TOEFL TPO 18 Writing Task 1 Sample: Summarize the points made in the lecture, being sure to explain how they cast doubt on the specific solutions presented in the reading passage.

1.子项得分 任务完成度：4 组织：4 连贯与衔接：4 语言使用：3

2.预估分数

25. 3.任务完成度

整体来说，文章较好地回答了题目要求，总结了听力中的观点，并对阅读中提出的解决方案进行了质疑。然而，文章在解释听力中的观点时，部分细节描述不够准确。建议在概括听力观点时更加注意细节的准确性。

示例1： 原文：This is because the climate of Florida can be affected by larger changes of global climate, which means the weather in Florida may get drier, which is not beneficial to the growth of Torreya. 修改后：This is because the coolest and dampest areas within Torreya's microclimate are being strongly affected by changes in the climate of the larger region, making it unlikely for Torreya to have the conditions it needs to survive.

示例2： 原文：The professor proves that the author's claim is indefensible by pointing out that compared to wild species, which is genetical diverse, Torreya planted in the research center can not. survive in the longer time due to the lack of diverse genes. 修改后：The professor argues that research centers would not have enough capacity to keep a large and genetically diverse population of Torreya trees, making them incapable of surviving diseases in the long term.

4.文章结构与组织 文章的结构和组织方面表现较好，有明确的引言、主体和结论。每段都集中讨论了一个具体的观点和支持细节。然而，部分段落之间的衔接可以进一步改进，使文章更加流畅。

示例1： 原文：First, even though the author states that Torreya population can grow by transition to to the same place where it survived for many years, such as northern part of Florida, the professor argues in the lecture that this is not a satisfactory solution. 修改后：First, although the author suggests reestablishing Torreya in its original location in northern Florida, the professor argues that this is not a satisfactory solution due to changes in climate.

示例2： 原文：Moreover, contrary to the statement in the reading that planting Torreya in a totally different place, the professor contends that the author ignores the disadvantages to the local plants of bringing in a new species. 修改后：Moreover, while the reading proposes relocating Torreya to an entirely different location, the professor contends that this approach could have negative consequences for local plants and ecosystems.

5. 语法批改

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Finally, the professor asserts that plants used in experimental environment can not resist diseasesdiseases,(This rule identifies whether commas are missing in a sentence.) whereas the author claims that moving TorreyaNorway(misspelling) to research centers is an effective approach. The professor proves that the author's claim is indefensible by (Two consecutive spaces)pointing out that compared to wild species, which is geneticalgenetic(misspelling) diverse, TorreyaNorway(misspelling) planted in the research center can not. surviveSurvive(Checks that a sentence starts with an uppercase letter) in the longer time due to the lack of diverse genes.

Section Title: 6.文章修订

The reading passage and the lecture both explore potential ways to prevent the decline of Torreya. The author of the reading believes that there are three ways to stop the decline. However, the professor casts doubts on these claims and uses three specific points to support her idea.

First, even though the author states that Torreya population can grow by transitioning to the same place where it survived for many years, such as northern part of Florida, the professor argues in the lecture that this is not a satisfactory solution. This is because the climate of Florida can be affected by larger changes in global climate, which means the weather in Florida may get drier, which is not beneficial to the growth of Torreya. Clearly, the professor's argument disproves its counterpart in the reading.

Moreover, contrary to the statement in the reading that planting Torreya in a totally different place is a viable option, the professor contends that this approach overlooks potential disadvantages to local plants resulting from introducing a new species. The professor challenges this claim by presenting an example where a new species may kill some endangered species, leading to unexpected outcomes.

Finally, while maintaining that moving Torreya to research centers is an effective approach, the author's assertion is contradicted by the professor who posits that plants used in experimental environments cannot resist diseases as effectively as their wild counterparts. The professor proves that this claim is indefensible by pointing out that compared to wild species which are genetically diverse, Torreya planted in research centers cannot survive long-term due to their lack of diverse genes. (270 words)

Revised essay: Section Title: 7.文章批改

The reading passage and the lecture both explore potential ways to prevent the decreasing decline of Torreya. The author of the reading believes that there are three ways to stop the decline. However, the professor casts doubts on these claims and uses three specific points to support her idea.

First, even though the author states that Torreya population can grow by transition to by transitioning (changed "transition" to "transitioning" for correct verb form) to the same place where it survived for many years, such as northern part of Florida, the professor argues in the lecture that this is not a satisfactory solution. This is because the climate of Florida can be affected by larger changes of in (changed "of" to "in" for correct preposition usage) global climate, which means the weather in Florida may get drier, which is not beneficial to the growth of Torreya. Obviously Clearly (changed "Obviously" to "Clearly" for a more neutral tone), the professor's argument disproves its counterpart in the reading.

Moreover, contrary to the statement in the reading that planting Torreya Torreya in a totally different place, place is a viable option (added "is a viable option" for clarity), the professor contends that the author ignores the this approach overlooks potential disadvantages to the local plants of bringing in resulting from introducing a new species. The professor challenges the author's statement this claim by presenting an example that where a new species may kill some endangered species, leading to an unexpected out come. outcomes.

Finally, the professor asserts while maintaining that moving Torreya to research centers is an effective approach, the author's assertion is contradicted by (changed "whereas" to "the author's assertion is contradicted by" for better sentence structure) the professor who posits that plants used in experimental environment can not environments cannot resist diseases whereas the author claims that moving Torreya to research centers is an effective approach. as effectively as their wild counterparts. The professor proves that the author's this claim is indefensible by by pointing out that compared to wild species, species which is genetical are genetically diverse, Torreya planted in the research center can not. centers cannot survive in the longer time long-term due to the their lack of diverse genes.

8. Mind Map

- Introduction
  - Reading passage and lecture topic: Preventing Torreya decline
  - Author's view: Three ways to stop the decline
  - Professor's view: Doubts on these claims

- Point 1: Transitioning to northern Florida
  - Reading: Torreya can grow in its historical location
  - Lecture: Climate change affects Florida's weather, making it unsuitable for Torreya growth

- Point 2: Planting Torreya in a different place
  - Reading: Viable option for Torreya growth
  - Lecture: Potential harm to local plants and endangered species

- Point 3: Moving Torreya to research centers
  - Reading: Effective approach for preservation
  - Lecture: Lack of genetic diversity, less disease resistance compared to wild counterparts

- Conclusion
  - Summarize professor's counterarguments against the reading passage claims

9. Keywords