TOEFL TPO -1 Writing Task 1 Sample: Question:Summarize the points made in the lecture, being sure to explain how they reply to each of the three explanations presented in the reading passage.

1.子项得分 Task fulfillment: 4 Organization: 3 Coherence and Cohesion: 3 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数 Estimated Score: 22

3.任务完成度 整体来说，你的文章回答了题目要求的问题，但在某些方面还有待改进。首先，在引用听力部分的论据时，尽量使用更精确的词汇和表达。其次，在对比阅读和听力部分的观点时，可以更明确地指出它们之间的关系。

示例1（原文）：The first reason provided by the author in the reading part is that sturgeon jump put of water to catch flying insects especially in early morning and evening when most fresh water occurs. 示例1（修改后）：The reading passage suggests that sturgeon jump out of the water to catch flying insects, particularly during early morning and evening when most freshwater fish feed.

示例2（原文）：This idea was challenged by the professor in the listening part. 示例2（修改后）：However, the professor in the listening passage challenges this idea by stating that...

4.文章结构与组织 Your essay has a basic structure with an introduction, body, and conclusion. However, there is room for improvement in terms of organization and coherence. Try to make your paragraphs more focused on a single point, and use clear transitions between ideas and paragraphs.

Example 1 (Original): The first reason provided by the author in the reading part is that sturgeon jump put of water to catch flying insects especially in early morning and evening when most fresh water occurs. Example 1 (Improved): In the reading passage, the first explanation for sturgeon jumping out of the water is to catch flying insects, particularly during early morning and evening when most freshwater fish feed.

Example 2 (Original): This idea was challenged by the professor in the listening part. Example 2 (Improved): In contrast, the professor in the listening passage challenges this idea by stating that sturgeon do not eat during summer months and are bottom feeders that do not consume insects.

5. 语法批改

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Section Title: 6.文章修订

Gulf sturgeon are large fish that reside in Florida rivers during the summer months, after spending the winter in the Gulf of Mexico. They are known for their habit of jumping several feet out of the water and returning with a loud splash. The reading passage proposes three different explanations for this behavior, while the listening passage refutes each of these theories.

Firstly, the reading suggests that sturgeon jump to catch flying insects as a food source, particularly during early morning and evening when most freshwater fish feed. However, the lecturer disputes this claim, stating that sturgeon do not eat during summer because they have already fed in the Gulf of Mexico during winter. Furthermore, she emphasizes that sturgeon are bottom feeders with specialized mouths for feeding on the seafloor, not insects.

Secondly, the reading posits that sturgeon jump to remove parasites from their scales. It highlights how they shake themselves vigorously in mid-air and hit the water with great force on their sides. Contrarily, the professor argues that although sturgeon do have parasites, these parasites are internal rather than external on their scales. She also points out that farm-raised sturgeon with external parasites do not exhibit jumping behavior, indicating no connection between jumping and parasite removal.

Lastly, the reading claims that increased sturgeon jumping during tourist season indicates aggression towards tourists invading their territory. In contrast, the lecturer asserts that collisions between boats and sturgeon are rare accidents caused by fast-moving boats inadvertently colliding with jumping fish. She also notes that sturgeon will jump regardless of whether boats are present or not.

In conclusion, while various theories exist regarding why Gulf sturgeon jump out of water, none of those presented in the reading passage withstand scrutiny from opposing evidence provided by the listening passage. (298 words)

Revised essay: The reading talks about discusses three different theories about why sturgeon often jump out of water. But However, the professor in the listening part disagree disagrees with all those statement statements mentioned by the reading, she said stating that they all have significant weakness. weaknesses.

The first reason provided by the author in the reading part is that sturgeon jump put is that sturgeon jump out of water to catch flying insects insects, especially in early morning and evening when most fresh water occurs. freshwater fish feed. This idea was challenged by the professor in the listening part. She claims that sturgeon does do not have the this feeding behavior in the summer and they feed on Sulf food from the Gulf of Mexico in winter. winter (reason for revising: clarity and accuracy). Moreover, Sulf, which are sturgeon prey by sturgeon, are feed on on creatures found at the bottom of the river rivers or seas. seas (reason for revising: simplicity and clarity). So based on this situation information, it’s impossible for sturgeon to jump out of water in order unlikely for sturgeon to jump out of water to catch insects. insects (reason for revising: tone).

Jumping out of the water so as to remove parasites on their skin is the second explanation provided by the author. This idea was rebutted by the professor, she illustrate who explains that parasites is dangerous exactly, are indeed dangerous, but they are not found on sturgeon’s skin. skin (reason for revising: clarity). Instead, it’s they are inside their body. bodies (reason for revising: grammar). Furthermore, parasites are mostly occur in farm fishing but they don’t embody jumping behavior in the farm, is not observed among farm-raised sturgeon (reason for revising: clarity), so we can not really see the there doesn't seem to be a connection between the parasites and the jumping behavior. behavior (reason for revising: tone).

The last explanation established proposed by the author is that sturgeon jump out of water because tourists invade sturgeon’s territory. Even more is that sturgeon in particular jump out of the water their territory, particularly during tourist season. This hypothesis was rejected by the professor, the reason who reasons that collisions between boats and sturgeon are accidental (reason for revising: clarity). Additionally, she provided is that the collision between the boat and sturgeon are just by accident. Plus points out that sturgeon will jump out of water whether are their boats are present or not. not (reason for revising: grammar). So this phenomenon can demonstrate that sturgeon jump out of water because of the collision rather than suggests that sturgeon jumping is not provoked by tourists.tourists (reason for revising: tone).

8. Mind Map

- Essay Structure
    - Introduction
        - Gulf sturgeon
        - Jumping behavior
        - Reading vs. listening passage
    - Explanation 1: Catching insects
        - Reading: Sturgeon jump to catch insects as food
        - Listening: Sturgeon don't eat during summer, specialized mouths for bottom feeding
    - Explanation 2: Removing parasites
        - Reading: Sturgeon jump to remove parasites from scales
        - Listening: Parasites are internal, farm-raised sturgeon don't jump for parasite removal
    - Explanation 3: Aggression towards tourists
        - Reading: Increased jumping during tourist season indicates aggression
        - Listening: Collisions are rare accidents, sturgeon jump regardless of boat presence
    - Conclusion
        - None of the theories in the reading passage withstand scrutiny from listening passage

- Lecture Points:
    1. Sturgeon don't eat during summer months.
    2. Specialized mouths for bottom feeding.
    3. Internal parasites, not external.
    4. Farm-raised sturgeon don't jump for parasite removal.
    5. Rare accidents between boats and sturgeon.
    6. Sturgeon jump regardless of boat presence.

9. Keywords

Sample sentences:

1. Gulf sturgeons are known for their habit of jumping out of the water.

2. Sturgeons are bottom feeders with specialized mouths for feeding on the seafloor.

3. The lecturer mentioned that sturgeons have internal parasites.

4. Sturgeons shake themselves vigorously in mid-air while jumping.

5. The reading claims that increased sturgeon jumping indicates aggression towards tourists.

6. The reading suggests sturgeons jump due to tourists invading their territory.

7. The lecturer asserts that collisions between boats and sturgeon are caused by fast-moving boats inadvertently colliding with jumping fish.

8. None of the theories in the reading passage withstand scrutiny from opposing evidence provided by the listening passage.

9. The theories presented in the reading passage do not withstand the counterarguments from the listening passage.

10. The listening passage refutes each of the theories proposed in the reading passage.