TOEFL TPO 48 Speaking Task 4 Sample: Using points and examples from the lecture, explain two ways that advertising can negatively affect the environment.

1.子项得分

• 交付：2

• 语言使用：2

• 话题发展：2

2.预估分数

• 总分：18

3.表达 从交付方面来看，发言者的语速较快，有时不太清晰。建议发言者在练习时放慢语速，注意发音的准确性。此外，适当地加入停顿，以便让听众更好地理解所表达的内容。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，发言者提到了两个广告对环境产生负面影响的方式，但在解释和举例方面略显混乱。建议发言者在练习时更加关注组织结构和逻辑性，确保在解释和举例时能够清晰地表达观点。同时，尝试使用更多的连接词来帮助组织思路和连接观点。

5.语言使用

原文：The professor talks about the sellers using advertising to sell products which are beneficial to them. However, many people are critical about that advertisement because it has the environmental problems and have negative effect on it. The professor discusses how companies use advertising to sell products, which can be beneficial for them. However, many people criticize advertisements due to their negative impact on the environment.（将句子结构进行了调整，使其更自然流畅。同时修正了一些语法错误。）

So first, it is a waste of energy and resources. Some of them are useless, for instance, the kitchen service, which is different from the floors and the models, such as the waste of the paper, and the paper is made of the trees. Firstly, advertising can lead to a waste of energy and resources. For example, some advertisements are irrelevant to certain consumers, like a kitchen renovation service advertised through a booklet made of paper, which ultimately wastes trees.（对原文进行了重写，使句子结构更清晰，同时修正了语法错误。）

Many of them are rented, but not needed, and the natural environment surrounding. Many recipients of such advertisements may rent their homes and have no need for these services, contributing to environmental waste.（对原文进行了重写，使句子结构更清晰，同时修正了语法错误。）

The second, about the landscape, no matter how beautiful it is, it is damaged by a visible environment, such as the area in the mountain, about the big deal, and it is only can be appreciated if it gets into the nature and the environment and gets in the way of it. Secondly, advertising can negatively affect the natural beauty of landscapes. For instance, large billboards in scenic mountain areas can obstruct the view and diminish the overall beauty of the environment.（对原文进行了重写，使句子结构更清晰，同时修正了语法错误。）

修订版（140词）：

The professor discusses how companies use advertising to sell products, which can be beneficial for them. However, many people criticize advertisements due to their negative impact on the environment. Firstly, advertising can lead to a waste of energy and resources. For example, some advertisements are irrelevant to certain consumers, like a kitchen renovation service advertised through a booklet made of paper, which ultimately wastes trees. Many recipients of such advertisements may rent their homes and have no need for these services, contributing to environmental waste. Secondly, advertising can negatively affect the natural beauty of landscapes. For instance, large billboards in scenic mountain areas can obstruct the view and diminish the overall beauty of the environment.

6.思维导图

- Introduction
  - Companies use advertising
  - Criticism due to environmental impact

- Point 1: Waste of resources
  - Irrelevant advertisements
  - Example: Kitchen renovation booklet
  - Wasting trees and paper

- Point 2: Affecting natural beauty
  - Landscapes and scenic areas
  - Example: Large billboards in mountain areas
  - Obstructing views and diminishing beauty

7.关键词