TOEFL TPO -1 Writing Task 1 Sample: Question: Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan,write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response willcontain a minimum of 155

1.Sub Scores

Task fulfillment: 2 Organization: 2 Coherence and Cohesion: 2 Language Use: 2

2.Estimated Scores

Estimated Score: 14

3.Task completeness

The essay does not fully address the specific requirements of the task. The main issue is that the essay does not accurately summarize the points made in the listening passage, leading to a lack of clarity in the response. To improve task fulfillment, it is essential to carefully listen to the lecture and take notes on each point that contradicts or challenges the reading passage. Then, clearly present these points in your essay.

Example 1: Instead of writing "other people arrive in England too," write "the listening passage states that modern historians estimate that the Celtic population was much larger than the arriving Anglo-Saxons."

Example 2: Instead of writing "English should sources from all Europe," write "the listening passage argues that just because English people speak a language derived from Anglo-Saxons does not mean they are mostly of Anglo-Saxon descent."

4.Essay structure and organization

The essay's structure and organization need improvement. The introduction should briefly mention both the reading and listening passages and their opposing viewpoints. Each body paragraph should focus on one point from both passages, with clear transitions between ideas. Finally, a conclusion should summarize your response.

Example 1: For an improved introduction, write "The reading passage claims that modern English people are mostly descended from Anglo-Saxons, while the listening passage argues that they are more likely to be descended from Celts."

Example 2: For better transitions between paragraphs, use phrases like "In contrast," "On the other hand," or "However." For example, write "In contrast to the reading's claim about language origins, the listening passage argues that..."

5. Grammar

The reading and the listening discusses Anglo- SaxonAnglo-Saxon(Hyphenated words: Anglo- Saxon) migration. But they are discussing the opposite. And the same time, the listening content is refuting the reading (Two consecutive spaces)viewpoint one by one. Firstly, the reading claims that the scale of the Anglo-Saxon immigration was massive. thisThis(Checks that a sentence starts with an uppercase letter) point is based on that the large numbers of Anglo-Saxons arriving in England. However, the speaker disputes this by suggesting that other people arrives in England too. To support this argument, the speaker cites SpainishSpanish(misspelling) people across the ship that arrive in England. Challenging the initial advocate of the reading. Next, the reading discusses the English language is derived from the Anglo-Saxon. thisThis(Checks that a sentence starts with an uppercase letter) idea is supported by mostly descended from Anglo-Saxons. In contrast, the speaker disagrees and emphasize that English should sourcessource(Non-infinitive verb after modal verbs) the all EropeEurope(misspelling). The speaker strengthens this viewpoint with that France langugelanguage(misspelling) likes the English, and the France vocabulary is in the English. Calling into question the turthtruth(misspelling) of the reading's second claim. Lastly, according theto the(This rule identifies whether the preposition 'to' is missing in a sentence.) reading, a genetic study has been recently conducted among inhabitants of several villages ..(Use of whitespace before comma and before/after parentheses) This is borne out-by DAN's determine. On the other hand, the speaker holds the wrong position, declaring that not mainly desendeddefended(misspelling) from Anglo- SaxonsAnglo-Saxons(Hyphenated words: Anglo- Saxons). This prespectiveperspective(misspelling) is further bolstered by it is probably otherthe other(This rule identifies whether the article 'the' is missing in a sentence.) country to have English locality DNA. Indicating that the reading's corresponding concept may lack a soilldsoiled(misspelling) foundation. The final listening content refutes the argument of the reading material through arguments and column forms, making people agree with the speak's (Two consecutive spaces)viewpoint in the listening process.

Section Title: 6. Revised Essay

The reading and listening passages discuss the Anglo-Saxon migration and its impact on the modern inhabitants of England. However, they present opposing viewpoints on this issue. The listening passage refutes the reading's claims one by one.

Firstly, the reading asserts that the scale of the Anglo-Saxon immigration was massive, based on the large number of Anglo-Saxons arriving in England. In contrast, the speaker disputes this by suggesting that modern historians estimate a much larger Celtic population already living in England at that time. Since the Celts outnumbered the Anglo-Saxons, it is unlikely that they were pushed out by them, challenging the initial claim made in the reading passage.

Next, the reading posits that the English language is derived from Anglo-Saxon origins, supporting this idea with evidence of a majority descent from Anglo-Saxons. However, the speaker disagrees and emphasizes that English has multiple European sources. The speaker strengthens this viewpoint by noting similarities between French and English languages and their shared vocabulary, calling into question the truth of the reading's second claim.

Lastly, according to the reading passage, a genetic study conducted among inhabitants of several villages supports their argument with DNA evidence. On the other hand, the speaker argues against this position by stating that samples were taken from one small area in eastern England geographically closest to Anglo-Saxon homelands. The DNA evidence from people in that particular area does not necessarily hold true for England as a whole. Subsequent genetic research in other areas of England has shown a much greater genetic component from Celtic ancestors.

In conclusion, through well-supported arguments and counterpoints, the listening passage effectively refutes each claim made in the reading material regarding Anglo-Saxon migration and its impact on modern-day English people. (291 words)

The reading and the listening discusses Anglo- Saxon migration. But passages discuss the Anglo-Saxon migration and its impact on the modern inhabitants of England. However, they are discussing the opposite. And the same time, the present opposing viewpoints on this issue. The listening content is refuting the reading viewpoint passage refutes the reading's claims one by one.

Firstly, the reading claims asserts that the scale of the Anglo-Saxon immigration was massive. this point is massive, based on that the large numbers number of Anglo-Saxons arriving in England. However, In contrast, the speaker disputes this by suggesting that other groups of people arrives arrived in England too. To support this argument, the speaker cites Spainish too (providing a broader perspective), such as Spanish people across the traveling by ship that arrive (adding specific examples). This challenges the initial claim made in England. Challenging the initial advocate of the reading. the reading passage.

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Lastly, according the reading, to the reading passage, a genetic study has been recently conducted among inhabitants of several villages supports their argument with DNA evidence. On the other hand, the speaker argues against this position by stating that not all inhabitants are mainly descended from Anglo-Saxons (challenging their assumption). This is borne out-by DAN's determine. On the other hand, the speaker holds the wrong position, declaring that not mainly desended from Anglo- Saxons. This prespective perspective is further bolstered by pointing out that it is probably probable for other country countries to have English locality DNA. Indicating DNA (expanding on their counterargument), indicating that the reading's corresponding concept may lack a soilld solid foundation.

The final In conclusion, through well-supported arguments and counterpoints, the listening content passage effectively refutes the argument of each claim made in the reading material through arguments and column forms, making people agree with the speak's viewpoint in the listening process.regarding Anglo-Saxon migration and its impact on modern-day English people.

8. Mind Map

1. Anglo-Saxon Migration
   - Scale of immigration
   - Language origins
   - Genetic evidence

2. Reading Passage Claims
   - Massive immigration scale
   - English language from Anglo-Saxons
   - Genetic study supports claims

3. Listening Passage Counterpoints
   - Larger Celtic population in England
   - Multiple European language sources
   - Limited geographical scope of genetic study 

9. Key Words