanced vocabulary) and enriching their lives (added for emphasis). Secondly, by focusing on practicality (rephrased for smoother transition), they can obtain valuable assets or experiences (more specific examples) that have long-term benefits (added emphasis on long-term value) and contribute to their overall well-being (stronger conclusion).Corrected:

I agree with the idea believe that when it is better for people who unexpectedly receive a large amount of money (revised for clarity) to spend it on practical things, it's better. First, things (revised for conciseness) rather than solely for pleasure (added "solely" to show a balance between practicality and pleasure). Firstly, they can use invest the money in acquiring new skills or knowledge (rephrased to learn something be more specific) that they couldn't learn in the past, so were previously unable to pursue, thus expanding their horizons (more advanced vocabulary) and enriching their lives (added for emphasis). Secondly, by focusing on practicality (rephrased for smoother transition), they can broaden obtain valuable assets or experiences (more specific examples) that have long-term benefits (added emphasis on long-term value) and contribute to their horizons after they learn something they couldn't do. Second, practical things means it is useful, so they can get something very practical after they learn something they couldn't do in the past.overall well-being (stronger conclusion).

6. 思维导图

- Preference/Opinion
  - Practical spending

- Main Point
  - Better to spend on practical things

- Supporting Examples
  - Learning new skills
  - Broadening horizons
  - Gaining useful knowledge or items

- Conclusion
  - Practical spending leads to personal growth and long-term benefits

7. 关键词

8. 补充示例

9. Sub-opinion: Saving for emergencies is a practical choice. Explanation: Unexpected expenses can arise, and having a financial cushion can help. Supporting Example: Setting aside money for medical emergencies or job loss can provide peace of mind.

10. Sub-opinion: Paying off debts is a wise use of unexpected money. Explanation: Reducing debt can improve one's financial situation and credit score. Supporting Example: Paying off student loans or credit card debt can lead to long-term financial stability.

11. Sub-opinion: Investing in personal health and well-being is important. Explanation: Good health is essential for a happy and fulfilling life. Supporting Example: Joining a gym, taking up yoga, or seeking therapy can contribute to overall wellness.

12. Sub-opinion: Contributing to charity or community projects is a meaningful way to spend money. Explanation: Helping others can bring personal satisfaction and make a positive impact on society. Supporting Example: Donating to a local food bank or sponsoring a child's education can change lives for the better.

13. Sub-opinion: Home improvements can increase the value of one's property. Explanation: Upgrading or maintaining a home can lead to long-term financial benefits. Supporting Example: Renovating the kitchen or adding energy-efficient features can boost the resale value of the house.

1.子项得分

• Delivery: 3

• Language Use: 3

• Topic Development: 3

2.预估分数

• Estimated Score: 23

3.表达 从表达方面来看，发言者的语言流畅度和语速基本一致，偶尔有停顿。建议发言者注意以下几点以提高口语表达能力：1) 在适当的地方停顿，以免造成标点符号使用不当；2) 注意发音准确性，避免拼写错误；3) 不要忽略单词大小写错误。通过改进这些方面，您的口语表达将更加自然流畅。

4.话题发展 The speaker provides a coherent and well-organized response, with clear connections between ideas and sufficient support or examples. However, there is room for improvement in terms of topic development. The speaker could provide more specific examples to support their points, such as mentioning how investing in education or starting a business with the money could lead to long-term benefits. Additionally, the speaker could also address the opposing view (spending money on pleasure) and explain why they believe spending on practical things is a better choice. By doing so, the response would be more balanced and persuasive.

5. 语言使用

Original:

From my point of view, I fully subscribe to the belief that a large amount of money should be spent on practical things. For example, first of all, it can actually raise our life standard. Using the money on practical things like cars or houses will make our life more convenient, and we can do things we like with some small amount of money, and it's just enough. Secondly, it can help us to avoid waste of money. If we just go to KTV very regularly, very frequently, and go out to eat very frequently, we may waste a lot of money, and we may regret about it.

Revised:

In my opinion, spending a large amount of money on practical things is the better choice. One reason is that it can significantly improve our standard of living. Investing in practical items such as cars or houses not only makes our lives more convenient but also allows us to enjoy our hobbies and interests with a smaller portion of the funds. Another supporting example is that allocating money towards practical purposes helps prevent wasteful spending. If we were to indulge in leisure activities like frequent visits to karaoke bars or dining out often, we might end up squandering a substantial amount of money and later regret our decisions.

In my opinion, spending a large amount of money on practical things is the better choice because it can significantly improve our standard of living. I revised this sentence to make it sound more natural and to clearly state my position on the topic. One reason is that it can significantly improve our standard of living. Investing in practical items such as cars or houses not only makes our lives more convenient but also allows us to enjoy our hobbies and interests with a smaller portion of the funds. I added this explanation to provide a clear example of how spending money on practical things can benefit us.

Another supporting example is that allocating money towards practical purposes helps prevent wasteful spending. I chose this phrase because it sounds more natural and emphasizes the importance of being responsible with our finances. If we were to indulge in leisure activities like frequent visits to karaoke bars or dining out often, we might end up squandering a substantial amount of money and later regret our decisions. This sentence was revised to provide a specific example of how spending money on pleasure only could lead to negative consequences, thus strengthening my argument for choosing practical spending over pleasure spending.

Corrected:

From

In my point of view, I fully subscribe to the belief that opinion, spending a large amount of money should be spent on practical things. For example, first of all, on practical things is the better choice because it can actually raise our life standard. Using the money on practical things like significantly improve our standard of living. I revised this sentence to make it sound more natural and to clearly state my position on the topic. One reason is that it can significantly improve our standard of living. Investing in practical items such as cars or houses will make our life not only makes our lives more convenient, and we convenient but also allows us to enjoy our hobbies and interests with a smaller portion of the funds. I added this explanation to provide a clear example of how spending money on practical things can do things we like benefit us.

Another supporting example is that allocating money towards practical purposes helps prevent wasteful spending. I chose this phrase because it sounds more natural and emphasizes the importance of being responsible with some small amount of money, and it's just enough. Secondly, it can help us to avoid waste of money. our finances. If we just go to KTV very regularly, very frequently, and go were to indulge in leisure activities like frequent visits to karaoke bars or dining out to eat very frequently, often, we may waste a lot of money, and we may might end up squandering a substantial amount of money and later regret about it.our decisions. This sentence was revised to provide a specific example of how spending money on pleasure only could lead to negative consequences, thus strengthening my argument for choosing practical spending over pleasure spending.

6. 思维导图

- Preference/Opinion
  - Spend money on practical things

- Main Point
  - Raise life standard
    - Examples
      - Cars
      - Houses
  - Avoid waste of money
    - Examples
      - Not going to KTV frequently
      - Not eating out frequently

- Conclusion
  - Spending on practical things is beneficial and prevents regret

7. 关键词

8. 补充示例

9. Investing in education can improve our career prospects and lead to a better future, which is a practical use of money.

10. Spending money on health care and insurance can provide us with a sense of security and well-being, which is essential for a happy life.

11. Allocating funds for home improvements or renovations can increase the value of our property and make our living environment more comfortable.

12. Saving money for emergencies or unexpected expenses is a practical way to ensure financial stability and peace of mind.

13. Donating to charitable organizations or causes can make a positive impact on society and help those in need, which is a meaningful way to spend money.

1.子项得分

• 交付 (Delivery): 3

• 主题发展 (Topic Development): 3.5

• 语言使用 (Language Use): 3

2.预估分数

• 预估总分: 26

3.表达 从交付方面来看，演讲者的语言表达较为清晰，但在某些地方存在轻微的停顿。建议练习更流畅、自然的语言表达，以便在实际考试中更好地展示自己的英语水平。同时，注意正确发音，避免出现拼写错误。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，演讲者提供了一个相对连贯和有组织的回答，并通过个人经历和朋友的例子来支持观点。但是，可以尝试提供更多具体的例子和详细信息来丰富论述。此外，在陈述观点时可以使用更多连接词和过渡词汇，使整个回答更加流畅。

5. 语言使用

Original:

I agree to spend that money on practical things for two reasons. Firstly, it can be beneficial to our future. Take me as an instance, if I got unexpected money, I would spend it to promote my skills so that I could get a better job in the future. Secondly, spend money on practical things can make people have a feeling of achievement. If you spend money totally on games or other things, you will feel empty. One of my friends spends all his salary on games and he always says to me that he doesn't know the meaning of life. So, I agree to spend money on practical things.

Revised:

I believe it is better to spend unexpected money on practical things for two reasons. Firstly, it can be advantageous for our future. For example, if I were to receive a large sum of money unexpectedly, I would invest it in enhancing my skills, which could lead to better job opportunities in the future. Secondly, spending money on practical matters can give individuals a sense of accomplishment. On the contrary, if one were to spend all their money solely on leisure activities such as games, they might feel unfulfilled. A friend of mine who spends his entire salary on gaming often confides in me about his struggle to find meaning in life. Therefore, I strongly advocate for spending unexpected funds on practical endeavors.

I believe it is better to spend unexpected money on practical things for two reasons. Firstly (revised for clarity and formality), it can be advantageous (advanced vocabulary) for our future. For example (smooth transition), if I were to receive (proper grammar) a large sum of money unexpectedly (natural flow of statement), I would invest it in enhancing (advanced vocabulary) my skills, which could lead to better job opportunities in the future (strong conclusion). Secondly (smooth transition), spending money on practical matters can give individuals a sense of accomplishment (natural flow of statement). On the contrary (smooth transition), if one were to spend all their money solely on leisure activities such as games, they might feel unfulfilled (advanced vocabulary). A friend of mine who spends his entire salary on gaming often confides in me about his struggle to find meaning in life (supporting example). Therefore, I strongly advocate for spending unexpected funds on practical endeavors (strong conclusion).

Corrected:

I agree

I believe it is better to spend that unexpected money on practical things for two reasons. Firstly, Firstly (revised for clarity and formality), it can be beneficial to advantageous (advanced vocabulary) for our future. Take me as an instance, For example (smooth transition), if I got unexpected money, were to receive (proper grammar) a large sum of money unexpectedly (natural flow of statement), I would spend invest it to promote in enhancing (advanced vocabulary) my skills so that I skills, which could get a lead to better job opportunities in the future. Secondly, future (strong conclusion). Secondly (smooth transition), spending money on practical matters can give individuals a sense of accomplishment (natural flow of statement). On the contrary (smooth transition), if one were to spend money all their money solely on leisure activities such as games, they might feel unfulfilled (advanced vocabulary). A friend of mine who spends his entire salary on gaming often confides in me about his struggle to find meaning in life (supporting example). Therefore, I strongly advocate for spending unexpected funds on practical things can make people have a feeling of achievement. If you spend money totally on games or other things, you will feel empty. One of my friends spends all his salary on games and he always says to me that he doesn't know the meaning of life. So, I agree to spend money on practical things.endeavors (strong conclusion).

6. 思维导图

- Preference or Opinion
  - Spend money on practical things

- Main Point
  - Beneficial to our future
  - Feeling of achievement

- Supporting Examples
  - Investing in skills for a better job
  - Friend spending salary on games feels empty

- Conclusion
  - Agree to spend money on practical things for a better future and sense of accomplishment

7. 关键词

8. 补充示例

9. Sub-opinion: Investing in health is practical. Explanation: Good health is essential for a happy life. Supporting Example: Buying a gym membership to stay fit and healthy.

10. Sub-opinion: Saving money for emergencies is wise. Explanation: Unexpected expenses can arise at any time. Supporting Example: Setting aside money for medical emergencies or car repairs.

11. Sub-opinion: Spending on education is a long-term investment. Explanation: Knowledge and skills can improve career prospects. Supporting Example: Enrolling in a professional course to enhance job qualifications.

12. Sub-opinion: Contributing to charity is meaningful. Explanation: Helping others in need can bring personal satisfaction. Supporting Example: Donating to a local food bank or supporting a child's education.

13. Sub-opinion: Allocating funds for personal growth is valuable. Explanation: Developing hobbies and interests can enrich one's life. Supporting Example: Taking up painting classes or learning a musical instrument.

1.Sub Scores

• Delivery: 2

• Topic Development: 2

• Language Use: 2

2.Estimated Scores

• Total Score: 17

3.Delivery The speaker's delivery could be improved by focusing on clear, fluid speech with a consistent pace. There were occasional pauses that disrupted the flow of the speech. To improve, the speaker should practice speaking more naturally and confidently, ensuring that their pronunciation is accurate and that they avoid inappropriate pauses.

4.Topic Development The topic development in the response could be improved by providing a more coherent and well-organized response. The speaker should focus on making clear connections between their ideas and providing sufficient support or examples to back up their points. To enhance their response, they can consider using transitional phrases to connect ideas and ensure that each point is fully developed before moving on to the next one.

5. Language Use

Original:

I prefer to spend money only for practical things. First, to make money, it's not easy for us to make money, and we should use it efficiently and costly. And we need to buy things, concentrate on useful things, but not just for pleasure. Second, to buy things practically, and we can build ourselves with analysis skills that can enhance our understanding of things.

Revised:

I believe it is better to spend money on practical things rather than solely for pleasure. Firstly, earning money is not an easy task, and we should use it efficiently and wisely. Focusing on purchasing useful items rather than just for pleasure ensures that our hard-earned money is well-spent. Secondly, by buying practical things, we can develop our analytical skills, which can enhance our understanding of the value of items and help us make better financial decisions in the future.

I believe it is better to spend money on practical things rather than solely for pleasure because earning money is not an easy task (revised for clarity and natural tone), and we should use it efficiently and wisely (revised for proper grammar). Focusing on purchasing useful items rather than just for pleasure (revised for natural flow) ensures that our hard-earned money is well-spent (revised for smooth transition). Secondly, by buying practical things (revised for clarity), we can develop our analytical skills (revised for proper grammar), which can enhance our understanding of the value of items and help us make better financial decisions in the future (revised for strong conclusion).

Corrected:

I prefer believe it is better to spend money only on practical things rather than solely for practical things. First, to make money, it's pleasure because earning money is not an easy task (revised for us to make money, clarity and natural tone), and we should use it efficiently and costly. And we need to buy things, concentrate wisely (revised for proper grammar). Focusing on purchasing useful things, but not items rather than just for pleasure. Second, to buy pleasure (revised for natural flow) ensures that our hard-earned money is well-spent (revised for smooth transition). Secondly, by buying practical things practically, and (revised for clarity), we can build ourselves with analysis develop our analytical skills that (revised for proper grammar), which can enhance our understanding of things.the value of items and help us make better financial decisions in the future (revised for strong conclusion).

6. Display title: 6.Mind Map

- Preference or Opinion
  - Spend money on practical things

- Main Point
  - Efficient and cost-effective use of money

- Supporting Examples
  - Difficulty in making money
  - Focus on useful items instead of pleasure

- Conclusion
  - Develop analysis skills and enhance understanding

7. Display title: 7.Key Words

8. Display title: 8.Additional Examples

9. Example: Investing in education

   • Sub-opinion: Education is a practical expense that can improve our future prospects.
   • Explanation: By spending money on education, we invest in ourselves and our ability to succeed.
   • Supporting example: Taking a course to learn a new skill can lead to better job opportunities.

10. Example: Buying energy-efficient appliances

    • Sub-opinion: Energy-efficient appliances are practical and save money in the long run.
    • Explanation: These appliances use less energy, reducing utility bills and helping the environment.
    • Supporting example: Replacing an old refrigerator with an energy-efficient model can save hundreds of dollars per year.

11. Example: Purchasing quality clothing

    • Sub-opinion: Quality clothing is a practical investment that lasts longer than cheap alternatives.
    • Explanation: Spending more on well-made clothes means they will last longer and need to be replaced less often.
    • Supporting example: A high-quality winter coat may be more expensive initially but will last for many years.

12. Example: Saving for emergencies

    • Sub-opinion: Setting aside money for emergencies is a practical financial decision.
    • Explanation: Having an emergency fund ensures that we are prepared for unexpected expenses.
    • Supporting example: Saving money for medical emergencies can prevent financial stress during difficult times.

13. Example: Prioritizing needs over wants

    • Sub-opinion: Focusing on needs rather than wants is a practical approach to spending money.
    • Explanation: By prioritizing essential items, we ensure that our basic needs are met before indulging in luxury items.
    • Supporting example: Choosing to buy groceries instead of a new video game demonstrates responsible spending habits.

1. Sub Scores

• Delivery: 3

• Topic Development: 3

• Language Use: 3

2. Estimated Scores

• Total Score: 23

3. Delivery The speaker's delivery is generally clear and fluid, with a consistent pace and only occasional pauses. However, there are some minor issues with punctuation and pronunciation that could be improved. To enhance the delivery, the speaker should practice proper pausing between sentences and work on pronouncing certain words more accurately.

4. Topic Development The response is coherent and well-organized, with clear connections between ideas and sufficient support or examples. However, there is room for improvement in terms of providing more specific details and expanding on the reasons given. For example, the speaker could elaborate on how saving time by driving to school would benefit them in other aspects of their life or provide more examples of practical things they would spend the money on. Additionally, the mention of "subway" in the context of a sports club seems misplaced and should be replaced with a more relevant example.

5. Language Use

Original:

on practical things because of two reasons. Firstly, I would be able to save a lot of time. If I get a car, it takes me only 15 minutes to school. However, if I'd like to choose subway, I'll spend at least one hour. I think spending the time saved on reading books or having a good rest is good for me. Secondly, I can use the money to join a sports club, such as subway, such as badminton. It is good for my health. I can improve my speed and strength, and I can also...

Revised:

I believe spending a large amount of money on practical things is better for two reasons. Firstly, it can save a significant amount of time. For example, if I were to purchase a car, my commute to school would only take 15 minutes, as opposed to an hour using public transportation like the subway. The time saved could be spent on reading books or getting proper rest, which would be beneficial for my overall well-being. Secondly, investing in practical activities such as joining a sports club, like badminton, can improve my health. Participating in sports can enhance my speed and strength while also providing an enjoyable pastime.

I believe spending a large amount of money on practical things is better for two reasons (I revised the opening sentence to provide a clear stance on the topic). Firstly, it can save a significant amount of time (I changed "I would be able to save" to "it can save" for smoother phrasing). For example, if I were to purchase a car (I used "if I were to" instead of "if I get" for proper grammar), my commute to school would only take 15 minutes, as opposed to an hour using public transportation like the subway (I corrected "choose subway" to "using public transportation like the subway"). The time saved could be spent on reading books or getting proper rest (I changed "having a good rest" to "getting proper rest"), which would be beneficial for my overall well-being. Secondly, investing in practical activities such as joining a sports club, like badminton (I corrected "such as subway" to "such as joining a sports club"), can improve my health. Participating in sports can enhance my speed and strength while also providing an enjoyable pastime (I added this phrase for a stronger conclusion).Corrected:

I believe spending a large amount of money on practical things because is better for two reasons (I revised the opening sentence to provide a clear stance on the topic). Firstly, it can save a significant amount of two reasons. Firstly, I time (I changed "I would be able to save a lot save" to "it can save" for smoother phrasing). For example, if I were to purchase a car (I used "if I were to" instead of time. If I get a car, it takes me "if I get" for proper grammar), my commute to school would only take 15 minutes to school. However, if I'd minutes, as opposed to an hour using public transportation like to choose subway, I'll spend at least one hour. I think spending the the subway (I corrected "choose subway" to "using public transportation like the subway"). The time saved could be spent on reading books or having getting proper rest (I changed "having a good rest is good for me. rest" to "getting proper rest"), which would be beneficial for my overall well-being. Secondly, I can use the money to join investing in practical activities such as joining a sports club, such as subway, such as badminton. It is good for like badminton (I corrected "such as subway" to "such as joining a sports club"), can improve my health. I can improve Participating in sports can enhance my speed and strength, and I can also...strength while also providing an enjoyable pastime (I added this phrase for a stronger conclusion).

6. Display title: 6.Mind Map

- Preference/Opinion
  - Practical things

- Main Point
  - Save time
    - Example: Car vs. subway
  - Invest in health
    - Example: Joining a sports club

- Supporting Examples
  - Time saved can be used for reading or resting
  - Improved speed and strength from sports club participation

- Conclusion
  - Prioritizing practical things leads to better time management and overall well-being

7. Display title: 7.Key Words

8. Display title: 8.Additional Examples

9. Cooking at home instead of eating out can save money and lead to healthier meal choices.

   • Sub-opinion: Home-cooked meals are often more nutritious.
   • Explanation: You can control the ingredients and portion sizes.
   • Supporting example: Preparing meals with fresh vegetables and lean proteins.

10. Investing in quality, versatile clothing items rather than trendy, disposable fashion.

    • Sub-opinion: Timeless pieces last longer and can be worn in various settings.
    • Explanation: Better quality materials and construction ensure durability.
    • Supporting example: A classic blazer can be dressed up for work or down for casual outings.

11. Choosing energy-efficient appliances to reduce utility bills and environmental impact.

    • Sub-opinion: Energy-efficient appliances are a smart investment.
    • Explanation: They use less energy, which saves money and helps the environment.
    • Supporting example: An energy-efficient washing machine uses less water and electricity.

12. Opting for public transportation or carpooling instead of driving alone to work.

    • Sub-opinion: Sharing transportation reduces traffic congestion and pollution.
    • Explanation: Fewer cars on the road lead to less fuel consumption and emissions.
    • Supporting example: Taking the bus or joining a carpool group with coworkers.

13. Participating in community events to build connections and contribute to local causes.

    • Sub-opinion: Engaging in community activities fosters a sense of belonging.
    • Explanation: Meeting neighbors and supporting local initiatives strengthens community bonds.
    • Supporting example: Volunteering at a food bank or attending neighborhood meetings.

1.子项得分

• 交付（Delivery）: 3

• 主题发展（Topic Development）: 3

• 语言使用（Language Use）: 3

2.预估分数

• 总分：23

3.表达 从交付方面来看，发言者的语音清晰，语速稳定，仅有少量停顿。为了提高表达能力，建议在练习时注意控制停顿的频率，以保持流利度。同时，注意发音的准确性，以避免拼写错误。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，发言者提供了一个连贯且组织良好的回答，并在回答中给出了明确的观点和充足的例子。然而，可以进一步完善论点的支持和举例。例如，在谈到购买保险和电脑时，可以更详细地说明这些投资是如何带来长期收益的。此外，在提供论据时尽量使用具体事例，以增强说服力。

5. 语言使用

Original:

In my opinion, I firmly believe that spending on practical things is a better choice. That's because, first, it can make us save money and make this money for insurance in the future. For example, if I gain a large amount of money, I can buy the insurance for my future. So if I have any disease or something, accidents, I can recover quickly. Secondly, it also can improve our life quality. By buying something with long-term benefits, such as computer, it contributes to our life quality.

Revised:

In my opinion, I firmly believe that allocating funds towards practical items is a more advantageous decision. This is due to two primary reasons: financial security and long-term benefits. Firstly, investing in practical necessities can lead to significant savings and provide a safety net for future uncertainties. For instance, if I were to acquire a substantial sum of money, I would consider purchasing insurance to safeguard my well-being. Consequently, in the event of illness or accidents, I would be able to recover more efficiently. Secondly, procuring items with lasting benefits can greatly enhance our quality of life. For example, investing in a high-quality computer can contribute positively to our daily experiences and productivity.

In my opinion, I firmly believe that allocating funds towards practical items ("allocating funds" and "practical items" are more advanced vocabulary) is a more advantageous decision (rephrased for better flow). This is due to two primary reasons: financial security and long-term benefits (smooth transition). Firstly, investing in practical necessities (advanced vocabulary) can lead to significant savings and provide a safety net for future uncertainties (more precise explanation). For instance, if I were to acquire a substantial sum of money (proper grammar), I would consider purchasing insurance to safeguard my well-being (clearer expression). Consequently, in the event of illness or accidents, I would be able to recover more efficiently (strong conclusion for the first supporting example). Secondly, procuring items with lasting benefits (advanced vocabulary) can greatly enhance our quality of life (natural flow). For example, investing in a high-quality computer can contribute positively to our daily experiences and productivity (strong conclusion for the second supporting example).

Corrected:

In my opinion, I firmly believe that spending on allocating funds towards practical things items ("allocating funds" and "practical items" are more advanced vocabulary) is a more advantageous decision (rephrased for better choice. That's because, first, it flow). This is due to two primary reasons: financial security and long-term benefits (smooth transition). Firstly, investing in practical necessities (advanced vocabulary) can make us save lead to significant savings and provide a safety net for future uncertainties (more precise explanation). For instance, if I were to acquire a substantial sum of money and make this money for (proper grammar), I would consider purchasing insurance to safeguard my well-being (clearer expression). Consequently, in the future. event of illness or accidents, I would be able to recover more efficiently (strong conclusion for the first supporting example). Secondly, procuring items with lasting benefits (advanced vocabulary) can greatly enhance our quality of life (natural flow). For example, if I gain investing in a large amount of money, I high-quality computer can buy the insurance for my future. So if I have any disease or something, accidents, I can recover quickly. Secondly, it also can improve our life quality. By buying something with long-term benefits, such as computer, it contributes contribute positively to our life quality.daily experiences and productivity (strong conclusion for the second supporting example).

6. 思维导图

- Preference or Opinion
  - Spending on practical things

- Main Point
  - Save money
  - Improve life quality

- Supporting Examples
  - Insurance for the future
  - Buying a computer for long-term benefits

- Conclusion
  - Practical spending is a better choice

7. 关键词

                                             |-To give something, especially money, in order to provide or achieve something together with other people.| 有助于;捐献               | A computer contributes to our life quality by providing long-term benefits.                         |

8. 补充示例

1. Sub-opinion: Investing in education is practical. Explanation: Education can provide better job opportunities. Supporting example: Spending money on a professional course can lead to a higher-paying job.

2. Sub-opinion: Buying energy-efficient appliances is practical. Explanation: They save money on energy bills. Supporting example: An energy-efficient refrigerator can reduce electricity costs in the long run.

3. Sub-opinion: Spending on health and fitness is practical. Explanation: It leads to a healthier and happier life. Supporting example: Joining a gym or purchasing home workout equipment can improve physical and mental well-being.

4. Sub-opinion: Saving for retirement is practical. Explanation: It ensures financial security in old age. Supporting example: Contributing to a retirement fund can provide a stable income after retirement.

5. Sub-opinion: Spending on experiences is practical. Explanation: Experiences create lasting memories and personal growth. Supporting example: Traveling to new places can broaden one's horizons and create unforgettable memories.