TOEFL Speaking Task 2 Sample: The woman expresses her opinion of the proposed policy change. State her opinion, and explain the reasons she gives for holding that opinion

1.子项得分

• 交付：3

• 话题发展：3

• 语言使用：3

2.预估分数

• 总分：23

3.表达 回答中的发音和语速基本清晰，但有时会出现不必要的停顿。为了提高口语表达能力，建议在练习时注意保持连贯流畅的语速，并尽量减少不必要的停顿。同时，注意正确发音单词，以避免拼写错误。

4.话题发展 回答内容基本上符合题目要求，提到了女生对政策的看法及原因。但在组织结构上可以更加清晰。建议在回答时先明确提出女生的观点，然后分点阐述她的理由，并在每个理由之间保持逻辑连贯。例如：“女生不同意这项政策，原因有两点：首先，她认为白天骑自行车并无危险，因为大部分事故都是在夜间发生的；其次，校园巴士效率低下，导致学生难以出行。”这样的表述会使回答更加有条理。

5.语言使用

原文：The school have published a policy about prohibit bicycles on campus because firstly, they think riding bicycle is a safety risk. The university has published a policy prohibiting bicycles on campus, primarily because they believe riding bicycles poses a safety risk.（将"have"改为"has"，将"about prohibit"改为"prohibiting"，将"riding bicycle"改为"riding bicycles"，使句子结构和语法更准确。）

Secondly, they have provided a free compass bus system in campus to replace riding bicycle and the girl disagrees with the policy because firstly, most accidents involving bicycles happened at night so she thinks riding bicycle at daytime is not danger. Additionally, they have provided a free campus bus system to replace bicycle use. The girl disagrees with the policy, arguing that most accidents involving bicycles occur at night, so she believes riding bicycles during the day is not dangerous.（将"compass"改为"campus"，将"in campus"改为“on campus”，将“riding bicycle”改为“bicycle use”，将“at daytime”改为“during the day”，使句子结构和语法更准确。）

Secondly, now students hard to get around because the school buses are inefficient so students need to wait for a long time to take it. Furthermore, she points out that students find it difficult to get around due to the inefficiency of the school buses, causing them to wait for extended periods before boarding.（将“now students hard to get around”改为“students find it difficult to get around”，将“the school buses are inefficient so students need to wait for a long time to take it”改为“due to the inefficiency of the school buses, causing them to wait for extended periods before boarding”，使句子结构和语法更准确。）

修订后的回答（140词）：

The university has published a policy prohibiting bicycles on campus, primarily because they believe riding bicycles poses a safety risk. Additionally, they have provided a free campus bus system to replace bicycle use. The girl disagrees with the policy, arguing that most accidents involving bicycles occur at night, so she believes riding bicycles during the day is not dangerous. Furthermore, she points out that students find it difficult to get around due to the inefficiency of the school buses, causing them to wait for extended periods before boarding.

6.思维导图

- Policy
  - Prohibiting bicycles
  - Safety risk

- Campus bus system
  - Free
  - Replace bicycle use

- Girl's opinion
  - Disagrees with policy
  - Reasons:
    - Accidents mostly at night
    - Daytime riding not dangerous
    - Inefficient school buses
    - Long waiting times

7.关键词

1.子项得分

• 交付（Delivery）：2

• 话题发展（Topic Development）：3

• 语言使用（Language Use）：2

2.预估分数

• 总分：19

3.表达 在交付方面，回答中存在一些问题。首先，句子之间的连接不够流畅，需要更多的连词来使句子更自然。其次，部分单词发音不准确，需要加强发音练习。建议多听英语录音并模仿，以提高发音和语言流利度。

4.话题发展 在话题发展方面，回答基本上涵盖了女生的观点和原因。但是，在表述时可以更加清晰和有条理。例如，在提到女生的观点时，可以明确指出她反对这项政策。在解释原因时，可以使用连词如“首先”和“其次”来组织论点。此外，在提到男生的观点时，应该注意与女生的观点区分开来。建议在练习时多关注文章结构和逻辑性。

5.语言使用

Original: the school will prohibit bicycles on campus because firstly they think bicycles are safety risks. Secondly, they have free campus bus system in the campus and the man disagrees with the proposal because firstly most accidents happened at night so he thinks it's not danger at daytime. Secondly, students now hard to get around because the school buses are inefficient so it's not convenient for student to take.

Corrected: The university plans to prohibit bicycles on campus primarily due to safety concerns. Additionally, they provide a free campus bus system as an alternative. The woman disagrees with this proposal, stating that most accidents occur at night, making it less dangerous during daytime. Furthermore, she believes that the current bus system is inefficient, making it inconvenient for students to use. (修改了句子结构，使用了更高级的词汇，改进了语法和连贯性。例如，将“the school”改为“the university”，将“firstly”和“secondly”改为“primarily”和“additionally”。同时，将原文中的部分表述进行了调整，使其更自然。)

Revised Answer (140 words):

The university plans to prohibit bicycles on campus primarily due to safety concerns. Additionally, they provide a free campus bus system as an alternative. The woman disagrees with this proposal for two main reasons. First, she points out that most accidents involving bicycles occur at night, making it less dangerous during daytime when most students need to move around and attend classes. Second, she believes that the current bus system is inefficient and runs infrequently, making it inconvenient for students to use as a primary mode of transportation on campus. In conclusion, the woman opposes the proposed policy change, arguing that bicycles do not pose a significant safety risk during the day and that the existing bus system is not a viable alternative due to its inefficiency and inconvenience for students.

6.思维导图

- University's Proposal
  - Prohibit bicycles
  - Safety concerns
  - Free campus bus system

- Woman's Opinion
  - Disagrees with proposal
  - Reasons:
    - Accidents mostly at night
    - Daytime less dangerous
    - Inefficient bus system
    - Inconvenient for students

7.关键词

1.子项得分

• 交付 (Delivery): 3

• 主题发展 (Topic Development): 3.5

• 语言使用 (Language Use): 3

2.预估分数

• 总分: 26

3.表达 回答中的语速和发音大部分都很清晰，但在某些地方存在轻微的停顿。为了提高交付得分，建议练习更流畅、连贯的发音，并尽量减少不必要的停顿。同时，注意正确发音以避免拼写错误。

4.话题发展 回答内容基本上是连贯和有条理的，但可以进一步优化。首先，在提到女生的观点时，可以更明确地表达她反对这一政策。其次，在解释原因时，可以更详细地描述女生提到的事故发生在夜晚以及校园巴士效率低下等问题。通过提供更多细节和支持性例子，可以使回答更加充实和有说服力。

5.语言使用

原文：The school published a policy about prohibiting bicycles on campus because firstly, they thought riding bicycle was a safety risk to students, secondly, they have provided a free campus bus system for students, The university proposed a policy to prohibit bicycles on campus due to concerns about student safety and the availability of a free campus bus system.（将句子结构进行了简化，使其更自然流畅。同时，将"school"改为"university"以保持一致性。）

and the girl disagrees with the policy because firstly, she thinks most accidents about riding bicycles happened at night, so riding bicycles at daytime is not dangerous, The female student disagrees with the policy, arguing that most bicycle accidents occur at night and daytime cycling is not dangerous.（将句子结构进行了简化，使其更自然流畅。同时，将"girl"改为"female student"以保持一致性。）

secondly, now students are hard to get around because the school buses are inefficient and students need to wait for a long time for that. Additionally, she believes that the campus buses are inefficient, making it difficult for students to get around and causing them to wait for extended periods.（将句子结构进行了简化，使其更自然流畅。同时，将"school buses"改为"campus buses"以保持一致性。）

修订版（140词）：

The university proposed a policy to prohibit bicycles on campus due to concerns about student safety and the availability of a free campus bus system. The female student disagrees with the policy, arguing that most bicycle accidents occur at night and daytime cycling is not dangerous. Additionally, she believes that the campus buses are inefficient, making it difficult for students to get around and causing them to wait for extended periods.

6.思维导图

- University Policy
  - Prohibit bicycles
  - Reasons
    - Student safety
    - Free campus bus system

- Female Student's Opinion
  - Disagrees with policy
  - Reasons
    - Most accidents at night
    - Daytime cycling not dangerous
    - Campus buses inefficient
    - Difficult for students to get around
    - Long waiting times

7.关键词