TOEFL TPO 47 Writing Task 1 Sample: Summarize the points made in the lecture, being sure to explain how they oppose the specific points made in the reading passage.

1.子项得分 Task fulfillment: 4 Organization: 4 Coherence and Cohesion: 4 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数 Estimated Score: 25

3.任务完成度 整体来说，你的文章在完成任务方面做得不错。你成功地总结了听力课程中的观点，并解释了它们如何反驳阅读文章中的观点。然而，为了进一步提高你的任务完成度，建议你在描述听力课程中的论据时更加详细和具体。此外，在引用听力课程中的信息时，请确保准确地表达教授所说的内容。

示例1（改进前）：However, the professor opposes this notion, citing that some newly discovered fossils provide evidence that pterosaurs would be capable of flying since they had hair like furs to keep warm, as warm-blood animals do. 示例1（改进后）：However, the professor opposes this notion, citing that some recently discovered pterosaur fossils indicate that pterosaurs had a dense, hairlike covering, somewhat similar to fur. This fur-like covering is typical of warm-blooded animals because they need to maintain a high body temperature when external conditions are cold.

示例2（改进前）：To be specific, she pionts out that despite the large frame, pterosaurs' bones were hollow, enabling them to be light enough to be able to fly by flaping their wings. 示例2（改进后）：To be specific, she points out that the bones of pterosaurs were hollow instead of solid. Hollow, lightweight bones would have kept the pterosaurs’ weight low despite their large body frames, allowing them to stay airborne by flapping their wings.

4.文章结构与组织 Your essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body, and conclusion. Each paragraph focuses on a specific point and provides supporting details from the listening lecture. However, to improve your essay's organization and coherence, consider using more explicit transitions between ideas and paragraphs. This will help guide the reader through your essay more smoothly.

Example 1 (Before Improvement): To begin with, the article asserts that pterosaurs were cold-blood animals whose metabolism were unable to generate enough energy to support their flying. Example 1 (After Improvement): To begin with, the article asserts that pterosaurs were cold-blooded animals whose metabolism was unable to generate enough energy to support their flying. In contrast, the professor argues that...

Example 2 (Before Improvement): Thirdly, the author claims that muscle on pterosaurs' back legs were too weak that they could neither run fast nor jump high, making them impossible to take off from ground, thus could not fly. Example 2 (After Improvement): Lastly, while the author claims that muscles on pterosaurs' back legs were too weak for them to run fast or jump high enough for takeoff, the professor presents a different perspective by stating...

5. 语法批改

The reading passage and the listening lecture both delve into the feasibility of pterosaurs flying. While the reading passage presents three reasons to support that pterosaurs are impossible to fly, the listening lecture challenges these main points by offering counterarguments.

To begin with, the article asserts that pterosaurs were cold-blood animals whose metabolism were unable to generate enough energy to support their flying. However, the professor opposes this notion, citing that some newly discovered fossils provide evidence that pterosaurs would be capable of flying since they had hair like furs to keep warm, as warm-blood animals do. Furthermore, warm-blood animals use fur to maintain their body temperature. Consequently, pterosaurs, like warm-blood animals, possess metabolism which is able to provide energy for flying, which contradicts what was said in the reading.

Secondly, the writer states that pterosaurs were totoo(to/two (too) late/soon/much) heavy to power their flight by flapingflaming(misspelling) the wings. The speaker, though, rebuts this idea by positing that there were special structures inside pterosaurs to support them to fly. To be specific, she piontspoints(misspelling) out that despite the large frame, pterosaurs' bones were hollow, enabling them to be light enough to be able to fly by flapingflaming(misspelling) their wings. Therefore, the conclusion in the reading is irrational.

Thirdly, the author claims that muscle on pterosaurs' back legs were too weak that they could neither run fast nor jump high, making them impossible to take off from ground, thus could not fly. Nevertheless, the lecturer disputes this asserting by arguing that there were big differences between pterosaurs and bird. To elaborate, she contends that rather than only using the back legs to lauchlaunch(misspelling) like birds, pterosaurs use all their four limslies(misspelling) to take off from the ground. As a result, their four limslies(misspelling) were enough to power their launch, which proves the idea in the reading is untenable.

Section Title: 6.文章修订

The reading passage and the listening lecture both delve into the feasibility of pterosaurs flying. While the reading passage presents three reasons to support that pterosaurs are impossible to fly, the listening lecture challenges these main points by offering counterarguments.

To begin with, the article asserts that pterosaurs were cold-blooded animals whose metabolism was unable to generate enough energy to support their flying. However, the professor opposes this notion, citing that some newly discovered fossils provide evidence that pterosaurs would be capable of flying since they had hair-like fur to keep warm, as warm-blooded animals do. Furthermore, warm-blooded animals use fur to maintain their body temperature. Consequently, pterosaurs, like warm-blooded animals, possess metabolism which is able to provide energy for flying, which contradicts what was said in the reading.

Secondly, the writer states that pterosaurs were too heavy to power their flight by flapping their wings. The speaker, though, rebuts this idea by positing that there were special structures inside pterosaurs to support them in flying. To be specific, she points out that despite their large frame, pterosaurs' bones were hollow, enabling them to be light enough to be able to fly by flapping their wings. Therefore, the conclusion in the reading is irrational.

Thirdly, the author claims that muscles on pterosaurs' back legs were too weak for them to run fast or jump high enough for takeoff from ground level; thus they could not fly. Nevertheless, the lecturer disputes this assertion by arguing that there were significant differences between pterosaurs and birds. To elaborate, she contends that rather than only using their back legs for launching like birds do; pterosaurs used all four limbs when taking off from the ground. As a result, their four limbs provided enough power for launching themselves into flight, which proves the idea in the reading is untenable. (307 words)

The reading passage and the listening lecture both delve into the feasibility of pterosaurs flying. While the reading passage presents three reasons to support that pterosaurs are impossible to fly, the listening lecture challenges these main points by offering counterarguments.

To begin with, the article asserts that pterosaurs were cold-blood cold-blooded animals (changed "cold-blood" to "cold-blooded" for proper terminology) whose metabolism were was (changed "were" to "was" for subject-verb agreement) unable to generate enough energy to support their flying. However, the professor opposes this notion, citing that some newly discovered fossils provide evidence that pterosaurs would be capable of flying since they had hair hair-like fur (changed "hair like furs furs" to "hair-like fur" for clarity and proper phrasing) to keep warm, as warm-blood warm-blooded animals do. Furthermore, warm-blood warm-blooded animals use fur to maintain their body temperature. Consequently, pterosaurs, like warm-blood warm-blooded animals, possess metabolism which is able to provide energy for flying, which contradicts what was said in the reading.

Secondly, the writer states that pterosaurs were to too heavy (added "too" for emphasis) to power their flight by flaping the flapping their wings. The speaker, though, rebuts this idea by positing that there were special structures inside pterosaurs to support them to fly. in flying (changed "to fly" to "in flying" for better phrasing). To be specific, she pionts points out that despite the their large frame, frame (changed "the large frame" to "their large frame"), pterosaurs' bones were hollow, enabling them to be light enough to be able to fly by flaping flapping their wings. Therefore, the conclusion in the reading is irrational.

Thirdly, the author claims that muscle muscles on pterosaurs' back legs were too weak that they could neither for them (added "for them")to run fast or jump high enough for takeoff from ground level (changed "to run fast nor jump high, making them impossible to take off high" to "to run fast or jump high enough for takeoff from ground, ground level" for clarity); thus they could not fly. Nevertheless, the lecturer disputes this asserting assertion by arguing that there were big significant differences between pterosaurs and bird. birds (changed "big differences" to "significant differences" for better word choice). To elaborate, she contends that rather than only using the their back legs to for launching like birds do (changed "to lauch like birds, pterosaurs use birds" to "for launching like birds do"); pterosaurs used all their four lims to take limbs when taking off from the ground. ground (changed "lims" to "limbs"). As a result, their four lims were limbs provided enough to power their launch, for launching themselves into flight (added "themselves into flight"), which proves the idea in the reading is untenable.

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Section Title: 8. Mind Map

• Introduction

  • Reading passage and listening lecture
  • Topic: Feasibility of pterosaurs flying

• Point 1: Cold-blooded vs. warm-blooded

  • Reading: Pterosaurs were cold-blooded, not enough energy for flying
  • Lecture: Evidence of hair-like fur, warm-blooded, sufficient energy for flying

• Point 2: Weight and wing flapping

  • Reading: Pterosaurs too heavy to fly by flapping wings
  • Lecture: Hollow bones, lightweight, able to fly by flapping wings

• Point 3: Leg muscles and takeoff

  • Reading: Weak leg muscles, unable to run or jump for takeoff
  • Lecture: Used all four limbs for takeoff, enough power for flight

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Section Title: 9. Keywords