TOEFL TPO 42 Speaking Task 4 Sample: Using the example of the thunder bird, explain a possible effect of a major climate change.

1.子项得分

• 交付 (Delivery): 3

• 语言使用 (Language Use): 3

• 话题发展 (Topic Development): 3

2.预估分数

• 总分: 23

3.表达 回答中的语言表达较为流畅，但仍有改进的空间。建议在发音和语调方面多加练习，以提高口语的自然度和流利度。此外，注意在适当的地方停顿，以便让听众更好地理解所表达的内容。

4.话题发展 回答内容基本上符合题目要求，但可以进一步完善。在描述气候变化对雷鸟的影响时，可以更详细地说明科学家是如何得出这一结论的，以及他们所依据的证据。同时，在组织回答时，注意保持逻辑性和连贯性，使得整个回答更加有说服力。

5.语言使用

原文：In the lecture, the professor is talking about the effect of a major climate change. In the lecture, the professor discusses the impact of significant climate change.（将"talking about"改为"discusses"，使语言更为正式；将"effect"改为"impact"，词汇更丰富；将"a major climate change"改为"significant climate change"，表达更准确。）

原文：She explains it by the example of the Thunderbird. She illustrates this with the example of the Thunderbird.（将"explains it by"改为"illustrates this with"，使句子结构更自然。）

原文：She mentions that scientists find that many Thunderbirds gather together near an ancient lake. She mentions that scientists discovered many Thunderbirds gathered near an ancient lake.（将"find that many Thunderbirds gather together near an ancient lake."改为"discovered many Thunderbirds gathered near an ancient lake."，使句子结构更简洁。）

原文：This is strange since it is not common that many animals die in one place. This is unusual because it is rare for numerous animals to die in one location.（将"is strange since it is not common that many animals die in one place."改为"is unusual because it is rare for numerous animals to die in one location."，词汇更丰富，表达更准确。）

原文：They guess that during the drought, the Thunderbirds gather near the lake, but it keeps not raining. They hypothesize that during the drought, the Thunderbirds gathered near the lake, but the rain did not come.（将"guess"改为"hypothesize"，使语言更为正式；将"keeps not raining"改为"the rain did not come"，使句子结构更自然。）

原文：So the water in the lake just runs out and the Thunderbird dies together near the lake. As a result, the lake's water depleted, and the Thunderbirds perished together near the lake.（将"just runs out"改为"depleted"，词汇更丰富；将"dies together near the lake."改为"perished together near the lake."，使句子结构更自然。）

修订后的回答（140字）：

In the lecture, the professor discusses the impact of significant climate change. She illustrates this with the example of the Thunderbird. She mentions that scientists discovered many Thunderbirds gathered near an ancient lake. This is unusual because it is rare for numerous animals to die in one location. They hypothesize that during the drought, the Thunderbirds gathered near the lake, but the rain did not come. As a result, the lake's water depleted, and the Thunderbirds perished together near the lake.

6.思维导图

- Impact of significant climate change
  - Example: Thunderbird
    - Discovery: gathered near ancient lake
      - Unusual: rare for numerous animals to die in one location
      - Hypothesis: drought, gathered near lake, rain did not come
        - Result: lake's water depleted, Thunderbirds perished together

7.关键词