TOEFL TPO 66 Speaking Task 4 Sample: Using points and examples from the lecture, explain two different hoarding strategies.

1. Sub Scores

• Delivery: 3

• Language Use: 3

• Topic Development: 3

2. Estimated Scores

• Total Score: 23

3. Delivery The speaker's delivery is generally clear and fluid, with a consistent pace and only occasional pauses. However, there are some punctuation problems that result from inappropriate pauses, and a few spelling errors that may be due to inaccurate pronunciation. To improve, the speaker should focus on proper pausing and pronunciation.

4. Topic Development The response is coherent and well-organized, with clear connections between ideas and sufficient support or examples from the lecture. However, the speaker could improve by providing more specific details from the lecture to support their points. Additionally, the introduction could be more concise to allow for more focus on the two hoarding strategies discussed in the lecture.

5. Language Use

Original: This lecture takes a ton of details to describe the difference between animals to store food during the winter. The professor takes two different hoarding strategies. First, as animals store all the food in one location, such as squirrels, they are capable for food supplies to defend other animals to steal their foods. However, squirrels store pine cones in one single tree because they are good at chasing other squirrels and fighting other squirrels back. Second, some animals are good at memory because they divide their food into several different places, such as the rat in the desert. They bury their seeds in the sand. Because other animals found some of the seeds in the sand, the rat can still eat the other seeds in different locations.

Corrected: This lecture takes provides a ton of details detailed explanation (to make it sound more natural) to describe the difference between animals' strategies to store food during times of scarcity. The professor takes discusses two different hoarding strategies. First, some animals store all their food in one location, such as squirrels; they are capable for of defending their food supplies from other animals that might try to steal it. Squirrels store pine cones in a single tree because they are good at chasing and fighting off other squirrels. Second, some animals have a good memory and divide their food into several different places, such as the desert rat. They bury seeds in various locations in the sand. Even if other animals find some of the seeds, the rat can still rely on the remaining seeds hidden in different locations.

Revised (140 words): The lecture provides a detailed explanation of the differences between animals' strategies for storing food during times of scarcity. The professor discusses two distinct hoarding strategies. First, some animals, like squirrels, store all their food in one location and are capable of defending their food supplies from potential thieves. Squirrels store pine cones in a single tree and are adept at chasing and fighting off other squirrels. Second, animals with good memory, such as desert rats, divide their food into several different places. Desert rats bury seeds in various locations in the sand, ensuring that even if other animals find some seeds, they can still rely on the remaining hidden seeds in different locations. These two strategies demonstrate how animals adapt their hoarding behavior based on their abilities and environmental factors.

6. Mind Map

• Introduction

  • Lecture explanation
  • Animal hoarding strategies

• Strategy 1: One location

  • Squirrels
  • Defending food supplies
  • Pine cones in a single tree

• Strategy 2: Dispersed locations

  • Desert rats
  • Good memory
  • Burying seeds in various locations

• Conclusion

  • Adaptation based on abilities and environment

7. Key Words