TOEFL TPO -1 Writing Task 1 Sample: Question: Summarize the points made in the lecture, being sure to explain how they respond to the specific points made in the reading passage

1.子项得分 任务完成度: 4 组织: 3 连贯与衔接: 3 语言使用: 3

2.预估分数

22. 3.任务完成度

整体而言，文章回应了阅读材料和听力材料中的观点。然而，为了更好地完成任务，建议您更详细地总结听力材料中的论点，并确保清楚地解释它们是如何反驳阅读材料中的观点的。此外，在引用听力材料时，请确保使用准确的信息和例子。

示例1: 不足之处：文章提到，“the professor claims than introduce a new version of product which exclusively needs to make tiny changes in its ingredients and advertises enable their company to sell more products.” 改进建议：可以改为，“the professor argues that introducing a new version of a product may alienate long-time consumers, as they might feel outdated and stop buying both the old and new versions.”

示例2: 不足之处：文章提到，“Thirdly, the author contends that some campanies form a partnership to sell a new combination product in order to encourage their consumers to try their new products and obtain good assessment.” 改进建议：可以改为，“Thirdly, the author suggests that companies can form partnerships to create new combination products, but the professor counters this by explaining how such partnerships can lead to competition between partners if one decides to enter the other's market.”

4.文章结构与组织 文章在结构上有一定的基础，包括引言、正文和结论。然而，为了提高文章的组织和连贯性，请确保每段都有明确的主题句，并在段落之间使用恰当的过渡词或短语。此外，注意避免重复内容，并确保文章中的信息准确无误。

示例1: 不足之处：文章开头，“According to the author of the reading passage, the author presents three methods which are believed to assisst the companies in achieving business success.” 改进建议：可以改为，“The reading passage presents three methods for companies to achieve business success, while the lecture opposes these strategies by providing counterarguments.”

示例2: 不足之处：在正文部分，缺乏清晰的主题句和过渡词。 改进建议：可以添加主题句和过渡词，如：“In response to the first method mentioned in the reading, the professor argues that...” 和 “Moving on to the second method, the professor counters by saying...”

5. 语法批改

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Secondly, the professor suggests that a well-known company can harness his famous name to sell some new but related type of product. (Whitespace repetition (bad formatting))And their consumers can buy their products for its name. (Whitespace repetition (bad formatting))On the contrary, the professor astutely points out that this manner may increase their total sell in a short period. (Whitespace repetition (bad formatting))However, if the company can not maintain their desirable quality or achieve the same quality as their main product, this can damage their reputation of the companies and the overall product sells would decrease.

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Section Title: 6.文章修订

The reading passage outlines three strategies that companies can employ to achieve business success. However, the lecturer in the listening material refutes these strategies and presents three counterarguments.

Firstly, the reading passage suggests that introducing a new version of a product with minor changes in its ingredients and advertising can boost sales. In contrast, the lecturer argues that this approach may alienate long-standing customers who prefer the company's traditional products. As a result, they may not purchase the new version and may even stop buying the old one, considering it outdated.

Secondly, the reading passage posits that a well-known company can leverage its reputation to sell new but related products, attracting customers based on brand recognition. The lecturer disputes this claim, noting that while this strategy may increase sales in the short term, it could backfire if the company fails to maintain or achieve the same quality as their main product. This could damage their reputation and lead to an overall decrease in sales.

Lastly, the author contends that companies can form partnerships to sell new combination products, encouraging consumers to try these offerings and garner positive feedback. In stark contrast, the lecturer vehemently argues that such partnerships could create competition between partner businesses. For example, if a chocolate company observes strong sales of a collaborative ice cream product, they may attempt to develop their own ice cream line to maximize profits. (235 words)

Revised essay: Section Title: 7.文章批改

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Thirdly, Lastly, the author contends that some campanies companies can form a partnership partnerships to sell a new combination product in order to encourage their products, encouraging consumers to try their new products and obtain good assessment. these offerings and garner positive feedback (rephrased for clarity). In stark constrast, the professor contrast, the lecturer vehemently disputs that this argues that such partnerships could influence some create competition between partner commerce. Because, for instance, the businesses (corrected "commerce" to "businesses"). For example, if a chocolate comany learn about their good sell grades, and then company observes strong sales of a collaborative ice cream product, they may attemp attempt to develop their own ice cream product in order to obtain more profits.line to maximize profits (improved sentence structure).

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8. Mind Map

1. Introduction
   - Reading passage: three strategies for business success
   - Lecturer: refutes these strategies

2. Strategy 1: New Version of Product
   - Reading passage: minor changes and advertising boost sales
   - Lecturer: may alienate long-standing customers, decrease in sales

3. Strategy 2: Leveraging Reputation
   - Reading passage: sell new related products based on brand recognition
   - Lecturer: short-term increase, potential damage to reputation and sales decrease

4. Strategy 3: Partnerships for Combination Products
   - Reading passage: encourage consumers to try new offerings, positive feedback
   - Lecturer: competition between partner businesses, potential loss of profits

5. Conclusion 
   - Summarize lecturer's counterarguments against reading passage strategies.

9. Keywords